What a unique way to look at life and at the same time so very true. I never thought of it like this before but after reading it I feel a little foolish for never making the connection. I also am not good at ping pong. But your ending summed it all up wonderfully...
"I’m not too good at Ping Pong,
But I can take a deep breath and feel very fortunate
To have played.
Because one must breathe and feel lucky sometimes!" Thanks for sharing this! Maci
Wow I bet you don't tick off too many people lol. I like how you disappointment and anger rushed off the page at me. I had to check to see if I didn't have Icing on my face. Well done! I did not see any mistakes. I enjoyed it very much. Thank you for sharing. Maci
How intense. I am sure a lot of people have felt this way. My how you nailed it. Very well written. I did not see any mistakes. I could feel the pain of the struggle. Making my heartbeat quicken. I hope things finally turn around for this person. Thank you for sharing. Maci
This is so precious! I went from cold chills to tears. I felt the lose of the child of eight. The flow of this poem was smooth. It is very well written and I saw no mistakes.
My favorite part was ..."Like peering through a broken glass, I can see fragments of my youth. Kaleidoscopic visions pass before my eyes. Are they the truth?" The whole thing left me speechless! Thank you for sharing. Maci
Now those were the days! LOL I enjoyed the flow of this piece. I wish we still had some of those things. Like leaving doors unlocked. Everybody helped everyone else. Yeah, those were the days. I did not see any mistakes. Wel Done! I truly enjoyed this very much. I could almost hear jail house rock. lol Thank you so much for sharing this. Maci
What a beautiful reminder to find rest in HIM! I love the flow of this piece. It's message is clear and wonderfully expressed. I loved it all but my most favorite line...
"For peace past understanding, Turn over your care to Him, Be, to His wonder, a witness, His glorious presence behold." I wish I could give this 10 stars. Well done! Maci
What a treat! I read this twice. The second time I sang it and giggled. As I write this I am humming it. I, who have been behind a horse in a buggy, I understand too well the whole story outlined here. Very well written. Thank you so much for sharing this. I totally enjoyed! Maci
I like this carefree piece. It is lighthearted and fun flowing poem. A bit of sunshine in my day. "Let's make life worthwhile." A very fitting finish to bring this poem full circle. It flowed well and I saw no mistakes. Well done! Thank you for sharing this wonderful piece. Maci
Chis I agree with you whole heartedly! I wish we could hurry and find a cure! My mom has had both of her breast removed long ago. I am sorry to hear about your friend Earl. I think it is great that this little letter brings attention to the fact that breast cancer happens to men too! Thank you for sharing this important message. Maci
Lesson learned.. never trust a talking fish. I enjoyed this short story. It had a great pace and I saw now mistakes. If I was Jimmy I would never go fishing again. I love to fish. But if a fish ever spoke to me I might just wet my pants. Very enjoyable story. Thank you for sharing this.
Lol This I can so relate! I love this piece. Even our Barbie's were in a dream world. How many Ken's are out there that have the looks plus a great personality Too! NOT!
Where is that Mr Maybe? I hope you found one. I enjoyed the way this piece flowed and I saw no mistakes. Thanks for sharing this. Maci
Well with this piece you chose all the right words. It flowed like a smooth river. I saw no mistakes. My favorite line was..." A thousand stars in the sky encourage a poet to write" Many times I have been "stuck" and the night sky has stirred something inside me. Thank you for sharing this. Well done! Maci
This piece made me SMILE!!! I love it! just throw everything else out the window and smile regardless this works for me. I hope there isn't people out there that really have to "practice smiling". I like the way this reads. I didn't see any mistakes. Thanks you so much for sharing this upbeat happy poem. Well Done! Maci
What a beautiful, beautiful poem. Well done tribute to your mother. It gave me cold chills when I read it. Thank you Lord for I am sure He heard your poem and gave your mother (maybe 2 dozen) roses. Because God like to give us "Double for our trouble" and held her extra long. For you-- from you! Thank you so much for sharing this.
God bless you and your Mother! I wish I could give this 10 stars Maci
Who knew that getting older would make us feel this way? I love the way you wrote this. It is a clever way to side the age in there, just like birthday's sneak up on us. I really enjoyed this fun flowing poem. As we get higher,.. the lower we get is a graceful way to sum it all up! Well done! Maci
How sweet and patient! I will give you that. This is a lovely piece. It's flow was great.
It made the reader cheer when you finally got that long awaited chance. I did not see any mistakes. Though it had only been a few months into the relationship, I was left to wonder if you are still together? I sure hope so, that is if this is a real life matter. lol Thanks for sharing this. I really enjoyed it. Maci
I love the play with numbers here. Very well done. The poem flowed easy. I could feel the disappointment and the pain. That's a whole lot of chances someone was given. I can say without doubt that I would never give someone that much control. I hope your heart healed! Thanks for sharing this. Maci
This is so cool! Wow the way you express this whole journey is like a painted path. The reader sees and feels you every inch. That first step was and always is so difficult. Well don! I enjoyed every step. I think everyone will enjoy this as well. It flowed well and I didn't see any mistakes. Thank you so much for sharing.
This is a wonderful heartfelt piece. I think there are many, I for one, who can identify with everything you have written here. I see your beauty in your writing. I love the way this poem flowed. I really enjoyed this as you can see. I thank you for sharing. I hope he does see the beauty that I can see from here. Have a great evening! Maci
Neva, This is a beautiful poem. It gives hope to anyone who is in a dark place or having just a depressed day. Reading it was like opening a little gift. And the finally thought. the last verse, A big fat bow! I really enjoyed this poem. I saw no mistakes. Thank you for sharing this and making my day brighter! Maci
wow what gore. I got tickled when I read... "Brains, my only thought." Then I gagged with the next part. "Munching and crunching like leaves oozing in my mouth" What a wonderful goory mess. I saw the note attending this poem. I would give this a 5 star But it gets a 1/2 from me. Maci
Wow what a powerful poem. uniquely showing the thoughts of someone who is dying. How very
touching. I found it very emotional. The name this poem is perfect! It is very well written and I didn't see any mistakes. The last verse brought me to tears. Thank you for sharing this wonderful poem. Maci
How sad. I hope all that has changed. I bet she has many friends. Starting school is a hard time. their world is turned upside down and they don't understand why. Playgrounds are just as hard to.everybody has their little comfort circles. I hope she has her own big circle by now. I remember thinking the same thing when my son started school. The piece is well written and I saw no mistakes. Thank you for sharing. Maci
Wow very Powerful! I felt you pain. I, like others was surprised to find, midway that you were talking about your mother. What pain that must cause to have so many unanswered questions. I do believe that the last line sums it all up beautifully and tragically You both lose! I hope she has come around before I get this review written! God bless you all! Maci
This is a truly heart felt piece. I could feel the emotions throughout. I think it flowed well. I saw no mistakes. I really enjoyed it. I understood the inner struggle that was present in this piece. I liked the flow of this poem. Thank you for sharing! Maci
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