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Review by Xiea
Rated: ASR | (3.5)
It's sad and really beautiful. Parents can really go far for their children. But personally, I don't think any child would rather their parents kills themselves so that they could live a better life. But if that is the only way out... What has to be done has to be done. If you find the motivation sometime, you can perhaps elaborate and convert this into a short story that appeals to the readers emotions, for I'm certain you have that potential. Keep going!
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Review of Breathe  
Review by Xiea
Rated: E | (4.5)
The emotions of the speaker are very well conveyed here. They reach out the screen and coincide with the reader's mind. We all have been in situations where we are too afraid of the people, their judgements and tend to become really concious about ourselves. And it's been written so perfectly well. Great going!
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Review of The Faiths  
Review by Xiea
Rated: E | (5.0)
Very well written. It leaves a strong impression on the reader. It's also thought provoking and the writer comes off as fearless and courageous. You have beautifully begun it and wound it up saying that dating to believe before seeing is essential for faith. Job well done! Keep going!

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Review by Xiea
Rated: E | (2.0)
Inspiring, really. There were many spelling mistakes and punctuation errors though. Please look into those.
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Review of A Clown's Funeral  
Review by Xiea
Rated: E | (4.0)
That was very touching a read. Don't see what purpose the massive space you have left after your name serves though. I'm sorry, I might be unaware of some decorum you script writers have to follow. It's simple, yet there is something about it that will haunt the reader even he is done reading it. I don't really have words to describe this piece... But great job. Excellentae!
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Review of The Fourth Child  
Review by Xiea
Rated: E | (4.0)
Very well written and an incredibly interesting and thought provoking plot. I can spot some ulterior motives scattered all across this story subtly reminding the reader how pathetic the human race is. What I enjoyed the most was the build up and the suspense element that keeps the reader hooked and in the end the moon flying away... Super cool! It starts of pretty normally and then the girl... Everything has been described really well and there is no scope for ambiguity or doubt except for the ones that were meant to be like who is that mysterious little girl. Well done! Keep going!
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Review by Xiea
Rated: 13+ | (4.0)
Beautifully written and very relatable. Honestly, many of our fathers use these seemingly callous ways of getting us on track, but it is later we realize how much it benefitted us. It's all the same with my father. In spite of every time I mess up, he never gives up on me. Thanks for sharing this instance. I feel this new found respect for my dad now.
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Review of Growth  
Review by Xiea
Rated: E | (4.0)
Your poem achieves depth in such brevity ... That's what makes it remarkable. Simple yet impactful and thought provoking. The tone of conversation is what I enjoyed the most. Keep going!
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Review of Ready to Fall  
Review by Xiea
Rated: E | (5.0)
This was so beautiful. A perspective I never even imagined... Maybe that's because I'm 16 and have never thought about old age, but still, the feelings of an old man have been conveyed so perfectly well. It evokes emotions one never even realized he possessed. It's so well written , simple, yet incredibly deep and touching. You're probably my favorite author around here.
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Review of Sleeping  
Review by Xiea
Rated: ASR | (5.0)
What a beautiful poem. You are no longer with us, but I know you will be remembered and loved by many. Rest in peace.
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Review by Xiea
Rated: E | (3.0)
Not sure what the 7*7*7 rule is and I can't really figure it out from this, but I liked your story. You can do a lot with this, give our protagonist a history, some problems, and some powers and you have something really cool on your plate. There are some punctuation issues you should look into. But forgive me if they are deliberate and have something to do with this rule you were trying out. You have some real cool ideas up your head... Keep going!
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Review by Xiea
Rated: ASR | (4.0)
So...This is funny...I think I know your critiques, but of course, I won't say... *Laugh*
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Review of Runt  
Review by Xiea
Rated: E | (4.0)
Good god, your writing style is amazing and absolutely hilarious! It kept me on the edge. this is great stuff! I cant wait to read the rest of your port...
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Review of Pines  
Review by Xiea
Rated: E | (5.0)
Such a beautiful poem. I can hear the silence resonating from every word. The tone of the poem is perfect. The brevity in which you have conveyed so much is incredible.
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Review of Alone  
Review by Xiea
Rated: ASR | (4.0)
Loved the paradox! Loved the ending! Nice idea. It's pretty captivating, and had just the right amount of devices used in the appropriate places. No flowery language..... Just the perfect amount of spice. Great read! Keep going!
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Review of The Morning Light  
Review by Xiea
Rated: E | (5.0)
So beautifully written! This is truly so full of feelings! Lovely!
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Review by Xiea
Rated: ASR | (4.0)
It's not racist that you wrote as an Indian man. What is racist is the fact that you thinks Indian mans havings so much English problemings. Is that deliberate? All the typos and the grammatical errors? I hope they are because they add onto most of the comedy element in here. Fun read!
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Review of Her Last Breath  
Review by Xiea
Rated: 13+ | (3.5)
Very interesting. It keeps the reader hooked till the very end. But there are some typos you should look into. All your 'lied' should be 'lay'. ....but they too....

There are a few more. Just look into that. Also, I think you should device your content into paragraphs. That would really help. Otherwise, when the reader comes to your page, they'll see the huge black box of text and won't feel like reading it. Besides, it would make it more clear.
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Review of My Rant  
Review by Xiea
Rated: E | (4.0)
Why do you close your rants with "my rant comes to a close"? Idk why, that bothers something deep within my amygdala. But apart from that, it was like reading my thoughts on the miseries of the world, only in a format more organized than it is in my head. We share these thoughts and arguments. But I think I know how you can avoid burning in hell. My mom tells me (and I really believe in it) that as long as you work towards your goal like it means everything to to you, but not worry about the fruits your actions are going to bear, (regardless of if its good or bad) it'll all work out. And of course, karma ain't no myth. Everything, good and bad, will come and bite you in the bum at some point in your life. And of course, don't do drinks and drugs (my mom didn't tell me about the drugs though... but take a wild guess as to who did. I'm sure you can't go wrong.)

I don't think I'll ver talk so preachy to anyone who's more than my dads age. I bet you already knew everything I just told ya, but everyone loves being preachy, right? So don't blame me for the time you wasted reading that, assuming that you read that, because I kind of wish you didn't. Stupid 16 y/o who thinks she too smart and goes about lecturing 55 y/os about what to do with their lives, signing off.
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Review of Since I Met You  
Review by Xiea
Rated: E | (5.0)
There are a few people I'd say this to and I don't think I can say it better than you have, it's so beautifully written. It's heartwarming. Personally I love these lines : I feel lighter, and my feet that once dragged,
Now rise and fall with an anticipation that has not been there in years.

I just realized that I suck at reviewing.
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Review by Xiea
Rated: ASR | (4.0)
You what's sad? How your stuff don't got that many reviews, cause it really good stuff. I love the title and your life stories are a real movie plot for me. Ima go check out your other stuff now.
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Review of Miranda  
Review by Xiea
Rated: 13+ | (4.0)
This was an astounding read, and it gives us all a perspective we would never had seen the world from before. Truly beautiful....
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Review by Xiea
Rated: ASR | (4.5)
This really nice to read. I like how you have conveyed everything while keeping the tone very passive and quiet. It keeps the reader endorsed till the very end. Really captivating, and a great idea. One could actually do so much with it, that I almost wish I got this idea before you. This is great stuff!
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Review of The Alien in Her  
Review by Xiea
Rated: ASR | (3.5)
God this is f***ing hilarious... I realize it's not supposed to be but still. I wish I was there to see that Aimee chick. This actually happened, right? Because it won't be that exciting if it didn't. It's written nicely and elaborately. I enjoyed reading it. I won't let me leave.
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Review by Xiea
Rated: E | (4.0)
This is really beautiful prose. The way you have laid out your feelings and insecurities is beautiful. It's very well written and keeps the reader thinking and feeling for what you went through till the very end. And I won't lie, it'll probably never be okay(assuming this has actually happened to you) But then again change is the only thing that's constant. I enjoyed the use of similes and metaphors in there. Great going! 🤗
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