There is very good. My only reservation was in the fact that you mentioned his name. It may have been better had you left it open. It's still very good. I'm working on one very similar to this one. It should be on my folio by Tuesday.
As for your heartache, I've had those feelings about the same girl for 7 years. How sad is that? It does get easier (I think). I have a poem on my folio called 'Just to Forget'. Check it out and tell me what you think.
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