It's good again. But I was expecting a different ending, something like - "my bones and soul scourged, I went to see the one behind it all... could this the one who created me and turned me into hell ... this no nightmare, this is the fault of the one who made me..."
Just adding some spices. But why don't you add some more. It's getting interesting, you know.
The drama of life - truly there is a great secret ready to be revealed as we pass on to the next life. As we close our eyes, we can know what is really the truth - that simple truth about life and about God. Although God has revealed this secret thousands of years ago through this prophets, we refused to believe. That's why, it has remained a secret.
Your story is a true-to-life story that we have to ponder on. How can we accept the truth? And what is the truth? Of course, it's Jesus up there who says "I am the Way, the Truth, and the Life."
But no matter how you die, the Truth remains. It's not how you die but how you lived that really counts.
I can regard this story as a day-to-day normal life of people. People who live, who commit mistakes, who resort to the extremes in order to attain something, and people who simply die but cannot accept the truth of living and dying.
I like to congratulate you for venturing into this kind of writing - making life as normal as it should be. Thanks for sharing it to us.
What about snore? Are there other substitutes for this? Can you substitute the sound of the train to the sound of snoring? Just asking, because I know someone who snores like the sound of a train.
What about glug-glug? Is this an English word - the sound of someone drinking heavily?
It's nice to read about such an experience, as if I experienced it myself. Too sad that it's impossible for me here, so far away, from the Philippines. Anyway, through cyberspace, I'll be able to "experience" what you had experience. Reading such experiences makes us feel and experience what is trully impossible. Regards, from the Philippines.
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