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Review of Memories  
Review by mars
Rated: E | (4.5)


Beautifully captured memoriam for your friend!

How sad that there was nothing that could be done, any more.

To lose a pet is heart breaking - I had to go through it several times, too and their memories are still alive, inside me, same like for you, I think.


Considering your writing, I see many positives: you built the piece thoughtfully and captivating; I see no errors, beautiful wording, skill.

Perhaps I would sooner call this prose than a poem, but that's just my feeling as the line breaks and the more narrative form and the 'visual shape' of your piece do not say 'poem' to me. *Blush*





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I hope that my review is in someway helpful, though please consider that what I say is only my personal opinion and respectfully given to you. Only you know what is right for your writing!

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Review of Behind Bars Again  
Review by mars
Rated: 13+ | (5.0)
Thank you for sharing this very honest poem with us!
It may not have been easy to tell us about being behind bars, I can imagine many 'inmates' would rather have kept it secret.
Your almost brutal honesty about feeling bad about yourself, the difficulty to avoid doing 'bad things', the hardship of life behind bars... I do hope others may find some support in this poem, in trying to stay away from a wrong path.

Well, most striking about this poem is of course its exceptional content but apart from that I think this is also a good poem: it flows, good word choice, well written and a good read!
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Review of RoadWork  
Review by mars
In affiliation with Circle of Sisters  
Rated: E | (5.0)
I enjoyed this poem! What an unusual but interesting subject for poetry.

Turning (the labour of) concrete road surfacing into a poetic and original poem is no small achievement in my opinion.

The middle stanza with it's appearance of movement is a good invention, well suited to this poem, and yet full of meaning. I loved the other two stanzas equally though.

Thank you for taking part in the Rising Stars Shining Brighter contest!



Afterthought:
I hope that my review is in some way helpful, though please consider that what I say is only my personal opinion and respectfully given to you. Only you know what is right for your writing!


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Review of Aurora Borealis  
Review by mars
In affiliation with Circle of Sisters  
Rated: E | (4.5)
Hi...,

I'm reviewing your item Aurora Borealis for the Rising Stars Shining Brighter Contest.

*Star*Lovely and well written poem about the Northern Lights. To call them 'hypnotizing' is a very apt description of the Aurora Borealis, I think.

*Star*I like very much that you have added the explanation about the Rondelet below the poem. It helps to appreciate a poem better; to see how the form-rules were applied; and also to inspire readers to perhaps try the form themselves.

*Star*If I may add a small point I noticed: being about a poetic subject, I'd have loved a slightly more poetic choice of words in some of the lines (though I know perfectly well how hard it is to write to form and be poetic as well and I myself am definitely not good at 'poetic feel'!). I'm especially thinking about
"resulting from a large, strong solar flare.". But like I said: it's just a minor point.

*Flower1* Thank you for taking part this month!


Regards,
Maria

Afterthought:
I hope that my review is in someway helpful, though please consider that what I say is only my personal opinion and respectfully given to you. Only you know what is right for your writing!



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Review by mars
In affiliation with Circle of Sisters  
Rated: E | (5.0)
Very touching poem full of warmth and evoking family-memories of my own.

You have painted the scene very well, I could almost place myself in the room and see the after-dinner time unfold.

Good use of rhyme also and the poem flows nicely.

Thank you for taking part in the Rising Stars Shining Brighter contest!



Afterthought:
I hope that my review is in someway helpful, though please consider that what I say is only my personal opinion and respectfully given to you. Only you know what is right for your writing!


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Review of Barn  
Review by mars
In affiliation with Circle of Sisters  
Rated: E | (5.0)
Hi...,

I'm reviewing your item for the Rising Stars Shining Brighter Contest.

*Star*Very beautiful and strongly evocative poem about an unusual subject - an old and long since abandoned farm - inviting melancholy and meandering thoughts in me. as reader.

*Star*I loved your wonderful poetic lines and strong imagery. It is such a powerful and well written poem, that it intensely 'caught' me, where usually this is not entirely my type of subject. Thus leaving me all the more impressed by beauty and depth of your writing.

*Star*I also liked the harmonious structure of the stanzas and the fact that it is a very poetic poem, without the use of rhyme. Proving that Free Verse can be 'as poetic', when done well! *Smile*


*Flower1* Thank you for taking part this month!


Regards,
Maria

Afterthought:
I hope that my review is in someway helpful, though please consider that what I say is only my personal opinion and respectfully given to you. Only you know what is right for your writing!



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Review of A Whispered Call  
Review by mars
In affiliation with Circle of Sisters  
Rated: ASR | (5.0)
Hi...,

I'm reviewing your item for the Rising Stars Shining Brighter Contest.

*Star*Your poem made had quite some impact on me and led me to reread several times and think and wonder. Are you speaking for yourself or have you placed yourself in the 'shoes' of someone else? Not that it matters much for the experience of the poem, but I do strongly hope you will find answers and a way back, if it is about you!

*Star*As a religious poem, I like this one more than I usually do. I love that it lacks sentimentalism, preachiness or being stereotype. You have powerfully and 'originally' worded deeply painful feelings and questions, related to belief.

*Star*I noticed this is technically a good poem, with consistent ten syllable count and natural feeling abab rhyme scheme. I'm no expert, but I think this is a Shakespearean sonnet (after a brief consult of Wikipedia), which appears quite difficult to write to me. So that makes it only more deserving, in my eyes, of five stars.

In case it's a sonnet indeed, I think it wouldn't have been amiss to mention that somewhere in the description or below the poem, Just to inform the reader. Though I guess many readers will recognise sonnets without trouble, not me, however. *Smile*


*Flower1* Thank you for taking part this month!


Regards,
Maria

Afterthought:
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Review of Dear Dad  
Review by mars
In affiliation with Circle of Sisters  
Rated: E | (4.5)
Deep and emotional poem about your Dad and what he means to you and his family. The love for your Dad and your gratefulness shine strongly through this poem.

Your father must have been very touched and proud when he heard or read this poem. It would have been a most special birthday-present for him! *Smile*

Thank you for taking part in the Rising Stars Shining Brighter contest!



Afterthought:
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Review of Meaning  
Review by mars
In affiliation with Circle of Sisters  
Rated: E | (5.0)
What a great poem! Such strong expression and captivating thoughts about life, beautifully caught in sculpted lines.

This poem strongly proves the merit of Free Verse: way more expressive and powerful than prose or other forms of poetry could lightly and likely achieve.

My favourite stanza:

There is nothing new
under this sun.
Our progress an illusion
brought about by rearranging
the cast offs of yesterday.


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Afterthought:
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Review by mars
In affiliation with Circle of Sisters  
Rated: ASR | (5.0)
I like this interesting poem very much! It is well written, clear and emotional and about a feeling, as I interpret it, that 'speaks to me'.

The funny thing is that the question you pose above it - about what the reader think it's about - makes me doubt very much if what I read in it, is whom you wrote it about. But, as I see a number of possibilities - from an unanswered love for someone in a bad situation (which was my first feeling when reading) , to a child in need to a pet in need - I am curious whom you wrote it about, so I hope you'd like to tell me? *Smile*

Thank you for taking part in the Rising Stars Shining Brighter contest!



Afterthought:
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Review by mars
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Rated: 18+ | (5.0)
*Flower1* Hi,

This is my review of your short story: Dahlia Deep

*Note1* What a chilling woman and what a chilling story. Yet, she is such a believable character. We all know of such self-centered, manipulative people, don't we? Though of course, by far the most of them will never resort to what 'your' Dahlia did...but still, what she did is simply fitting with her character - living it to the ultimate, so to say.

*Note2* I like your economy with words: a lot told in a very short story. It adds to the haunting feeling that it was just a minor step for her.

*Note3* Concluding, I think this is a well written story and a very good read! *Smile*

*Flower1* Thank you for sharing!
*Flower1* And please: Write on!

Regards,
Maria
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Review by mars
In affiliation with Circle of Sisters  
Rated: E | (5.0)
*Leaf* What an interesting poem! Both in contents as visually. I love it!!!

It's an amusing poem too, as you compellingly invite us to reflect upon this poem likewise as you are reflecting, in it, upon others' poems; but of course also because of the ironic wording. Ironic, without becoming 'a joke' though...just a light way of wording your thoughts. And it is this lightness of tone which is, for me, definitely an added charm and makes it more poetic. *Smile*

The questions you pose in the last stanza's are a nice catalogue of the questions we all could ask when reading a poem and which could help us review as well.

Why do I feel now as if we have come full circle *Bigsmile*

All in all an unusual poem of beauty and tremendous joy to read. Great!

*Leaf* Thank you for taking part in the Rising Stars Shining Brighter contest!



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Review of Husk  
Review by mars
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Rated: 13+ | (4.5)
Hi,

This is my review of your poem Husk.

Impression: I really like this poem! It is sharp and to the point and yet it is clearly poetic. It is also beautiful and the combination of a slightly dark subject, poetic feel and meaningful contents, lifts your poem well above the average in my opinion. Great item!

Rhythm, flow, style:
You call it 'Non structured poetry'. I googled that term and found 'unstructured poetry' to be an existing term. Yet I would prefer to use 'free verse' because I believe that poetry will never benefit from being completely unstructured. Unstructured poetry, free verse, still needs a minimum of rhythm and flow to help it appeal to a reader *Smile* Happily, although rhythm is not the strongest point of your poem, but still it is all right in this respect, I believe. The rhythm varies a bit much, here and there. It looks like that you have broken up the lines in their 'natural' position. Perhaps you could play a bit with that, like you have done in the penultimate line of the first stanza. With a slightly enhanced rhythm and flow, I'd have given this poem 5 stars.

Contents: I must say I recognize what you are saying and agree with it. The hyped - media, peer pressure - wish to buy and have more and more and then also the use of all those things takes our attention away, in a (sometimes) devastating way, of what is really important in life, of simple things, friendship, family, nature, our inner selves even. So yes, I believe many of us in the 'West' are depleted of our original fantasies. And actually, to me that is not so much a pessimistic, dark view, but rather an optimistic view: as it is in other words to see the beauty in simple things, in life itself.

Remarks:

*Leaf* My favourite part, very poetical and of a nice rhythm:
The soul long since vanished,
Never to take angelic flight,
With scarce contribution to,
The magnificence of life.


*LeafO* I love the first stanza very much, the second a tad less. I think perhaps also that the last line Till it grinds us beneath the ground is a bit too 'heavy in meaning' in relation to the rest of the poem, a bit overdone, so to say.

*LeafBr* All in all a very promising poem and I truly enjoyed reading it!

Write on,
Maria


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Review of Life is Scary  
Review by mars
In affiliation with Circle of Sisters  
Rated: 13+ | (4.5)
Sympathetic short piece of musing on change and our relation to it. I liked it, found it very interesting, admired the tone. But, there is a lot going on here. Almost too much for such a small piece. It made me want to read just a bit more, see a bit more elaboration on the connection between Halloween and change.

So, all in all a very promising, very well written and lovely thoughtful musing, which made me wish for more!

Thank you for taking part in the Rising Stars Shining Brighter contest!



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Review by mars
In affiliation with Circle of Sisters  
Rated: ASR | (4.5)
Eerie and fascinating story. fitting with this time of year. I think it is rather well written, but I remain somehow with a feeling of a few unanswered questions, though that may very well be the effect you're after. *Bigsmile*

As soon as I read the name the creature used for the child, I understood it was to be read backwards and that meant the story was taking a very different turn and meaning from there...it took me by surprise and that was nice!

Thank you for taking part in the Rising Stars Shining Brighter contest!



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Review by mars
In affiliation with Circle of Sisters  
Rated: E | (5.0)
Awesome poem on a great subject! I really, really love it. It is ironic and yet very serious and respectful about God. Which in itself looks like an achievement to me *Delight*

The philosophical questions posed here are deep and very interesting and at the same time seem so 'earthly' because of the way how you bring them up. For me this lifts this poem to a high level; one to read again, to ponder over and to remember!

The form of the poem adds to it, with the indented lines, making it look like 'floating' a bit. Also the wording is light, poetical, of good rhythm and flow and thus making it a wonderful read!

Thank you for taking part in the Rising Stars Shining Brighter contest!



Afterthought:
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Review of LOVE SONG  
Review by mars
In affiliation with Circle of Sisters  
Rated: E | (5.0)
I really like your beautiful and powerful poem about a far-away love. Very clear expression of strong emotions, which are both painful and with hope shimmering. Honest too - about hiding and thus not giving a chance to possible other lovers and the need to trust in each others love and person to take the plunge and vanish that barrier of distance. The repetition of words and parts of sentences works very well to strengthen the emotionality, I think.
The poem has a good rhythm and flow to it as well. It really gripped me!

Thank you for taking part in the Rising Stars Shining Brighter contest!



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Review of The Circus  
Review by mars
In affiliation with Circle of Sisters  
Rated: E | (5.0)
*Flower1* Hi,

I'm reviewing your 'Word Search': The Circus

*Note1* Thank you! This was a very nice game to play! I love circuses and I often feel they don't get the attention and admiration due to them. So I was happy to see a word search on this very topic.

*Note2* You had a nice variety of words to look for and they were quite well spread out over the grid, so it was a nice challenge!

*Note3* You are newly registered...so welcome to Writing.com (WDC) and I wish you a great and inspiring time in this wonderful community!

*Flower1* Thank you for sharing!
*Flower1* And please: Write on!

Regards,
Maria
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Review of SHINE  
Review by mars
In affiliation with Circle of Sisters  
Rated: E | (4.5)
A beautiful small and mysterious poem, that captivates and almost made me wish it were longer. Especially because your wording is highly poetic and near magical.

Could you elaborate on it, whilst keeping it poetical and mysterious, I would absolutely love to read more of it. Though I very well understand that it was not without reason that you kept the poem as short as it is: it's pointedness adds to its mystery and is a quality in itself *Smile*

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Review by mars
In affiliation with Circle of Sisters  
Rated: ASR | (5.0)
What an awesome poem! You call it a dark poem and dark it is indeed, but written with a nice touch of irony and with such great poetic skill that I absolutely loved reading it!

Your poetic skill shows, I think, in the rhythm, fast, well established and easy to read, but above all in the rhyme which is supple and beautiful and nowhere a line suffers in meaning or flow because it needed to rhyme. The rhyme seems to come naturally.

But it is not only the poetic qualities which make this a great poem: it tells a well developed, interesting and amusing story of two exploitative characters - even the story alone made it well worth the read!

Great job!


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Review of Climax  
Review by mars
Rated: 13+ | (5.0)
Wow! What a great poem! Meaning, clarity, wonderful rhyme, flow, rhythm, great choice of words (nothing wasted, everything in place)...I can think of a whole list of qualities which I found in this poem. And the speed in which I could read it - not that that is a sign of quality always, but here it is - breathtaking.
I really love this remarkable poem, with it's unusual subject of a woman at the top. I think it is an exceptional piece.
Perhaps one may point out that it is not a very lyrical poem, but that is also not a requirement for great poetry I believe. The sharp observation, the critical analysis with yet a touch of compassion, so apprehensible (nothing woolly or wrapped up) and yet not commonplace...now I'm getting lyrical *Smile*

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Review of Be my everything  
Review by mars
Rated: 13+ | (4.5)
A passionate message about deep love in the form of an acrostic poem and with a feel of prose...you've written a captivating and emotional piece and I love the strong feelings you are showing us.
Only mistake I noticed was "your" in the second line where it should be "you're".
I think you've made what you wanted to say all important, which had the consequence that the rhythm of your poem is not too smooth. But I can imagine that you wanted it like this: straight from the heart.
Well done!


Thank you for taking part in the Rising Stars Shining Brighter contest!

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Review of My Journey  
Review by mars
Rated: E | (4.5)
Hi,

I'm reviewing your item: My Journey for the Rising Stars Shining Brighter Contest.

*Note1* I think this is a poem in free verse with very beautiful and strongly expressed wording. It flows smoothly and paints lively scenes. I love your use of vocabulary, especially as a non-native-speaker, as you use words with a more literally quality which I don't often get to see.

*Note2* You changed the tense between the first and second stanza, but I think that's fine as it serves a purpose.

*Note3* The only remark I have is that I find it hard to get involved, I stay "on the outside". It's as if you are talking to yourself and not to me as a reader, but perhaps this is exactly how you wanted it.

*Flower1* Thank you for entering your item!
*Flower1* And please: Write on!

Regards,
Maria
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Review of MY PURPOSE  
Review by mars
Rated: E | (4.0)
Hi,

I'm reviewing your item: MY PURPOSE for the Rising Stars Shining Brighter Contest.

*Note1* You wrote a very personal item and I think it is courageous that you made it public and even entered it for a contest. As if you are making your resolve even stronger this way (though I may be very wrong with my interpretation: you will have your very own reasons)

*Note2* Powerful and well formulated and no errors or typo's, so I can't find any fault with it. I think you are able to create high quality prose or poetry.

*Note3* Even though I see no fault and in spite of the powerful expressiveness, yet as a reader I can't do much with it: I feel your words as a statement - the outcome of a process in which I had no part (because that process in you, which made you wish to re-focus, is not present in this prose-poem). And that's why somehow I don't feel like giving more than four stars. But I must say that the quality of your writing makes me wish to read more by you....

*Flower1* Thank you for entering your item!
*Flower1* And please: Write on!

Regards,
Maria
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Review by mars
Rated: E | (5.0)
Hi,

I'm reviewing your item: Giggles from the visitation room for the Rising Stars Shining Brighter Contest.

*Note1* I like this poem about the visitation room. The compassion for the mom makes it very special (with that I'm not saying that you have no compassion for the child). You make us aware of an aspect of foster care and adoption, which we not often get confronted with.

*Note2* I don't see mistakes in spelling or grammar. A well written piece, with good flow.

*Flower1* Thank you for sharing!
*Flower1* And please: Write on!

Regards,
Maria
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