|The introduction was pretty good. It was interesting, well-written, and had a good hook. It had me looking forward to reading the rest. I felt that this got weaker as soon as you began talking about the spiritual battlefield. I will detail them.
First of all, you use the "we as christians" phrase. This implies that everyone who is reading this is of the Christian faith, which is probably not the case.
You use way too many quotes from the Bible. Anytime you use a quote, it weakens your idea because it is not coming from you. The numerous amount of quotes not only makes your piece weaker, but it also makes the piece difficult to read as you are constantly shifting in and out of the ideas of the Bible and your ideas.
As the piece progressed, you began using more imperative language. Thus, it started to feel like you are preaching, which would decrease the interest of anyone who isn't convinced of your argument.
You present an interesting idea of the Bible as a spiritual weapon, but you provide little detail to further develop this concept. You went on asking the reader where their Bible is, and then telling them to use it. Overall, it doesn't spark much interest or say much of anything new.
Please don't take these comments personally. They were simply things that I felt could be improved on. Mechanically, this was very well written. And take my suggestions as you want, as they are only my opinion, and this is your piece after all.