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Review of Randomness  
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Rated: E | (3.5)
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First Impression - Wow!

What I like - You have definatly captured what a lot of us feel in life, and you have done it well. Many of the conditions that you mention are universal, so they apply to a wide range of people in many situations, which is a good thing.

Meter - None (Repetition Poetry usually doesn't have meter)

Rhythm/Rhyme - Good rhythm for a repetition poem, no rhyming scheme.

Nuts & Bolts - I would have gone with quotation marks over brackets around the words you have chosen to emphasize, but that is just me.

Ways to improve - As much as I like this piece, I have to admit that there is no one facet that makes it stand out from many simmilar poems out there. It is not that you have not done a good job with the subject, but rather that you are covering a very popular topic in a regular fashion.

Keep Writing!!!



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Review of Jericho  
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Rated: 13+ | (4.5)
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First Impression - WOW!

What I like - I love the imagery, the way you bring life to the halusinations of this man, as if his delusions are more real than reality, which at this point I am sure they are for him. I also like the way you pull the daughter in at the three points of the story, useing her to bridge between real life, James's reality, and then back to real life.

Keep Writing!!!



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Review of The Young Wolf  
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Rated: E | (4.5)
Review of: The Young Wolf

First Impression - Very Nice!

What I like - I like the imagery within this piece. You have very effectively created a peaceful setting while depicting a creature usually associated with power and savagery. The juxtaposition works well in this instance, and it shows your talent as a poet. It especially comes through with the thought of one dripping with blood settling down for rest.

Keep Writing!!!



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Rated: E | (4.5)
Review of: Keeping the Secret

First Impression - Wow!!! I love this!

What I like - I love the fact that you have captured the love of a mother for her family. I am a firm believer in the “secret ingredient” as I have known it to greatly influence the flavors of foods, the enjoyment of a summer day, and many other aspects of life.

Keep Writing!!!



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Rated: E | (5.0)
Review of: Pure and Unconditional

First Impression - WOW!!

What I like - I love the ending, and the mark of suspence that you buiold throughout the story. You make us believe that it might be Chris that has something to worry about, but pull the rug out from under us at the end with the revelation of Melanie's results. You have masterfully created an image for us to be part of, and it works wonderfully! I would love to see this as part of a larger piece!

Ways to improve - I can't think of any.

Keep Writing!!!



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Rated: E | (3.5)
Review of: Contemplations of our Nation

First Impression - I love your message!

What I like - You have a very powerful message, and you seem to speak your mind fairly well. A lot of the points you bring up are painfully valid, and it is obvious that you have invested a lot of your emotions in this piece

Ways to improve - I think you need to look at splitting this up, creating stanzas or paragraphs. The way you have it set up now, in one big block, makes it a little difficult to follow. If you were to make each statement its own paragraph, it would give your thoughts more power. The way it is, it looks and feels like a black and white brick.

Keep Writing!!!



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Rated: ASR | (4.0)
Review of: The Face in the Sky
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First Impression - I like this piece, but it took a while for it to warm up on me.

What I like - I like the messege, which I take to be an environmental one. I also like the way you depict your all powerful being, as it gives him a very human persona.

Ways to improve - Can't think of any at this moment.

Keep Writing!!!



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Review of Whispers  
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Rated: E | (4.5)
Very Nice!

I love that you approached such a traditional topic such as love from a new and fresh perspective! This piece has power simply becouse of the way you treat the subject. By focusing on the usually unseen details, the minor things that complete the whole, you have created a poem that will move readers for a long time.

Keep Writing!




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Rated: E | (4.5)
Beautiful!

This is a great little poem (prayer), and I am glad you have shared it with us. I think its power is in its simplicity, and you have beautifully brought forth the idea that God does listen, even at those times when we might not be making sense, even to ourselves.

I also like the fact that this is given over to the purpose of giving thanks, as opposed to asking for something. You have really opened up what prayer should be, as opposed to what it has become!

Keep writing!
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Rated: E | (4.5)
Very Interesting!!!

You had me from the first paragraph. This is a powerful piece, and it leaves the reader wanting more. I hope you have plans to finish this, as it is a powerful introduction.

I like the way you have multiple generations flash before his eyes, and the way you have him experience his father's and grandfather's memories.

Keep writing!
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Review of Really, Jack? #3  
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Rated: 13+ | (4.5)
You're right. This is a fun series that you have started here, and I can not wait until the next installment! I love the irreverence, and the mix of dialogue and description.

Keep writing!
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Review of Don't Want to Go  
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Rated: ASR | (4.5)
Very nice!

I love the twist at the end of this! It's a great piece, and the humer is wonderful!
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Review of Unheard Plea  
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Rated: E | (4.5)
Very Nice!

You have a great poem here, and it has within it some wonderful imagery! The thing about poetry in todays world is that it must be able to do one of two things: Introduce something new, or present the old in a new way. You have done a wonderful job at giving us a new perspective on longing, that this piece stands out from its croud.

Keep Writing!
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Review of Obituary  
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Rated: ASR | (5.0)
THIS IS GREAT!!!!!

I love your sence of humor, and you show a real tallent for sarcasm and irreverance here!

No matter how hard I try, I can't think of any way this could be improved.

Keep Writing!
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Rated: E | (4.5)
Nicely done!

This image is one that is done to a point of almost being overdone, but you have taken it from a slightly different perspective, which makes it fresh and interesting. I like the image of the change in purpose through the change in seasons. It works very well.

Keep writing!
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Rated: E | (4.5)
Very nice!

I think you have tackled a great issue here, an done it in a very respectable and caring manor. You show that your deceased was obviously a powerful person simply due to the fact that there were people who showed up to their wake/funeral after a single encounter. May we all find ourselves in such high regard when our time comes up!

Keep Writing!
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Review of Blur  
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Rated: E | (4.5)
Wow!!!!!!

Very powerful, and has a lot of great imagery for such a short piece! I like the way you describe the landscape here, and then set these seemingly over-sized pieces "adrift". Coupled with the spacing, it makes for a very powerful piece of poetry.

Keep writing!!
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Review of Really, Jack? #2  
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Rated: 13+ | (4.5)
Nice!

This is a fun little short, and it stands out for it's irreverance and it's imagery of angles as being your average everyday individuals is great!

I thionk you should really think about expanding on this concept. This is just long enough to wet the appetite, and I hope you continue with it!

Keep writing!
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Review of My Secret Dream  
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Rated: E | (4.0)
Nice!

I would not call this an "atempt" at poetry, I would call it poetry!

This is a wonderful piece on a time tested subject. You have good emotion in this, and it shows a lot of talent and potential.

If I might make a sugestion, you might want to try introducing something new to the conversation next time. Some of the best poetry out there is great simply becouse it pushes the boundry. Making connections between seemingly unconnected subjects, done to reinforce your prospective, will make your poetry and your writing stand head and shoulders above the crowd!

I hope you take your gift for the writen word and yse it to push boundries!

Keep Writing!
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Rated: 13+ | (4.5)
Wow!

I've never thought of multiple personalities in this way, but you have brought up some very valid points. I like the fact that you have taken on a controvertial topic and given it a very human face. It is obvious that this is a subject that you care deeply about, and that you have spent a lot of time thinking about, if not one that you live with in some form.

Please keep writing!
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Rated: E | (4.5)
I like it!

I wasn't sure what I was getting into based on your description, but this is a very interesting piece, and you have put it together in a wonderful way. Given the theme, I think your word choices are great, and the imagery is amazing. When reading it, I could almost picture myself inside a computer as it was sending out it's last commands before the entire thing gave up.

Keep writing!
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Rated: 13+ | (4.5)
Very Nice!!!

You have done a good job with this story, and, after having read the original poem (I had to find it in Yahoo!) I must say that you have honored the poem as well. I could definatly see this as being the cornerstone of a larger piece of work.

One small thing. In the third paragraph of section two, you have writen: "At times the firing would lessen others it would be nearly deafening in the echoes...". You might want to add "At times the firing would lessen WHILE AT OTHERS others it would be nearly deafening in the echoes..."

Keep Writing!
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Rated: 13+ | (4.5)
Great!

I have to say that I was expecting this to go in a much diffrent direction. Your ability to keep people guessing is a gift, and it makes for a wonderful twist in the reading,

Keep writing!
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Rated: 13+ | (5.0)
WOW!!!

You have an amazing story, and you should know that you will be a powerful influence on this world! Please keep writing, and please, if it is not too hard for you, fill in this story with as many details as yo possibly can, for it could save the life of another in a similar situation.

Whatever you do, Keep Writing!
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Rated: E | (4.0)
This is a nice poem, and well written. The only issue I would bring up is that in a sea of poetry on the environment, you have offered little in this piece to make it stand out in a crowd. Introducing something new to the conversation could make this an amazing piece!

The writing here speaks to your talent, and you should keep writing!
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