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I always try to be encouraging. I will be honest, though, with kindness. I will try to present examples of what worked, and what didn't work, and help you in any way I can. I graduated from the Dynamic Reviewing class. I am an Alumni in The Art of Criticism Project.
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Review of Old As You Feel  
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Rated: E | (5.0)
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It's Marci Missing Everyone . This is your fifth and final review from the package you won at the Ice Cream Social Benefit. Anything I say is just my humble opinion. Use whatever you can and send the rest out to the poetry pixies for use another day. *Butterflyo*

*Leaf* Imagery - This is so awesome. I can see the person looking in the mirror and all that he sees in it.

*Leaf* Tone & Mood/Emotional Impact - I can so identify. I look in the mirror and see a girl that's 39ish *Laugh*, when really it should be 20 years ago, right? I love reading poems that I can relate to.

*Leaf* Rhyme, Form & Flow - The rhyme scheme was spot on, as was the flow. No stumbling through.

*Leaf* Grammar/Punctuation - No problems that I could see.

*Leaf* Poetic Devices noticed and used effectively - Nothing specific noted.

*Leaf* Favorite Lines/Stanzas - I have a couple of favorite places.

If I didn't know better I'd say it was me
All except for the gray where the black use to be.

Well you got me that time, boy this mirror is fun,
There's no way you could tell I'm just seventy-one.

I have enjoyed reading through your poetry. Keep up the great work! If you ever need anything, don't hesitate to let me know!

Sincerely,
Marci Missing Everyone


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Review of The Musician  
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Rated: 13+ | (4.5)
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It's Marci Missing Everyone . This is the fourth of five reviews that you won in a package from the Ice Cream Social Benefit. Anything I say is just my humble opinion. Use whatever you can and send the rest out to the poetry pixies for use another day. *Butterflyo*


*Leaf* Tone & Mood/Emotional Impact - I got a nice chuckle out of this little poem, as I should with most Limericks. You painted a really fun picture of these two girls swooning over the cello player.

*Leaf* Rhyme, Form & Flow - You followed the form perfectly in regards to meter, rhythm, and rhyme pattern.

*Leaf* Grammar/Punctuation - No grammar issues. There are arguments on both sides of the punctuation issue. I am a proponent of it, but most especially if you use it in one place as you have here. I recommend that you add punctuation and you also don't need to capitalize the beginning of each line unless it begins a new sentence.

*Leaf* Poetic Devices noticed and used effectively - Some nice alliteration: sisters/same, music/mellow, and Good/God.

*Leaf* Favorite Lines/Stanzas -

Good God, How that lad played the cello!

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Marci Missing Everyone


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Rated: 13+ | (3.0)
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This is your final review from the package you won at the Ice Cream Social Benefit. Anything I say is just my humble opinion. Use whatever you can and send the rest out to the writing pixies for use another day. *Butterflyb*

*Star* Hook - The title was the initial hook. Since it's Halloween season, I am drawn to anything spooky. However, I would work on the first paragraph just a little to make it more exciting. In short stories you need to be drawn in quickly.

*Starb* Details - You use some vivid imagery. I especially like the descriptions of the moss. "...the swamp was very beautiful at first, with its gnarled, ancient cypress trees that had lacy, webbed-like moss hanging down."

*Starbl* Tone & Mood - The story was definitely mysterious.

*Starbr* Transitions/Flow - Make sure you stay in the same tense. Within the first paragraph you go from the past tense to the present tense. The transitions were slightly choppy and hard to follow.

*Star* Characters - Juanita and her dog are introduced mid-story and then not elaborated on. I was thinking, "Where did they come from?" You did a good job with Harold's brother, Marv. I think this main character could have been brought more to life by explaining his facial features and describing his voice as he told the stories.

*Starb* Plot Development - I didn't see a strong conflict/resolution, but I did enjoy the telling of the story.

*Starbl* Grammar/Punctuation - Be careful with the use of pronouns. In the second paragraph, first sentence, "his" made it confusing to know who you were talking about. There is also a redundant use of "I have to say".

*Starbr* Final Notes - I have read quite a bit of your other work, and in comparison, I think this just needs a good edit. This would make for a really good story, so don't give up on it. If you do a re-write, please let me know because I would love to read it again. Until next time... Live, Laugh, and Write!!!

Sincerely,
Marci Missing Everyone


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Review of Let Freedom Ring  
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Rated: E | (4.5)
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It's Marci Missing Everyone . This is the third of five reviews that you won during the Ice Cream Social Benefit. Anything I say is just my humble opinion. Use whatever you can and send the rest out to the poetry pixies for use another day. *Butterflyo*

*Leaf* Tone & Mood/Emotional Impact - I really thought that the statement of this poem was amazing! You did a beautiful job of recreating something that rang reminiscent of Martin Luther King, Jr. and one of his great speeches. No matter how one feels on the subject, he was one of the greatest speakers and motivators of all time.

*Leaf* Rhyme, Form & Flow - You followed the form so beautifully and without missing a beat on the rhythm or flow. I am so impressed by this poem! *Thumbsup*

*Leaf* Grammar/Punctuation - The only problem at all I see with this poem is that line 5 should end with a period and line 6 should be it's own sentence.

*Leaf* Poetic Devices noticed and used effectively - This poem is full of amazing devices that thoroughly increase the melodic sound of it. Alliteration: born/bred/believing/binds, man's/magnitude, allocates/alibi, and without/wondering/why/we. There is probably more, but these really stuck out. There is also some great line to line rhyming: binds us/remind us/defines us, ditches/riches, and eye/alibi/why/die.

*Leaf* Favorite Lines/Stanzas - I had a very hard time choosing a favorite part.

Can any nation rise to rule the world
if its leaders cannot govern themselves?

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Marci Missing Everyone


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Rated: E | (4.5)
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It's Marci Missing Everyone . This is the second of five reviews that won from my package in the Ice Cream Social Benefit. Anything I say is just my humble opinion. Use whatever you can and send the rest out to the poetry pixies for use another day. *Butterflyo*

*Leaf* Tone & Mood/Emotional Impact - What I see here is a person that is at peace and content within him/herself.

*Leaf* Rhyme, Form & Flow - The form is well followed and the flow is and rhyme is impeccable.

*Leaf* Grammar/Punctuation - No problems that I can see.

*Leaf* Poetic Devices noticed and used effectively - There are a couple instances of assonance that are nice: eyes/child, and smile/night. There are also some nice alliterations used: flourishing/fruit, and sleep/smile.

*Leaf* Favorite Lines/Stanzas -

Exempt from despair and forever consoled
I sleep in the arms of the smile that I hold.

Sincerely,
Marci Missing Everyone


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Rated: E | (4.5)
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It's Marci Missing Everyone . This is the second of five reviews from the package that you won at the Ice Cream Social Benefit. Anything I say is just my humble opinion. Use whatever you can and send the rest out to the poetry pixies for use another day. *Butterflyo*

*Leaf* Imagery - I actually like how this poem looks on the page. I know that's not the imagery you are thinking about. However, I can imagine going in a room and thinking your pet is gone forever, and then shock, they wake up!

*Leaf* Tone & Mood/Emotional Impact - This is kind of a fun poem on a sad theme.

*Leaf* Rhyme, Form & Flow - I like how each line has another syllable than the previous line. ei. 1,2,3...

*Leaf* Grammar/Punctuation - No problems.

*Leaf* Poetic Devices noticed and used effectively - I like the use of enjambment. You didn't make every line a full sentence, and that creates additional interest.

*Leaf* Favorite Lines/Stanzas - I love that at the end "He gave a wink". He gained a tenth life just like the title says. By the way, the title makes you want to read the poem to find out about that extra life.


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Marci Missing Everyone


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Review of Whispering Tears  
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Rated: 13+ | (4.5)
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It's Marci Missing Everyone . I am reviewing your piece as the first of five reviews that is part of the package you won at the Ice Cream Social Benefit. Anything I say is just my humble opinion. Use whatever you can and send the rest out to the poetry pixies for use another day. *Butterflyo*

*Leaf* Imagery - There is beautiful imagery of a romance from beginning until death do us part.

*Leaf* Tone & Mood/Emotional Impact - I was definitely saddened at the end. I can't imagine losing my husband. However, it's also a remembrance of all the time before that. How blessed we are to have memories!

*Leaf* Rhyme, Form & Flow - This is free verse at it's best. I write very little free verse, and rarely review it because a lot of the time, people write prose and not poetry. Your writing is very poetic and has smooth flow throughout. The only line I stumbled on a bit was line two. "Knows me not" also seems a bit cliche. However, it does fit well with the next to last line.

*Leaf* Grammar/Punctuation - No problems. I like the use of "..." to create a dramatic affect.

*Leaf* Poetic Devices noticed and used effectively - You use some nice alliteration: when/we/whispered, knows/not, went/wind/we, etc.

*Leaf* Favorite Lines/Stanzas - This line is amazing and it ties in well with the last line, which I also love.

We loved we laughed..years and wind...whispered it all

I have rated this four and half stars. I really did enjoy this poem, and I'm glad you requested a review so that I could read it. Until next time... Live, Laugh, and Write!!!

Sincerely,
Marci Missing Everyone


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Review of My eyes  
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Rated: E | (3.0)
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It's Marci Missing Everyone . I am reviewing your piece as part of the package that you won for The Birthday Auction. This is the first of three such reviews. Anything I say is just my humble opinion. Use whatever you can and send the rest out to the poetry pixies for use another day. *Butterflyo*

*Leaf* Tone & Mood/Emotional Impact - You portray a serious and frustrated tone with this piece. I'm not sure what to say about the emotional part of this poem. It seems that the first part of the poem is more about insomnia, and the second part of the poem is about forcing words on a page. There is a big disconnect.

*Leaf* Rhyme, Form & Flow - This is a quatrain with a rhyme pattern of abcb throughout. There is no distinct meter or syllable account. This can really cause the flow to stumble at times, especially when there is a large difference from line to line. You use true rhymes all the way through, which is nice, except for in the next to last stanza. There you use forced and chorus. I particularly like the second stanza where all four lines rhyme.

*Leaf* Grammar/Punctuation - I see no major grammatical errors. However, with punctuation use, there is no consistency. In some places you use it, and in other places you do not. Also, you do not need to capitalize the beginning of every line in a poem unless it starts a new sentence. Be careful with the over use of periods because this causes hard stops. Try to transition more of the sentences with softer stops.

*Leaf* Poetic Devices noticed and used effectively - Nothing special noted.

*Leaf* Favorite Lines/Stanzas - The following lines are really very powerful.

I've tried for days, weeks and months.
Emotional gain turns to physical pain.

If you would like to discuss this review further, or if you need help with anything in particular, please don't hesitate to ask. Until next time... Live, Laugh & Write!

Sincerely,
Marci Missing Everyone


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Review of Praise the Writer  
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Rated: E | (4.5)
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This review is part of the gift basket that 🦄🏳️‍🌈Sapph gifted to you. Anything I say is just my humble opinion. Use whatever you can and send the rest out to the poetry pixies for use another day. *Butterflyr*

*Noter* First impression/emotional impact - You wrote this poem in satire, but what makes it really funny is many people do this. Many people just want a pat on the back instead of an honest to goodness review. The only time I get ill with reviewers is when they give me a huge pat on the back and then a low rating with stars. I feel like that's a big disconnect... But I digress.

*Noter* Rhyme/form/flow - The rhymes were very well done, and the layout was great. I liked the use of colors to distinguish between reviewer and writer for the dialogue. The flow was impeded at times just because of varying syllable counts. I'm not sure how you could fix this and keep the dialogue relaxed, so I would just leave it alone. There is a couple of other things that impede the flow slightly, and that brings me to my next point.

*Noter* Grammar/Punctuation - In the case of this review, I am also going to add Capitalization to the list. In poetry, it is becoming less and less acceptable to capitalize the first word of every line. You should only use a capital letter if it is the beginning of a sentence. I have gotten so used to this, that it's jarring to me when I read it done otherwise. It was a little confusing that you did this in some places and not others.

One other thing that I noticed was the use of commas. When you put two sentences together with just a comma, it reads awkwardly since there is no conjunction. You can fix this my using a semicolon for a soft stop (which I recommend) or by using a period for a hard stop and making a new sentence. In poetry, even the a small thing such as a comma can change the flow of a piece.

*Noter* Favorite lines/stanzas - This stanza really made me laugh!

Not sure how to explain this,
Your story just went south.
Truly, I have to disagree with you,
But I’ll try to watch my mouth.

I have given you four stars for the reasons listed above. If you have any further questions or would like to discuss this further, please don't hesitate to ask. Until next time... Live, laugh, and write!

Sincerely,
Marci Missing Everyone

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Rated: E | (5.0)
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This review is part of the gift basket that 🦄🏳️‍🌈Sapph gifted to you. Anything I say is just my humble opinion. Use whatever you can and send the rest out to the writing pixies for use another day. *Butterflyr*

*Noter* First impression/emotional impact - I read through all of the cNotes on here. For some reason I have not seen your shop when sending out cNotes previously, but I will be using these notes quite a bit from now on. Not only were the pictures beautiful, but the quotes appropriate and encouraging!

*Noter* Pricing - I think the amount charged is right in line with other shops I've seen on WdC.

*Noter* Grammar/Punctuation - No problems that I could see.

*Noter* Shop Header - The shop header is nice and catchy. I appreciate that you let your customers know that the proceeds go to PENCIL. To me, I would prefer to buy something like this knowing it will help a good cause!

*Noter* Favorite cNote - I had a very hard time choosing a favorite, but I think I like the one titled "Change" the best. The picture and quote are both amazing!

I will definitely be stopping by for some future purchases! Until next time... Live, laugh, and write!

Sincerely,
Marci Missing Everyone

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Review of God's Voice  
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Rated: E | (4.0)
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This review is part of the gift basket from "Invalid Item"  that you won at the "Invalid Item"  raffle. Anything I say is just my humble opinion. Use whatever you can and send the rest out to the poetry pixies for use another day. *Butterflyr*

*Noter* First impression/emotional impact - Haiku is a small poem with a nature theme. I love that you have captured two parts of nature to reflect on the voice of God.

*Noter* Rhyme/form/flow - Traditionally, you will not see two Haiku placed together like this, but who says we must hold to tradition. Usually, the way to build onto an Haiku is to add two lines of seven syllables each, making it a Tanka. I didn't write the rules. I'm just sharing them. *Smile* As far as this could be two individual Haiku, I really enjoyed their reflective nature.

One side comment - when I think of waves crashing, I don't think about peace. What if you chose a different word here such as "rolling" or some other softer way to describe the waves? I definitely understand what you are going for her.

*Noter* Grammar/Punctuation - There is no capitalization or punctuation necessary in an Haiku unless it a proper name. So you can remove the capital letters that begin each verse and you can leave off the period.

*Noter* Poetic Devices - None noticed.

*Noter* Favorite lines/stanzas -

shouting God's power
whisper God's sweet peace


Until next time... Live, laugh, and write!

Sincerely,
Marci Missing Everyone

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Review of Malevolence  
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Rated: 13+ | (4.5)
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This review is part of the gift basket from "Invalid Item"  that you won at the "Invalid Item"  raffle. Anything I say is just my humble opinion. Use whatever you can and send the rest out to the poetry pixies for use another day. *Butterflyr*

*Noter* First impression/emotional impact - This is definitely a dark and intense piece. Gossip and rumors hurt people so deeply. I remember when I was a kid, they had the saying, "Sticks and stones may break my bones, but words can never hurt me." This is quite false! Words often hurt more than any physical pain that's inflicted.

*Noter* Rhyme/form/flow - This is the first time I have read a Terzanelle, so I am glad you explained it at the bottom of your piece. I have noticed in previous poems that you have done this, and I think it's really important. *Thumbsup* The flow is spot on, and the rhymes work really well without seeming forced.

*Noter* Grammar/Punctuation - I see no problems.

*Noter* Poetic Devices - Alliteration is carefully used. This is important in a more serious piece. In lighter more playful pieces, alliteration can be used more liberally. My favorite examples: once/whispered, and inundating/innocent.

*Noter* Favorite lines/stanzas - This stanza really shows the heart of what happens with rumors.

The infection rages, a cancer of the soul,
inundating the hearts of the innocent.
Its malevolent touch spreads without control.

Until next time... Live, laugh, and write!

Sincerely,
Marci Missing Everyone

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for entry "Invalid Entry" 
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Rated: 18+ | (4.5)
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I am reviewing this item for the challenge presented by Diane . Anything I say is just my humble opinion. Use whatever you can and send the rest to the poetry pixies for use another day. *Butterflyb*

*Balloonp* Emotion/Imagery - This was definitely a fun piece. I love writing and reading things from the perspective of our pets. It's somewhat insightful if you stop to think about it. You present the thoughts very well while keeping to a poetic form. *Thumbsup*

*Balloonb* Rhyme/Form/Flow - This is a quatrain with a rhyming pattern of abab. Meter is spot on and that makes for great flow!

*Balloonv* Grammar/Punctuation - I see no issues.

*Balloonb* Poetic Devices - I noticed a few places where you used enjambment, and quite successfully, I might add. This line was my favorite example of that.

Enough! – the jokes have all been said.

*Balloonp* Favorite Line/Stanza - There are so many to choose from, so I'm going to list more than one. I thoroughly enjoyed this foray in the mind of dogs. (especially since I have two of my own)

We’re happy just to sit and wait
for treats. (We don’t have any thumbs.)
Fun reference to the Beggin' Strips commercial.

We don’t make fun of you … in bed.”

“You could have scratched my ears and chin.”
And though it wouldn't have fit in, you could insert "belly" here. *Laugh*

Until next time... Live, laugh, and write!

Sincerely,
Marci Missing Everyone


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Review of GRANNY'S OLD FLAG  
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Rated: ASR | (3.5)
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I am reviewing this item for the challenge presented by Diane . My name is Marci. Anything I say is just my humble opinion. Use whatever you can and send the rest out to the poetry pixies for use another day. *Butterflyv*

*Flowerp* Imagery - You present the picture of Granny very well. She is faithful and true to her country, and especially the military. The old flag that she has carefully mended has much meaning to her.

*Flowerv* Tone & Mood/Emotional Impact - Because I also have this type of love for my country and it's military, this had a strong emotional impact on me. For the loved ones that she had lost in battle, I actually cried little tears. This is a serious poem, and you do well in the use of your words to present that.

*Flowery* Rhyme, Form & Flow - The poem has an abcb rhyme pattern and is a quatrain. The meter varies from verse to verse, and this does impede the flow somewhat. Although it's a wonderful story, there were a good many stumbles all the way through.

*Flowerb* Grammar/Punctuation - I noticed that at least one time a sentence carried over to another stanza. This was really disconcerting to me, and I think I would find a way to change that. Generally by the end of a stanza, you have finished your thought.

*Flowerw* Poetic Devices noticed and used effectively - None that stood out.

*Flowert* Favorite Lines/Stanzas - This line made me want to stand up and shout with Granny. It also gave me a little chuckle because I imagine Granny as a slight little thing taking on the military.

"Don't make ME come over there!"

Although there were definitely some technical issues with the poem, I really loved the story behind it. How can you not enjoy reading about someone that is such a Patriot! Until next time... Live, Laugh, and Write!

Sincerely,
Marci Missing Everyone

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Review of Writing.Com  
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Rated: E | (4.0)
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It's Marci Missing Everyone . I am reviewing your piece as reciprocation for your review of Visual Poetry. Anything I say is just my humble opinion. Use whatever you can and send the rest out to the poetry pixies for use another day. *Butterflyv*

*Flowerp* Imagery - This is a nice tribute to Writing.com. You included several great thoughts about this wonderful community.

*Flowerv* Tone & Mood/Emotional Impact - I share your feelings about writing.com

*Flowery* Rhyme, Form & Flow - You follow the form nicely. Since it we have so many options with WritingML, it would be nice to see you bold, or even bold and color for the first letter in each line. It really makes the acrostic pop at that point.

*Flowerb* Grammar/Punctuation - The following line does not need commas:

Carefully, carved, creation

*Flowerw* Poetic Devices noticed and used effectively - I like how you use alliteration in each line, even if you are fudging a bit in the "N" line with "environ". *Smile* You could also leave out the "and" in the next line because it is the only line with a conjunction.

*Flowert* Favorite Lines/Stanzas -

Real rhythmic rhyming

Until next time... Live, Laugh, and write!

Sincerely,
Marci Missing Everyone

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Review of Comes an Idea  
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Rated: E | (4.0)
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I am reviewing your piece as a judge in the "Invalid Item" . Anything I say is just my humble opinion. Use whatever you can and send the rest to the poetry pixies for use another day. *Butterflyb*

*Balloonp* Emotion/Imagery - This is a really fun little limerick! It pays great tribute to SM and SMs!

*Balloonb* Rhyme/Form/Flow - You followed the form of limerick nicely. The flow is off a little, and I think I know the reason. In lines one and five, you have nine syllables. However, in line two, you have twelve. This threw off the flow for me quite a bit. There are some easy fixes to take out a couple of syllables. It might be something to think on for the future.

*Balloonv* Grammar/Punctuation - I saw no errors here.

*Balloonb* Poetic Devices - In a form such as a limerick, it's a fun addition to use alliteration. Here are some that I noticed: once/wasteland/writers, and none/niche/nails. Some think that alliteration can only happen in the same line, but this is actually not true.

*Balloonp* Favorite Line/Stanza -

Gives us thirteen years of nail-biters

One of the rules is to highlight the prompt words. Please make sure you do this for future entries. Until next time... Live, laugh, and write!

Sincerely,
Marci Missing Everyone


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Review of Number “13”  
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Rated: E | (4.0)
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I am reviewing your piece as a judge in the "Invalid Item" . Anything I say is just my humble opinion. Use whatever you can and send the rest to the poetry pixies for use another day. *Butterflyb*

*Balloonp* Emotion/Imagery - I like that you take the myth and mystery out of the number thirteen. This was quite creative.

*Balloonb* Rhyme/Form/Flow - You have established a nice quatrain here with the pattern and meter explained at the bottom. However, I only counted seven syllables in the last lines of stanzas one and two. The flow was okay, but I stumbled a bit on a few of the lines.

*Balloonv* Grammar/Punctuation - For the most part, grammar and punctuation are fine. In line two of stanza one, the phrasing is redundant. Is there something different you could put here to improve upon the flow and meaning?

So many times we often hear.

*Balloonb* Poetic Devices - None noticed.

*Balloonp* Favorite Line/Stanza -

So wake up from the slumber,
It is just another number.
Though unlucky for those few,
Blessings it may shower on you.

Until next time... Live, laugh, and write!

Sincerely,
Marci Missing Everyone


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Review of Walk The Lines  
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Rated: 13+ | (5.0)
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I am reviewing your piece as a judge in the "Invalid Item" . Anything I say is just my humble opinion. Use whatever you can and send the rest to the poetry pixies for use another day. *Butterflyb*

*Balloonp* Emotion/Imagery - The vivid imagery in this poem is amazing. You give us a peak into a wonderful imagination feels like it is about to come crashing down.

*Balloonb* Rhyme/Form/Flow - This is a free verse at it's best! The rhyming patterns and meter used is amazing. That's the thing. Free verse can still have rhymes, and then moments of expression as is shown here:

Memories torn in fists of rage,
An actor on a broken stage.
Calendars,
The pages
Gone.
No love,
No dreams
To carry on.

*Balloonv* Grammar/Punctuation - Used to perfection

*Balloonb* Poetic Devices - None noticed.

*Balloonp* Favorite Line/Stanza - I had a hard time choosing a favorite, but here it is...

Ghost ships sail in to the night,
A sheaf of poems
I tried to write.

This poem was wonderfully creative! Thank you for sharing your talent. Until next time... Live, laugh, and write!

Sincerely,
Marci Missing Everyone


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Review of Kindled flame...  
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Rated: E | (4.5)
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I am reviewing your piece as a judge in the "Invalid Item" . Anything I say is just my humble opinion. Use whatever you can and send the rest to the poetry pixies for use another day. *Butterflyb*

*Balloonp* Emotion/Imagery - I read this poem several times, and I love the feel and imagery in this poem. Although, I must say that I didn't exactly get the story line. This line especially confused me:

under the sheets she hid to write, that little crook

Was she stealing something? I can see that maybe she was being sneaky in some way, but a crook is someone who steals.

*Balloonb* Rhyme/Form/Flow - You followed the form perfectly. Nice use of the lesson from Prof. Dave this past week! The rhymes were great, and the flow was smooth.

*Balloonv* Grammar/Punctuation - No problems.

*Balloonb* Poetic Devices - There were a couple nice alliterations worked in: sheets/she, and small/secret. I also noticed a good use of consonance in one line: warm/home/came

*Balloonp* Favorite Line/Stanza -

found meaning in her name -
Kindled flame.

Until next time... Live, laugh, and write!

Sincerely,
Marci Missing Everyone


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Review of Thunderstorms  
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Rated: E | (4.5)
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This review is part of the gift basket from "Invalid Item"  that you won at the "Invalid Item"  raffle. Anything I say is just my humble opinion. Use whatever you can and send the rest out to the poetry pixies for use another day. *Butterflyr*

*Noter* First impression/emotional impact - I love to see different spins put on thunderstorms. They happen to be something that I love writing and reading about as well. Anything that gives honor to God also touches me.

*Noter* Rhyme/form/flow - You followed the Haiku syllable counts well. However, in traditional Haiku, there are no capital letters and no punctuation.

*Noter* Favorite lines/stanzas -

Thunderstorms... shouting God's power

Until next time... Live, laugh, and write!

Sincerely,
Marci Missing Everyone

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In affiliation with Let's help each other grow...  
Rated: E | (4.0)
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It's Marci Missing Everyone . I am reviewing your piece in response to your review of my poem. Anything I say is just my humble opinion. Use whatever you can and send the rest out to the pixies for use another day. *Butterflyv*

*Flowerp* Imagery - The imagery in this small piece is amazing. Is this meant to be a poem? Or where is this going?

*Flowerv* Tone & Mood/Emotional Impact - Since I have Fibromyalgia Syndrome, I can really relate here. I was reading through this thinking, "Yes, wow! Someone else totally gets this." This piece can teach others and make those who have FM feel supported.

*Flowerb* Grammar/Punctuation - The only issue that I found is that you changed from present to past tense a couple times. Since that is your first draft, I assume that is something you will look for upon revision.

*Flowert* Favorite Lines/Stanzas -

"A moan edges out over my yawn. The powerful pain throughout my body inches up from my toes. I could feel the intensity writhe to my back. My shoulders shudder and my body trembles."

I would love to have another look at this after your revision. Thank you for sharing this! Until next time... live, laugh, and write!

Sincerely,
Marci Missing Everyone

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In affiliation with WDC Addicts Anonymous  
Rated: 18+ | (5.0)
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It's Marci Missing Everyone .
** Images For Use By Upgraded+ Only ** This review is part of the gift basket that Shaye bought for you at "Invalid Item"  with the message 'Thanks for buying my package in "Invalid Item" . *Bigsmile* Anything I say is just my humble opinion. Use whatever you can and send the rest out to the poetry pixies for use another day. *Butterflyv*

*Flowerp* Personal Impression - I have never seen a PLOG before! What a wonderful idea. I have a file on my computer where I keep all of these, but they get lost. I think I might have to use this idea. Thank you for sharing!!

*Flowerv* As I read through your poetic thoughts, I was really inspired. It is amazing where we can find an idea for a poem. Great job!

Until next time... Live, laugh, and write!

Sincerely,
Marci Missing Everyone

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In affiliation with The Poet's Place  
Rated: E | (3.5)
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I'm Marci Missing Everyone . I am reviewing your piece because I am working on the 6 hour challenge set forth by StoryMistress. Anything I say is just my humble opinion. Use whatever you can and send the rest out to the poetry pixies for use another day. *Butterflyv*

*Flowerp* Personal Impression - Cinquains are among my favorite forms of poetry. I was immediately drawn to your piece, especially when I opened it and saw the picture.

*Flowery* Rhyme, Form & Flow - you follow the form perfectly with your syllable counts. As far as how this looks on the page, personally I would make the picture smaller since the poem is so small. The picture overwhelms the poem and becomes the focal point instead of just enhancing the writing.

*Flowerw* Suggestions - The poem has a nice flow, but there are a couple of things that I would like to point out. When writing a small poem such as this, it's nice when there is more focus. Choosing your words carefully becomes much more important. Instead of telling me everything about the birdies, focus in on smaller details.

Chirping, munching - I was really thrown off by the sweet sound of chirping, then the next word was munching... hmmm. I don't know what I would put here, but in my mind it goes straight to the sound of "crunch crunch".

Hanging precarious - Now in my mind these birds are singing, crunching, and hanging upside down with one foot.

Living life - These to words together are kind of redundant, and it really stands out in a small poem like this. You could replace the word "life" with "free" or any number of other words to lend to the impact of the poem.

Content - In a Cinquain, this last word should be another form of the first word. So, maybe it could a type of bird like "Robin" or, you could change it around with the word "birdies" and put it at the top.

If you decide to play around with the form any more, let me know. I'd be glad to help in anyway I can. I have a bunch of little poems like this in my port. Keep writing, and until next time... Live, laugh, and write!

Sincerely,
Marci Missing Everyone
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Review of Joey Versus Santa  
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Rated: 13+ | (5.0)
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It'sMarci Missing Everyone again. I am reviewing your piece because you are member of the week for "WDC Addicts Anonymous"  and I am doing the 6 hour WdC challenge. Anything I say is just my humble opinion. Use whatever you can and send the rest out to use another day.

*Flowerr* Hook - Of course you know how important it is to have a good hook. It didn't take me too long to really get into the story. This line really got my attention, and I couldn't look away after reading it.

Or when he killed that dumb little girl Jenny down the block and then dragged her lifeless body down to the river because she'd called him a 'Butt Head'?

*Flowerr* Details - too few/too much - I didn't feel at all bogged down by the details. I liked that you used other descriptions for Santa instead of just saying his name all the time. For example:

- the red suited guy
- that jolly old fellow

*Flowerr* Tone & Mood - You have this listed as a comedy, and I did laugh a couple of times. However, I think that the mood of this piece was more sinister than anything. Have mercy!

*Flowerr* Characters - My mind is still swimming trying to figure out if Joey was a kid or if he was an elf. I thought you did an awesome job portraying this character.

*Flowerr* Plot Development - The twist at the end is something I never saw coming. Wow! Great plot development on this. And the transitions were flawless.

*Flowerr* Grammar/Punctuation - No issues that stood out to me.

I gave this 5 stars, which is rare. This is definitely not your usual Christmas Story!

Sincerely,
Marci Missing Everyone
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Review of Awakening  
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Rated: E | (5.0)
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I'm Marci Missing Everyone . I am reviewing your piece because I reviewed it earlier, and you did an edit. Anything I say is just my humble opinion. Use whatever you can and send the rest out to the poetry pixies for use another day. *Butterflyv*

*Flowerp* Personal Impression - This really speaks to me about coming out of depression now. The title is much more appropriate and the description pulls you right into the poem.

*Flowerv* Tone & Mood - I can feel the struggle that you are talking about and it is evidenced by...

In the midst of the darkening gloom,
I long for the cold, biting wind of a snowy day

*Flowery* Rhyme, Form & Flow - A free form one stanza poem with no rhyming pattern. The structure and flow are impeccable!

*Flowerw* Emotional Impact - My own struggle with depression feels like this, and I identify with the feelings here strongly. Since I only go out a couple times a week, I really wish I could be outdoors for any kind of weather!

*Flowert* Favorite line...

as I drink in the chilly air and, for a moment, feel alive

You did an amazing job on this rewrite, and I had to give you five stars!!! Live, laugh, and write!!!

Sincerely,
Marci Missing Everyone


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