I've read the first chapter that's what reviewing it on. I'm not that good at reviewing that's why I don't do many. So I'm reviewing the story on content etc. not grammar or anything like that.
These are my thoughts it's well written. I liked best of all the first paragraph which I thought very descriptive and flowed well.
There is enough action going on to hold the reader's attention overall. The one thing I found a little of putting is it seemed to me that you go into a very narrative detached mode I realise this is mostly a style of writing so don't to much pay to much attention to me here. In any case its a good read and try to the chapters later