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I really enjoyed reviewing your article. Please take anything I say here as my personal observations. Use what you can and lose the rest.

My overall impression of your work: I'm not exactly sure if I understood the ending. Was it a boy dreaming or an animal dreaming? I do believe that animals can dream after watching the behavior of some dogs I had. Anyway the ending was unclear as it seemed to shift from a boy walking and scared of some approaching foe to an animal trying to sleep in the pouring rain.

Your spelling and grammar: The only grammar mistake I saw was in the second stanza. You used the word "a" before a vowel. "One more moment in a abject life, trivial year, and frivolous week."

It should read "an" abject life.

What I liked most about your article /poem was: I liked the plot. I believe this could be turned into a good horror short story.

What I liked least about your article/poem was: As I said the ending confused me. Perhaps you meant for it to be confusing as a part of the dream? If so then kudos! Brilliantly executed.

Closing remarks: Thank you for writing this. Take what you want of my review and ignore the rest. We're all learning here. Happy account anniversary from Anniversary Reviews Forum!

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Review of Die  
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Rated: E | (4.5)
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I really enjoyed reviewing your article. Please take anything I say here as my personal observations. Use what you can and lose the rest.

My overall impression of your work: This is a poem about unrequited love and a broken heart. You express deep love for this person from what appears to be a masculine point of view. I say masculine because you portray the "tough guy, stiff upper lip image", when you know the reality is far different. I hope you have since come to terms with your grief. I think the hardest grief to deal with is grieving a living person because there are constant reminders along the way.

Your spelling and grammar: looked fine to me.

What I liked most about your article /poem was: I liked that you were able to express this even if anonymously. While we writers leave it all exposed there is a certain anonymity to it. This is a "safe" environment.

What I liked least about your article/poem was: I didn't like thinking your pain may be recent. I didn't catch the writing date. I hope you are over it now.

Closing remarks: Thank you for writing this. I hope it helped. Happy account anniversary from Anniversary Reviews Forum!

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Review of A Boys Way Out  
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Rated: 13+ | (4.5)
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I really enjoyed reviewing your article. Please take anything I say here as my personal observations. Use what you can and lose the rest.

My overall impression of your work: Gang violence is indeed a scourge on our society. Whatever happened to the days when boys would beat the crap out of each other then walk away friends at the end of the fight? I remember that was how fights were once settled. I can see your pain in this one and I hope you are abler to reclaim your town. Good for you! You are absolutely correct when you say "angry parents are hard to beat."

Your spelling and grammar:looked fine to me.

What I liked most about your article /poem was: I LIKED THAT YOU WROTE IT. It tells a story and has a good theme. I wish for your sake it had ended differently. i am assuming it is based on truth.

What I liked least about your article/poem was: I didn't like knowing this was probably true and a young man gave his life because he wanted out of an unhealthy relationship.

Closing remarks: I am very glad you wrote this. I pray it was cathartic for you. Happy account anniversary from Anniversary Reviews Forum!

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Review of Amour  
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Rated: E | (4.0)
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I really enjoyed reviewing your article. Please take anything I say here as my personal observations. Use what you can and lose the rest.

My overall impression of your work: I read a beautiful love story here. It described a strong love that seems eternal. I hope it all works out and that it lasts forever.

Your spelling and grammar: were great as far as I could see.

What I liked most about your article /poem was: I liked the romance and the rhyme. I'm a nut for rhyme poetry.

What I liked least about your article/poem was: The flow was off. Some lines seemed too long and others were good. The rhyming lines should sync and they seemed off.

Closing remarks: Happy account anniversary from Anniversary Reviews Forum!

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Review of Every Night  
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Rated: E | (4.5)
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I really enjoyed reviewing your article. Please take anything I say here as my personal observations. Use what you can and lose the rest.

My overall impression of your work: I read a poem of regret in this one as the author second guessed themselves and beat up on themselves for bad choices made. I think we have all done that. The key is acceptance. If I have one foot in the past and one foot in tomorrow I am skipping today. We all have regrets. I hope you learn to like who you are now and realize that it took each second of the past to make you who you are now.

Your spelling and grammar: were mostly okay. In the eleventh line you wrote "a" apple and the proper grammar would be "an" apple.

What I liked most about your article /poem was: IU liked that you were examining yourself.

What I liked least about your article/poem was: It makes me uncomfortable when people are down. I want to help them up. Hope you live down your regrets.

Closing remarks: Happy account anniversary from Anniversary Reviews Forum!

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Rated: 13+ | (5.0)
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I really enjoyed reviewing your article. Please take anything I say here as my personal observations. Use what you can and lose the rest.

My overall impression of your work: This poem had everything I like in it. It was rhymed and metered. It discussed a spirit seeking vengeance on the mortals who hurt her. The theme was great, the flow excellent. Good job!

Your spelling and grammar: I saw no issues.

What I liked most about your article /poem was: Everything. I love a good sing song flow and this poem had one. The imagery was good and the theme good.

What I liked least about your article/poem was: Nothing.

Closing remarks: Thank you for writing this. You show talent. Happy account anniversary from Anniversary Reviews Forum!

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Review of the unmarked door  
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Rated: E | (5.0)
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I really enjoyed reviewing your article. Please take anything I say here as my personal observations. Use what you can and lose the rest.

My overall impression of your work: I can understand why you would want to awaken from this dream, although I agree with you. Mythical creatures are fascinating. I have a letterhead I use with a picture of a griffin on it. Your poem talks about riding the dragon's back. I never thought about riding my griffin or the pegasus I have. It makes for an interesting story line.

Your spelling and grammar: As far as I could see were okay. Nothing stood out.

What I liked most about your article /poem was: I Liked the way you included plot in those few lines. Perhaps you can write a short story using this plot?

What I liked least about your article/poem was: Nothing, thus the five stars. Your poem flowed well and had a good plot. The imagery was excellent.

Closing remarks: Thank you for writing this and maybe sparking my own muse a little.

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Review of Acrostic Poems  
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Rated: E | (5.0)
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I really enjoyed reviewing your article. Please take anything I say here as my personal observations. Use what you can and lose the rest.

My overall impression of your work: This acrostic about Cinderella was fun to read. You depicted the story of Cinderella sneaking into the ball and winning her suitor's heart in just a few words and lines.

Your spelling and grammar: were fine as far as I could tell.

What I liked most about your article /poem was: I liked the format. Acrostics are a favorite of mine and Cinderella makes interesting subject matter.

What I liked least about your article/poem was: Nothing, thus the perfect score.

Closing remarks: Happy account anniversary from Anniversary Reviews Forum!

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Rated: E | (4.0)
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I really enjoyed reviewing your article. Please take anything I say here as my personal observations. Use what you can and lose the rest.

My overall impression of your work: You have written a prayer to Facebook here modeled after the Lord's Prayer. While I can agree that there is humor in it, it seems to place Facebook in the status of God, which I don't care for. I know from the tone and context that this was not meant to be serious and I'm sure even the Good Lord got a chuckle at the humor in it. Facebook can be finicky to say the least.

Your spelling and grammar: were fine as far as I could tell.

What I liked most about your article /poem was: I liked the humor. It was funny and the wayyou poked fun at other social medias was worth the read.

What I liked least about your article/poem was: I didn't like elevating Facebook to the status of deity, even as a joke.

Closing remarks: Happy account anniversary from Anniversary Reviews Forum!

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Review of Lifelines  
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Rated: E | (4.0)
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I really enjoyed reviewing your article. Please take anything I say here as my personal observations. Use what you can and lose the rest.

My overall impression of your work: I think you are absolutely right. Life is usually not easy and it is tougher on some than it it is on others. Every once in a while somebody comes along who eases the burdens. For me that somebody was Jesus Christ. For others it may be a girlfriend or boyfriend.

Your spelling and grammar: were okay as far as I could see.

What I liked most about your article /poem was: I like that you reminded me that we are herd animals. We need each other.

What I liked least about your article/poem was: Maybe the format. I'm developing a taste for free verse but still have problems with flow.

Closing remarks: Happy account anniversary from Anniversary Reviews Forum!

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Rated: E | (4.5)
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I really enjoyed reviewing your article. Please take anything I say here as my personal observations. Use what you can and lose the rest.

My overall impression of your work: You used the prompt word "prescient", which threw me for a loop because I am unfamiliar with the word. Take from the context of the poem I assume it to mean "psychic" and if so the poem is about a person with an incredible psychic talent. Apparently they are pretty accurate as your poem compares their consistency to that of ocean waves.

Your spelling and grammar: Looked okay to me.

What I liked most about your article /poem was: I liked learning a new word.

What I liked least about your article/poem was: Nothing thus the high score. I gave you a 4.5 in case I was wrong about my deduction as to the meaning of "prescient".

Closing remarks: Happy account anniversary from Anniversary Reviews Forum!

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Review of Knight's Devotion  
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Rated: E | (4.5)
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I really enjoyed reviewing your article. Please take anything I say here as my personal observations. Use what you can and lose the rest.

My overall impression of your work: It sounds like you are very bitter toward God. The last stanza asks that you not be buried under a steeple, indicating a church. Then you go on to say that God has abandoned you. I assure you that I have felt as if God had abandoned me and at times I was convinced of it. Experience has taught me that when God seems to have moved that it is actually I who who has moved. Jesus is the same yesterday, today, and forever. Hebrews 13: 8.

Your spelling and grammar: These appeared to be okay.

What I liked most about your article /poem was: I liked that you questioned God. I wish you had drawn better conclusions.

What I liked least about your article/poem was: I didn't like thinking that you may feel God has abandoned you. I assure you He has not.

Closing remarks: Hopefully you will reconcile with God. He loves you. I love you. Happy account anniversary from Anniversary Reviews Forum!

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Review of Heaven and Dust  
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Rated: ASR | (4.5)
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I really enjoyed reviewing your article. Please take anything I say here as my personal observations. Use what you can and lose the rest.

My overall impression of your work: You said in your poem that heaven is a place in one's soul. I don't know that I totally agree with that. I believe heaven can exist within the soul but that it is a real place where believers will be forever.

Your spelling and grammar: I saw no issues,

What I liked most about your article /poem was: I like knowing that you believe in heaven. As a Christian this tells me you also believe in hell and want to avoid it.

What I liked least about your article/poem was: Maybe the format. I lose attention after a few stanzas and it becomes hard to focus. Rhyme and meter is easiest for me.

Closing remarks: Thank you for writing this. Happy new year and happy account anniversary from Anniversary Reviews Forum!

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Rated: E | (4.5)
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I really enjoyed reviewing your article. Please take anything I say here as my personal observations. Use what you can and lose the rest.

My overall impression of your work: I agree that Santa comes in many different forms. You have described many of the forms Santas can take. I guess it depends on the part of the world you are in and if the culture even celebrates Christmas. This poem was very fitting as this is Christmas Day and Santa just made his huge trek from the North Pole last night.

Your spelling and grammar: I saw no spelling or grammar mistakes.

What I liked most about your article /poem was: I liked that you had a poem about Santa in your port on Christmas Day. How appropriate!

What I liked least about your article/poem was: The second stanza and the next to the last stanza did not flow as smoothly and interrupted the rhythm.

Closing remarks: Thank you for writing this Bill. Merry Christmas my friend! Happy account anniversary from Anniversary Reviews Forum!

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Review of Moon Music  
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Rated: E | (4.0)
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I really enjoyed reviewing your article. Please take anything I say here as my personal observations. Use what you can and lose the rest.

My overall impression of your work: The different moons of the year do indded make for an excellent topic to write about. This poem felt nostalgic while at the same time seeming very descriptive.

Your spelling and grammar: These looked okay to me.

What I liked most about your article /poem was: I liked the way you used twelve individual moons to write twelve stand alone yet cohesive poems.

What I liked least about your article/poem was: Your syllable count was correct if I did not miscount, but it takes more than syllables to make a true haiku. Haiku also needs an epiphany or "aha" moment in the last line. In this case you would need twelve of them and I did not see that. Haiku is very difficult and even the Japanese masters had great difficulty getting them accomplished.

Closing remarks: Thank you for writing this. While it may not be a true haiku, it is still a good nature poem. Happy account anniversary from Anniversary Reviews Forum!

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Review of White Water Life  
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I really enjoyed reviewing your article. Please take anything I say here as my personal observations. Use what you can and lose the rest.

My overall impression of your work: You have written a poem about the thrills of white water rafting and you make it sound like a lot of fun. I try not to do anything too strenuous anymore so I can't imagine fighting to keep afloat. It sounds exhausting!

Your spelling and grammar: I saw no errors.

What I liked most about your article /poem was: I especially liked that you introduced me to a newe form. I am unfamiliar with the form and would have to study it before I could even venture to critique it well.

What I liked least about your article/poem was: I did find it a bit longer than I like.

Closing remarks: Thank you for writing. Happy account anniversary from Anniversary Reviews Forum!

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Rated: ASR | (5.0)
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I really enjoyed reviewing your article. Please take anything I say here as my personal observations. Use what you can and lose the rest.

My overall impression of your work: I think the idea of a forum where there are no ratings and no critiques is a good idea. You are providing such a forum here. Poets do work hard on their poetry. Sometimes they don't want it critiqued, just read. Good call!

Your spelling and grammar: Your spelling and grammar mostly looked good to me. I did want to point out that you wrote "These poets have worked hard on the pieces I and others, have been displaying here."

"Others" should come before "I" to be grammatically correct.

What I liked most about your article /poem was: I liked that you are providing a laid back, read only forum.

What I liked least about your article/poem was: With the exception of the one grammar error I saw no problems and thus gave this one five stars.

Closing remarks: Thank you for providing this forum! Happy account anniversary from Anniversary Reviews Forum!

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Review of Sucked At My Soul  
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Rated: E | (5.0)
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I really enjoyed reviewing your article. Please take anything I say here as my personal observations. Use what you can and lose the rest.

My overall impression of your work: I very much related to this piece. For one thing the people you described were once me. I have been clean almost 11 years. I also related as a professional. I am a peer support specialist/counselor working toward my MSW and work a lot with addicts. The part that touched me most was your missing those who did not return. I understand that feeling and have felt it. You often never know what became of them.

Your spelling and grammar: The only pllace I saw any conflict was the line where you wrote "Junkies, alkies, users hooked on me,"

I think "me" was meant to be "meth".

What I liked most about your article /poem was: Again I rellated as a professional myself. I have seen a lotof good providers burnout because of the nagging "what ever became of this one or that one questions. We cannot look at the losses. We must look at the victories and the comfort we provide. This is our fuel.

What I liked least about your article/poem was: I liked everything about this because it conveyed a message about what it feels like to be on the professional side of the fence. Providers are often the forgotten heroes in the picture. Perhaps your poem will enlighten some new readers who are not themselves professionals.

Closing remarks: Thank you Doctor for providing care and treatment to the addicts in your care. I know it is a very hard job and the victories seem to be so few. The one or two victories we see make the rest more bearable. It was doctors like yourself who made my life as a junkie more "tolerable". I may have died by my own hands long ago without the help of individuals such as yourself. Perhaps after I complete graduate school and am a doctor in my own right our paths will cross. I'd like that. I am applying to the MSW program at Marshall University, then plan to seek a Ph. D. perhaps in forensic psychology dealing with addiction. Again thank you for caring and sharing. Happy account anniversary from Anniversary Reviews Forum!

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Rated: E | (4.0)
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I really enjoyed reviewing your article. Please take anything I say here as my personal observations. Use what you can and lose the rest.

My overall impression of your work: It is obvious from this poem that you have a serious crush on somebody. May it bloom into a full grown, full blown love affair and may you have a bright future together. I enjoyed reading about this budding romance and the way you were attracted by various body parts. That truly is infatuation and love.

Your spelling and grammar: The only thing I saw was the lines that ended in "Tell me yes" seemed to be misplaced. In one place you made it a separate line as it should be and it worked fine. As it is it interrupts the reader's concentration.

What I liked most about your article /poem was: I liked your use of metaphors and situations. For example you said "I will never kill a moth again if that is what it means to be attracted to light".
I really liked that.

What I liked least about your article/poem was: In places your poem seemed to stall when I was reading it. By that I mean the flow seemed disrupted. I don't have a suggestion on fixing it. Maybe rewording some of it so it is not as long in places would do the trick.

Closing remarks: Thank you for writing this. Again I hope your romance blooms as the poem was very romantic! Happy account anniversary from Anniversary Reviews Forum!

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Review of Heroes  
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Rated: E | (4.0)
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I really enjoyed reviewing your article. Please take anything I say here as my personal observations. Use what you can and lose the rest.

My overall impression of your work: I felt like there was an incompleteness to your poem unless it was intentional. You described how the seven men began a quest but you never said they finished it. Surely out of all the people named and many more they could have found their heroes?

Your spelling and grammar: I saw no spelling or grammar errors.

What I liked most about your article /poem was: I liked the format most of all. I was partial to rhyme and meter but have come to appreciate well written free verse. Yours had flow and and a nice steady beat.

What I liked least about your article/poem was: Again I was disappointed that they seemed to continue on their quest without settling on anybody.

Closing remarks: Thank you for writing this. I enjoyed reading it. Perhaps you would like to edit it to give it some semblance of the men coming to a consensus. Happy account anniversary from Anniversary Reviews Forum!

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Review of The Blue Heart  
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I really enjoyed reviewing your article. Please take anything I say here as my personal observations. Use what you can and lose the rest.

My overall impression of your work: In this poem you successfully recounted the pain of unrequited love. It is painful to love somebody and not have them love you back. You are obviously suffering the blues and Blue Heart expresses this well.

Your spelling and grammar: Yourr spelling and grammar appeared to be okay. I allow for poetic license, which means that many poets choose to omit punctuation because it interferes with the flow of readsing. If you used poetic license you did so successfully.

What I liked most about your article /poem was: I liked that you were able to express this pain.

What I liked least about your article/poem was: Nothing, thus the five stars.
Closing remarks: Happy account anniversary from Anniversary Reviews Forum!

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Review of Meaningless  
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I really enjoyed reviewing your article. I look forward to seeing more work from you in the future. I try to do as many reviews as I can each week. I am a professional writer and I know the value of a good review. So I try to give them as often as possible. I am also reviewing this article in association with Anniversary Reviews forum. Happy account anniversary!!

My overall impression of your work: Iagree that love should be the motive behind everything we do. I am a soldier in the Salvation Army, a worldwide evangelical organization and every action I take is tempered with love. I try not to get angry or out on anger because it doesn't work out well.

Your spelling and grammar were good as far as I could tell. I read quickly so I could easily overlook something. However everything looked good to me.

What I liked most about your article /poem was: I liked the message.

What I liked least about your article/poem was: the grammar and spelling mistakes.

Free Writer's Advice: I include the following in all of my reviews. It is some advice I learned about poetry based on personal experience. Hopefully you can use it: I have recently made some discoveries that I like to share with my fellow poets. I also write for https:allpoetry.com and recently have won numerous awards there. The reason I have been winning is because I have changed my writing style. I write primarily poetry and have always been very descriptive in my work. I have discovered however, that the key is not in describing but rather in painting a picture and allowing the reader to interpret it through their own filters. I do that by omitting adjectives and adverbs, as well as prepositions. In other words I use no words that describe but rely instead on nouns, pronouns, and verbs to convey my message. Instead of saying “Roses are red” I say “looking at the roses”. This allows the reader to interpret it and paint their own picture. I have found it to be very effective. I have won a total of ten out of thirty contests I entered there in the past two weeks. I have not always placed high. Many of my wins have been honorable mentions, but they are still trophies.

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Review of Buried Terror  
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Rated: 18+ | (5.0)
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I really enjoyed reviewing your article. I look forward to seeing more work from you in the future. I try to do as many reviews as I can each week. I am a professional writer and I know the value of a good review. So I try to give them as often as possible. I am also reviewing this article in association with Anniversary Reviews forum. Happy account anniversary!!

My overall impression of your work: As a peer support specialist and as a psychology student I have discovered that you never know when some sight, smell, situation, or combination of any of these things and many more will trigger just such a moment. Fortunately you had somebody who knew what to do. Many are not as fortunate when their moment of reckoning occurs.

Your spelling and grammar were good as far as I could tell. I read quickly so I could easily overlook something. However everything looked good to me.

What I liked most about your article /poem was: I thought it was spot on. I often find that when people react negatively toward me, it is not really me they are angry with but some specter from their past.

What I liked least about your article/poem was: Nothing thus the high score.

Free Writer's Advice: I include the following in all of my reviews. It is some advice I learned about poetry based on personal experience. Hopefully you can use it: I have recently made some discoveries that I like to share with my fellow poets. I also write for https:allpoetry.com and recently have won numerous awards there. The reason I have been winning is because I have changed my writing style. I write primarily poetry and have always been very descriptive in my work. I have discovered however, that the key is not in describing but rather in painting a picture and allowing the reader to interpret it through their own filters. I do that by omitting adjectives and adverbs, as well as prepositions. In other words I use no words that describe but rely instead on nouns, pronouns, and verbs to convey my message. Instead of saying “Roses are red” I say “looking at the roses”. This allows the reader to interpret it and paint their own picture. I have found it to be very effective. I have won a total of ten out of thirty contests I entered there in the past two weeks. I have not always placed high. Many of my wins have been honorable mentions, but they are still trophies.

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Review of Tender Touch  
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Rated: E | (4.5)
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I really enjoyed reviewing your article. I look forward to seeing more work from you in the future. I try to do as many reviews as I can each week. I am a professional writer and I know the value of a good review. So I try to give them as often as possible. I am also reviewing this article in association with Anniversary Reviews forum. Happy account anniversary!!

My overall impression of your work: It's amazing that the first review I do on the day that I find out I'm to be a grandfather is about motherhood! Motherhood is such a beautiful thing. I was both mother and father to my son after his birh and for many years so I have experienced all the things you speak of. One never wearies! Love keeps you going!

Your spelling and grammar were good as far as I could tell. I read quickly so I could easily overlook something. However everything looked good to me.

What I liked most about your article /poem was: I liked that it was so appropriate for me.

What I liked least about your article/poem was: maybe the format.

Free Writer's Advice: I include the following in all of my reviews. It is some advice I learned about poetry based on personal experience. Hopefully you can use it: I have recently made some discoveries that I like to share with my fellow poets. I also write for https:allpoetry.com and recently have won numerous awards there. The reason I have been winning is because I have changed my writing style. I write primarily poetry and have always been very descriptive in my work. I have discovered however, that the key is not in describing but rather in painting a picture and allowing the reader to interpret it through their own filters. I do that by omitting adjectives and adverbs, as well as prepositions. In other words I use no words that describe but rely instead on nouns, pronouns, and verbs to convey my message. Instead of saying “Roses are red” I say “looking at the roses”. This allows the reader to interpret it and paint their own picture. I have found it to be very effective. I have won a total of ten out of thirty contests I entered there in the past two weeks. I have not always placed high. Many of my wins have been honorable mentions, but they are still trophies.

Closing remarks: Happy account anniversary from Anniversary Reviews Forum!

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Review of LIGHT  
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Rated: E | (5.0)
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I really enjoyed reviewing your article. I look forward to seeing more work from you in the future. I try to do as many reviews as I can each week. I am a professional writer and I know the value of a good review. So I try to give them as often as possible. I am also reviewing this article in association with Anniversary Reviews forum. Happy account anniversary!!

My overall impression of your work: I like metered poetry in any form and ABC poetry is no exception. I always have a problem when I get to the end of the alphabet! Your poem about light does it well though. I did a science fair project once about the spectrum. I didn't even place!

Your spelling and grammar were good as far as I could tell. I read quickly so I could easily overlook something. However everything looked good to me.

What I liked most about your article /poem was: I liked the form.

What I liked least about your article/poem was: Nothing thus the five stars.

Free Writer's Advice: I include the following in all of my reviews. It is some advice I learned about poetry based on personal experience. Hopefully you can use it: I have recently made some discoveries that I like to share with my fellow poets. I also write for https:allpoetry.com and recently have won numerous awards there. The reason I have been winning is because I have changed my writing style. I write primarily poetry and have always been very descriptive in my work. I have discovered however, that the key is not in describing but rather in painting a picture and allowing the reader to interpret it through their own filters. I do that by omitting adjectives and adverbs, as well as prepositions. In other words I use no words that describe but rely instead on nouns, pronouns, and verbs to convey my message. Instead of saying “Roses are red” I say “looking at the roses”. This allows the reader to interpret it and paint their own picture. I have found it to be very effective. I have won a total of ten out of thirty contests I entered there in the past two weeks. I have not always placed high. Many of my wins have been honorable mentions, but they are still trophies.

Closing remarks: Happy account anniversary from Anniversary Reviews Forum!

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