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Review of Cloudstepper  
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Rated: E | (5.0)
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My overall impression of your work: We are studying the atmosphere in my Oceanography class right now so I can really relate to your poem. Clouds are fascinating to look at, especially from above.

Your spelling and grammar were good as far as I could tell. I read quickly so I could easily overlook something. However everything looked good to me.

What I liked most about your article /poem was: I liked the flow. It has symmetry.

What I liked least about your article/poem was: Nothing, thus the high score.

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Rated: 13+ | (5.0)
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I really enjoyed reviewing your article. I look forward to seeing more work from you in the future. I try to do as many reviews as I can each week. I am a professional writer and I know the value of a good review. So I try to give them as often as possible. I am also reviewing this article in association with Anniversary Reviews forum. Happy account anniversary!!

My overall impression of your work: I was just wondering if this was the same "Hooves" that is on here? I guess it doesn't matter, but I was curious. I like the way this one flowed and the plot was well arranged.

Your spelling and grammar were good as far as I could tell. I read quickly so I could easily overlook something. However everything looked good to me.

What I liked most about your article /poem was: The flow as I said. I like rhyme poetry.

What I liked least about your article/poem was: Nothing thus the high score.

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Review of A Moment in Time  
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Rated: ASR | (5.0)
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I really enjoyed reviewing your article. I look forward to seeing more work from you in the future. I try to do as many reviews as I can each week. I am a professional writer and I know the value of a good review. So I try to give them as often as possible. I am also reviewing this article in association with Anniversary Reviews forum. Happy account anniversary!!

My overall impression of your work: It sounds to me like somebody was in love. I know the feeling. My wife has been dead for almost six years and I still love her very much. Hang in there. You'll love again one day.

Your spelling and grammar were good as far as I could tell. I read quickly so I could easily overlook something. However everything looked good to me.

What I liked most about your article /poem was: I liked the flow.

What I liked least about your article/poem was: Nothing thus the high score.

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Rated: E | (4.5)
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I really enjoyed reviewing your article. I look forward to seeing more work from you in the future. I try to do as many reviews as I can each week. I am a professional writer and I know the value of a good review. So I try to give them as often as possible. I am also reviewing this article in association with Anniversary Reviews forum. Happy account anniversary!!

My overall impression of your work: It looks to me like you used all of the words. I didn't see any that you missed. I liked the way you started out saying you character had a proclivity for doing things. I don't hear that word used a lot nor defined often.

Your spelling and grammar were good as far as I could tell. I read quickly so I could easily overlook something. However everything looked good to me.

What I liked most about your article /poem was: I liked the way you defined all the words by giving examples.

What I liked least about your article/poem was: Nothing thus the high score.

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Rated: E | (5.0)
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I really enjoyed reviewing your article. I look forward to seeing more work from you in the future. I try to do as many reviews as I can each week. I am a professional writer and I know the value of a good review. So I try to give them as often as possible. I am also reviewing this article in association with Anniversary Reviews forum. Happy account anniversary!!

My overall impression of your work: Mothers are something a lot of people don't appreciate until they are gone. I'd give anything to be able to talk to my mother again, but she has gone to her reward. Hold onto your mom if you still have her. Time will go by quickly.

Your spelling and grammar were good as far as I could tell. I read quickly so I could easily overlook something. However everything looked good to me.

What I liked most about your article /poem was: I liked the sentiment and the rhyme.

What I liked least about your article/poem was: Nothing thus the high score.

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Review of Corporate World  
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Rated: E | (5.0)
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I really enjoyed reviewing your article. I look forward to seeing more work from you in the future. I try to do as many reviews as I can each week. I am a professional writer and I know the value of a good review. So I try to give them as often as possible. I am also reviewing this article in association with Anniversary Reviews forum. Happy account anniversary!!

My overall impression of your work: This one was sing song just the way I like and it had a good message. I need to get back to writing more rhyme poetry. I've been a free verse tangent recently. Your poem reminded me of the beauty of verse. I will be back.

Your spelling and grammar were good as far as I could tell. I read quickly so I could easily overlook something. However everything looked good to me.

What I liked most about your article /poem was: I liked the rhyme and the topic. People do work themselves to death sometimes.

What I liked least about your article/poem was: Nothing thus the high score.

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Review of New Life  
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Rated: E | (5.0)
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I really enjoyed reviewing your article. I look forward to seeing more work from you in the future. I try to do as many reviews as I can each week. I am a professional writer and I know the value of a good review. So I try to give them as often as possible. I am also reviewing this article in association with Anniversary Reviews forum. Happy account anniversary!!

My overall impression of your work: I have found that writing in a man that allows the reader to interpret poetry is very effective. It shows the reader and doesn't tell them. I have won several awards by doing that.

Your spelling and grammar were good as far as I could tell. I read quickly so I could easily overlook something. However everything looked good to me.

What I liked most about your article /poem was: I liked that it was impressionable.

What I liked least about your article/poem was: Nothing thus the high score.

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Review of Walls  
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Rated: E | (4.5)
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I really enjoyed reviewing your article. I look forward to seeing more work from you in the future. I try to do as many reviews as I can each week. I am a professional writer and I know the value of a good review. So I try to give them as often as possible. I am also reviewing this article in association with Anniversary Reviews forum. Happy account anniversary!!

My overall impression of your work: I've felt that way before: trapped and confused. I have to ask you a question I am asked every Sunday. Have you read your Bible today? I find that the answers to those trapped feelings is usually in God's word. I know the solution is in Jesus Christ.

Your spelling and grammar were good as far as I could tell. I read quickly so I could easily overlook something. However everything looked good to me.

What I liked most about your article /poem was: I liked that you are searching.

What I liked least about your article/poem was: Nothing thus the high score.

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Review of The Seer  
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Rated: E | (5.0)
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I really enjoyed reviewing your article. I look forward to seeing more work from you in the future. I try to do as many reviews as I can each week. I am a professional writer and I know the value of a good review. So I try to give them as often as possible. I am also reviewing this article in association with Anniversary Reviews forum. Happy account anniversary!!

My overall impression of your work: I like your use of metaphor in this one and can see why iy was about to be published. Metaphors show people your poem and allow them to interpret it. You used them well.

Your spelling and grammar were good as far as I could tell. I read quickly so I could easily overlook something. However everything looked good to me.

What I liked most about your article /poem was: As I said I liked the use of metaphor.

What I liked least about your article/poem was: Nothing thus the high score. Good luck with the publication. I hope it all goes well.

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Rated: 18+ | (4.5)
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I really enjoyed reviewing your article. I look forward to seeing more work from you in the future. I try to do as many reviews as I can each week. I am a professional writer and I know the value of a good review. So I try to give them as often as possible. I am also reviewing this article in association with Anniversary Reviews forum. Happy account anniversary!!

My overall impression of your work: I read a lot of William Johnstone novels and a lot of Louis La'mour westerns. They always have the bad guys losing of course but your poem puts the bad guys in the protagonist role. Nice approach!

Your spelling and grammar were good as far as I could tell. I read quickly so I could easily overlook something. However everything looked good to me.

What I liked most about your article /poem was: I liked the twist on the good guy/ bad guy roles.

What I liked least about your article/poem was: I thought it was a bit too long. My attention span with poetry is short.

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Review of Crimson Dreams  
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Rated: E | (5.0)
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I really enjoyed reviewing your article. I look forward to seeing more work from you in the future. I try to do as many reviews as I can each week. I am a professional writer and I know the value of a good review. So I try to give them as often as possible. I am also reviewing this article in association with Anniversary Reviews forum. Happy account anniversary!!

My overall impression of your work: This one has a great flow to it. I can tell you are obviously very enthralled with somebody. I pray it worked out the way you wanted it to.

Your spelling and grammar were good as far as I could tell. I read quickly so I could easily overlook something. However everything looked good to me.

What I liked most about your article /poem was: I liked the flow. As I said it was sing-song in meter and that is great. It takes talent to produce that kind od piece. Good job!

What I liked least about your article/poem was: Nothing thus the high score.

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Review of Murder  
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Rated: 18+ | (4.5)
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I really enjoyed reviewing your article. I look forward to seeing more work from you in the future. I try to do as many reviews as I can each week. I am a professional writer and I know the value of a good review. So I try to give them as often as possible. I am also reviewing this article in association with Anniversary Reviews forum. Happy account anniversary!!

My overall impression of your work: That sounds more like war than murder. I know a lot of warriors who have killed and I would call none of them murderers. War is terrible. Nobody is saying it is a good business. Your character sounds more like a warrior than killer.

Your spelling and grammar were good as far as I could tell. I read quickly so I could easily overlook something. However everything looked good to me.

What I liked most about your article /poem was: I liked the way the enemy looked at him.

What I liked least about your article/poem was: I have won a lot of awards recently on another site because I changed my writing style. Now I use metaphors consisting of nouns, pronouns, verbs, conjunctions, and a few prepositions to convey a message readers can "interpret". They love it.

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Review of I Remember  
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Rated: E | (4.5)
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I really enjoyed reviewing your article. I look forward to seeing more work from you in the future. I try to do as many reviews as I can each week. I am a professional writer and I know the value of a good review. So I try to give them as often as possible. I am also reviewing this article in association with Anniversary Reviews forum. Happy account anniversary!!

My overall impression of your work: Those sound like fond memories of unrequited love or worse yet, love lost to death. My wife died in 2014 and I still miss her dearly. In fact, it was today in 2014 that she collapsed after having a heart attack. She died three days later. I hope you can regain your lost love.

Your spelling and grammar were good as far as I could tell. I read quickly so I could easily overlook something. However everything looked good to me.

What I liked most about your article /poem was: I liked the imagery in it.

What I liked least about your article/poem was: I have won a lot of awards on another site recently because I changed my writing style. I no longer use descriptive words such as adjectives or adverbs. I use nouns, pronouns, conjunctions, verbs, and some prepositions to create metaphors for the reader to interpret. They love it.

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Review of The Seasons  
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Rated: E | (4.5)
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I really enjoyed reviewing your article. I look forward to seeing more work from you in the future. I try to do as many reviews as I can each week. I am a professional writer and I know the value of a good review. So I try to give them as often as possible. I am also reviewing this article in association with Anniversary Reviews forum. Happy account anniversary!!

My overall impression of your work: Yes. Winter will be here soon. I dread its approach because it is not my favorite season. However God is in control so we take what we get. I like what you wrote here. My favorite line was "Bright autumn leaves are falling"/ It showed and did not tell. I could picture leaves falling from the trees.

Your spelling and grammar were good as far as I could tell. I read quickly so I could easily overlook something. However everything looked good to me.

What I liked most about your article /poem was: I like old fashion rhyme even if critics say it is amateurish.

What I liked least about your article/poem was: I would suggest using no descriptive words at all. I have been winning a lot of trophies on another site I write for because I started using only nouns, verbs, pronouns, conjunctions, and limited prepositions. I leave out adverbs and adjectives. This allows the reader to fill in the blanks, thus interpreting the words. They love it!

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Review of Summer Storm  
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Rated: E | (4.5)
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I really enjoyed reviewing your article. I look forward to seeing more work from you in the future. I try to do as many reviews as I can each week. I am a professional writer and I know the value of a good review. So I try to give them as often as possible. I am also reviewing this article in association with Anniversary Reviews forum. Happy account anniversary!!

My overall impression of your work: I too enjoy a good summer time storm. I just don't like them when they are damaging or people get hurt. I guess I'm a people person. I enjoy nature and there is a lot of beauty to it. I prefer people though. I did enjoy reading your poem. I like old fashion rhyme poetry, even if critics say it is amateurish.

Your spelling and grammar were good as far as I could tell. I read quickly so I could easily overlook something. However everything looked good to me.

What I liked most about your article /poem was: I like the rhyme scheme and imagery.

What I liked least about your article/poem was: My advice with poetry is to show, don't tell. I have started to write using only nouns, pronouns, some prepositions, and conjuctions and omitting adverbs and adjectives in my poetry. I find this allows the reader to fill in the blanks and thus build the images in their own mind. Readers love to interpret your work. Use no descriptive words!

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Review of part 2  
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Rated: 13+ | (4.0)
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I really enjoyed reviewing your article. I look forward to seeing more work from you in the future. I try to do as many reviews as I can each week. I am a professional writer and I know the value of a good review. So I try to give them as often as possible. I am also reviewing this article in association with Anniversary Reviews forum. Happy account anniversary!!

My overall impression of your work: It sounds as if you have been hurt. I find that others cannot let me down if I don't place expectations on them. I know this is difficult to do in a relationship because we develop expectations whether we want to or not. Just don't set the curve too high.

Your spelling and grammar were good as far as I could tell. I read quickly so I could easily overlook something. However everything looked good to me.

What I liked most about your article /poem was: I liked that you explored these feelings.

What I liked least about your article/poem was: the format. This was more prose than poetry. I prefer rhyme and meter over prose.

The following are just some tips I have picked up along the way. I pass this along in all my reviews:

I have recently made some discoveries that I like to share with my fellow poets. I also write for https:allpoetry.com and recently have won numerous awards there. The reason I have been winning is because I have changed my writing style. I write primarily poetry and have always been very descriptive in my work. I have discovered however, that the key is not in describing but rather in painting a picture and allowing the reader to interpret it through their own filters. I do that by omitting adjectives and adverbs, as well as prepositions. In other words I use no words that describe but rely instead on nouns, pronouns, and verbs to convey my message. Instead of saying “Roses are red” I say “looking at the roses”. This allows the reader to interpret it and paint their own picture. I have found it to be very effective. I have won a total of ten out of thirty contests I entered there in the past two weeks. I have not always placed high. Many of my wins have been honorable mentions, but they are still trophies.

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Rated: 18+ | (4.0)
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I really enjoyed reviewing your article. I look forward to seeing more work from you in the future. I try to do as many reviews as I can each week. I am a professional writer and I know the value of a good review. So I try to give them as often as possible. I am also reviewing this article in association with Anniversary Reviews forum. Happy account anniversary!!

My overall impression of your work: I admire you for putting in volunteer hours. I once worked as a volunteer at an animal shelter for better part of a year. Then I spent another year working as a volunteer at a hospital. I found it rewarding.

Your spelling and grammar were good as far as I could tell. I read quickly so I could easily overlook something. However everything looked good to me.

What I liked most about your article /poem was: I liked that you explored volunteering. I don't know that I would have been as hard on the manager, and probably would not have called her anything.

What I liked least about your article/poem was: I have recently made some discoveries that I like to share with my fellow poets. I also write for https:allpoetry.com and recently have won numerous awards there. The reason I have been winning is because I have changed my writing style. I write primarily poetry and have always been very descriptive in my work. I have discovered however, that the key is not in describing but rather in painting a picture and allowing the reader to interpret it through their own filters. I do that by omitting adjectives and adverbs, as well as prepositions. In other words I use no words that describe but rely instead on nouns, pronouns, and verbs to convey my message. Instead of saying “Roses are red” I say “looking at the roses”. This allows the reader to interpret it and paint their own picture. I have found it to be very effective. I have won a total of ten out of thirty contests I entered there in the past two weeks. I have not always placed high. Many of my wins have been honorable mentions, but they are still trophies.

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Rated: E | (4.5)
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I really enjoyed reviewing your article. I look forward to seeing more work from you in the future. I try to do as many reviews as I can each week. I am a professional writer and I know the value of a good review. So I try to give them as often as possible. I am also reviewing this article in association with Anniversary Reviews forum. Happy account anniversary!!

My overall impression of your work: It sounds like somebody loves and cares for somebody very much. You have immortalized her with words. Good job!

Your spelling and grammar were good as far as I could tell. I read quickly so I could easily overlook something. However everything looked good to me.

What I liked most about your article /poem was: I liked the passion you expressed and the admiration.

What I liked least about your article/poem was: I have recently made some discoveries that I like to share with my fellow poets. I also write for https:allpoetry.com and recently have won numerous awards there. The reason I have been winning is because I have changed my writing style. I write primarily poetry and have always been very descriptive in my work. I have discovered however, that the key is not in describing but rather in painting a picture and allowing the reader to interpret it through their own filters. I do that by omitting adjectives and adverbs, as well as prepositions. In other words I use no words that describe but rely instead on nouns, pronouns, and verbs to convey my message. Instead of saying “Roses are red” I say “looking at the roses”. This allows the reader to interpret it and paint their own picture. I have found it to be very effective. I have won a total of ten out of thirty contests I entered there in the past two weeks. I have not always placed high. Many of my wins have been honorable mentions, but they are still trophies.

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Review of Push  
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Rated: E | (4.5)
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I really enjoyed reviewing your article. I look forward to seeing more work from you in the future. I try to do as many reviews as I can each week. I am a professional writer and I know the value of a good review. So I try to give them as often as possible. I am also reviewing this article in association with Anniversary Reviews forum. Happy account anniversary!!

My overall impression of your work: There is a lot of self-loathing going on in this one. Do you need a bigger club to beat yourself with? I don't think that last punch quite knocked you out! It bothers me when people beat up on themselves. I have never met you, but I believe you have value. I mean you can't be all bad. You're a writer and that says a lot for you. I'll tell you what. If nobody else will be your friend contact me. I'll be your friend!

Your spelling and grammar were good as far as I could tell. I read quickly so I could easily overlook something. However everything looked good to me.

What I liked most about your article /poem was: I like that you are exploring yourself, even if you are being so hard on yourself. I'm sure it's not as bad as you believe it is.

What I liked least about your article/poem was: The following is some advice I routinely attach to my reviews:

I have recently made some discoveries that I like to share with my fellow poets. I also write for https:allpoetry.com and recently have won numerous awards there. The reason I have been winning is because I have changed my writing style. I write primarily poetry and have always been very descriptive in my work. I have discovered however, that the key is not in describing but rather in painting a picture and allowing the reader to interpret it through their own filters. I do that by omitting adjectives and adverbs, as well as prepositions. In other words I use no words that describe but rely instead on nouns, pronouns, and verbs to convey my message. Instead of saying “Roses are red” I say “looking at the roses”. This allows the reader to interpret it and paint their own picture. I have found it to be very effective. I have won a total of ten out of thirty contests I entered there in the past two weeks. I have not always placed high. Many of my wins have been honorable mentions, but they are still trophies.

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Review of MOCK ME  
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Rated: E | (4.5)
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I really enjoyed reviewing your article. I look forward to seeing more work from you in the future. I try to do as many reviews as I can each week. I am a professional writer and I know the value of a good review. So I try to give them as often as possible. I am also reviewing this article in association with Anniversary Reviews forum. Happy account anniversary!!

My overall impression of your work: I agree! There is a lot of stigma attached to having an eating disorder, substance abuse disorder, mental illness, or myriad other things. Some humans are never happy unless they can look down their noses at others. I pray you have treated your disorder and are in recovery. If you still struggle,might I suggest Overeater's Anonymous? They have a very impressive track record with eating disorders. They are in most cities.

Your spelling and grammar were good as far as I could tell. I read quickly so I could easily overlook something. However everything looked good to me.

What I liked most about your article /poem was: I liked that you shedlighton this pervasive problem in our society.

What I liked least about your article/poem was: The following is advice I attach to most of my poetry reviews:

I stopped by your port today to do a review in honor of your account anniversary for Anniversary Reviews Forum. I found your port empty. As a writer I encourage you to write for us. You obviously have an interest. You filled out the form to open a port. Why not use it?
One reason I find people do not use ports is because they are concerned. They think they will not find an audience for their work. We have people from all walks of life on Writing.com. There are some who like fantasy. Some who like religion. Some who want to blog. We even have a group who is into different fetishes. Whatever your tastes, you will find an audience of like-minded people on Writing.com. I encourage you to share your work and Write on!


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Review of Gone  
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Rated: E | (4.5)
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I really enjoyed reviewing your article. I look forward to seeing more work from you in the future. I try to do as many reviews as I can each week. I am a professional writer and I know the value of a good review. So I try to give them as often as possible. I am also reviewing this article in association with Anniversary Reviews forum. Happy account anniversary!!

My overall impression of your work: The old cliche is true. Sometimes we don't know what we have until it is gone. Apparently this was the case for your relationship partner. I wish it had worked out for you. I'm sure that was difficult.

Your spelling and grammar were good as far as I could tell. I read quickly so I could easily overlook something. However everything looked good to me.

What I liked most about your article /poem was: I liked that you explored this painful situation. Usually the only way to deal with pain is to face it.

What I liked least about your article/poem was: The following is something I typically attach for poets.

I have recently made some discoveries that I like to share with my fellow poets. I also write for https:allpoetry.com and recently have won numerous awards there. The reason I have been winning is because I have changed my writing style. I write primarily poetry and have always been very descriptive in my work. I have discovered however, that the key is not in describing but rather in painting a picture and allowing the reader to interpret it through their own filters. I do that by omitting adjectives and adverbs, as well as prepositions. In other words I use no words that describe but rely instead on nouns, pronouns, and verbs to convey my message. Instead of saying “Roses are red” I say “looking at the roses”. This allows the reader to interpret it and paint their own picture. I have found it to be very effective. I have won a total of ten out of thirty contests I entered there in the past two weeks. I have not always placed high. Many of my wins have been honorable mentions, but they are still trophies.

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Review of My Master's Agony  
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Rated: E | (4.5)
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I really enjoyed reviewing your article. I look forward to seeing more work from you in the future. I try to do as many reviews as I can each week. I am a professional writer and I know the value of a good review. So I try to give them as often as possible. I am also reviewing this article in association with Anniversary Reviews forum. Happy account anniversary!!

My overall impression of your work: This was sort of deceptive! At first I thought it was a religious piece. The end brought it all together. Good job.

Your spelling and grammar were good as far as I could tell. I read quickly so I could easily overlook something. However everything looked good to me.

What I liked most about your article /poem was: I have never considered the world from an animal's perspective. I like the idea. It was very imaginative.

What I liked least about your article/poem was: I have recently made some discoveries that I like to share with my fellow poets. I also write for https:allpoetry.com and recently have won numerous awards there. The reason I have been winning is because I have changed my writing style. I write primarily poetry and have always been very descriptive in my work. I have discovered however, that the key is not in describing but rather in painting a picture and allowing the reader to interpret it through their own filters. I do that by omitting adjectives and adverbs, as well as prepositions. In other words I use no words that describe but rely instead on nouns, pronouns, and verbs to convey my message. Instead of saying “Roses are red” I say “looking at the roses”. This allows the reader to interpret it and paint their own picture. I have found it to be very effective. I have won a total of ten out of thirty contests I entered there in the past two weeks. I have not always placed high. Many of my wins have been honorable mentions, but they are still trophies.

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Rated: E | (4.5)
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I really enjoyed reviewing your article. I look forward to seeing more work from you in the future. I try to do as many reviews as I can each week. I am a professional writer and I know the value of a good review. So I try to give them as often as possible. I am also reviewing this article in association with Anniversary Reviews forum. Happy account anniversary!!

My overall impression of your work: I like what you have started here. I believe you could make this poem exceptional if you want to. I have recently made some discoveries that I like to share with my fellow poets. I also write for https:allpoetry.com and recently have won numerous awards there. The reason I have been winning is because I have changed my writing style. I write primarily poetry and have always been very descriptive in my work. I have discovered however, that the key is not in describing but rather in painting a picture and allowing the reader to interpret it through their own filters. I do that by omitting adjectives and adverbs, as well as prepositions. In other words I use no words that describe but rely instead on nouns, pronouns, and verbs to convey my message. Instead of saying “Roses are red” I say “looking at the roses”. This allows the reader to interpret it and paint their own picture. I have found it to be very effective. I have won a total of ten out of thirty contests I entered there in the past two weeks. I have not always placed high. Many of my wins have been honorable mentions, but they are still trophies.

I agree with you. Death will catch up to us all. I have been married twice. Both women are now deceased. It makes one take a hard look at their own mortality, and accept the fact that we are not going to live forever. Since you mentioned eternity,let me ask you if you know where you will be in eternity. Do you believe in God? If so, do you believe in Jesus Christ? Have you accepted Christ as your Savior? I did not believe in anything at one time. Then I entered recovery from addiction. I found that recovery for me required a power greater than myself. I investigated all world religions, and found that history seems to support the resurrection of Jesus Christ. I mean, even Roman records from that time discuss the eye-witness accounts of His resurrection. That convinced me. I am a Christian.

Your spelling and grammar were good as far as I could tell. I read quickly so I could easily overlook something. However everything looked good to me.

What I liked most about your article /poem was: I liked that you are considering your mortality.

What I liked least about your article/poem was: If anything it would be the format. I have already discussed the use of adjectives and such. I prefer poetry with rhyme and meter over free verse and prose. If I read free verse I prefer it to be less flowery and more hard hitting.

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Review of Ladybug Beach  
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Rated: E | (4.5)
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I really enjoyed reviewing your article. I look forward to seeing more work from you in the future. I try to do as many reviews as I can each week. I am a professional writer and I know the value of a good review. So I try to give them as often as possible. I am also reviewing this article in association with Anniversary Reviews forum. Happy account anniversary!!

My overall impression of your work: I grew up on a farm. My parents never wanted lady bugs, or any other bugs around our gardens. We used to put pesticides on everything to keep bugs off of it. Now I understand that the geniuses at the local Department of Natural Resources have released some form of lady bug like critter that bites like a wolf. Of course, they also flew over the state dropping timber rattlers as well so I'd put nothing past them!

Your spelling and grammar were good as far as I could tell. I read quickly so I could easily overlook something. However everything looked good to me.

What I liked most about your article /poem was: I liked the rhyme scheme and the flow.

What I liked least about your article/poem was: I write poetry for another site and they have taught me to avoid the use of adjectives, adverbs, and prepositions and rely on nouns, pronouns, and verbs to get my point across. In doing so one shows the reader as opposed to telling the reader. I have won numerous awards there since I began doing so.

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Review of Storm  
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Rated: E | (4.0)
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I really enjoyed reviewing your article. I look forward to seeing more work from you in the future. I try to do as many reviews as I can each week. I am a professional writer and I know the value of a good review. So I try to give them as often as possible. I am also reviewing this article in association with Anniversary Reviews forum. Happy account anniversary!!

My overall impression of your work: I'm working ahead a little so I can have my quota for the month. Forgive me.

It is obvious that somebody affected you very much. I hope you were able topatch things up. If not I am sorry.

Your spelling and grammar were good as far as I could tell. I read quickly so I could easily overlook something. However everything looked good to me.

What I liked most about your article /poem was: I have felt this way before. In my case it was death that separated us and there is no coming back from that.

What I liked least about your article/poem was: I have done a lot of writing on another poetry site. One of the tricks I have learned is not to use adjectives or adverbs and drastically limit my use of prepositions. It makes for shorter sentences but award winning poetry. I have won several awards since following this rule. In fact, I won two today.

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