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Review of ROOMMATE WANTED  
Review by Elanda2
Rated: E | (3.5)
That was cute. The sibling is picky and out of diapers, obviously. He didn't ask mommy first, so he's prepubescent. Who knows! If he asks mommy and daddy, he might get his wish.
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Review of Assumptions  
Review by Elanda2
Rated: 13+ | (4.0)
I had no idea this was a zombie story. At first, I "assumed" it was about politics, what with all the foreign influences muddling our perceptions. And then the hiding in the shadows and pathways.

I began to see a vampire lurking about, waiting for a victim. But there was no indication of darkness or light, just a hiding monster.
That zombies can think is a new twist. And that they're agile and flexible and supple, another new twist. I think they should look more human in the future, less obvious, charming and unassuming. That's another possibility.

This was cool. I'd like to see them cunning and beguiling next.
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Review of Passing Through  
Review by Elanda2
Rated: E | (4.0)
I enjoyed the look back into the past, the prose and cons of throwing a pass. It's obvious that we all had no idea how wonderful life was and still can be.
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Review by Elanda2
Rated: 18+ | (4.0)
Good one! I was hoping the culprit would be captured and destroyed forever. Alas, the vampire rules again. I always like vamps, especially the ones with memories and feelings about once being human.
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Review by Elanda2
Rated: E | (2.5)
I enjoyed the idea the the villain is just a brokenhearted person the same as everyone else. I found myself feeling empathy for the villain, but am I supposed to? I think the villain is doubt, itself. Great break through for me right now. Doubt is the enemy. Thanks for that!

I would strongly suggest that the slash in between words is a a sign that the writer has not committed to the subject. What does it matter the gender. The slash shows a lack of commitment to the subject being discussed. Get rid of it.
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Review of Quiet  
Review by Elanda2
Rated: E | (4.5)
That was interesting in that "quiet" has always been the lesson taught from childhood into adulthood. But the rage inside keeps burning. The trick it to express those feelings without anger. We owe it to ourselves to say what's on our minds. After all, this is America, Land and home of the free and brave. We can't keep just talking to ourselves. When we open our mouths, we discover that others are thinking and feeling the same things we are. That's the beauty of communicating. And we can learn how to communicate from others. We just simply have to reach out. It's hard at first, but with practice, it becomes easier and we can learn to perceive the emotions and thoughts of others. Thoughts and emotions have physical properties. They exist in the physical. Let it out, properly, of course, and see what happens.
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