It makes me smile. I like the idea of buying toys for kids means no suffering.
This must be a fairly personal poem. That's just a guess, but i can sort of picture a life and this poem going profoundly together.
I'm also happy to see that this piece isnt limited to only rhyming. There's a few in there but none of them are forced.
Overall, I think it's a good piece.
I enjoy the idea of it very much. The sort of laugh at the face of death part. It's oddly healthy to come to terms with your own death, because, really, everyone has to die. It sounds sad, but I see no sadness in it.
Anyway, good rhythm, but a few of the rhymes feel just a bit forced. otherwise, good work.
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