This is a wonderful true story about the spirit of sacrifice for others' sake that is inherent in living beings, even among animals. Psycho-neurological research shows that giving enhances happiness. Your story, a true one, fully illustrates this.
What stories could these old homes tell,
Of master and slave, and laws forgotten
In the name of "decency", leaving
Innocent young men hanging from trees?
The words "laws forgotten" convey much more than their literal meaning. They refer to illegality, injustice and cruelty heaped up on "Innocent young men hanging from trees".
This is a really tragic and creepy story. You have achieved the purpose effectively within a few words. It was a pleasure to read it, though it ends with a note of grief and mystique. It has a chilling effect.
This is a very nice poem which vividly brings out the contrast between a small, simple town and a metropolis.
The following lines clearly show the difference--
Neighbors side by side, like strangers
in the night
Exchanging glances, not even a smile
Oh what a sight
This is a different life from our old
familiar place
Where every neighbor is a friend and
conversation took at ease.
This is a small nice piece which is shaped like a poem but is not described as such. It deals with the problem of arts supplies being expensive, such as paints, brushes, canvases etc.
The piece begins with the opening-- I am ashamed.
It is not clear why the artist should be ashamed if art supplies are costly.
I started reading this article in the hope that I shall learn 7 tricks used by scammers. I find that 1 to 5 are saying the same thing in different words. No. 7 is not a scamming trick at all. It is just a hope expressed by you--"I pray you never get this far..."
"Fiona Maken was raised in a family of secrets. The knowledge she was adopted was not one of them. Neither was the fact that she had been discovered, newborn, in a half-melted snowbank. What her family did not share was the fact that Fiona was not an average little girl. Fiona had an ability which her family kept a closely guarded family secret. She had a way of learning by touching people."
Who can resist reading further beyond these opening lines?
And, well, that is the real purpose and aim of a story teller--to ensure attention and interest of the reader!
This is a beautiful sonnet, written in proper meter, which displays very vividly the goings on in nature in the earth, the sky, the trees, etc., along with man's efforts to neatly prepare seed beds in the lawn to grow winter crops.
It is a well scripted description of an imaginary scene where a human mortal is given a chance by providence to visit heaven for a few minutes. The person, who was not very religious earlier, comes out of the scene as one who loves Bible.
Your writing is good. There are 5-6 minor language / spelling mistakes. You may like to take care of them.
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