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Review of My Friend  
Review by Dr M C Gupta
Rated: E | (3.0)
My thoughts on reading this poem, written in admiration of a male acquaintance, were that you are strong on vocabulary (I learnt a new word--avuncular) and weak on grammar. In any language, it should be reverse. When grammar has been learnt / perfected, adding to one's vocabulary is no big job.

Some examples, out of many, are given below:

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Our conversation forced me to drop by his port,
Shocked! Was my reaction to find him old and exhort?

>>> Exhort is a verb, not adjective.

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Sooners more than laters, he has great deal of faith in me,
Blessed I am to be gifted and talent that he foresees.

>>> Sooner more than later [preferably, Sooner rather than later]

Blessed I am to be gifted and talented.

[that he foresees--does not fit here. Maybe you can write-- that he perceives.]


I hope you take these suggestions in the right spirit, not as criticism or condemnation.

--M C Gupta

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Review by Dr M C Gupta
Rated: E | (3.0)
This is a long poem which took me a long time trying to understand. But I could not. The whole idea behind the scene--a lamp post and a bench with a writer on it, both being watched by the writer of this story, seems difficult to grasp, along with the oft-repeated query--how many stories are being written--one or two.

--M C Gupta

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Review by Dr M C Gupta
Rated: 18+ | (4.5)
This is a nice small article about homosexuality. It informs that homosexuality is something well known and well accepted in African culture. It traces the practice of homosexuality to several animal species also, quoting references.

You could also add that there is some scientific evidence that homosexual traits may be genetically determined.

--M C Gupta

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Review by Dr M C Gupta
Rated: 13+ | N/A (Review only item.)
This is a story well made up around the idea of being a victim of the twin tower tragedy, losing life, yet living in the memory of the dear ones. You have a good ability to conjure up ideas and express them beautifully in words for others to savour.

--M C Gupta

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Review of The Painting  
Review by Dr M C Gupta
Rated: E | (4.0)
This is an unusual story that may as well be true as regards the concept of rebirth and remembering previous life events triggered by a picture / painting, as in this case.

The story itself is well written.

There is some scientific proof of rebirth. You may like to view:

THE TRUTH ABOUT REINCARNATION—"THE TRUTH ABOUT REINCARNATION
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Review by Dr M C Gupta
Rated: 18+ | (4.5)
This is a well told tale, in poetry, of an unfortunate boy in his teens who, due to whatever reason, has been unable to learn and grow as per accepted societal norms. It is easy for the society to hate and revile such a teen, but, frankly, it is the society which is, at least to some extent, responsible for his skewed development.

--M C Gupta

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Review of The Email's Tale  
Review by Dr M C Gupta
Rated: 13+ | (5.0)
As I proceeded to read this poem, I had a glance at the title and the description and wondered what I would write on this topic if I were supposed to. And, my mind failed me. I just could not think of anything.

Then I read this poem, a ballad, and was totally stunned to see what a wonder you could spin around a hard nut to crack!

You are certainly a creative writer!

--M C Gupta

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Review by Dr M C Gupta
Rated: E | (4.0)
It is a nice short story, well told and well spun around the myth of mermaid watching the waters, trying to save sailors, but unknown to them, and never supposed to be seen by them. In this story, the man awakens a bit before he was supposed to, thus having a chance of seeing the mermaid and, expectedly, fall in love with her.

The imagery and the description of the nature are good.

--M C Gupta

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Review by Dr M C Gupta
Rated: E | (2.5)
You have joined the group very recently and the present item is the only one in your port. It was written 10 days ago and already has one 5 star rating.

I will be failing in my duty if I repeat a similar rating. I am rating it 2.5. The reason is that there is an unacceptable number of mistakes, grammar and punctuation. Let me admit that I was so much confused by the title about the "pomegrante" and the 5 star rating (and the fact that American spellings can sometimes be surprising) that I actually googled for the word pomegrante. It listed only a pomegranate, the fruit I have known since childhood.

This review is not meant to discourage you. If you want to be a writer, that's very good and you are most welcome on this site. But, for any language, grammar and spelling are the bsics that can never be ignored.

--M C Gupta

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Review of Real Time  
Review by Dr M C Gupta
Rated: E | (4.0)
This is a nice poem written in a romantic mood when

"I love when our eyes unexpectedly meet across the room.
I love being beside you and bathing in the smell of your skin."


The expressions and expectations of love are described using some unusual imagery as above.

--M C Gupta

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Review by Dr M C Gupta
Rated: 18+ | (4.0)
This poem is a sort of an ode to a door in the following words--

"Painted white
with a simple brass knob
with a simple switch
to lock all the world outside...

Not soundproof, but not transparent.

Secrets are told behind this wonderful invention!"

***

The beauty of this poem lies in the uniqueness of the idea which a testimony to the poet's creativity.

--M C Gupta

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Review of A SAILOR'S WISH  
Review by Dr M C Gupta
Rated: E | (4.5)
This is a good poem regarding the calling of a sailor and the wish of a true sailor, well exemplified in the following--

A great mighty spirit
once told me.
The heart of a sailor
lives in the sea.

His soul goes to heaven
when it's time to go.
But his spirit lives on
in the waters below.

You have a good style. Keep writing.

--M C Gupta

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Review by Dr M C Gupta
Rated: 18+ | (3.5)
You have chosen a good and unusual topic--Alzheimer's disease--and have chosen a catchy title that fits with the last two lines--

For her, there will always be turquoise, indigo and an Iowa green that revives the soul

I carry her colors onward through the years because she cannot.

***

This would look more like a poem if there was some apparent poetical structure in it. For starters, you could try minimising the vast variation in line length.

--M C Gupta

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Review of A lonely poet  
Review by Dr M C Gupta
Rated: E | (2.5)
This poem is already rated 4.5 by two reviewers. I need to review it objectively.

It consists of four lines--

I saw a beggar sitting beside a river
Seems very happy I noticed in fewer
I expected not to see such ever
A poet of clever one knows never

***

Its shortness is not the reason for low rating. But, what is written must be intelligible. It must be grammatically correct, without which understanding suffers.

The second and fourth lines above are obviously faulty.

--M C Gupta

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Review of Butterfly  
Review by Dr M C Gupta
Rated: E | (5.0)
This is a beautiful, just beautiful anecdote that only an accomplished writer can write. Who else can start a piece as follows--


"Don't leave me," I sob. He looks up at me, his blue eyes full of love. I hold him close, afraid to let go. I can see the light leaving his eyes. I cry and let the tears slip from eyes. He can't die. He can't die. "I love you," he says,"but I have to go. The angels are calling me." I cry, "I love you too." His eyes close and I let the hurt and loss drain out of me through tears. Then all of a sudden he grabs my hand, his eyes open and alert. He looks up at me and smiles. "A butterfly! I'll come back to you as a butterfly.


Write on.

--M C Gupta

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Review of new beginning  
Review by Dr M C Gupta
Rated: ASR | (4.5)
This is a "Dear Me" letter written to oneself. You have written it well, as is clear from the opening stanza--

I write to you disappointed
in the way that you acted last year
You ate far too much junk food and Mars bars
and you also drank far too much beer


It's quite honest and straight forward.

Keep writing.

--M C Gupta

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Review by Dr M C Gupta
Rated: E | (4.5)
You aptly named this poem as "Believe in yourself" and made a wonderful opening--



When things go wrong and life is cruel
It`s not a sin to cry
But when tears subside just be strong
And hold your head up high

***

I felt the poem is too short and ends abruptly. Add a fourth stanza at least.

--M C Gupta

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Review of Life's Road  
Review by Dr M C Gupta
Rated: E | (4.0)
This is a nice poem, with rhyme. It might benefit from trying at some sort of constancy in line length / syllabic counts.

Ref: There is so many things still left to do.

>>>There are so many things still left to do.

On the whole, it is a nice poem. Write on......


--M C Gupta

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Review of Liars  
Review by Dr M C Gupta
Rated: 13+ | (4.0)
This is a nice poem, telling about the experience of dating a few boys. Such descriptions are not common and hence this poem elicits immediate interest. Ultimately, the lady is able to find a proper suitor--

No one reassured me
that there would be a boy who would
hold me as if I were
made of glass.
Who smiled like he just discovered
the secret to life
every time
he leaned in
for a kiss.

*****

Suggestion--It might be nice if the length of the poem could be a bit less.

--M C Gupta

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Review of Life's lessons  
Review by Dr M C Gupta
Rated: E | (5.0)
I have never seen this type of song earlier--

Momma taught me,
how to treat a lady right
how to talk to her,
make her laugh and never cry
but momma's not here tonight
(I) Guess I'm on my own.....

(Chorus)
I'm gonna, take you out tonight
down by the river and dance in the moonlight

***

It is perfectly written. There is no reason to hold back even half a star.

--M C Gupta

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Review by Dr M C Gupta
Rated: E | (3.0)
This is a poem on a sensitive topic—watching the mother die. It would have been appropriate to deal with such a topic with due seriousness. In this context, here are a few suggestions:

i)—Don’t use slang spellings. Instead of bein, hopin, write being, hoping etc.

ii)—Pay attention to grammar. The opening line is
As I watch you die pain & regret infected my spirit
>>> You probably meant—“ As I watched you die, pain & regret infected my spirit”
Please also note that punctuation often helps.
The closing line is-- Moms, I always loved you
>>> You need to use the singular form—Mom.

iii)—It would be nice to have some sort of constant rhyming scheme. Stanzas 2, 3 and 4 suggest that you have tried abcb rhyme. Try to use that in the remaining stanzas also.

Also, a modest suggestion / advice----- You have been a member of this site for many years but have sent only one review so far. Sending serious reviews helps the reviewer himself to become a better writer.


--M C Gupta

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Review by Dr M C Gupta
Rated: E | (3.5)
This is an uncommon poem describing the scene in a hospital or clinic where there is too much of rush and too little time to attend to patients to their satisfaction.

You need to be careful with grammar / typos etc.

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The waiting room is truly packed,
Patients charts fill the racks.

>>> Patients'

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Who'll complain first: Doctors? patients?
To ride this out just makes no sense.

>>> Doctors? Patients?


--M C Gupta

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Review of The Ice Queen  
Review by Dr M C Gupta
Rated: E | (5.0)
This is a wonderful and beautiful poem about a girl who, after her heart was broken once, decided to seal herself in ice walls. The opening lines describe the idea aptly as--


The Ice Queen has now come to rise
To rule her kingdom far and wide
She sits atop a frozen throne
Cursed to sit now and ever alone

She rules the land with a stone cold heart
With harsh gray eyes, she looks the part
Her tall icy walls keep others away
But also they keep her there to stay


--M C Gupta

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Review by Dr M C Gupta
Rated: E | (4.0)
This poem presents a different than usual view of love--


"What Is love?

Love is for the foolish and the fickle.
Well I am neither.
It is for the brave and the courageous.

Devotion.
Honesty.
Trust.
Love."

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It is well presented.

--M C Gupta

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Review of Morning Dream  
Review by Dr M C Gupta
Rated: E | (4.0)
This is a nice poem about the half awake, half dreamy state in the morning when one is awakened briefly by the pattering of the rain drops on the roof top.

And, the poet wonders--

And as I listen
to the birds in the rain,
still choosing to chirp,
I wonder—

It is indeed a wonder that when humans prefer the cosy bed, the birds enjoy the rain and chirp gleefully. How much far have we come from nature!

--M C Gupta

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