Admittedly, English is not your first language. Nor is it mine. Everybody need not have excellent proficiency in every language.But, basic rules have to be adhered to.
This piece is labelled as an essay. An essay consists of sentences and paragraphs. A look at this piece gives an impression that it is a free verse poem, which, of course, it is not.
It is a cardinal rule that every sentence must have a verb. Please look into this aspect. I am quoting just two sentences which do not have a proper verb:
1--One day without tomorrow, weighing the years, hardened as the lead and full of both grief and bitterness.
2--Without proprieties, without family, isolated and neglected, even though your yesterday love and tenderness as radiance let hearts vibrant.
Hope you would not mind my suggestions.
--Dr. M C Gupta