This is a nice article telling about the importance of world peace and the reasons for the lack of the same. One of the reasons mentioned is pride (about our possessions). In this connection, the author writes--
"We are living in an age of gross wealth and gross poverty. In the equation lies gross neglect. We are neglecting our fellow man. We are neglecting our duty to humankind and to our immortal souls."
The above is very correct and true. There are two opposite thoughts:
A--Happiness lies in possession of materialistic goods and pleasures. [This is the capitalistic approach based on cosumerism.]
B--Happiness lies in renunciation of materialistic goods and pleasures. [This is the Hindu spiritual philosophic approach based on the belief that the assets of the nature are to be enjoyed by all the humanity and not cornered and enjoyed by a selected few as their personal possessions.]
NOTE--Jesus also preached renunciation--""Anyone who has two shirts should share with the one who has none, and anyone who has food should do the same."
Approach A leads to what the author says--"We are neglecting our fellow man. We are neglecting our duty to humankind."
This poem is beautifully built around the concept of the sound of something that is supposed to be silent. The idea of the poem is nicely summarised in the last stanza--
So many are the sounds
Of lonesome
One knows not where
To start
But to me you see
T’will e’er be
The sound of
…A broken heart…
>>> I think it would be better to use the word lonesomeness in place of lonesome.
This is a poem / statement about cats by a your mother who wrote it past 80 years of age and is having Alzheimer's disease now. It would be prudent not to analyze / dissect it, except suggesting that --
A cat does not ask for much, only a little love,
to be fed and for house cats, a liter box.
It is a nice poem. The last line comes a bit unexpectedly and suddenly affects the reader's thoughts.
The beauty we saw when walking together
Thought we could do it always and forever
The time has come..I did my best
The time has come..I laid you to rest
This is basically a poem of longing--the longing a boy has for the girl. There is nothing unusual about it. But the poem itself is nice. Every poem is unique. The uniqueness of this poem lies in its simple words that flow reasonably well.
This is a lengthy account of your visit to India--too lengthy for me to read (I live in India) but I am sureothers visiting India would lap every word of it.
You have an engaging style. Sample this--
"A woman had approached us once with a baby in her arms, asking not for money, but for food to keep her baby alive. Although neither looked starved, we went into the store and started selecting items we thought the woman and the baby could use. The woman turned down the products we produced, and went along the shelves, selecting things for herself. She came back to us with an armload of goods. Although puzzled, we bought them for her, only to learn the truth much later when she had tried to hit us up for goods again a few days later."
Thanks for giving the readers a brief over view of Japan. It is the only country in the world where civilian population was bombarded by atom bombs dropped by the world's self- styled champion of human rights.
You have done well to draw attention to excessive whaling in Japan.
I may add a piece of information about Japanese legal system. It is based on arbitration and reconciliation and mediation. There is not much litigation in the sense this term is understood in USA and UK and India.
This is a description of life in this world; of death; and of life in heaven, all three combined in the description of one who has seen all the three.
Ref: A nurse knocked on the door of my room and there was no answer. They entered. They found me dead. I had a content look on my face.
>>> This reminds me about the OOB (Out of body) and near death experiences of those close to death described by Raymond Moody's "Life after life". This book had been a best seller. He was a PhD in psychology and later got his MD.
This item is about parenting. Its description reads--"the joy of parenting from the perspective of those involved".
You need to improve your writing by paying attention to punctuation and by keeping the sentences short. The opening sentence reads--
"I find myself wondering what we learn from the adventure called parenthood whether we be a child or an adult who has suffered the joys and pains that attend surviving as a child what took place during a growing up kind of jungle."
This poem gives a strong and clear message in no ambiguous words--
So, men, just let her have a free hand
with design of the house, for you’ll adjust
to whatever she picks, but know beforehand
unless everything pleases her she’ll just bust.
I wondered why this 11 line poem, without rhyme or rhythm, has been rated five stars by five viewers. I found the answer. It lies in the last line---"No wonder babies cry."
But these four words, "No wonder babies cry", are not dramatic in themselves. The dramatic change occurs just before these.
This is quite a humorous story, definitely worth a read.As things are, humour is not common on this or other sites. The fact is--It is not easy to write humour.
Ref: since I had all ready bought myself two new movies for Christmas
When tears find their way to my eyes, I am not distraught.
I can smile in the pain; it will only last for a moment.
The joy of your love is new and fresh every day.
I know I can turn to you. No doubt. No fear.
This is followed by one more line, referred below.
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The reader is prone to think these lines are addressed to a human being. Such thought is strengthened by the fact that throughout the poem, 'y' in you is not capitalised.
But, then, the poem ends with--
I know I can turn to you. No doubt. No fear.
My Savior, My Lord.
The theme of this story is good but its presentation is not perfect.
1--In the beginning, you write-- Couple A believed in raising their child with strict discipline and control while Couple B believed in giving their child whatever he desired.
LATER, you write--
And as for couple B’s child their strict and disciplined way of raising him drove him insane.
So, you see, you have lost the plot yourself:)
2--There are issues of grammar and punctuation throughout.
--M C Gupta
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