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Review of Kurt Cobain  
Review by Meriki Moon
Rated: 13+ | (5.0)
At home my teenage son says, "Mum that song sucks"; but I LOVE Polly too.
I also love Kurt for what he has given.

Nicely written, I liked the tears.

Thanks. (e:smile)
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Review of Evening Meander  
Review by Meriki Moon
Rated: E | (4.5)
' Squatting down in brittle nest
of wind-flattened rush grasses
I watch the night sky
pan for gold. '...

...I love this stanza, very clever, & eloquent! *Smile*

Hi again fyn, this one is very descriptive; you are good at that aren't you!
It has a very elusive, yet so familiar aspect. Well done!

You had me from the beginning with this one, as I live right by the sea, & I love those walks. What a wonderful place you must have walked at!

A terrific poem fyn, thanks so much for sharing your talented works!

Meriki *Flower4*
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Review by Meriki Moon
Rated: E | (4.0)
Hi again! *Smile*

This little poem has great word usage, well done!

The beginning seemed to rhyme, (perhaps coincidently?), then mid-way, the poem lost flow.

The homey, almost smell, of what you have written is great! *Thumbsup*

Thanks fyn.

*Smile* Meriki
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Review of Freespirit  
Review by Meriki Moon
Rated: E | (4.0)
Hi Fyn, I am happy to be reviewing some of your poetry.

This one is old, wise, & humble. I do like it, though was disconcerted with the length; in saying so it ended very nicely.

I found one can get caught in each meaning, or just read & enjoy. Very philosophical.


I found a typo in stanza 4 :

... paths ithruough pepples.

A nice read, thank you. *Smile*
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Review by Meriki Moon
Rated: E | (5.0)
I love them, thank you!
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Review by Meriki Moon
Rated: E | (4.5)
Hi Jenny,
I love the style & wonderful choice of word in this poem of yours!
Well done!

The flow & rhyme are great, & your ending beginning word adds a terrific touch!

I am so glad to have read you, thanks for sharing.
Meriki
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Review of Will you?  
Review by Meriki Moon
Rated: E | (4.5)
Will you stay quiet,
when prejudice and unjustness reigns?

*Note1* no way


Will you drop your basket of roses and fight for your friend,
when he has lost all hope and is pursued by ghosts?

*Note3* heck yeah!


Will you try to sing,
even when there's no one in sight?

*Note2* as often as possible!!!


Will you keep helping others,
when no help is returned?

*Note* yes, dammit.

Hey Koorow, I loved this, different, & makes you think!

OH! & :


Will you forget this mail now,
and think of others that don't ask such questions?

*Note5* Never never.

Thanks mate,
*Heart* Meriki

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Review of Death  
Review by Meriki Moon
Rated: E | (5.0)
Hi Babygurl!

This is a great wrote, short & plain, in a good way I mean...like life & death!

I liked how you didn't try & solve the mystery, yet appreciated it!

Thanks mate,
Meriki *Heart*
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Review of The Hunger  
Review by Meriki Moon
Rated: E | (5.0)
Hi Judy! *Smile*

I like this, it is very different, & so natural.

Nice to have the power to recognize such hunger, well done, great write!

*Heart* Meriki
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Review of Now I See  
Review by Meriki Moon
Rated: E | (5.0)
Whoah! Hi Autumn, this is a powerful piece!

You write with such passion & openness!*Flower5*

Your poem has perfect rhyme & rhythm & is enticing!

I sounds like you are as wonderful a friend as you are a poet! *Smile*

A beautiful heartfelt poem, well done, I loved it!

Meriki*Heart*
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Review by Meriki Moon
Rated: ASR | (5.0)
Dear kimchi, I am happy to be reviewing you as one rising star to another.

I have to comment on your port layout, as it is so different & original*Thumbsup* It is amazing! Great job!

It adds curiosity, & you have succeeded in making ME want to come in to 'your house'.

LOve iT! *Heart*
Meriki
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Review of The Chanters  
Review by Meriki Moon
Rated: 13+ | (5.0)
Hi Kristi, I am so proud to be reviewing you for the BSFU*Bigsmile*

THE POEM:

'The Chanters' is itself a haunting chant. I loved it!

Terrific flow & rhythm, with a nightmarish theme...voices within.
You have presented a taunting existence so well, I imagine many will relate. *Thumbsup*

Great job!
Meriki
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Review by Meriki Moon
Rated: E | (5.0)
Hi gab! You do such a great job with your Rising Stars!

Thank you for the gift points, & the help & support to gain me my yellow case!

Much Love Meriki*
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Review of What If  
Review by Meriki Moon
Rated: E | (4.0)
Yeah, if only there was a 'what if'.

Hi Char, I enjoyed your write.

THE POEM :

a place where we have all been; the 'what ifs' of life!
I imagine most everyone shall relate to this write.

RHYTHM & RHYME :

a nice easy flow lends the reader to feel here; as it is not pushed, yet has a natural rhythm that is human, & spiritual.

SPELLING & GRAMMAR :

I noticed you start a new line with an upper case letter at all times in this write. An upper case is only required after a periodfull stop mark, & not for the beginning of a line.

No other errors were found, great job!

MY FAVORITE :

' To another past
another plateau of
beauty and joy.'

very beautiful, thankyou!

Love from Meriki*

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Review of TRUST IS A MUST  
Review by Meriki Moon
Rated: E | (4.5)
THE POEM :

about trust...so vital. Valid points are set, & this is easily related to. Well done!

RHYTHM & RHYME :

A slightly uneven flow; still the tone is balanced without force. A joy to read!

SPELLING & GRAMMAR :

A simple typo in line 14 :

you have a comma followed by a period.

also in your intro, under the poem title;

'losing' is misspelled.

No other errors found, great job!

MY FAVORITE :

the title, & line ;

'trust is a must'

Very simply true.

Thanks for sharing yourself so openly Carlotta.

Yours, Meriki*

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Review by Meriki Moon
Rated: E | (5.0)
What a wonderfully strong bond you must have with your sister!
This is so beautiful!

Meriki* A review on behalf of the 'Bipolar Special Forces Unit'.

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Review by Meriki Moon
Rated: 18+ | (5.0)
Dear Cissy,
I am pleased to be reviewing some of your work on behalf of the 'Bipolar Special Forces Unit'.

* THE STORY :

you have bared your heart & soul in this emotional write.
It is not easy to share such heartache, & I commend you for your openness.

I would like to see this write go further, & you have said it is a work in progress.

As you have come this far, it may be time for you to be more specific in your personal experience & story.
The story as it is, is left a little vague, but I sense that you are preparing in readiness to share more of your self, in a more personal way.
Readers always want to know more; but Cissy, I think YOU will benefit so much from sharing your pain in a more intimate way!

Open up to us...free yourself, if but for a while.
I promise it works magic, & I'm sure you felt a sense of release to write thus far.

You have done a wonderful job, & I look forward to more!!!

Thank you for sharing your inner most self.
Much love, Meriki*

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Review of Voices In My Head  
Review by Meriki Moon
Rated: E | (5.0)
Beautiful!

A talented young lady!

Autumn, (I hope I remembered your name right?...I didn't check, I just know you are Stacey's eldest), you are so beautiful dear, outside & in! Just like your mama!

I'm so glad you are putting your writes up!

This is a beautifully giving poem, with heartache & lessons, fear & trust.

Your rhythm & rhyme is wonderful, & there are no errors!

Well done mate!

I hope you put lots more on here for us all to read!

You should check out suki08.

She is only a bit younger than you, 16, & lives near me. She writes amazing prose & poetry.
I reckon you guys would really relate to each other!

So nice to read you Autumn! Give your ma a hug for me!!!

Take care sweetie,
Love Raelene Meriki*
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Review of Waves  
Review by Meriki Moon
Rated: E | (5.0)
Dear kip,

I live by the sea, & am especially akin to the moon; so I was drawn to this beautiful nature-spirit poem.

It is a little meditation...it cleanses, nurtures, & releases.

There is a wanting, & a welcoming peace.

The flow & word choice are wonderfully sincere, not pushed, yet naturally read & understood.

I like your writing very much kip,

with love from a fellow poet,
Meriki*
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Review of The Hermit  
Review by Meriki Moon
Rated: E | (4.5)
Hi there kip,

this seems to be spiritual & observational.

You paint a scene to view, & I see your character, but I feel an essence or everyone's life in this write.

Your rhythm & rhyme are perfect, giving the poem an easy flow.

A few places ask for more listening, & are no doubt in the eye of the beholder.

I found it humanistic, caring, & spiritual.
I enjoyed it very much, you write very well kip; well done!
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Review of Lorelei  
Review by Meriki Moon
Rated: E | (5.0)
Hello kip, I am so happy to be reviewing you, from one rising star to another.

I am really pleased I chose your port for my first 'dutiful' review as a rising star, because I immediately related to your work.

This, is very enjoyable to read...I like a good haunt!

* I love the romantic angst in the repeated :

'Lorelei, Lorelei, my Lorelei
For you I lament, for you that I cry'

It is endless, longing & devotedly sore. Well done.

* The rhythm itself plays a haunting symphony for the picture you play for us in this beautiful, tragic love poem.

You have reminded me of Edgar Alan with your truly beautiful write.
Thank you for sharing this lovely work with us.

Meriki*
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Review by Meriki Moon
Rated: E | (5.0)
These make wonderful gifts and thank yous. A great variety of beautiful pictures. Thank you for making them.
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Review of I love him  
Review by Meriki Moon
Rated: E | (5.0)
Tammy this is truly beautiful.
I can feel the intensity of your love through your words, great writing.

I too have feel this love, so I can totally relate, & you have captured so much about loving another adult.

Thanks for sharing a bit of you.

Your friend, Meriki*
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Review by Meriki Moon
Rated: 13+ | (5.0)
Amazing!

You have told it well Wade.

Great flowing prose.

My favorite : 'The sound is both liquid and rock'

Good visionary, and I loved the 'world goes on theme'.

Thanks Wade. I loved it. Brilliant!
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Review of As Old as We are.  
Review by Meriki Moon
Rated: 13+ | (5.0)
This is so; giving & romantic. I cannot find a thing wrong,
Terrific meter, a breeze to read, & a softness that is filled with love.

Thanks Wade, again I say, what a remarkable undying love you & your partner have.

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