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Review by Meriki Moon
Rated: E | (5.0)
BRAVO BRAVO!!!

What a wonderful job. Line after line, stanza after stanza, got more & more brilliant.
The best part is how you have explained it in the most total of Aussie ways!

This has to be published...so many would be interested.
Great job Meg. LOVE IT!
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Review of BUMPER STICKERS.  
Review by Meriki Moon
Rated: 13+ | (5.0)
I love this funny write!
I got plenty of giggles out of this poem Meg, it's good to have a light read. Well done.

loved the bit about washing a waterproof coat.
I am currently attempting to soak a life jacket for a sail boat. I tried to share to dilemma with my mere male, but he just suggested the bath would be big enough; not even realizing that the FLOATING was the problem!!!

Thanks for sharing Meg.
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Review of As Old as We are.  
Review by Meriki Moon
Rated: 13+ | (5.0)
This is so; giving & romantic. I cannot find a thing wrong,
Terrific meter, a breeze to read, & a softness that is filled with love.

Thanks Wade, again I say, what a remarkable undying love you & your partner have.
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Review by Meriki Moon
Rated: E | (4.0)
Very cute Magoo.

lots of great lines. I loved the 1st stanza particularly.

Terrific rhyme and flow, and a lovely warm story.

Ta mate!

Meriki*
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Review by Meriki Moon
Rated: E | (4.5)
Hi Magoo,

aww, nice that you sacrifice your side so your wife can be snug and warm, (like you have a choice!).
A cute poem many can relate to!

Really well written, with good meter, form, and humor.

Get those winter pj's on buddy!

Thanks for sharing!
Meriki*
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Review of Put It Down  
Review by Meriki Moon
Rated: E | (4.0)
Don't let it put you down!

Great repetitiveness & openness, thanks.
Meriki*
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Review of the Cage  
Review by Meriki Moon
Rated: ASR | (4.0)
Hi,
a very strong write. I enjoyed the visionary, & could feel the angst. Well done.
Thanks for sharing, Meriki*
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Review by Meriki Moon
Rated: E | (4.0)
Hi there Halo,
this is very different.
I'm liking & disliking it, [it's too weird to decide], I mean that as a compliment!
Thanks for sharing, M*
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Review of Theseus Lost  
Review by Meriki Moon
Rated: E | (5.0)
Hello dear Mr Dressing Gown,

From the first verse, you had all of me.

I would like to express my sincere thanks sir, as this may be the most enjoyable read I have yet encountered on this site.

Simply perfect in imagery, and phrase. You reminded me of a man very close to my heart and country; 'Banjo' Patterson; one of our most magnificent male bush poets.

I have copied this to send to my dad. I hope you don't mind. He will like it very much.

Thanks for sharing this piece,
Meriki*
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Review of Lines (Revised)  
Review by Meriki Moon
Rated: E | (4.0)
lovely thea.

I especially liked the ending moments with your son.

The flow wanders a little in places, but the write is still good enough to keep the reader interested with heart.

A really great message here for kids of all ages! I hope more read this, as it is inspirational.

Thanks for sharing this lovely piece, M*
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Review by Meriki Moon
Rated: E | (4.0)
Hello thea,
this is very sweet.
It is a nice thought!

Thanks for sharing, M*
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Review of Dance  
Review by Meriki Moon
Rated: 13+ | (4.0)
I like it! Passion.

Thanks Nicolina, M*
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Review of untitled  
Review by Meriki Moon
Rated: E | (4.0)
Yes, very well spoken.

Hi Morgan, this is really enjoyable to read.
I can totally relate to what you are saying, as many will, and there is a true fondness to this. I am there now!

I think the flow gets interrupted here and there.
* a mere suggestion; it is your art...
Try evening it up by placing the longer lines from each stanza in the 2nd line; like as in the 1st stanza... or something similar that suits you and doesn't change the content,[perfect], and still rhymes and flows.

In saying that, it is lovely to read as is!

Thanks for sharing this, M*
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Review by Meriki Moon
Rated: E | (4.0)
Hi there,
I enjoyed this. Different and clever.
Well done.

Thanks for sharing, Meriki*
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Review by Meriki Moon
Rated: 13+ | (4.0)
Hi, I enjoyed this.

Most will relate to this poem.

It has a nice even flow, and is welcoming to read.

* A few typos...

1st stanza, last line: 'know' is misspelled.

Of course it is up to you, a lower case 'i' is not usually preferred by readers.

Thanks for sharing, M*
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Review of dearest daddy  
Review by Meriki Moon
Rated: 13+ | (4.5)
Dear Broken Angel,
I cried reading this; & I am sure many will.

A touching, honest write.

It has an easy flow, & with the story; the reader is embraced.

Thanks for sharing,
Meriki*
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Review of Forever I trust  
Review by Meriki Moon
Rated: E | (4.0)
Very nice.

I liked the way you began; & the deep theme.

Thanks for sharing,
Meriki*
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Review of Sun Will Die  
Review by Meriki Moon
Rated: E | (4.0)
This is really enjoyable to read.
I most liked how it made me think!

There is a lovely sombre tone to this poem, along with it feeling like...something hidden.

Thanks for sharing.
Meriki*
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Review of A Wiish  
Review by Meriki Moon
Rated: E | (4.0)
Very enjoyable to read, & nice visualization.

I loved its lightness, no pressure.

I most enjoyed the freedom this poem made me feel - very relaxing, thank you.

Thanks for sharing.
Meriki*
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Review of Kiss Me Goodbye  
Review by Meriki Moon
Rated: E | (4.0)
A lovely goodbye poem stillwater.

Thank you so much for sharing your work.
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Review of Kiss the fool.  
Review by Meriki Moon
Rated: E | (5.0)
Wow ; take that leap fool!

I was totally drawn in the passion!
you did a great job...lust indeed!

The meter & flow is terrific.

Thanks for sharing Tree!
Meriki*
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Review of Relief  
Review by Meriki Moon
Rated: E | (5.0)
Really loved it!

I smiled hard for you her me, at the end.
The simplicity is great.

Thanks for sharing!
M*
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Review of The Letter  
Review by Meriki Moon
Rated: E | (4.5)
Hi Jennifer Joy!

I like the thoughts this poem provoked in me! I wondered if you were comfortable with , ' the words blowing away', & I had the feeling you were!

I have a punctuation suggestion :

I felt the comma in the first line was not needed. On the other hand ; more emphasis on the 'space' could be shown with a

'.....' or a semi colon.


Of course the way you want it read is what matters, this is just my interpretation.

I most liked the angst.

ta for sharing!
Meriki*
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Review of memories of us  
Review by Meriki Moon
Rated: 13+ | (4.0)
Hi dark shadow!

I liked the way this showed both irreplaceable love, & moving on.

* I noticed a grammatical error...

'Everything was alright when you was here' ; should be..

'when you WERE here'

I also thought that the comma after..

'Your smile'

; could do with a longer pause. That is just the way I read it , it is not necessarily correct!

I mostly enjoyed the portrayal of emotion, of having loved ; & the easy flow.

ta 4 sharing!
Meriki
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Review of Flooded  
Review by Meriki Moon
Rated: E | (4.0)
An amusing end! Not expected!

I liked the way I could relate.

I felt I would like to know more about these characters' lives, which left me a bit 12 full.
However I appreciate your ability to convey ; so well, a few moments.
Ta SWpoet.
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