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Review by G. B. Williams
In affiliation with RAOK Upgrade Brigade Group  
Rated: E | (4.5)
Ryan S, I loved it! I could relate and enjoyed the rhyming, although some felt awkward. Thank you so much for writing and sharing this one. Also, I could not connect the title "Whispers of the Sleeping Sky" with the writing, even though I read it a few times.

Why I read it: It was a random selection by Writing.com.
What I liked: The writer's writing style and rhyming skills.
Recommendation(s): Consider renaming, e.g., "Mysteries of the Sky" or "Pondering the Mysteries of the Sky." These are my thoughts after reading it a few times.

I did not notice any glaring grammatical errors. Thanks for sharing. NOTE: These are my thoughts and recommendations. You are the writer and know what was in your head and heart as you drafted each line. I am thrilled that you shared "Whispers of the Sleeping Sky."

Write on. WRITE ON!


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Review by G. B. Williams
In affiliation with RAOK Upgrade Brigade Group  
Rated: 13+ | (4.0)
Good afternoon, Anonymouse. Thank you for sharing this chapter of your novel. I should have read Chapter 1 before ranking Chapter 2, but I did not since Chapter 1 was randomly assigned by writing.com.

Why I read it: It was randomly assigned, and I am on a mission to figure out how to write a novel, i.e., understanding how the story gets told. Yours was the first read on my mission.

What I liked: The free flowing of the passages in the chapter.
What I would recommend: Better spacing or breaks as the story transitions. I would also suggest that the chapter be edited.

Thank you so much for sharing.

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Review by G. B. Williams
Rated: E | (4.5)
Netty, I totally understand where you are coming from. I, too, want to share what I feel with others. I believe everyone should feel His love, compassion, and the joy that comes with that love.

Thank you so much for sharing.

Why I read it: It was listed in this month's Spiritual Note.
Recommendations: edit
What I would change: Spacing
What I liked: The passion

Write on. WRITE ON!
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Review of Saying Goodbye  
Review by G. B. Williams
In affiliation with SENIOR CENTER GROUP  
Rated: E | (5.0)
Fynn, the title got my attention, but the last stanza took my breath away -- "You can't say goodbye when no one is there!" WOW! Those words spoke volumes to me. You summed up for me my feelings and thoughts about death for years in a few words -- you cannot say goodbye to someone that is not there, and that vibrant living person that you knew is no longer there when death has claimed their soul, spirit, mind, and body.

Thank you so much for sharing.

Why I read it: it was in one of the reviews.
What I liked: The title and the last stanza.
Recommendations: NONE!

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Review of BLESS-ED  
Review by G. B. Williams
Rated: ASR | (4.0)
Mandy Writes, thank you for sharing your poem. Of course, I read it twice, and on the second time, I GOT IT! Thank you so much for sharing because I, too, am bless-ed, but I do not hold grudges. I get even!

Why I read it: It was shared by Spiritual
What I liked: The brevity with which you got your point across
Suggestions/recommendations: None

Thank you for sharing, and write on, WRITE ON!


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Review of Cat Walk  
Review by G. B. Williams
In affiliation with The WDC Angel Army  
Rated: 18+ | (4.0)
Thankful Somali 16 WDC years, this was a random selection by WDC, and I read it because of its title. I re-read it to be sure I understand the "new cat walk," LOL. My thought after the second read was what a smart cat, and yes, the cat walk was necessary to throw his human a party, and I bet it took the entire 21 days.

Why I read it: It was a random selection by the WDC writing team, and it had the word cat in it. My cat died a few years ago, and I have been missing him like crazy.

What I liked: The words used throughout the story and the mews-sick.

Recommendations: none

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Review by G. B. Williams
In affiliation with Showering Acts of Joy Group  
Rated: 13+ | (5.0)
Dorianne, not only did I enjoy your poem, but I learned a few things about writing a quatern, something I had never heard of until I read your poem and the explanation at the end. Of course, I went online to learn more about this writing style and will try to write at least one quatern shortly. Thank you for sharing, and thank you for teaching.

Your message in the poem was very clear and in your face, as it repeated itself in each stanza. The poem told the story of the life of the pretty little girl and its cruel undertone throughout her life and her untimely death.

Why I read your poem -- it was a random selection by writing.com
What I liked -- it introduced me to a new writing style and forced me to go look up the writing style and when it came about as well as how to use it and who else had used it -- two of my favorite authors -- Langston Hughes and Robert Frost.
What I would change -- nothing

Again, thank you for sharing, thank you for the lesson, and write on WRITE ON!


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Review of Half Empty?  
Review by G. B. Williams
In affiliation with The WDC Angel Army  
Rated: E | (5.0)
Either great minds think alike, or we have had similar experiences!

I wrote "Never Ever an Empty Glass, #2280007, " with a similar analogy. It took me a lot of words to say what you said in almost one stanza.

Thank you for sharing, and I enjoyed the read and am glad to see it featured today.

It really does depend on the frame of mind AND the environment in which the person grew up or found themselves.

For whatever reason, I have always found my glass to be half full, thus leaving room to add more.

I hope your glass is also half full.

Why I read it: It reminded me of my writings, and it was one of the featured items.
What I liked: The concept and brevity of the piece.
Recommendations: None

Write on. WRITE ON!


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Review of Brownies  
Review by G. B. Williams
In affiliation with The WDC Angel Army  
Rated: ASR | (3.5)
Elisa, Snowman Stik, yes, as a former bake, I knew that brownies start out white, but I don't know how much white powder sugar I would need to add to turn them white -- unless, like me, you sprinkle it on the top. LOL

What I liked: I loved the treatment of the story and the deep thoughts provoked by the intro -- "Did you know that this brown concoction
starts off white?" Almost as powerful as "If you had a choice, would you want to be Black?

Why I read it: It was a random selection by writing.com, and I needed to catch up on reviewing.

Suggestions/recommendations: None

Thank you for sharing.

WRITE ON! Write on.


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Review of Know Yourself  
Review by G. B. Williams
In affiliation with The WDC Angel Army  
Rated: 13+ | (4.0)
2troo, I was happy to see someone else writing from self-experiences and sharing lessons learned. I label myself as an emotional writer. I write from my emotions and experiences because that is what I know best, and I want to document the moment or the experience.

I enjoyed the read and identified with quite a number of the points you made and some of the lessons learned.

Why I read "Know Yourself?": It was a random selection, and I reviewed another piece earlier and realized that I had not done a review in quite some time.

What I liked: I like the writer's personal story about his life lessons and the steps taken to overcome them while getting to know himself and how he acted or reacted in any given situation.

Recommendations/Suggestions: A hard review and tight editing of the piece for easier and smoother reading.

WRITE ON! Write on.


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Review of That Chair There  
Review by G. B. Williams
In affiliation with The WDC Angel Army  
Rated: E | (4.5)
Axton Gard, I enjoyed reading "That Chair There!" Although I did not see (or missed it) there was no gender in the story, I could vividly remember being in similar situations with my mom and my son with me.

You could almost picture the guilt on the face, the defiance and joy of going to the store, getting bored when the second or third chair didn't fit, and finally deciding to take matters into your own hands.

Instead of becoming a chair (or another object), my son and I let go of mom's hand and ended up being lost in the big store.

Lessons taught and lessons learned our actions have consequences, and sometimes those consequences are forever.

An excellent story for young and old.

What I liked: The message in the story and the relatability of it to real life.

Why I read it: The review was requested by writing.com staff, AND I had not done a review in more than a month or two. (FELT GUILTY)

Recommendations/Suggestions: Review punctuation and edit for better flow -- but all of this depends on what you were going for in the character being described and telling the story.

For the record, these are strictly my opinions, and I am sharing my thoughts and hope that they are helpful. Thank you for sharing your thoughts in "That Chair There."

WRITE ON! Write on.


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Review by G. B. Williams
In affiliation with The WDC Angel Army  
Rated: E | (5.0)
Elephantsealer, your "Today Begins with Yesterday" is an awesome way of saying there is never a tomorrow, and you can't hold on to yesterday for today is always a present as soon as yesterday is gone. Very nicely written and thought-provoking. Thank you for sharing.

Why I read it: It was short, and I needed to get in another review today.
What I liked: Your writing style.
What I would change: Nothing.
Suggestions/recommendations: None

Write on. WRITE ON!


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Review of I Saw Death  
Review by G. B. Williams
In affiliation with The WDC Angel Army  
Rated: E | (3.5)
Elephansealer, some writers write so vividly that you almost enter the story with them. You become so involved in the story that the world changes to match your mood, space, and place in time.

From your writing, "I Saw Death," I gather that the reader and writer merged to form a very clear image of what they imagined death looks like, but also became very scared of that vision. Only when there was safety or the feeling of safety did the character in the story realize that they were safe and there was no need to fear.

What I liked: The gentle encouragement by the father to look at the window. Sometimes, we need a second and a third look to be certain of what we are seeing.
Why I read it: It was the first piece in your portfolio, and recently you read two items in my portfolio. Thank you.
Suggestions/recommendations: Review and edit the piece to improve the flow.

Again, thank you for sharing, reviewing, and providing feedback.

Write on. WRITE ON!


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Review of Security  
Review by G. B. Williams
In affiliation with The WDC Angel Army  
Rated: E | (5.0)
DestinyAwaitsDarling, I just read "Security," and it kind of frightened me. I cannot imagine a life of chaos, moving from place to place or even running from everything! While reading this, I just wanted to reach out to you and offer comfort. If this is your writing style, it is a winner, and you got my attention instantly. On the other hand, if this is your way of asking for help, please reach out to me in my email.

Why I read this: Random choice by Writing.com
What I liked: The impactfulness of the storyline
What I would change: Nothing
Suggestions/recommendations: Made in the narrative above

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Review by G. B. Williams
In affiliation with The WDC Angel Army  
Rated: E | (5.0)
Tim Chiu, I read "Friction and Hope: Look Ahead" twice to truly appreciate your writing style and catch the message of your poem. What a message packed into a few lines -- the magnificence of the airplane, built by many to carry many more and save time. WOW! Thank you for sharing.

Why I read it: I need to catch up on reviews, and Writing.com randomly chose this item.
What I liked: The writing style, as well as the delivery of the message
What I would change: Nothing
Suggestions/recommendations: None.

Write on. WRITE ON!


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Review by G. B. Williams
In affiliation with The WDC Angel Army  
Rated: E | (4.0)
Lightinmind, I decided to visit your portfolio since you had honored me by reviewing one of my items.

Why I read this item: I chose "The Old Lady at The Back" because of the title.
What I liked: The message within the story about what makes a true soldier in God's army -- one who serves without question, earthly rewards, or praise.
What I would change in the story: Nothing.
Suggestions/recommendations: A review of the story to address punctuation and flow of the story by an app such as Grammarly.
What I learned: Learning from others can be rewarding and can change your direction if you only pay attention. Note: I also decided that you were/are a minister.

Thank you for sharing.

Write on. WRITE ON!


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Review by G. B. Williams
Rated: E | (4.5)
BB, WOW! WOW!

I am Pentecostal, and your poem hit a cord with me. Thank you for sharing, and I, too, am glad to have been baptized and washed in the Master's blood. Yes, we are called Holy Rollers, and I think that is neat because I roll with Jesus up and down these mean streets!

When the devil comes riding through, everybody calls on Jesus and begs for prayers.

Thank you for sharing.

What I liked: The title. IT got my attention immediately.
Why I read it: I am pentecostal (Pentecostal Assemblies of the World) and proud of it.
Suggestions: Consider changing "And isn't it sweet." to -- And it is so sweet! "And sometimes I will holler." does not rhyme with roller."
"And praise the Lord. Does not rhyme with observe."

I only bring these up because most of the others rhyme. I also do not have any suggestions for the words that would fit what you have written. Personally, I LOVE IT!

Thank you for sharing and write on. WRITE ON!
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Review by G. B. Williams
In affiliation with SENIOR CENTER GROUP  
Rated: E | (3.0)
Dr. M. C Gupta, I agree. Silent or silence is more than the non-utterance of words. To me, it is body language, facial expressions, or the lack thereof. Silence is definitely more than the non-utterance of words and can be seen when speaking with someone whose mind is elsewhere. And, yes, silence is all of those things you mentioned.

Why I read it: It was a random choice by Writing.com
What I liked: That you took the time to express what many others think and may already know about conversations they have with others. Some call it disrespect when one does not acknowledge the speaker with active listening.
What I would change: Nothing
Suggestions: None

Write on. WRITE ON!


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Review by G. B. Williams
In affiliation with SENIOR CENTER GROUP  
Rated: E | (5.0)
Isokari1959, how did you pack so much wisdom in two lines? I must admit I went down the page twice, looking for the quotes and words of wisdom. Then I saw the two lines and had to read them twice to get the full impact of your words. It left me at WOW! Thank you for sharing.

Why I read it: It was a random selection by Writing.com, and I am glad I read it.
What I liked: I loved the cynicism packed in those two lines.
What I would change: Absolutely nothing.
Suggestions: None.

Write on. WRITE ON!
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Review of In His Presence  
Review by G. B. Williams
Rated: E | (5.0)
WOW! Double WOW! You must have written "In His Presence" just for me. I have felt all of these things in my lifetime and knew that I was in God's presence. I have never had to wonder if God was real, and I have always known that He was and is.

Thank you so much for writing this and sharing it.

What I liked: The power of the words and that you put them on paper.
Why I read it: Wanted to get a glimpse of you after reading your invite to join you when you are in DC.
What I would change: Not a single word. Beautifully written.
Suggestions: Tell your writing muse to hurry up and return because you have something to say.

Thank you for sharing, and write on WRITE ON!
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Review by G. B. Williams
In affiliation with The WDC Angel Army  
Rated: 18+ | (5.0)
Beholden, I did not read all of the short stories here, but the ones I read made me laugh out loud. Thank you so much for sharing. I have always wanted to write short stories but never took pen to paper. Having read these, I might just give it a try.

Thank you so much for sharing.
What I liked: They were very short but very good.
Why I read them: They were short, snappy, and funny.
How chosen: They were featured in the newsletter
Recommendations: None.

I did not read them for grammatical errors or anything else. I read them for fun.

Write on! WRITE ON.


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Review of The Dreamer  
Review by G. B. Williams
Rated: E | (4.5)
BB, thanks for writing this poem. It reminded me of the children's prayer that I was taught, that I taught my children and my children's children! The poem's title was "Now I lay me down to sleep."

Why I read your poem: It was a random selection by writing.com.
What I liked: It provoked a memory of a poem from my childhood. It was also short and fitted into my time schedule (I was taking a break from another project).
Suggestions: I did not re-read it, so I do not have any suggestions or edits.

Write on. WRITE ON!


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Review by G. B. Williams
In affiliation with Showering Acts of Joy Group  
Rated: E | (4.0)
Daylee Coffee, I just finished reading "The Day I saw Purple Clouds." I kept trying to imagine or think if I had ever seen a purple cloud (I am an avid cloud watcher) and could not remember a time. Then I read your entire piece and reached the ending, and my thoughts were no longer on whether I had ever seen a purple cloud but how God answers each of us in His own special way and in a way right for each of us.

I totally related to how you felt looking up and seeing a purple cloud. Some many years ago, one of my favorite uncles died, and while the ceremony was going on in the cemetery, I looked up and saw a cloud perfectly shaped as a heart, directly over our funeral party. Thank God I was in the right frame of mind to take out my camera and take a picture of it while all heads were bowed. My thought at that very moment was God showing me that my uncle had loved me too and that my uncle knew how much I loved him. What a magical moment.

Thank you for sharing. I will continue looking skyward, for who knows, I too may one day see a purple cloud and think of you.

Why I read your piece? It was featured in the Spiritual Newsletter.
What I liked? How your story built up and crescented at the end with the good news about your sister's healing.
Recommendation(s): Maybe run a grammar check (Note: I am NOT the grammar expert, but I use Grammarly, which helps.)
Personal thoughts: Nicely done, and I definitely related to the ending.

Thank you for writing this piece.

Write on! WRITE ON.


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Review by G. B. Williams
In affiliation with The WDC Angel Army  
Rated: E | (5.0)
Miss Jennifer N, different situations, but same procrastination, inaction, and frustration! I bare your burdens and relate to where you are coming from in this writing. Loved the descriptor "No rest for the wicked? Not much more for the virtuous I'd say." Thank you for sharing.

What I liked: The entire writing. It spoke to me and my frequent behaviors.
Why I read it: It was a random selection by Writing.com.
Suggestions/recommendations: None.

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Review of Send me a rainbow  
Review by G. B. Williams
In affiliation with The WDC Angel Army  
Rated: E | (4.5)
Jaya, this poem could have gone many ways, but you chose to make your introduction --"Send Me a Rainbow." Very nicely done, and I thank you for sharing it with me. Many days, I need God to send me a RAINBOW!

What I liked: I loved the title.
Why I read it: The title was catchy and good. I also read it because it was a random selection by Writing.com.
Suggestions/recommendations: I really do not have either worth mentioning, but I offer an alternative. I kept waiting for the poem to return to the rainbow throughout the reading. Without returning to the rainbow, I did not get the sense that the rainbows were often, but more of you making a request for a rainbow.

Thank you for sharing this one. It may have inspired me to write a responding poem about being sent so many rainbows over the years.

WRITE ON! Write on.


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