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Review by G. B. Williams
In affiliation with The WDC Angel Army  
Rated: E | (3.0)
Thatonenerd, I just finished reading your poem about "The House on the Hill." Although short and attempted to rhyme, it was not a smooth read.

Why I read it: It was randomly selected, and I enjoy reading about houses
What I liked: T the title
What interested me: The treatment of the house in the poem; the memories the house held for the writer

Suggestions/Questions/Comments: Would suggest that you reconsider the way the poem is written. I would also ask you to consider thinking about punctuation. My thought only. Please discard anything you choose.

Thanks for allowing me to read, review and rate your work.


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Review by G. B. Williams
In affiliation with Showering Acts of Joy Group  
Rated: E | (4.5)
T. L., what a perfect heatwave. thanks you for sharing your take on a heatwave. It was a very nice read.

What I liked: The title of the poem and its introduction.
What was most interesting: The turning of the heatwave into a thunder storm and a cooling of the heatwave
What interested me: The transition from the heatwave to the storm

Suggestions/Questions/Comments: I enjoyed reading the poem and I quite purely identified with it because I love poems about the weather.

Write on. WRITE ON!


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Review of Road Rage  
Review by G. B. Williams
In affiliation with The WDC Angel Army  
Rated: E | (4.0)
Kenzie, I am reminded of the story of the woman driving her car all recklessly and out of control on a local highway. After being observed and followed for a few blocks, she was pulled over by an officer of the law, and hauled off to jail. She asked, "why am I being arrested?" He answered that he determined that the car was stolen because of the christian sign on the back of the car after he observed her giving the finger to one driver, honking the horn at another, cutting another drive off, and the list went on and on. Based on your actions, "I knew you were not the christian that owned that car!" Sometimes, our actions speak louder than our words. Great story.

Thank you for writing and sharing. I enjoyed it.


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Review by G. B. Williams
In affiliation with The WDC Angel Army  
Rated: E | (4.0)
Bumfuzzled, I am bumfuzzled, I did not get this piece. I think it is because I do not understand flash writing. After reading your piece, I am going to spend some time learning more about this form of writing. That is one of the things I like most about WDC, the exposure to other writers, other forms of writing, and more opportunities to learn. Thank you for sharing this flash piece.

What I liked: The title
What interested me: The shortness and brevity of the story
Why I read it: It was randomly assigned.

Suggestions/questions/comments? Would not know where to start offering suggestions on this piece. Thank you so much for sharing.


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Review by G. B. Williams
In affiliation with Showering Acts of Joy Group  
Rated: E | (3.5)
Snadralyn, thank you for sharing your piece on your kitty that grew into a cat. Very nicely done.

What I liked: The sharing of your story about the life of your cat.
What interested me: How you wove the story of your kitty from baby to adult/how it now rules the house
Why did I read it: It was randomly assigned, but I read it because it was about a cat, and I own one.

Recommendation/questions/comments: Interesting

Write on. WRITE ON!


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Review of It's So Easy  
Review by G. B. Williams
In affiliation with Showering Acts of Joy Group  
Rated: 18+ | (5.0)
Brandywyn, thank you for sharing your song. I read the words, then played the video on Youtube, and read the words as you sang them. I loved it, and could hear and feel the emotions that you shared in the song and the video.

What I liked: Hearing the song and reading the words. Great idea.

What interested me: The actual song is not exactly like the written word. Song lines were repeated in the song when you were singing it.

Why I read it: It was randomly assigned, but I am glad I got to read and hear it.

Recommendations/questions/comments: None. Nice.

Write on. WRITE ON!


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Review of OTALGIA  
Review by G. B. Williams
In affiliation with RAOK Upgrade Brigade Group  
Rated: E | (4.0)
C. Spies, I read and re-read your poem. I got two different takes on it. Otalgia in the true definition has to do with ear pain, and I know that can be extremely painful. On the other symbolically speaking, you could have ear pain from the pain and suffering of those around you and the helplessness of those feelings. As I read the poem, I could see both being applicable depending on your mindset.

What I liked: The dual meaning that I gained from the poem, physical ear pain, and symbolic ear pain
What interested me: The dual meaning ans use of the word otalgia

Suggestions/questions/comments: Nicely written.

That only my ears can see (hear). This is where I picked up the symbolism -- ears can't see, but the pain could be so loud/painful that it was as if your inner ear could see it. You could also haer it as part of your view of the world and the suffering you see around you.

Just my thoughts as I read your poem. Thank you for sharing it.

Write on. WRITE ON!


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Review of The Numb King  
Review by G. B. Williams
In affiliation with RAOK Upgrade Brigade Group  
Rated: E | (4.0)
VRGL, your poem was randomly assigned to me for a review. "The Numb King," is a nice little poem that did what you wanted it to do, much of nothing,but fun to read.

My one and only suggestion: What ever (whatever) keeps the masses down

Thank you for sharing.

Write on. WRITE ON!


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Review by G. B. Williams
In affiliation with RAOK Upgrade Brigade Group  
Rated: E | (5.0)
Soo, I burst out laughing when I read the ending! What a very interesting and very nicely written story. I liked it very much. Thank you for sharing.

Suggestions/Questions/Comments: Top honors on this one. It's and excellent read. Thanks again for sharing.

Write on. WRITE ON!


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Review by G. B. Williams
In affiliation with RAOK Upgrade Brigade Group  
Rated: E | (4.0)
WOW! Andrew, we must be of similar minds. Your piece is truly a satire on our society, and how we treat our poor and underprivileged. I know that some will pay lip service to this piece, but its premise is one that I hold dear, i.e., we do not really care for people in this Country. We treat the poor just like trash or dirty garbage. We live in a disposable society, and disposing of people seems to come easy.

What I liked: The subject matter that was addressed.
What interested me: The treatment of the subject matter by the author.
Why I read it: It held my interest, and was a subject that I have tried to address for years

Suggestions/Questions/Comments: Thank you so much for sharing.
"Gee, how (why) did (didn't) I never (ever) come up with that?"

Write on. WRITE ON!


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Review of Jatog Sees Green  
Review by G. B. Williams
In affiliation with The WDC Angel Army  
Rated: E | (3.5)
Jatog, thank you for sharing this poetic piece. It was randomly assigned to me for review. I must say, I am not sure what I would do, if I awoke to a world of green. You treated the subject matter with seriousness, and told a story in a very short amount of space. Kudos on your efforts with this.

Thank you for sharing.

Write on. WRITE ON!


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Review of The Journey  
Review by G. B. Williams
In affiliation with The WDC Angel Army  
Rated: E | (4.0)
Billy, I believe that this is the second one of your pieces that got randomly assigned to me. I LIKED the title, "The Journey." I also liked the way the journey was presented in your poem.

What I liked: It was short, filled with wisdom, and easy to read
What interested me: How the journey would begin and end
What I would change, if any thing: The rhythm and flow

Suggestions/Questions/Comments: It is a poem of encouragement.

Thanks for sharing. Write on. WRITE ON!


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Review by G. B. Williams
In affiliation with The WDC Angel Army  
Rated: E | (4.0)
TJ Marie, you write with the same passion as the artist that performed the piece which you so adequately described. I enjoyed reading your description of the artist, the way it made your feel, and the inside view of the artist.

Suggestions/Questions/Comments: Not sure if the small catches are yours or if they are in the original:
...in those weak and drunken heart(s)...
...And if your (you're) homesick, give me...
...and it goes (on) to tell that if you
Great job TJ Marie, and write on. WRITE ON!


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Review by G. B. Williams
In affiliation with The WDC Angel Army  
Rated: 18+ | (2.5)
Me, your piece was randomly assigned to me for a review. It is a story of love in junior high school, and the effect of the love of your life on you. It made me smile, and remember.

Suggestions/Questions/Comments: Thank you for sharing. The following are my observations/suggestions:
...even those who bully (bullied) her
...to admit to love (loving) her because my other friend
This piece is in desperate need of spell check, editing, and punctuation.

These are my observations and comments. Please use what you can and discard everything else.

Write on. WRITE ON!


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Review by G. B. Williams
In affiliation with The WDC Angel Army  
Rated: E | (5.0)
Your emotions and strength shows in this simple prayer. The repetition of your thank you to God for the many gifts that He bestowed upon you comes through loud and strong. It is emotional, but clear. It is powerful, but humble. It acknowledges God as your all and all, and shares your faith.

Thank you for sharing, and write on. WRITE ON!


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Review by G. B. Williams
Rated: E | (5.0)
Thank you for writing and sharing your most inner thoughts and prayers. This is well written and speaks to the thankfulness you have for your life and your belief and relationship with God. I enjoyed reading it, and believe I felt your emotions that you shared.

Thanks so much for sharing, and write on. WRITE ON!


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Review of Who Is Nneka?  
Review by G. B. Williams
In affiliation with The WDC Angel Army  
Rated: E | (4.0)
Very strong and interesting narrative of Nneka, and how you view, define, and characterize you. You set very high standards for you and view you as strong, but flexible to some degree.

Suggestions/questions/comments: Thoughtful. Suggest the following for your consideration:
and I work to make a positive difference in their.
complete,(complete. Delete and) and I am disciplined (,) and I frequently channel my efforts toward benefitting (benefiting) others.
I honor the past, and use lesson (lessons) learned to...
I'm a (delete a) simply one of God's children,...

Thank you for sharing. Write on. WRITE ON!


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Review by G. B. Williams
In affiliation with The WDC Angel Army  
Rated: E | (4.5)
N. M. Barnes, thank you for sharing your "Meet My Alphabet Family." I think it is adorable. It's fun. It introduces new words and has very short sentences for the young reader.

What I liked: I liked the way each alphabet was introduced.

What interested me: How each alphabet was shown in each sentence.

Suggestions/questions/comments: The story was well written and I believe age appropriate for young children. I would make the following changes:
...even the alphabet (s).
She is nice (a) nurse.
She tells terrific tales about turkey (turkeys)...

Not sure how you would do it, but it occurred to me that the story would make the alphabet stick if the last word in each started with the alphabet. (Just a thought.)

These are my thoughts and observations. It is your story, and you get to use or toss any and all of the above. Thank you so much for sharing.

Write on. WRITE ON!


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Review of My life  
Review by G. B. Williams
In affiliation with Showering Acts of Joy Group  
Rated: E | (3.0)
zzzzcccc2, your published piece on "My Life," was randomly assigned for me to review. The topic was of interest, and so I read it. I am always interested in how people view themselves. Your story did not let me down. You started it from a perspective that I had not expected, and shared some of your life incidents that got you to the hospital emergency room. You left me wondering where would you take me next.

What I liked: I liked the title

What interested me: Your story got me wondering what was wrong with you and/or what medical condition you had to face.

Suggestions/questions/comments: The piece did not transition well for me from one idea/thought to next. In some cases, I had to read and re-read the section to see what you wanted me to know about you and how the piece fitted with the title. Suggest a major re-write for clarity.

I actually had an (a)very good idea of what had happened.
...and any direction (directional) body movement arms, or legs, made...
My equilibrium is off because of this. (Consider rewriting)
...I agreed to go to the emergency (room).

These are my observations and comments. It is your story, and in this case, your life story. You know how you want it written. Please use any, all, none of my comments. They are just that comments that I think may improve this piece.

Thank you for allowing me to read, critique, and rate your work. Write on. WRITE ON!


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Review by G. B. Williams
In affiliation with The WDC Angel Army  
Rated: 13+ | (4.0)
Brom21, I read your poem with interest as it addressed one of the subject that I have written about over the past few months. I found it to be very well written and a rather flamboyant description of death.

Suggestions/questions/comments: Lots of good rhymes in the poem, however, this line broke my rhythm: Her appearance was irresistible but inwardly vile
...and the last two lines also did not rhyme. I could not tell, if this was on purpose or not since all the others did.

Thank you for sharing. Write on. WRITE ON!


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Review of Lost in the Woods  
Review by G. B. Williams
In affiliation with The WDC Angel Army  
Rated: 18+ | (4.0)
Prosperous Snow, your short story was randomly assigned. I enjoyed reading it, and actually admire you for being able to write short stories. I still need to develop that skill.

Suggestions/questions/comments:
...those who's (whose not who is) bodies remain unburied are doomed...
... the (in) limbo between the world of matter...
...woods (or worlds) of matter,...
,,,because my body lays (lies) in an unmarked grave.
..., in order (consider deleting in order) to get as far from my ...
...where my bruised body lays (lies)

These are my suggestions, and I hope that they are helpful. Please feel free to use or discard as you deem appropriate.

Thank you so much for sharing, and write on. WRITE ON!


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Review of What's My Name?  
Review by G. B. Williams
In affiliation with The WDC Angel Army  
Rated: E | (4.5)
Your story about your name made me laugh out loud. One day you will have to read my version. I liked your very much. It takes your first name and your middle name to make "A tender gift from God!" And you still are just that with many gifts.


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Review by G. B. Williams
In affiliation with The WDC Angel Army  
Rated: 13+ | (5.0)
Harry, that was awesome! I enjoyed the read, but LOVED the message. Not only did it speak to the simple things of life, but of the many reasons for living just by admiring the various season. Though randomly chosen for me to review, I am very glad for the selection.

Suggestions/questions/comments: Although I understand why the third and tenth stanzas start off with a lower case letter, both threw me for a minute and made me start over when reading them. I have no idea what to tell you to do about that, but it is they are the only stanzas that begin with a lower case.

Thank you for sharing, and write on. WRITE ON!


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Review by G. B. Williams
In affiliation with The WDC Angel Army  
Rated: E | (3.0)
Thank you for sharing your writing. I Chose your piece to read, review and rate because of its title "Always a New Day Ahead." The poem seems to imply that even when you are having a bad day, not to despair because there is always a new day coming that may just be better.

Suggestion/questions/comments:
...when I am on(in) bed,…
You managed to rhyme in the first three stanzas, but may require some review
The las two stanzas do not follow the first three, however, they read more closely with the first three with additional lines.
YOu (You) will definitely…
Remember (the) universe is Round

These are my observations, however, as the writer, please view them and use as you deem appropriate. Again, thank you for sharing, and write on. WRITE ON!
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Review by G. B. Williams
In affiliation with The WDC Angel Army  
Rated: E | (4.5)
This was a good introduction to reviewing not only poetry, but reviewing in general. I related to the article, and was encouraged to see a group promoting good reviewing, and helping reviewers do a better job. I most liked the survey and the requirement to read the article on reviewing.

Suggestions/questions/comments: Maybe I overlooked, but I did not see information in the article on how to determine the rating for the item. For example, does one mis-spelled word in an otherwise well written piece warrant a rating of 2 stares?

I tend to rate the item on content, connection, writing, and other things. Spelling is important, but not the sole determiner.

I believe that the addition of rating information would improve this article.

Write on. WRITE ON!
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