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In affiliation with WdC SuperPower Reviewers Group  
Rated: E | (5.0)
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*Exclaim* Hi Itchybarn! I'm participating in the Game of Thrones Competition on our site. One of the tasks includes reviewing red case members. I heard that WDC had some little glitches this morning, so I didn't want to bother the big guy or your mom while they might be busy.
This gave me the opportunity to visit your port again. I think it's been a while since we chatted, so here I am!

Wow, what a fun story this is! I think it was clever of your teacher to give that assignment. Most of the time, we hear about teachers who insist their students write an essay about how they spent their summer.
This one was an assignment about how one didn't spend their summer! I thought that was very unique, indeed. I bet you and your fellow students had a blast writing it!

I'm going to work backward and speak about the ending, which I absolutely loved! You said, "I didn’t even get to say that I still had 900 million dollars left" LOL That was such a fun line! I might tell my husband that when we dream of winning the lottery. I'll mention what I want to do first, and then I will tell him, 'then I'll decide what to do with the rest of it'! *Laugh*

I had to go back and look at which genres you chose to list this in.
I would perhaps take out finance, and add in comedy instead. You wrote this, in my opinion, in a way that gave a bit of light humor, which I enjoyed very much.

I would jump up and down if I won a billion dollars.
That was a good start and set the scene for the fun times to come.

I didn't know what hunter-jumpers were, but I will look that up. Gosh, my daughter took horseback riding lessons for many years. I should know that! LOL

It was so sweet to include that you would also give a million to all of your closest friends. Great sentiments and the thought was there, as it is said. Thanks for sharing this great story.

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Game of Thrones  [13+]
Returning in April - Prep starts March 1st
by Gaby ~ Keeper Of The Realm




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In affiliation with WdC SuperPower Reviewers Group  
Rated: E | (5.0)
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*Exclaim* Hi QP doll. I thought this was a great forum. I bet you think it's weird that people have suddenly been reviewing old forums.
It's part of a quest from the Game of Thrones Challenge in which I'm participating. We need to find inactive forums and review them.

I wondered if your forum had anything to do with the dialogue contest which I entered last week...It was similar (though that one was dialogue instead of no dialogue), but, of course, this forum came first. Either way, it was really fun and it's good that a great thing keeps going.

I must say that this forum of yours had a really pretty presentation.
The image at the beginning of the heading is definitely one of the best that I've ever seen on our site. It shows kittens at a birthday party and says No Dialogue contest and Happy Birthday Writing.com. I hope you'll bring this contest out again for another WDC site anniversary.
Maybe in this September? It would be fun!

I liked that you gave the option to skip to the bottom. This comes in handy for people who have already read it all and just want to get to the bottom. Very convenient.

It seems fair that you had several judges. And a big congratulations for the Quill Awards! You see, as I was getting to about a great thing, people love these quick, fun little dialogue-type contests!

Also, you made it easy to enter in my opinion. You put the rules in the heading cleanly and neatly. Short, fiction stories, using no dialogue or inner dialogue. Word count is listed, along with dates needed, etc. Nice work, and congrats on creating such a successful activity.

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Game of Thrones  [13+]
Returning in April - Prep starts March 1st
by Gaby ~ Keeper Of The Realm


3
3
Review of SLAM!  
In affiliation with WdC SuperPower Reviewers Group  
Rated: 18+ | (5.0)
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*Exclaim* Hi Cappucine! As part of the "Game of Thrones"  activity, the participants need to read and review closed forums. I was very happy to come across yours because I do remember that at one time these slam poems were so very popular!

I used to participate in Pita's anti-slam activities. Remember her? Fun times for sure. I did more, I think it was for Leger, but I can't recall, where we had to write zombie poems, like this one: "A Good Zombie Fright" . I'm sure I would have participated in this one of yours if I had known about it. Maybe I was too new to the site, as this was created the year that I joined. Gosh, you have been a member since the site was 'born'! Congratulations on your successful years here, by the way.

Your contest forum mentioned that these poems were to be regular poems, and not anti-slam poems. I read the heading thoroughly, and I felt that all of the directions were clear and easy to follow.

I thought it was a great idea to have your participants post their entries as a reply to the prompt for that round. What an easy way to keep track of it all. It was smart to offer a different forum, "The SLAM! Green Room" , where people could talk about the slam contest, or whatever came to their minds. This kept your contest forum clean and neat.

What fun it must have been to have those who placed in the prelim rounds eligible to participate in the final rounds - the best of the best.

Your contest seemed fair because there were three host judges to pick the winners.

The entries also had to be newly created for the contest. This, I believe, encouraged your participants to write new poems. The instructions were clear to say that the entries couldn't be edited after the deadline. That made the judges job a bit easier, that they wouldn't have to keep checking to see if the entry had been modified.
They should never need to do that! Good job with this and thanks for bringing back great memories.

The views and opinions on this review are mainly the things discovered by the reader and therefore, do not reflect necessarily to the group, activity and/or event being affiliated herein. This is only the opinion and suggestions of the reviewer and it is still up to the author of this piece to consider this review as a corrective action or otherwise.

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Game of Thrones  [13+]
Returning in April - Prep starts March 1st
by Gaby ~ Keeper Of The Realm


4
4
In affiliation with WdC SuperPower Reviewers Group  
Rated: 18+ | (5.0)
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*Exclaim* Hi Legerdemain! I was tasked with the quest of visiting and reviewing some inactive forums, and right away your 15 for 15 Contest forum came to mind. I'm glad that I stopped here again because it brought back some great memories.

I do remember that I participated in this activity! What fun I had adding things to "Maryann's 15 for 15 Scrapbook " ! I wouldn't have that item if it hadn't been for the prompts and encouragement from you and this activity.

As I see all of the posts, and, of course, the beautiful trophy award at the top near the brief introduction, I can imagine that I was not the only one who loved this item.

The brief introduction, by the way, made your contest very inviting. All a person needed was fifteen minutes a day to write. It sounds like a light commitment that anyone can easily do. I did it, and I found it to be, not only easy to do, but fun to do!

The colors of the font and images in the heading add to the feeling of fun. I think it was all presented well and the rules were simple to understand. I liked that you have a drop note of the easy-to-follow rules. This made the heading less cluttered and therefore, less intimidating. Your visitors could simply click on things as needed for further information.

In a nutshell, we needed to write for fifteen minutes a day, for fifteen days. You listed the exact days so there was no confusion.
We didn't need to be concerned about a word count, and you gave picture prompts. People were free to write poems or stories, but they needed to follow that strict fifteen-minute time limit. That was fun and very unique. I've never seen anything like your contest since.

I clicked on a few of the picture prompts, and it really brought back great memories. Thanks for the fun!

The views and opinions on this review are mainly the things discovered by the reader and therefore, do not reflect necessarily to the group, activity and/or event being affiliated herein. This is only the opinion and suggestions of the reviewer and it is still up to the author of this piece to consider this review as a corrective action or otherwise.

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Game of Thrones  [13+]
Returning in April - Prep starts March 1st
by Gaby ~ Keeper Of The Realm


5
5
Review of In Her Memory  
In affiliation with WdC SuperPower Reviewers Group  
Rated: ASR | N/A (Review only item.)
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*Exclaim* Hi Webwitch. I thought this was truly a beautiful tribute to your beloved mom, who passed in July of 2013. ...Or as you were calling it, 'A memorial remembrance'. I also thought it was nice that you had added the memorial tribute to a newspaper in remembrance of her. It was good, I thought, that you added a message about that near the bottom of your sweet poem.

This item has a very pretty ribbon on it. Very thoughtful of the person to have added it. I see that you have review only so I can't give you any stars, but of course, I would give you ten if I could for this item.

The poem in general is delicate and light, just enough to give dynamic meaning.

It was sweet that you began the poem, 'Mom', as though this were a letter directly to her. I'm sure if she could see it, she would be honored and feel loved by her darling daughter.

You wrote in your poem that Mom didn't pass alone because a piece of you went with her. Yes, I can understand those words. You will always be with her, as she will always be with you. And you expressed that sentiment as well when you mentioned that her love remains. You remember her in smiles, in tears, just everywhere, which is true for our loved ones who are no longer here with us. They will never leave our memories. 'Forever in our Hearts' is a touching sentiment, indeed. I recall seeing that sentiment on memorials of beloved deceased ones.

I thought that you ended this touching, heartfelt memorial poem in a great way. It makes the reader able to imagine that there is hope of seeing those beloved ones once again, as you wrote, in eternity. Well done tribute.



The views and opinions on this review are mainly the things discovered by the reader and therefore, do not reflect necessarily to the group, activity and/or event being affiliated herein. This is only the opinion and suggestions of the reviewer and it is still up to the author of this piece to consider this review as a corrective action or otherwise.

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Game of Thrones  [13+]
Returning in April - Prep starts March 1st
by Gaby ~ Keeper Of The Realm




*Gold* My review has been submitted for consideration in "Good Deeds Get CASH!" .
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In affiliation with WdC SuperPower Reviewers Group  
Rated: E | (5.0)
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*Exclaim* Hello again! Oh my gosh, is there nothing in port that doesn't already have an awardicon on it! I would have given this story one, but, of course, it already has one. So, just pretend that I gave it. *Bigsmile*

I liked the talk about the dragonfly at the beginning and then the narration of seeing it once again. It seemed like the same one. It could have been. And that actually gave me chills.

You wrote this story in a way that will capture the interest of your readers. It certainly captured my interest. In fact, I was very touched by the paragraph where the narrator walked back to the village and pondered the beauty of life, especially nature and that little dragonfly, and all the projects and stress seemed to go away, leaving the narrator with a feeling of peace. I don't talk about my life much, being a more personal person, but I almost died when I was forty-six years old. After two years of much time in the hospital, having all sorts of operations and medicines, nurses coming to the house, etc., I was finally well and able to go out. I was so grateful and stopped to smell the roses so to speak. I remember looking up and seeing birds flying. I was completely in awe and I was able at that time to appreciate and enjoy all the little things. I overheard a young couple bickering about who knows what. It was so trivial, and it made me realize that people overthink and stress the dumbest things, when they should, instead, be appreciating the remarkable beauty around them. Anyway, your story brought back these memories and I wanted to say that, I get it.

So getting back to the rest of your story..I enjoyed reading about how the person telling the story thought of the beautiful dragonfly as a totem, there to give her strength to tackle her projects and what she viewed as problems in life. As I mentioned in your other stories and poems that I've seen, you wrote descriptions that can make your readers feel that they are right there on that walk.

I loved the ending, where she saw the dragonfly again, and this time, she was able to get a picture of it!

The image which you supplied at the end of the story was a perfect complement to it. Nicely done.



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Game of Thrones  [13+]
Returning in April - Prep starts March 1st
by Gaby ~ Keeper Of The Realm




*Gold* My review has been submitted for consideration in "Good Deeds Get CASH!" .
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7
In affiliation with WdC SuperPower Reviewers Group  
Rated: 18+ | (5.0)
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*Exclaim* Hi Webby, I'm back again and I hope you're not tired of hearing from me by now! After I read your last detective story, I remembered that you mentioned this chapter in the series was entered in a contest, and you did it slightly differently. So, I wanted to come by and check it out.

I read it last night from my iPad, but I wanted to review it on my larger computer, or my review would have looked like my seven-year-old granddaughter typed it! LOL

I knew it would be good, and I wasn't at all disappointed. To be honest, I liked the first storyline better, but this one was great! It's like comparing apples to oranges. They are both great but different and it comes down to what a person likes.

I was, indeed, very impressed at the wording in this story. I felt that you used way more 1930s lingo in this one, than the other one. You must have done so much research to learn those words. Really, it's like you wrote it in a different language. That was remarkable and it's no wonder that this story won first place in the site contest. Big congratulations to you.

I was also impressed that you used the pop-up glossary thing in this story. I can't remember what it's called..I wrote an article using that when it was introduced, but I don't normally see people using it. Funny story - Last night when I read this on my iPad, I couldn't get it off the screen each time I clicked on it. It's an iPad thing. But I liked to read where one was Lake Michigan, what copper was, etc.

Your 1930s gangster/slang wording in this story was abundant and very well done. I found that in just about every single sentence. *Starstruck*
Your readers will feel like they're right there with Gloria, Lou, and Gary in the Chicago Speakeasy and places. They will read words like gumshoe, heist, and Abyssinia! I knew most of those words in this story, but I did walk away learning more than I knew before I read your story.

You thought up a great plot. Gloria's brother was set up to take the heat for killing a guy, but his alibi was that he had been robbing a jewelry store at that time, so it wasn't him who did the murder. Lots of twists and turns. Of course, Lou so cleverly solved the crime, and helped out people along the way, like saving poor Mona's life!

My favorite line was, "Ah, that Gloria. She’s a swell secretary for an old gumshoe like me. But the doll’s a trouble magnet." You have a way of writing that makes your readers come to adore your characters, Gloria and Lou.

As in your last story, this story had a happy ending, which I liked. Lou, Gloria, and Gary were able to celebrate a job well done. And, I felt that your story was well done!

I felt that it was a good touch to add an author's note at the bottom, explaining about Prohibition and the time period in Chicago.



The views and opinions on this review are mainly the things discovered by the reader and therefore, do not reflect necessarily to the group, activity and/or event being affiliated herein. This is only the opinion and suggestions of the reviewer and it is still up to the author of this piece to consider this review as a corrective action or otherwise.

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Game of Thrones  [13+]
Returning in April - Prep starts March 1st
by Gaby ~ Keeper Of The Realm




*Gold* My review has been submitted for consideration in "Good Deeds Get CASH!" .
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8
Review of O Mohonk  
In affiliation with WdC SuperPower Reviewers Group  
Rated: E | (5.0)
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*Exclaim* Hi Webwitch, I'm back again. This time, I had the honor of reading this enchanting poem. I found this poem to be full of wonder, delight, and beauty. Very nicely done.

I've been working on using more descriptive words in my writing, so such descriptions are fresh in my mind. I can see that you were able to do this in a smooth and flawless manner. I believe you are able to present your expert writing as a dazzling painted picture in the minds of your readers.

The picturesque scene is set from the very first stanza. Although I've yet to know what place Mohonk is, I can get the feeling of it from your beautiful poetic words.

I think you easily succeeded in awakening all of your reader's senses. We can feel and hear the gentle breeze and we can feel the warmth of the sun; we can take in the sweet scent of the flowers; we can see the pretty cherry blossom trees. You expressed that the scene is intoxicating, which brings the feeling of knowing how amazing it all is.

Your second stanza, made me think that this enchanting place makes us feel that our soul has been inside of a cocoon and is only now revitalized. Of course, you say all of that in an outstanding way through remarkable poetry. I'm forever impressed. Last night I read your detective story, which you wrote in the style of a 1930s gangster, and now today I'm reading the poetry of an artist! The brilliant talent displayed is in your portfolio for sure!

I loved the sounds you mentioned of the night animals scattering across the dried leaves.

The moonbeams in the darkness did sound glorious! I found your poem to be a very pleasant item to read.

The views and opinions on this review are mainly the things discovered by the reader and therefore, do not reflect necessarily to the group, activity and/or event being affiliated herein. This is only the opinion and suggestions of the reviewer and it is still up to the author of this piece to consider this review as a corrective action or otherwise.

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Game of Thrones  [13+]
Returning in April - Prep starts March 1st
by Gaby ~ Keeper Of The Realm




*Gold* My review has been submitted for consideration in "Good Deeds Get CASH!" .
9
9
In affiliation with WdC SuperPower Reviewers Group  
Rated: 13+ | (5.0)
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*Exclaim* Hello again, Webwitch. I reviewed the other thing, the Witch's House item, and it mentioned The Witch's Garden, so I thought I'd stop by to see what that item was. I know that I visited this item in the past, but I didn't give it the pretty stars from me that it deserves.
So, here I am to fix that.

Ah what holiday spirit memories. Ledger does an amazing job with the Secret Santas, but you are known for this fun, holiday spirit item. I think many WDC members might not remember to join in the festive atmosphere if they didn't notice this holiday activity. Your item encourages everyone to add the festive spirit into their handles.

The presentation in your heading looks great and sets the mood of the holiday spirit theme. Again, as I mentioned when I reviewed the Witch's House item, I love the festive colors - the reds and the greens, emoticons, and images you added into the item.

I felt that the instructions were very clear and well-written. A WDC member simply needs to make a post with 'holiday handle' in the subject line. Unlike the fun which you do at Halloween time where we post other people's handles, at this event, we only post for our own. One post per member. Easy to do for sure.

To add to the fun, you give out prizes. I thought it was smart to leave the prizes vague. This allows you to give more or less as your time and spirit lead you. I understand that, and I also use that philosophy at my "WdC SuperPower Reviewers Group"  raids. Sometimes I give out more goodies during the raid, sometimes I give less. You seemed to give out lots in this last event!*Santahat*

You ended the heading writing on a note to spread the cheer. That's what I felt this activity does in a nutshell. It spreads the cheer for sure.

Congratulations for all the Quill wins on this. Well deserved. *Smile*

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Game of Thrones  [13+]
Returning in April - Prep starts March 1st
by Gaby ~ Keeper Of The Realm


10
10
Review of The Witch's House  
In affiliation with WdC SuperPower Reviewers Group  
Rated: 13+ | (5.0)
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*Exclaim* Hello again, Webwitch! I thought I'd do a little light reading after that long, amazing detective story, so here I am. I came across this Witch's House item. It does feel homey and welcoming, so you created the most fitting title, in my opinion. It's also the second item listed in your portfolio, so I clicked on it.

What an awesome page! Wow, you have a lot of merit badges! My group has a few, but I don't own one personally. That is on my list of things to do, but seeing all of these nice ones here that you have, I feel inspired. Maybe I'll get to that in May.

The Crow bird, 'Webbie' image at the top gives a nice feel to the page. It cements the idea that this is, indeed, Webbie's House, or, The Witch's House, as you have it titled. And, I see the larger version of the one you have in your brief introduction, too.

I glanced back at the brief introduction, and I see that it further explains that this is the home for your merit badges and the Band for the Witch's Garden. What a pretty title, by the way. As expected, you have awardicons, more than one, and a very unique little image at the brief introduction as well.

The page is set up very nicely, the way that I like to present my pages, with lots of emojis, color, and images to complement the writings.

Speaking of the writing on the page, *Wink* I really loved this line: "...I am a Web~Witch and cover a whole lot of territory via my handy, zoom-broom!" You are so much fun! It's no wonder everyone loves you on WDC so much!

I see that you are Pisces like my son. You both seem to have a lot in common.

I giggled at the Gingerbread kids baking comment. So much fun! Little details like that add to the fun atmosphere of the page.

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Game of Thrones  [13+]
Returning in April - Prep starts March 1st
by Gaby ~ Keeper Of The Realm


11
11
In affiliation with WdC SuperPower Reviewers Group  
Rated: 18+ | (5.0)
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FIRST IMPRESSION:Hi Webwitch! Your chapter series, Windy City Tales, was highlighted in your port. To me, it looked really intriguing. The idea of a Private Detective story from the 1930s seemed like it would be very interesting, and I was impressed that you were able to write such a thing. I was also impressed that you won a couple of very nice awardicons for it. Megan really has beautiful awards. After I thoroughly read this story, I realized that it deserved this award and more!

THOUGHTS: I saw this story and thought it would be a fun thing to read while I was relaxing in bed last night before sleep. Webby! You are such a very talented storyteller!! My gosh! I was in awe with every word! I always knew that you are brilliant at setting up fun activities, which the entire site has fun with. I learned yesterday that you are a fine poet. But this! This is amazing!

Often my husband and I listen to old-time radio while on very long car rides. I used to try to read my sci-fi books, but it was too distracting with the radio blasting, so I caved and simply listened to Johnny Dollar with him instead. I liked it! I am sincere in saying that I thought your story was just as good, heck, even better than those old-time radio broadcasts. Nicely done, indeed. *Starstruck*

FAVORITE PART: I must say that what I liked the most about your story was the voices that you gave to your characters. The language you gave them in their words was very believable, and it made me feel like this story was absolutely taking place in the 1930s. The entire story had a gangster and mobster feel from the beginning to the end.

Your opening was great, as it set the stage for the rest to come. You gave a glimpse of the main characters, though your readers learn more as we read through the rest of the captivating story. Yes, when it ended, while I was half asleep in bed, I nearly forgot that I was reading a WDC story. The whole thing reads like a good page-turner novel. I thought, 'Oh, that's the end. I guess I better get to sleep now.' Yes, I was very into that story!

You thought up a wonderful plot. Poor Gloria, new in town, met a guy named Vinny Lo Bianca and thought he was nice. It was only until she saw him killing a person from a distance, that she realized he was bad. Nervously, (and smartly) she ran off to seek help and that's when she came upon the office of this small-town Private detective, Lou Ryan.

He agreed to help Gloria and wow, what an adventure that turns into! I felt that you executed the display of this adventure really well. You even mentioned Capone at one point, which I thought added a more gangster feel to the story.

The ending was sweet! I love happy endings, and (of course) your character, Low Ryan, lives to fight crime another day!

SUGGESTIONS: I mentioned that I really, really loved the 1930s Chicago character voices. With that said, there were a few mentions that I will need to look up. One was, 'transom'. I still don't know what it is. An elevator?
'Smarmy', is another example.
Maybe for some of the old-time lingo, I would have liked a glossary at the end of the story, or maybe a subtle explanation causally slipped into the writing.
While none of that took away from the excitement of your captivating story, it's just something I thought I'd mention.

The views and opinions on this review are mainly the things discovered by the reader and therefore, do not reflect necessarily to the group, activity and/or event being affiliated herein. This is only the opinion and suggestions of the reviewer and it is still up to the author of this piece to consider this review as a corrective action or otherwise.

Game of Thrones  [13+]
Returning in April - Prep starts March 1st
by Gaby ~ Keeper Of The Realm




*Gold* My review has been submitted for consideration in "Good Deeds Get CASH!" .
12
12
In affiliation with WdC SuperPower Reviewers Group  
Rated: ASR | (5.0)
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*Exclaim* Hi there WebWitch! I thought I saw you on the newsfeed, though you claim that, 'You're not really here'! *BigsmiLe* Anyway I suppose it's part of the GoT fun that I stop by for another visit!

Wow, somehow I navigated to this wondrous poem! I'm glad that I did because it really gave me the feeling that I had a glimpse into the mind of a mother wolf. You wrote this one well, so I hope you did great in the contest it was entered in.

I wondered if the poem was about the actual animal, or the instincts of an inner animal, which the title implies. Either way, I felt a brilliant mystery.

From the first stanza, your readers will understand the strength, both inner and physical, of the Mother Wolf. We read that she can be fierce when needed, but she still knows to respect the elder wolves.

The tales of wolves always involved a showing that these beasts are wise, graceful, and spectacular. Their senses are super keen, and I believe you succeeded in expressing that in your various stanzas. You mentioned in your second stanza that they can sense things with no need to look! How extraordinary is that! In your third stanza, I felt that this poem was drifting more about the narrator feeling like the wolf, with the spirit floating. The energy seemed boundless.

My favorite stanza was the second to last. It spoke about the keen hearing of the wolf. "Nothing's undetected from me/Even the shallowest breath". To me, that just seems so remarkable that animals can do that. I recently read that deer can sleep with ease because they can smell things and hear things that wakes them right up. I had the feeling that's what this stanza was expressing.

The last stanza was a great closure, in my opinion. It brought my attention back to the topic of the contest prompt that asks, "What kind of animal are you?" The poem ends with the narration about being thankful for having the wolf as a guide. Very pretty poem. *Wolf*

The views and opinions on this review are mainly the things discovered by the reader and therefore, do not reflect necessarily to the group, activity and/or event being affiliated herein. This is only the opinion and suggestions of the reviewer and it is still up to the author of this piece to consider this review as a corrective action or otherwise.

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Game of Thrones  [13+]
Returning in April - Prep starts March 1st
by Gaby ~ Keeper Of The Realm




*Gold* My review has been submitted for consideration in "Good Deeds Get CASH!" .
13
13
In affiliation with WdC SuperPower Reviewers Group  
Rated: E | (5.0)
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*Exclaim* Hi Webwitch! I haven't been by your port in a while, so I was happy that I had the time and the opportunity to stop by. I was glad that I did because now I get to see hidden gems like this great cNote shop. Yesterday was my WDC anniversary, so I wished I had a list of great shops lined up to send out as people gave me things like award icons or merit badges. I'm sure I certainly could have found items at your shop.

I am most impressed with your affordable prices. Hey, now that I've been earning lots of gift points, I could afford higher, but I love to be frugal, and gift points don't stay in my pocket for very long. It's nice to know the address of a fine shop at great prices.

Aww, I clicked on your pretty ribbon and saw that Sherry had given it to you. Time flies, people come and go, and we will miss people like Sherry and Mona. Your ribbon keeps her memories still with us.

I loved that you filled up your shop with ten cNotes. It gave me lots to look at and choose from. You have a wide variety of various types here, too. One can find Sympathy, love, friendship, or get well. In addition, we can congratulate someone for anything or just say a simple hello. I like that you supplied us with a cNote to give to a person who had a baby, or who had a birthday. Both are occasions to celebrate!

My absolute favorite cNote in this collection is the Congratulations with the Marching band character. It had a very colorful, fun look to it. Even the, 'well done' saying on the inside was colorful. Yes, I clicked on all of the, 'view full cNote' areas! Thanks for putting this shop together.

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Game of Thrones  [13+]
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by Gaby ~ Keeper Of The Realm


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Rated: E | (4.5)
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*Exclaim* Hi Dan! Oh we never got to hear what happened to the keys! I was hoping for a punch line or an explanation, but I guess that's part of what makes this story a mystery. Your readers will just have to use their imagination and guess what might be happening!

I liked the light humor in your story, and I see that's why you added comedy to the genres listed. Your character kept his sense of humor, even though he was obviously stressed out from his bad luck with keys. He had been losing them out of his pocket, then they didn't work anytime he hid one to use. His solution of selling anything of value and simply keeping the doors unlocked was funny. I imagined a door accidentally locking anyway, and he still wouldn't be able to get in. LOL

I thought you had a fun start to your story. The narrator tells us that he had to break into his house again for the third time this year! Oh no! Nobody should have to do that. I was thrilled to read more because I kept hoping to find out what was happening, especially after reading the next part!

Oh my gosh, the narrator starts feeling paranoid because he came up with the far-fetched idea that someone is taking his hidden keys, filing the teeth of them down, and then putting them back. Like a prank! I would have thought maybe a rat was gnawing at them, but now you have your readers wondering, too! That's the sign of a fun, thought-provoking story.

I think it's time that character gets himself an electronic door lock. Then, there will never be anything to lose, unless he forgets his code!
Nice work. It was a fun read. *Delight*

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Game of Thrones  [13+]
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by Gaby ~ Keeper Of The Realm




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Rated: 18+ | (5.0)
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*Exclaim* Hi Dragonwoman! Nice story! I remember when I used to watch Star Trek: The Next Generation, and Data used to love to visit the Sherlock world at the Halodeck. Your story reminded me of that and brought back fond memories.

Well done with adding the actual title right into the dialog between two people. I never noticed that done before and you slid it right in smoothly.

The idea that it's not easy to prove that a person or people 'saw nothing' will provoke thought in your readers. It's so true, but I never thought about that before. I liked how Sherlock didn't just interpret that as a done deal, but instead questioned it to the inspector. I could imagine Sherlock, wearing his great coat and walking up to the inspector. I had to look up what a 'greatcoat' was. I figured it might have been an overcoat, but I wasn't sure.

I felt that you stuck to the main point of the story while adding in those tiny little details, such as the coat and walking stick, and also about having Holmes pay the cab driver while Sherlock walked straight up to the police officer.

I could imagine Sherlock and Holmes taking a better look at the people who saw nothing to see if they seemed visually impaired. It's a good thing he had a notebook handy to write down his findings. Today, he would probably just take notes on his phone! You gave your character the intelligence in your words that we all expect from Sherlock. He figured if they didn't see anything, maybe they heard something.

I loved the closure that you gave to this story. 'There's more than one way to 'see' a crime! So true. *Smile*

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Game of Thrones  [13+]
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Review of "The Darkest Sky"  
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Rated: E | (5.0)
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*Exclaim* Hi JCosmos! I absolutely loved this story! I thought the title added to the mystery and suspense found inside. After I read it, I kept thinking that I would love to see THIS in movie form. I think it would really make a great movie because here we have a great story already.

I would suggest redoing the brief introduction when you get the time.
Instead of simply repeating the title, maybe you might writing something that provokes curiosity, such as, Is the Earth prepared?

Another thing that I would suggest thinking about changing is this part:
"Quickly dubbed the doomsday asteroid. Everyone looked up at the doomsday asteroid." It could maybe be something like, ...'Everyone looked up at the treacherous wonder.'

Other than that, I felt your story was a provocative masterpiece. It provokes thought about what might happen if one day, we all wake up and there is something perilous threatening the planet from above. The unknowing would cause extreme anxiety. As you mentioned, people could speculate aliens, and, well, impending doom, as in your title.

I liked how you stressed the point that in an event such as this, the entire world would come together as one. They would have to! Enemies would now be allies. The US would be joined by Brazilians, Chinese, the EU, Koreans, Japanese, Iraqis, Iranians UAE, and Israel,. Indians, Pakistanis, Russians, Saudis, South Africans, Russians, and Ukrainians, even the North Koreans. You made this all sound easily believable and impressive. I would have needed to do a bit of research in order to name all of that! Nicely done.

You gave good closure to your story, in my opinion. In the end, while the world watched, the crisis was averted and the asteroid was blown away.

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Game of Thrones  [13+]
Returning in April - Prep starts March 1st
by Gaby ~ Keeper Of The Realm




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Rated: E | (5.0)
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*Exclaim* Hi Jackie! I found your story to be very enjoyable and entertaining. I could certainly feel the mystery that you so cleverly wrote. It could have almost have been also in the comedy genre, as it had a bit of light humor in it as well, which I also liked.

You are a talented storyteller. I loved the suspense and adventure that you smoothly added throughout your story, and your descriptions were spot on to have me captivated with every word.

For example, at one point, the character mentioned that they were hiding in an old house, and then later when the police jiggled the door knob and the door squeaked, I could imagine all of those sounds that an older house would make.

I noticed that you had a phrase in bold, so I'll assume this was for a contest. I hope you did well in it, or at least, I'm sure, you must have made it hard for the judges to choose because this is very good!

I thought it was a great move to start the mystery and suspense right from the starting hook. When the narration spoke about partners hiding in a suspect's house, I thought they might be police officers, but then I remembered the title and realized they were detectives. I could hear the anxiety in the character's voice, as they hear noises and hide for fear of being discovered. The setting you described so well, made me think of an old cellar for sure, with talk of cobwebs and decaying rats.

I felt that you described what the characters were experiencing while hearing footsteps upstairs. 'My heart is thumping around in my chest." I wondered what would happen next and wanted to read on. Nice work in this page turner. I thought it ended nicely, with the characters feeling that they did a good job in solving the crime, and they could, if they can first get out of jail! Fun story! *Smile*

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Game of Thrones  [13+]
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by Gaby ~ Keeper Of The Realm




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Review of Predictable News  
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Rated: E | (5.0)
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*Exclaim* Hi Christine! You should write for Hollywood because while I was reading this awesome poem, I kept thinking that I wished this was a movie!! What a great idea for a movie it would be. I would certainly watch it and I think it would be a blockbuster hit. Did you ever consider writing a short story about this idea? You already have a very successful poem. I think it could easily be turned into a successful story as well.

By the way, a big congratulations for winning at the Writer's Cramp with this entry. It is truly well deserved.

Thank you, also, for adding all of those links about Lisbon and Portugal.
Next year, my husband and I will be visiting Spain. We were thinking about going to Lisbon while we were in that area. You might have just inspired me to do that for sure!

I thought you did a terrific job with the rhyme in this poem. I love poems that rhyme, and this one seemed to flow smoothly. It made a pleasant feel without interrupting the great sci-fi story that the poem told.

Most of us recently experienced the Solar Eclipse, so it is fresh in your reader's minds. We can know what it must have been like to be so entranced with watching the beautiful phenomenon, and not realizing that there was a terrible earthquake about to happen. I liked that you added a Martian spaceship that had been paying attention, and saved the day by beaming the spectators up to safety.

I plan to look up that earthquake of seventeen fifty-five so that I can find out all of the details. I think that might be one of the great links that you added at the bottom. I wonder if there might be ruins of it over in Portugal!

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Game of Thrones  [13+]
Returning in April - Prep starts March 1st
by Gaby ~ Keeper Of The Realm




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Rated: E | (5.0)
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*Exclaim* Wow JCosmos! I enjoyed the vast amount of information you provided at the bottom of your poem equally as much as the delightful poem itself. Some days I feel that I actually learned something new.
You can take the credit for me learning what a Coy Dog is. I truly never heard of it before. Maybe it's because, I don't think, we have those on the east coast where I live.

I was attracted to your item because I love dogs and I thought your poem story was about shy dogs. How funny is that! Anyway, now I know something new.

You did add the prompt words nicely. I thought they were well-placed, and they told a believable story. When I read those lines, I felt that you described a beautiful symphony gala. How fancy everyone must have looked, wearing tuxedos, top hats, and red cocktail dresses. These descriptions made it seem like a beautiful event.

You did a great job with showing concern that the guy felt about going to the event, while leaving his chickens unattended at the rural farmhouse. I would have been worried, too, if I knew there were out of control coy dogs running around. Oh gosh, and there were mountain lions, too! Your poem had a disturbingly realistic feel to it!

Mr. Chuckmiester added a bit of humor to your story poem.

I liked the fun fact that told of how the Sobrante area where your story took place, had been inhabited by the Huichin, an Oh lone tribe, between 5000 and 1000 BC., and that one of their villages stood where the El Sobrante Library now stands.

Important: Please change the rating of your item. You have it at E, but with the mention of drugs and weapons, of course, it should be a higher rating. Thanks!

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Game of Thrones  [13+]
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by Gaby ~ Keeper Of The Realm




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Review of Bobby-Q  
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Rated: E | (5.0)
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*Exclaim* Hello, IE! I was glad that I 'set a spell' to read your funny poem story about a tourist getting directions from a local. I loved it so much, that I went back to the contest to see if this one won.
It certainly must have been a close race because this is so much fun to read. You have a talent for writing comedy.

I read through the entire poem first before I started writing this review, so I did see the link that you mentioned about, 'Southernese'.
I took a glance at that, but I'll have to go back to it at a later time. It also looks like a fun piece to read.

There seemed to be a lot of requirements to the prompt, but I feel that you covered all of it. It can't be too easy to give directions without using the words, north, south, east, west, left, right, straight, but you did this flawlessly. *Well, maybe not according to the stumped tourist!* *Laugh*
You also made up a funny way to show why Bubba's Corner BBQ isn't on a corner. That is knee-slapping comedy for sure!

I felt that you did a great job of capturing the mannerisms, personality, and, especially, the speech of the local guy. Your readers don't get a glimpse of the tourist until the end when he runs off. It makes us ponder the idea that he either didn't understand anything of what the guy was saying, thought there was something wrong with him, or both!

My favorite stanza was your third. I chuckled when I read the part: "Yer nose’ll lead t’way
Bubba’s Bobby-Q ribs smell just like heav’n" LOL
I almost want to tell someone that the next time I have to give directions. "Your nose will lead the way at that point..." How much fun would that be! Anyway, I'm sure I'll be thinking about your poem if I ever do have to give directions. Thanks for creating this item.

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Game of Thrones  [13+]
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by Gaby ~ Keeper Of The Realm




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Review of The Shoe Emporium  
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Rated: E | (5.0)
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*Exclaim* Hi Detective! Oh, I loved your poem about Shoes! I was attracted to it because...Well, SHOES!! As a person who could spend hours 'playing' in a shoe store, I knew I would enjoy yours, and I did!

What a fun poem! I think if you want to get someone's attention, you talk about puppies or shoes! I felt that your title of, The Shoe Emporium, was very clever. Whenever I hear of a store called a boutique or emporium, it always makes me think it's a very special type of store, selling exquisite merchandise. That right there already set the stage for what's to come in your poem.

Did you ever consider adding a stock image to the brief introduction? I just took a quick little look, and I see lots of selections that would work nicely here. This one, for example: C102336, was listed under the 'shoes' category. It shows someone resting with their feet up. The age is unknown and the shoe type could really be anything. There are also other places in the stock images you might look under for 'boots', 'shoes', and accessories.

I liked that you used creativity in making many stanzas of various types of shoes. In those stanzas, I felt gentle humor, and (since you meant this to be in the children's genre), I could imagine little ones running around in their fancy purple sequined cowgirl boots. My daughters certainly had cowgirl boots, though those were pink!

You covered everything, though I didn't see any rain boots there. The idea for an additional stanza? *Wink*

I liked that you added sports cleats, walking shoes, and business shoes as well. It's the type of words which make your readers envision your Shoe Emporium well. Speaking of which, it was nice that you returned to that wording at the end for good closure, too.

Oh, and I would also like to point out that your rhymes were clever as well. You chose unusual words to rhyme, in my opinion, which I felt added to the uniqueness of the, 'store'. Nice work!

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Game of Thrones  [13+]
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by Gaby ~ Keeper Of The Realm




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Rated: E | (4.5)
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*Exclaim* Hi Kristina. I was looking for a light, fun story to read. When I noticed yours, I knew I found what I was looking for.
The title, mentioning a Marshmallow Squad, sounded like it would be fun for sure.

I didn’t understand what the story would be about from the brief introduction, but it did sound intriguing to me. It wasn’t until I started reading it, that I realized it was about a boy and his dog. I love dogs, so it made me want to read even more.

You had a sad opening, where your readers learn that the boy’s parents died in a car accident, and now all Michael has is his dog, Jordan. I think you set to scene well, because your readers will understand why Jordan was too upset to go to school when he couldn’t find his dog.

Wow! Nice work in creatively turning what sounded like a strange dream into a sci-fi type reality. I liked the names that you gave to Marshmallow creatures. I also thought you chose a great name for the planet that they came from. I found myself glad that they were there to help Michael find the dog.

Your story ended with a scene where it is revealed that the dog was taken by a mean person who hoped to sell the dog. I take it this was a first chapter and that you might be planning to write more.

I found a few little things that, in my opinion, could be polished up so that your story could shine like the great story it is.

Your first opening paragraph seems to go on and on. I would break it up into at least two paragraphs. For example, the part, ” That day, Michael decided not to attend school because…”, could probably start a new paragraph.

Typo here, ” Jordan is you’re lost puppy who is very special ”. Of course, you’re should be your.


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Game of Thrones  [13+]
Returning in April - Prep starts March 1st
by Gaby ~ Keeper Of The Realm




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Rated: E | (5.0)
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*Exclaim* Hi Tracker! What a fun story! I'm so glad that happened upon this one and chose it to read! If I can make a suggestion, I would say to also add comedy genre, because I smiled the whole time I was reading it. What a great mood-lifter as I was enjoying my coffee! I would love to join the Hammock Haters Movement! LOL

With that said, I've never had the desire or the courage to attempt to try one out, and after reading your story about it, I probably never will. *Laugh*

I enjoyed reading all of the descriptions in your story. It made me recall strolling around in Playa Del Carmen, Mexico, and having several of the venders try to sell me hamacas. I was intrigued, but I wondered if it was a thing. Apparently from your story, it is. But who can actually use one of those correctly! *Crazy*

You gave good advice throughout, offering suggestions as to what people should choose to pass their time in the sunshine. I would also choose the lounge chair myself.

Your descriptions of the makings of a hammock were great. I could imagine, if I never saw one before, exactly what they look like. I also chuckled at how you mentioned greeting cards like to pose a retired person sitting in a hammock. By the way, the little image in the brief introduction is cute as well, and sets the scene for the story.

The unsuspecting user is really in for a shocking surprise when he tries to get out of one. Hey, according to your fun writing, he might not ever get into one to begin with! That would be me - no, I'd be in the comfortable chaise lounge!

I felt that it was nice of you to add a link to the activity at the bottom, but sadly, that item is no longer valid. The thought was there, but perhaps you should remove the link and have this cute story stand alone.

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Game of Thrones  [13+]
Returning in April - Prep starts March 1st
by Gaby ~ Keeper Of The Realm




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In affiliation with WdC SuperPower Reviewers Group  
Rated: E | (5.0)
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*Exclaim* Hi Sindbad! I found your story to be adorable! I couldn't expect what it would be from the title, but from the brief introduction, I had a feeling that it would be cute. It was, indeed!

I never thought about what twins would be thinking in the womb. I felt it was clever of your to write a story about them and what might be going through their minds.

As they kept saying, 'life after delivery', it made me think it was a play on, 'life after death', and that would add a philosophical or even biblical aspect to your story. In any event, I felt that you created a nice twist on that.

I thought you did a great job in showing that the twin's mother was resting, enjoying the breeze and beauty of a garden, unaware that her unborn babies were pondering thoughts about life after delivery. Bringing your readers back to her in the garden at the end was a great closure to your story.

You created the twin's personalities well. One twin thought with positivity, contemplating that there must be something else other than what they have been experiencing. ...A life after delivery. The other twin felt that such thoughts were unrealistic. I thought it showed your creativity in having that twin question suggestions about possibly being able to walk with their legs or eat with their mouths instead of having to depend on an umbilical cord. He questioned the idea of, 'Mother', in general.

You expressed the optimism of the first twin well. He didn't give up with his determination to convince the second twin. He told him to focus and listen for her loving voice. That was sweet. If only the mom resting in the garden knew and was able to reassure her babies!

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Game of Thrones  [13+]
Returning in April - Prep starts March 1st
by Gaby ~ Keeper Of The Realm




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25
In affiliation with WdC SuperPower Reviewers Group  
Rated: E | (5.0)
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*Exclaim* Hi GreenWillow! I'm coming across so many pretty items here on WDC this month so far, and yours is no exception! I love Acrostic poetry forms, so when I noticed yours as a tribute to St. Patrick's Day, I knew this is one that I'd love! I was right!

Let me first say that the colorful image in the brief introduction is eye catching. The title, Ode to the Emerald Isle, adds to the poetic beauty.

I thought it was a perfect choice to present your poem in a large, green font. What better way to show off a St. Patrick's Day poem!

I also thought it was a nice touch to not only capitalize the first letter of each line, but to underline those letters as well. It really made the, 'St. Patrick's Day' show out, in my opinion.

Your lines told a story of Ireland well. Your opening, made me feel the warmth of spring. I liked that you said, 'clover', and I immediately thought of shamrocks! I was also able to imagine a pink hue of sunrise, so I could picture the narrator waking and seeing that sky.

The mention of castles and the stone they are made of, added a piece to your poem that makes Ireland seem like a, 'wondrous land', indeed. You also cleverly provoked thoughts in your readers, by hinting for them to ponder what stories those ancient castles hold. Maybe there were saints that lived nearby. In any event, there is certainly a lot of history.

I've visited Ireland a few times, and I've seen castles. I agree that it has a beauty all of it's own. You captured that beauty in your lovely poem.

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Game of Thrones  [13+]
Returning in April - Prep starts March 1st
by Gaby ~ Keeper Of The Realm




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