Overview: A breathless tale of fear, abuse, and determination.
Characters: The naked runner was the only major character. Even the villain was a smell, a grab, a hit. This was pure adrenaline. The naked runner was fueled by fear and determination.
Descriptions: Your descriptions were well done. The feel of the storm, the anxiety of the chase, the cold, the wet, all the environmental descriptions, you nailed.
Emotions: You drew me in and made me feel sorry for her, which in turn made me root for her and hope for her eventual escape.
Likes: I liked the use of the senses. Having a smell and taste signify the villain was brilliant and well executed. Her being cold and wet intensified the tension.
The pacing was spot on through most of the story, and really added to the feeling of being pursued.
Dislikes: There was barely a paragraph go by where you didn't mention the fact that she was naked. I understand this added to the tension, but only if you spread it out. By mentioning it over and over, it actually became tiresome.
Problems/Fixes: When she got away from him in the second paragraph, she said she walked briskly away. I find it hard to believe that she wouldn't be running full speed if she was in such a desperate state.
There were a few mispellings that you should catch on a read through.
Overall: A good, adrenaline fueled, YA, story with a decent moral.
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