'The lady of the night.' A fascinating enigma. Your wording here brings your thoughts to life. 'Her embrace covers me like second skin' and 'the bosom of the night is a world uncharted' are without parallel. From beginning to end a very 'tight' piece with 'the story in your eyes' (Moody Blues). Enjoyable and well written.
Well written with a lot of heart. Pure innocent flailing in emptiness from wronging. We all hurt and hurt. Very often without knowing what we do. A change in character and/or life character is what is needed more than sorry. Also being able to respond to, and 'baby' that other soul. helps a great deal.
Heart-swollen with feeling. At points, the lineage seems slightly uneven, along with the rhyme scheme. Put to music I am sure this would 'sound' differently. Do you plan to put this to music? Do you write music? I am soulfully unable to create that music which I wish I could.
An excellent life cycle of this butterfly's realizations. Your rhyme scheme stays with the story, being a wonderful addition. Your words bring this butterfly to life for the reader. In particular ":metamorphosis of wing" and "flash of color in the sky" bring a reality to the birth and short-lived experience of the butterfly. Very well written, with a distinct look into the butterfly.
Soo positive as to spread to all who read through your words. Wha happen? Would like to know. Beautifully written with so much goodness in it, flowing through you to all the phrases you employ. Beautiful!
Well written with a flow which allows the story to develop. As the characters are introduced, there is just enough of a hint to know them, while eluding the true reasons for their being. Powerful in one sense, while emotionally kind in another. Enjoyable from beginning to end.
A nicely written love sonnet. Your form and phrasing are commendable. The rhyme scheme you selected fits well and continues throughout the poem. Your thoughts are clear and represent your basic meaning very well. Enjoyable, with only one or two hiccups.
A fascinating piece for someone to clean up. Great usage of your rhyming scheme. You need to regain that feel for life which brings joy regardless of torment. As John Lennon said rivers of pain, waves of joy flowing through my mind (or something like that).
If this is really you, you need to forgive and love yourself. If not, extremely well written in the third person. Very much like a poem I wrote about a hundred years ago.
Time flies, yet it can sure be fun. As a soothsayer I used to know once said "There is only one person responsible for how their day goes."
So sad. My life for one whole year, until I decided "I was sick and tired of being sick and tired." Everyone has down days, but try not to let them get you down. Depression loves company and depresses everything it can get its hands on. Be of good cheer and try to love #1...YOU!
A beautifully written fairytale. Your words bring very apt attention to your thoughts, combining both poetry and beauty in descriptive nuance. From beginning to end, I was rapt with attention on each descriptive phrase, as it continued into the next, all adding to the total concept and picture. Very enjoyable.
A beautifully written piece...from beginning to end. A shattered life brought about through time's wringing hands. A remembrance of a love which once existed to the nth degree. Enjoyable, though heart-wrenching throughout. Excellent use of the beginning line over and over and...
Very well done. My dream, and reality, reflect the emotional, and none, presented here in such realistic candor. A dream? Reality? Who really knows for sure which is which. In my mind, both are so irretrievably seared together, as to never know really for sure. Enjoyable and a mimic of mine.
Absolutely. Songs are notes to words which to me involve so much more than the original meaning. The words carry the tune into a different place, while the music carries the words along with it. If only I could write that music which creates melody for the words to be so involved.
I do not know either. Perhaps being eaten would demolish your dismay, perhaps going back to work would take it away. I do not know (Je Ne Sais Pas). Interesting thought.
Beautifully, and skillfully written. Love is the beginning and end-all of everything. A poetic remembrance and reminder of what a true Thanksgiving should be. Enjoyable from the beginning to the end, in thought and form. Just one question: who is he? But I think I know.
A fascinating and educational piece of literature. Something that often literature is not, fascinating and educational...add funny, you have outdone yourself. I, myself, am known for the dangling participle, which I hated to diagram in grade school since I had not a clue what a diagram was!
"Offer empathy to both sides of this speculative matter." Indeed, we must wonder about other planets and their inhabitants, as they wonder about us. However, I do not believe that either they or we will be able to solidify the random search for other beings. Interesting.
A wonderful piece, including very well done Haiku. Each season is well described while maintaining the form you chose. One point to ponder, in that two lines are missing one syllable each. Enjoyable, with great pictures for the mind. Enjoy and share are a great way to end.
Love the picture of ABBA. Soldiers is one of my very favorite songs by them. My father was a soldier, as was my brother. I did not make it, as I was 4F and a student at the time. If I had gone, I would not be here today...I could not shoot anyone if I had to.
I love reading words "out of context." Like A Rolling Stone by Bob Dylan. Fabulous.
A very well written pictograph, bringing all that creates the 4th to life. I can see and hear the sights and sounds which I shall always remember and ever miss. Those awesome spectacles that created and maintained my memories, as well as leading my life to where it now dwells. Thank you for the 4th.
Great idea! Superb adjectival words, bringing pictures close to mind. I have had such thoughts in the past, caressing all of the universe in one universal sweep. A fascinating journey when one is inclined to go on the ultimate passage. Thank you!
A very heartfelt realistic picture of the drama which is a tornado. Horrific by nature and design, so much devastation can occur in such a short time period. They were still alive which is the major accomplishment, in the leavings which signal and determine this fantasmic occurrence.
So reminiscent of the feeling of apple pies so delicious and so warming to the days. Very well thought out from beginning to end, while the reader ingests the words which bring the pies to the forefront in thought and taste. Very well written for the child in all of us.
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