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Review of Christmas Trivia  
Review by Dominique
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Rated: E | (5.0)
Hello. You did a really great job in creating the Christmas Trivia quiz. I can clearly see that you spend a lot of time and efforts to put it all together. It was fun and entertaining to do as well!! I didn't see a few of the movies so it was difficult to answer some... instead of cheating, [I considered briefly hehe] I guessed. Even though I only got a 58%, I enjoyed myself! Also, it brought back wonderful memories of my all time favoriteeee Christmas movies, Home Alone. You've inspired me to go searching for them around the house. They're laying around somewhere in VHS embarrassingly enough... I don't even know if I have a VCR anymore... hmm I may have to look online but ANYWHO..... Thank you for putting your creative talents to work for the website, people such as yourself are what makes WDC what it is!

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Review by Dominique
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Rated: 13+ | (5.0)

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Hello Jack G. !!
Thank you for sharing your story with me, I thoroughly enjoyed reading your words!
Keep in mind, I am not a professional, my suggestions are just that, suggestions. At the end of the day, do what you feel is right for your writing! Any suggestion I make is done with love and a desire to simply help you become the best writer you can be.

GRAMMAR:
I didn't notice too many glaring grammatical errors, which is awesome. Something I did see was missing or even misplaced comma's so I suggest just checking that out. The dreaded comma... I swear they're the worst. So desparetly needed in writing but annoying as all hell.

SPELLING:
I didn't notice any spelling mistakes, you were on point with that. Great job.
EXCEPTTTTT ---> you did write 'estern' instead of 'eastern'

WORD CHOICE:
You had an excellent word choice, avoiding boring, dull language. Very descriptive as well.

CHARACTERS:
The characters were believable.

APPEARANCE:
The spacing within your story added power to it. If you would have done without it, it would have ruined it, taking away a lot of the impact. Of course, it would have been the same story but the spacing truly helps it.

POSITIVES:
What I liked most: the raw emotion displayed and the well portrayed story of grief
My Favorite Part: The ending sentence is truly powerful. He will, indeed, be okay even if it doesn't feel like it while grieving a loved one.

CONSTRUCTIVE CRITICISM:
What I liked least: I cannot find a single thing my love.
My Suggestions: It's your writing, do as you wish but I wonder if you would agree... possibly switching this sentence around from 'Then there were the answers No...' to -- 'Then came the dreaded answers. No, no, no.'
I don't know why I like it better that way but I do.

EMOTIONS:
It made me feel: sad and emotional but hopeful for him at the very end
It reminded me of: my mother who died from Ovarian Cancer. It's the hardest thing in the world to have to watch a loved one die so terribly. My mother truly suffered. and the chemotherapy only made it worse.. the radiation destroyed her. It's such a despressing topic but you really wrote it beautifully touching on the emotions perfectly.

CREATIVITY:
It was extremely creative.

HELD MY ATTENTION?:
You held my attention from the first sentence until the very end. It truly grabbed me, sucked me in and made me think of my mother. I was genuinely intrerested in it throughout the whole story. I'd love to read more of your work in the future. You're a great writer. Keep up the amazing work.

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Review by Dominique
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Rated: 13+ | (5.0)

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Hello iguanamountain !!
Thank you for sharing your story with me, I thoroughly enjoyed reading your words!
Keep in mind, I am not a professional, my suggestions are just that, suggestions. At the end of the day, do what you feel is right for your writing! Any suggestion I make is done with love and a desire to simply help you become the best writer you can be.

GRAMMAR:
I didn't notice any glaring grammatical errors, which is awesome. There were a few places I believe that needed comma's but other than that, everything seemed grammatically correct.

SPELLING:
I didn't notice any spelling mistakes, you were on point with that. Great job.

WORD CHOICE:
You had an excellent word choice, avoiding boring, dull language.

CHARACTERS:
The characters were believable. Dogs are each unique, wonderful creatures. I grew up with three, with my grandmothers as a fourth visiting quite frequently. There were times when my one dog would literally jump up to bark at a deer. Yes, a deer... from inside.... she would somehow know there was a deer outside and she'd be all over the window for the next half hour, barking away!!! They really do have personalities, it's incredible.

APPEARANCE:
The spacing helped the story. It didn't appear bunched up.

POSITIVES:
What I liked most: You kept me interested, got me smiling, even had me laughing and gave me wonderful memories of my past animals who are are not with me anymore.
My Favorite Part: When he happily devours the porridge.

CONSTRUCTIVE CRITICISM:
What I liked least: "Tinted glass window slides easily with one hand." That sentence tripped me up. Did the intend to have the word the tinted glass window? It just seems odd without saying "the". Personal opinion.

EMOTIONS:
It made me feel: sentimental, nostalgic, love for animals as well. I am a true animal lover, they're the most loving, innocent creatures on this Earth and deserve all the love possible.
It reminded me of: as earlier mentioned, my past pets. They turned to ages 14 - 16 - 17 and 17 before passing away. I had them their entire lives besides my grandmother's which came and went because he wasn't fully mine hehe.

CREATIVITY:
It was extremely creative.

HELD MY ATTENTION?:
You held my attention from the first sentence until the very end. You're a very interesting writer, keep up the awesome work!!! The world needs great writers.


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Review of My Son  
Review by Dominique
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Rated: E | (5.0)

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Hello J.L. O'Dell !!
Thank you for sharing your poetry with me, I thoroughly enjoyed reading your words!
Keep in mind, I am not a professional, my suggestions are just that, suggestions. At the end of the day, do what you feel is right for your writing! Any suggestion I make is done with love and a desire to simply help you become the best writer you can be.

GRAMMAR:
I didn't notice any glaring grammatical errors, which is awesome.

SPELLING:
I didn't notice any spelling mistakes, you were on point with that. Great job.

WORD CHOICE:
You had an excellent word choice, avoiding boring, dull language.

RHYME:
Your poem rhymed well.. except for one stanza I'm just not seeing the rhyme. Each stanza seems to rhyme the ending word on the 2nd and 4th lines. With the third stanza, I'm not seeing the rhyme with brave and sleigh. Even without rhyming, it flows well and is a beautiful poem! I just thought I'd point that out.

FLOW:
Your poem flowed naturally and freely.

APPEARANCE:
Clear, well spaced. Center alignment may make it look nicer but it certainly doesn't need it if it's not your preference. Centering shorter poems is a personal preference of mine.

POSITIVES:
What I liked most: the clear, evident love for your son. As a mother of a 13 month old boy, I personally know that there's no love stronger in the universe than that of a parent's love for their child. Maternal/Paternal love is flawless and unconditional. Seeing your sons smile is amazing. I can't imagine how it'll be.. years from now when he's old enough to run around and sleigh ride in the snow, not needing my lap anymore... or god forbid, the teenage years when they don't need a mothers love anymore! ah! I shall enjoy the time now with my little munchkin. :)

My Favorite Part: The last stanza is powerful and raw emotion. I would definitely say that's my favorite stanza.

CONSTRUCTIVE CRITICISM:
What I liked least: Nothing crazy in terms of suggestions because I liked the entire poem. I already pointed out the one and only piece that stumbled me [the non-rhyme] so, I think that pretty much covers it. :)

EMOTIONS:
It made me feel: proud to be a mother, warm hearted and love towards my own son
It reminded me of: obviouslyyyyy... my beautiful son named Armani
It touched me by... seeing a father share their emotions about their child. It's not as often that I see that. I do see it but just not as frequently which makes me sad.

CREATIVITY:
It was extremely creative.

HELD MY ATTENTION?:
You held my attention from the first sentence until the very end.

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Review of King  
Review by Dominique
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Rated: E | (4.5)

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Hello Angel J. Stanton !!
Thank you for sharing your poetry with me, I thoroughly enjoyed reading your words!
Keep in mind, I am not a professional, my suggestions are just that, suggestions. At the end of the day, do what you feel is right for your writing! Any suggestion I make is done with love and a desire to simply help you become the best writer you can be.

GRAMMAR:
I didn't notice any glaring grammatical errors, which is awesome.
Although, there wasn't too much official "grammar" being used either.

SPELLING:
I didn't notice any spelling mistakes, you were on point with that. Great job.

WORD CHOICE:
You had an excellent word choice, avoiding boring, dull language. I actually had to look up what filigree meant.

RHYME:
Your poem rhymed well.

FLOW:
Your poem flowed naturally and freely.

APPEARANCE:
Only a suggestion, maybe consider centering the poem? Or aligning it differently somehow. I think it would add to the appearence, drawing the reader in, considering each line is so short.

POSITIVES:
What I liked most: I like how it told a story and I definitely like learning new words. I wrote it down so I hope to remember it and possibly even use it in the future. I bought a daily calendar for 2019 that I cannot wait to use.. each day has a new vocabulary word and after the day is over, you tear off the page. So, I hope that by the end of 2019, I will know 365 brand new words and use them in everyday speaking and writing!!!

CONSTRUCTIVE CRITICISM:
What I liked least: there was nothing I really disliked. One thing that caused me to have to reread the poem several times was lack of punctuation. Once I was able to mentally add periods at the ends of sentences, it flowed more naturally for me anyway, as the reader. But the first time I read it, some sentences flowed into the next rather awkwardly, leaving me confused. But, I did say earlier it flowed naturally and freely and that's because it does!!! but only once fully aware of what exactly I'm reading and where punctuation falls... if that makes sense to you...

EMOTIONS:
It reminded me of: how much greed is in the world. There's men out there, richer than entire cities combined who will never be happy without more. Some men cannot be happy with all the money in the world, they need everybody elses money too. It's just simply what it reminded me of.

CREATIVITY:
It was extremely creative.

HELD MY ATTENTION?:
You held my attention from the first sentence until the very end.. not that it was extremely long or anything but sometimes it doesn't matter... there's times when a poem is only 100 words but the writer loses me in the first stanza. Length doesn't matter in terms of attention span with me, depth does and interest. So, yes, you've interested me.

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Review by Dominique
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Rated: 13+ | (5.0)

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Hello Redtowrite !!
Thank you for sharing your poetry with me, I thoroughly enjoyed reading your words!
Keep in mind, I am not a professional, my suggestions are just that, suggestions. At the end of the day, do what you feel is right for your writing! Any suggestion I make is done with love and a desire to simply help you become the best writer you can be.

GRAMMAR:
I didn't notice any glaring grammatical errors, which is awesome.

SPELLING:
I didn't notice any spelling mistakes, you were on point with that. Great job.

WORD CHOICE:
You had an excellent word choice, avoiding boring, dull language. Beautiful metaphors.

RHYME:
Your poem was not a rhyming poem, which is fine. *Smile*

FLOW:
Your poem flowed naturally and freely.

APPEARANCE:
Everything was clear and typed well. Maybe consider adding the title in the body as well, although it's absolutely not necessary.

POSITIVES:
What I liked most: the poem was beautiful and filled with metaphors and deep meaning. I loved it.
My Favorite Part: The last stanza was my favorite.

CONSTRUCTIVE CRITICISM:
What I liked least: There was nothing I could possibly say negatively about it, honestly. You did really well with it, keep up the great work!

EMOTIONS:
It made me feel: questioning of my own life's answers
It reminded me of: life is short, it's never too late to find yourself.

CREATIVITY:
It was extremely creative.

HELD MY ATTENTION?:
You held my attention from the first sentence until the very end.

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Review of "Time"  
Review by Dominique
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Rated: 13+ | (5.0)

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Hello writerchuck !!
Thank you for sharing your poetry with me, I thoroughly enjoyed reading your words!
Keep in mind, I am not a professional, my suggestions are just that, suggestions. At the end of the day, do what you feel is right for your writing! Any suggestion I make is done with love and a desire to simply help you become the best writer you can be.

GRAMMAR:
I didn't notice any glaring grammatical errors, which is awesome.

SPELLING:
I didn't notice any spelling mistakes, you were on point with that. Great job.

WORD CHOICE:
You had an excellent word choice, avoiding boring, dull language.

RHYME:
Your poem was not a rhyming poem, which is fine. *Smile*

FLOW:
Your poem flowed naturally and freely.

APPEARANCE:
I really like the alignment of the words and how it looks. The alignment was a great choice for this poem

POSITIVES:
What I liked most: the progression of the poem
My Favorite Part: probably the last 2 lines although honestly, I loved the whole poem

CONSTRUCTIVE CRITICISM:
I have nothing, you did really great. Keep writing and doing you.

EMOTIONS:
It made me feel: happy about all the things I have done with my life
It reminded me of: life is short, embrace is before it passes you by

CREATIVITY:
It was extremely creative.

HELD MY ATTENTION?:
You held my attention from the first sentence until the very end.

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Review by Dominique
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Rated: 18+ | (5.0)

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Hello Keaton Foster: Know My Hell! !!
Thank you for sharing your poetry with me, I thoroughly enjoyed reading your words!
Keep in mind, I am not a professional, my suggestions are just that, suggestions. At the end of the day, do what you feel is right for your writing! Any suggestion I make is done with love and a desire to simply help you become the best writer you can be.

GRAMMAR:
I didn't notice any glaring grammatical errors, which is awesome.
Except ---> to instead of too in the line too damn busy

SPELLING:
I didn't notice any spelling mistakes, you were on point with that. Great job.

WORD CHOICE:
You had an excellent word choice, avoiding boring, dull language.

RHYME:
Your poem was not a rhyming poem, which is fine. *Smile*

FLOW:
Your poem flowed naturally and freely.

APPEARANCE:
I like that it was centered, it helped the poem since it is only a few words per line

POSITIVES:
What I liked most: that it was intelligent and very well written
My Favorite Part: Turn off those programmed responses

CONSTRUCTIVE CRITICISM:
My Suggestions: Edit to --> too

EMOTIONS:
It made me feel: like everyone should read this :)
It reminded me of: how programmed the world is now with technology

CREATIVITY:
It was extremely creative.

HELD MY ATTENTION?:
You held my attention from the first sentence until the very end.

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Review by Dominique
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Rated: E | (5.0)

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Hello Gestalt1 !!
Thank you for sharing your poetry with me, I thoroughly enjoyed reading your words!
Keep in mind, I am not a professional, my suggestions are just that, suggestions. At the end of the day, do what you feel is right for your writing! Any suggestion I make is done with love and a desire to simply help you become the best writer you can be.

GRAMMAR:
I didn't notice any glaring grammatical errors, which is awesome.

SPELLING:
I didn't notice any spelling mistakes, you were on point with that. Great job.

WORD CHOICE:
You had an excellent word choice, avoiding boring, dull language.

RHYME:
Your poem was not a rhyming poem, which is fine. *Smile*
I noticed some lines did rhyme and they rhymed well. The ones that didn't rhyme still flowed beautifully.

FLOW:
Your poem flowed naturally and freely.

APPEARANCE:
easy to read, clear spacing and alignment

POSITIVES:
What I liked most: your metaphors and how much depth it had. It is a beautiful poem.

EMOTIONS:
It made me feel like i was in nature myself.
It reminded me of times I wandered off into a field or hidden pathway to be alone in nature finding my own peace and serenity

CREATIVITY:
It was extremely creative.

HELD MY ATTENTION?:
You held my attention from the first sentence until the very end.

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Review of The Angel Army  
Review by Dominique
Rated: ASR | (5.0)
I don't know how to comment on here other than this way...I am trying to reach out and request a Christmas miracle...help with an upgrade. My paid membership ran out and they locked most of my portfolio and I lost all my work. I was in the middle of working on something very special to me. Please, is there any way someone could help me? I would forever appreciate it!!
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Review of Behind Bars Again  
Review by Dominique
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Rated: 13+ | (5.0)

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Hello A.J. Dru !!
Thank you for sharing your poetry with me, I thoroughly enjoyed reading your words!
Keep in mind, I am not a professional, my suggestions are just that, suggestions. At the end of the day, do what you feel is right for your writing! Any suggestion I make is done with love and a desire to simply help you become the best writer you can be.

GRAMMAR:
I didn't notice any glaring grammatical errors, which is awesome.

SPELLING:
I didn't notice any spelling mistakes, you were on point with that. Great job.

WORD CHOICE:
You had an excellent word choice, avoiding boring, dull language.

RHYME:
Your poem was not a rhyming poem, which is fine. *Smile*

FLOW:
Your poem flowed naturally and freely.

APPEARANCE:
font: traditional
colors: traditional
alignment: traditional
size: traditional

POSITIVES:
What I liked most: was the message.
My Favorite Part: every word.

CONSTRUCTIVE CRITICISM:
What I liked least: nothing
My Suggestions: write on
SOME OF THE MISTAKES I SAW WERE:
- nada

EMOTIONS:
It made me feel: sad, not for you really but for f***ing inmates and the bulls***. Most people get so sucked into the lifestyle it becomes... home and it's sad. You're there so damn often..
It reminded me of: The many years I spent more time in jail than at home, myself.
It touched me by... seeing some of my own thoughts and feelings in someone else's poetry. Don't see it often and when I do it's helpful.

CREATIVITY:
It was extremely creative.

HELD MY ATTENTION?:
You held my attention from the first sentence until the very end.

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Review of One by One  
Review by Dominique
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Rated: E | (5.0)

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Hello gummyhearts !!
Thank you for sharing your poetry with me, I thoroughly enjoyed reading your words!
Keep in mind, I am not a professional, my suggestions are just that, suggestions. At the end of the day, do what you feel is right for your writing! Any suggestion I make is done with love and a desire to simply help you become the best writer you can be.

GRAMMAR:
I didn't notice any glaring grammatical errors, which is awesome.

SPELLING:
I didn't notice any spelling mistakes, you were on point with that. Great job.

WORD CHOICE:
You had an excellent word choice, avoiding boring, dull language.

RHYME:
Your poem rhymed well.

FLOW:
Your poem flowed naturally and freely.

APPEARANCE:
font: traditional
colors: traditional
alignment: traditional
size: traditional

POSITIVES:
What I liked most: was the meaning and emotion that is in your writing.
My Favorite Part: The first line is powerful.

CONSTRUCTIVE CRITICISM:
What I liked least: nothing
My Suggestions: write on, girl.
SOME OF THE MISTAKES I SAW WERE:
- none

EMOTIONS:
It made me feel: sad honestly
It reminded me of: losing my mother when I was 17 and then all my grandparents one by one.
It touched me by... making me think about how precious life is

CREATIVITY:
It was extremely creative.

HELD MY ATTENTION?:
You held my attention from the first sentence until the very end.

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Review of Listen, Listen  
Review by Dominique
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Rated: E | (5.0)

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Hello Andie !!
Thank you for sharing your poetry with me, I thoroughly enjoyed reading your words!
Keep in mind, I am not a professional, my suggestions are just that, suggestions. At the end of the day, do what you feel is right for your writing! Any suggestion I make is done with love and a desire to simply help you become the best writer you can be.

GRAMMAR:
I didn't notice any glaring grammatical errors, which is awesome.

SPELLING:
I didn't notice any spelling mistakes, you were on point with that. Great job.

WORD CHOICE:
You had an excellent word choice, avoiding boring, dull language.

RHYME:
Your poem was not a rhyming poem, which is fine. *Smile*

FLOW:
Your poem flowed naturally and freely.

APPEARANCE:
font: traditional
colors: traditional
alignment: traditional
size: traditional

POSITIVES:
What I liked most: that it went through all the senses and really made you see nature in your mind
My Favorite Part: was how you ended the first line of each stanza saying HEARING, SEEING, et cetera then followed with HOW

CONSTRUCTIVE CRITICISM:
What I liked least: nothing
My Suggestions: write on!!
SOME OF THE MISTAKES I SAW WERE:
- nothing

EMOTIONS:
It made me feel: at peace with nature and the world
It reminded me of: sitting somewhere in the middle of the woods one day, years ago. I found the most gorgeous spot in the woods.. I was on lsd but that's besides the point, other than the fact that it enhances all your senses by millions.... everything looks sharper, more colorful, sounds clearer, smells stronger, et cetera. anyway, it was beautiful
It touched me by... making me want to stop sitting inside all day being a hermit at a computer trying to write. I need to get outside and get inspired.....

CREATIVITY:
It was extremely creative.

HELD MY ATTENTION?:
You held my attention from the first sentence until the very end.

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Review by Dominique
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Rated: 13+ | (5.0)

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Hello Noel Billiter !!
Thank you for sharing your poetry with me, I thoroughly enjoyed reading your words!
Keep in mind, I am not a professional, my suggestions are just that, suggestions. At the end of the day, do what you feel is right for your writing! Any suggestion I make is done with love and a desire to simply help you become the best writer you can be.

GRAMMAR:
I didn't notice any glaring grammatical errors, which is awesome.

SPELLING:
I didn't notice any spelling mistakes, you were on point with that. Great job.

WORD CHOICE:
You had an excellent word choice, avoiding boring, dull language.

RHYME:
I suggest using a rhyming dictionary to improve your rhymes. It will help you rhyme longer, more complex words. You can find one online, or even try rhymezone.com It has helped me tremendously. I don't know how I'd write poetry without it.

Stanza's 1,2 and 5, the first two lines ended in rhyme. Stanza's 3 and 4 did not. I'm not sure if they were all meant to rhyme or not.

FLOW:
Your poem flowed naturally and freely.

APPEARANCE:
font: traditional
colors: traditional
alignment: traditional
size: traditional

POSITIVES:
What I liked most: the emotion felt in it about the boyfriend holding feelings for the ex. I've been there and it sucks especially when they deny it but it's obvious.
My Favorite Part: The last two lines. Good for f***ing you. Good riddance to him. haha

CONSTRUCTIVE CRITICISM:
What I liked least: the 2 stanzas that didn't rhyme
My Suggestions: either stick to non rhymes or rhyme the whole time? idk honestly I really liked the entire poem so I really am just saying this but I like it
SOME OF THE MISTAKES I SAW WERE:
-none

EMOTIONS:
It made me feel: annoyed at asshole men
It reminded me of: my ex and some rough times
It touched me by... the fact that you walked away. it made me proud

CREATIVITY:
It was extremely creative.

HELD MY ATTENTION?:
You held my attention from the first sentence until the very end.

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Review of The bagel store  
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Rated: E | (5.0)
Every Friday morning before work you treat yourself to a fresh bagel from the local bagel store. Working as a Stripper is hard work, so getting a bagel on fridays makes your day better. On your way to the bagel shop, you get a call from Armani, your co-worker.
“f*** outta here!” Armani screams.
You couldn’t believe what you just heard. You had to get to work right away. But You still needed your bagel.
Once arriving to the shop, it took 7 minutes to find a parking spot. You were annoyed.
Once inside, you notice something strange going on. There is a person in the corner of the room stripping. There is no one in line so you run up to the register.
“Hello, can I please have a bagel” you say to the woman.
“Sorry, I can’t help you right now, I am watching that person over there. I think it’s sexy.”
You were skipped. You had to be at work soon.
“f***ing-a!” You scream at the woman behind the register.
You were not in a good mood. The person in the corner of the room who was stripping walked over to you and told you your ass was dirty.
That was the final straw.
You dusted the person in the boobs and scream at the woman behind the register to get your bagel.
The woman runs back and starts making your bagel. All of a sudden you see her reading on your bagel. You started to write.
The woman came back with your bagel. “Here you go” she said “enjoy.”
You took the bagel and left the shop. You were so hungry you decided to eat your bagel in the car.
You took a big bite out of the dumb bagel and found a baby in the cream cheese. You were horny




haahaha that was my answer which was perfect. awesome mad libs. It was funny. It made me smile and laugh. I enjoyed it. Great job. It was extremely creative.

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Review of When in the Woods  
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Rated: E | (4.5)

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Hello Tinker !!
Thank you for sharing your poetry with me, I thoroughly enjoyed reading your words!
Keep in mind, I am not a professional, my suggestions are just that, suggestions. At the end of the day, do what you feel is right for your writing! Any suggestion I make is done with love and a desire to simply help you become the best writer you can be.

GRAMMAR:
I didn't notice any glaring grammatical errors, which is awesome.

SPELLING:
I didn't notice any spelling mistakes, you were on point with that. Great job.

WORD CHOICE:
You had an excellent word choice, avoiding boring, dull language.

RHYME:
Your poem rhymed well.

FLOW:
Your poem flowed naturally and freely.

APPEARANCE:
font: traditional
size: traditional
color: traditional
alignment: traditional

POSITIVES:
What I liked most: the drop down bar is pretty damn awesome
My Favorite Part: one with the setting sun

CONSTRUCTIVE CRITICISM:
What I liked least: nothing
My Suggestions: keep doing you
SOME OF THE MISTAKES I SAW WERE:
- none

EMOTIONS:
It made me feel: calm
It reminded me of: nature
It touched me by... wanting to go enjoy the weather and beautiful outdoors

CREATIVITY:
It was extremely creative.

HELD MY ATTENTION?:
You held my attention from the first sentence until the very end.

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Review of Toressa  
Review by Dominique
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Rated: E | (4.5)

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Hello rl !!
Thank you for sharing your lyrics with me, I thoroughly enjoyed reading your words!
Keep in mind, I am not a professional, my suggestions are just that, suggestions. At the end of the day, do what you feel is right for your writing! Any suggestion I make is done with love and a desire to simply help you become the best writer you can be.

GRAMMAR:
I didn't notice any glaring grammatical errors, which is awesome.

SPELLING:
I didn't notice any spelling mistakes, you were on point with that. Great job.

WORD CHOICE:
You had an excellent word choice, avoiding boring, dull language.

RHYME:
Your lyrics rhymed well in the places they meant to.

FLOW:
Your song flowed naturally and freely.

APPEARANCE:
font: traditional
colors: traditional
alignment: traditional -- maybe center it? just a thought
size: traditional

POSITIVES:
What I liked most: I liked the sweetness of it
My Favorite Part: The gentle rain plays out your name a sweet song lullaby

CONSTRUCTIVE CRITICISM:
What I liked least: ---
My Suggestions: keep doing you
SOME OF THE MISTAKES I SAW WERE:
- none

EMOTIONS:
It made me feel: it made me smile
It reminded me of: love and the love I have for my son
It touched me by... how sweet it is

CREATIVITY:
It was extremely creative.

HELD MY ATTENTION?:
You held my attention from the first sentence until the very end.

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Review of Downhill  
Review by Dominique
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Rated: E | (5.0)

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Hello Soldier_Mike !!
Thank you for sharing your poetry with me, I thoroughly enjoyed reading your words!
Keep in mind, I am not a professional, my suggestions are just that, suggestions. At the end of the day, do what you feel is right for your writing! Any suggestion I make is done with love and a desire to simply help you become the best writer you can be.

GRAMMAR:
I didn't notice any glaring grammatical errors, which is awesome.

SPELLING:
I didn't notice any spelling mistakes, you were on point with that. Great job.

WORD CHOICE:
You had an excellent word choice, avoiding boring, dull language.

RHYME:
Your poem was not a rhyming poem, which is fine. *Smile*

FLOW:
Your poem flowed naturally and freely.

APPEARANCE:
font: traditional
colors: traditional
alignment: centered and in a triangle type shape which looks awesome and grabbed my attention immediately
size: traditional

POSITIVES:
What I liked most: I liked the message and also the format of the text
My Favorite Part: As children, all of eternity seemed forever before us.

CONSTRUCTIVE CRITICISM:
What I liked least: ---
My Suggestions: continue doing you
SOME OF THE MISTAKES I SAW WERE:
- n/a

EMOTIONS:
It made me feel: proud of being a mother
It reminded me of: being a child wanting to get older [I didn't sign up for this lmao]
It touched me by... realizing life is too short

CREATIVITY:
It was extremely creative.

HELD MY ATTENTION?:
You held my attention from the first sentence until the very end.

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Review by Dominique
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Rated: E | (5.0)

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Hello Lobelia is truly blessed !!
Thank you for sharing your poetry with me, I thoroughly enjoyed reading your words!
Keep in mind, I am not a professional, my suggestions are just that, suggestions. At the end of the day, do what you feel is right for your writing! Any suggestion I make is done with love and a desire to simply help you become the best writer you can be.

GRAMMAR:
I didn't notice any glaring grammatical errors, which is awesome.

SPELLING:
I didn't notice any spelling mistakes, you were on point with that. Great job.

WORD CHOICE:
You had an excellent word choice, avoiding boring, dull language.

RHYME:
Your poem rhymed well.

FLOW:
Your poem flowed naturally and freely.

APPEARANCE:
font: traditional
colors: traditional
alignment: traditional.. maybe center it and enlarge it since it's so tiny?
size: traditional

POSITIVES:
What I liked most: the meaning of the poem
My Favorite Part: it's so small to pick out one specific part.. I liked the whole poem

CONSTRUCTIVE CRITICISM:
What I liked least: nothing
My Suggestions: like I said, maybe center it and enlarge the font
SOME OF THE MISTAKES I SAW WERE:
- none

EMOTIONS:
It made me feel: sad. it absolutely pulled at my heart strings especially as a mother
It reminded me of: my own son and what I'd do if anything happened to him
It touched me by... anytime death of a child is mentioned.. I think the average person is affected at least to a point. It's human nature.

CREATIVITY:
It was extremely creative.

HELD MY ATTENTION?:
You held my attention from the first sentence until the very end.

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Review by Dominique
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Rated: E | (5.0)

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Hello Jay O'Toole !!
Thank you for sharing your poetry with me, I thoroughly enjoyed reading your words!
Keep in mind, I am not a professional, my suggestions are just that, suggestions. At the end of the day, do what you feel is right for your writing! Any suggestion I make is done with love and a desire to simply help you become the best writer you can be.

GRAMMAR:
I didn't notice any glaring grammatical errors, which is awesome.

SPELLING:
I didn't notice any spelling mistakes, you were on point with that. Great job.

WORD CHOICE:
You had an excellent word choice, avoiding boring, dull language.

RHYME:
Your poem rhymed well in the places it should.

FLOW:
Your poem flowed naturally and freely.

APPEARANCE:
font: clear
colors: bold and drew my attention in immediately
alignment: center which is perfect for poetry
size: perfect size for the size of the poem

POSITIVES:
What I liked most: the message
My Favorite Part: "Friendship felt, oft from you"

CONSTRUCTIVE CRITICISM:
What I liked least: nada
My Suggestions: keep doing
SOME OF THE MISTAKES I SAW WERE:
- nada

EMOTIONS:
It made me feel: smile
It reminded me of: not sure
It touched me by... Making me smile

CREATIVITY:
It was extremely creative.
or

HELD MY ATTENTION?:
You held my attention from the first sentence until the very end.


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Review by Dominique
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Rated: ASR | (5.0)

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Hello Harry !!
Thank you for sharing your poetry with me, I thoroughly enjoyed reading your words!
Keep in mind, I am not a professional, my suggestions are just that, suggestions. At the end of the day, do what you feel is right for your writing! Any suggestion I make is done with love and a desire to simply help you become the best writer you can be.

GRAMMAR:
I didn't notice any glaring grammatical errors, which is awesome.

SPELLING:
I didn't notice any spelling mistakes, you were on point with that. Great job.

WORD CHOICE:
You had an excellent word choice, avoiding boring, dull language.

RHYME:
Your poem rhymed well in the places it should.

FLOW:
Your poem flowed naturally and freely.

APPEARANCE:
font: traditional
colors: traditional
alignment: traditional
size: traditional

POSITIVES:
What I liked most: that he comes to see his wife, whether real or not. Also, your link to your ten books that's great!
My Favorite Part: "it's his wife that he does see!"

CONSTRUCTIVE CRITICISM:
What I liked least: nothing
My Suggestions: keep doing you
SOME OF THE MISTAKES I SAW WERE:
- none

EMOTIONS:
It made me feel: happy for him, it made me smile
It reminded me of: missing my mother who's deceased
It touched me by.. showing me how valuable life is

CREATIVITY:
It was extremely creative.

HELD MY ATTENTION?:
You held my attention from the first sentence until the very end.

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Review of Airbnb  
Review by Dominique
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Rated: E | (5.0)

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Hello 1974janeen !!
Thank you for sharing your poetry with me, I thoroughly enjoyed reading your words!
Keep in mind, I am not a professional, my suggestions are just that, suggestions. At the end of the day, do what you feel is right for your writing! Any suggestion I make is done with love and a desire to simply help you become the best writer you can be.

GRAMMAR:
I didn't notice any glaring grammatical errors, which is awesome.

SPELLING:
I didn't notice any spelling mistakes, you were on point with that. Great job.

WORD CHOICE:
You had an excellent word choice, avoiding boring, dull language.

RHYME:
Your poem rhymed well in the places it's meant to be.

FLOW:
Your poem flowed naturally and freely.

APPEARANCE:
font: traditional
colors:traditional
alignment:tradiitional
size:traditional

POSITIVES:
What I liked most: the entire poem! I loved it 5 STARS!
My Favorite Part: Tonight I can do anything I please

CONSTRUCTIVE CRITICISM:
What I liked least: nada
My Suggestions: continue doing you
SOME OF THE MISTAKES I SAW WERE:
-you

EMOTIONS:
It made me feel: like I should go get an Airbnb like I keep swearing I'm going to do
It reminded me of: vacation
It touched me by... making me smile

CREATIVITY:
It was extremely creative.

HELD MY ATTENTION?:
You held my attention from the first sentence until the very end.

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Review by Dominique
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Rated: E | (4.5)

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Hello intuey !!
Thank you for sharing your poetry with me, I thoroughly enjoyed reading your words!
Keep in mind, I am not a professional, my suggestions are just that, suggestions. At the end of the day, do what you feel is right for your writing! Any suggestion I make is done with love and a desire to simply help you become the best writer you can be.

GRAMMAR:
I didn't notice any glaring grammatical errors, which is awesome.

SPELLING:
I didn't notice any spelling mistakes, you were on point with that. Great job.

WORD CHOICE:
You had an excellent word choice, avoiding boring, dull language.

RHYME:
Your poem was not a rhyming poem, which is fine. *Smile*

FLOW:
Your poem flowed naturally and freely.

APPEARANCE:
font: traditional
colors: traditional
alignment: traditional
size: traditional

POSITIVES:
What I liked most: the beauty in it, the beauty nature brings allowing these words
My Favorite Part: the last two lines

CONSTRUCTIVE CRITICISM:
What I liked least: nothing
My Suggestions: continue doing you
SOME OF THE MISTAKES I SAW WERE:
- "On bended knee, I closed my eyes" ---> knees? on a bended? hmm.

EMOTIONS:
It made me feel: love towards nature
It reminded me of: sitting outside in a place in nature nobody else knows, in complete peace and harmony
It touched me by.. how beautiful the world can be

CREATIVITY:
It was extremely creative.

HELD MY ATTENTION?:
You held my attention from the first sentence until the very end.

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Review by Dominique
Rated: E | (3.5)
Hello Tim Chiu!! Thank you for sharing your poetry with me, I thoroughly enjoyed reading your words! Keep in mind, I am not a professional, my suggestions are just that, suggestions. At the end of the day, do what you feel is right for your writing! Any suggestion I make is done with love and a desire to simply help you become the best writer you can be.

I found your poem by looking in the emotional genre!

I didn't notice any glaring grammatical errors, which is awesome. Nor did I notice any spelling mistakes, you were on point with that. So great job.

You had an excellent word choice, avoiding boring, dull language.

What I liked most about your writing was the meaning behind it and clearly you have a large vocabulary or a thesaurus at hand.

What I liked least about it was some of the words don't rhyme. winsome-awesome is one example. I suggest using a rhyming dictionary when writing your poetry. There's excellent online ones such as rhymezone.com that will really help you out. It helps me tremendously, I don't know how I'd write poems without it.

You held my attention from the first sentence until the very end.
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Review by Dominique
Rated: E | (3.5)
Hello Schnujo!! Thank you for sharing your poem with me, I thoroughly enjoyed reading your words! Keep in mind, I am not a professional, my suggestions are just that, suggestions. At the end of the day, do what you feel is right for your writing! Any suggestion I make is done with love and a desire to simply help you become the best writer you can be.

I didn't notice any glaring grammatical errors, which is awesome. Nor did I notice any spelling mistakes, you were on point with that. So great job.


I suggest going back through your writing with a thesaurus, they are our best friend! Avoid boring, dull language. Get rid of overused words! It would truly improve your writing to spruce up the wording a bit.

What stood out to me was the colors drew it in

You held my attention from the first sentence until the very end.
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