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138 Public Reviews Given
Review Style
My review style is more on the technical side of things and the theme of your story. I want to feel what is happening to the characters and be able to see their motives. However, I will look if there are grammar or structure issues and depending on the errors, the review will be longer and more detailed. I am honesty driven and I will provide feedback, but it will not be cruel. Everyone deserves feedback on their work, after all, it’s what makes writers thrive and keep going.
Favorite Genres
Psychological, dark, drama, fiction, non-fiction, narratives, and poetry
Least Favorite Genres
Horror
Favorite Item Types
Prose, essays, poems, and short stories
I will not review...
Novels, long chapters, anything overly explicit, and long essays.
Public Reviews
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In affiliation with The WDC Angel Army  
Rated: E | (5.0)
This was a fun little puzzle. It was interesting in the layout with the different spots the words were in. I’ve never done one like this. Keep making more games!
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In affiliation with The WDC Angel Army  
Rated: E | (5.0)
A very cute poll. I didn’t know anyone ate waffles in fall, specially, anyway. I voted for the yummy waffles but I would eat all except the spiced wafers. Bleh. I wish I had seen the candy corn earlier though. I would have voted for it. Delicious-ness *Smile*
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In affiliation with The WDC Angel Army  
Rated: 18+ | (5.0)
Hi Robert! Miranda again. My apologies for how long it took me to read this. I just kept saying “I’ll read it later...” Well, I’m here now. Let’s dive in, shall we?


I loved this story. The warmth from Maria, and the love and heartbreak from Virginia was beautiful in a way I never thought about. The death is heartbreaking, and yet, it brings some kind of peace to the work because you know she’s okay. She’s no longer suffering. But maybe I just believe that because I believe in religion. Or something. I don’t know, I’m complicated. Back to the story!

The emotions V felt towards Father Juan was something I’ve felt over the years, and it made me grin because I know exactly what she’s feeling. The distrust. How can someone who believes in some magical person in the sky actually be right? Oh, how times have changed *Laugh* It’s an interesting dynamic that I have seen before, but the nuances weren’t as thought out like yours were.

The only suggestion I would make is a smoother transition. When V smells the rose and then sees her wife, it isn’t clear what happens at first. You have to reread for a minute to understand exactly what just happened. Can you smooth that out? Let the reader slip into it instead of making them dive in.

Regardless of that, I throughly enjoyed this magnificent piece. It was sweet, thoughtful, and had a tang of bitterness. Keep writing Robert, and please never stop.


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In affiliation with The WDC Angel Army  
Rated: 18+ | (5.0)
Hi Kara, Miranda here. I’m reviewing per your request.

I love the premise of this. It would be so cool to see how she gets out of that title, and flays all of the lowly bigots. Ahh, this world has so much potential; It’s awesome. I wonder how she came into that realm, and why? I know this is just a short flash fiction, but it’s so well crafted you just get drawn in immediately and wish for more.

I didn’t see any errors in punctuation or style either.

There is a part I’m confused on though. The last few sentences. Is she being the assertive one, or is that someone else? If it’s her, then my respect for this price goes up more. In some sense, it reminds me of ancient history. How slaves were treated, and women. I’m not sure if you based this off of anything so that’s just how I interest it, obviously.

Keep writing *Smile*
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Review of The Hooded Man  
In affiliation with The Rainbow Retreat  
Rated: 13+ | (5.0)
Hi Robert! Miranda here. I am reviewing on part of my new group, the Rainbow Retreat. It’s not finished yet, but when it will be, it’ll be great. So, let’s get into the story, shall we?

First off, I have to love your commitment to their language. That doesn’t happen often, and it brings depth to the characters. It reminds us that they are in a different time and place in such a way that it is like we are there ourselves. Phenomenal.

Second, I was quite surprised when Robyn turned out to be a girl. I was expecting some man with scars all over his face or a mangy beard. So what you gave us was much better, and very sweet. There isn’t a lot of folklore that I’ve seen with lesbian storylines, so I thought that was adorable. It makes me happy.

Third, I didn’t see any errors. Usually, there are maybe one or two, but I saw none here. It’s an awesome feat to do that, and to read it with such ease. All in all, I really enjoyed this story and I hope others will to. Keep writing!
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Review of Monster  
In affiliation with The WDC Angel Army  
Rated: E | (5.0)
Hi Lili, I’m Miranda, or Mia if prefer and today I will be reviewing your song.

First off, I must say I really liked this song. I do wonder what inspired it though. It’s kind a melancholy feel to it; and it makes me wonder about why you choose to put these feelings to paper. It’s pretty great.

You don’t seem to shy away from certain topics, and I love that in a writer, or a person in general. It brings a feeling to the work that isn’t seen much.

As far as suggestions go, I really don’t have any. There are a few spots were punctuation is needed, but as this is a song and not a poem, I’ll ignore it.

All in all, great work. Keep writing!
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In affiliation with The WDC Angel Army  
Rated: 13+ | (5.0)
This is a lovely blog and I can’t wait to read more. It’s nice to see another teenager on here. Have a good day :)
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In affiliation with The WDC Angel Army  
Rated: 13+ | (5.0)
Hi Israel, I’m Miranda, or Mia and today I shall be reviewing this lovely poem. I am a part of the "The WDC Angel Army.

I liked the theme here. It was well to the point, outspoken, and painted a great picture. However, it’s sad how true this is. It happens daily, and to millions of people. For that, I wonder what inspired you to create this; was it personal experiences, family, friends or just a poem from your muse? Whatever the case may be, you did a great job and I will definitely be reading more of your works in the future. Keep writing!
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In affiliation with WdC SuperPower Reviewers Group  
Rated: ASR | (5.0)
Hi Jessica! I’m Miranda, or Mia and today I am reviewing this per the WDC Reviewers Group *Smile*

Now this looks delicious! Is this a home recipe or something on the Internet? It looks fairly easy to make and I think I’ll try and create it; it’ll give my grandmother a free day when I visit. I can’t wait to try it!


WdC Superpower Reviewers Sig Garden #2


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Review of Raised for Us  
In affiliation with WdC SuperPower Reviewers Group  
Rated: E | (5.0)
Hi Mike, Miranda Keening. I’m reviewing this piece due to Tina Stone Tina Stone bible study, and your faithful service in the US military.

This is a great poem. It talks about Jesus being resurrected and Easter. It’s small, and sweet. I’m happy you devoted to write about this, because even though this is small, it conveys a great message.

Keep writing Mike!
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In affiliation with WdC SuperPower Reviewers Group  
Rated: E | (5.0)
Hi Mike, Miranda here. I am reviewing this because of a challenge proposed in Tina Stone Tina Stone VBS, and I figure I owe you for the reviews you’ve left me :)


👾Thoughts: This was a sweet look at your family traditions. The memory was nostalgic, and I could practically feel the love of that. 👾

Suggestions: Keep writing :)

Final Musings: I liked this story, and I’m happy you decided to share it with us. Keep writing my friend. 🍪


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In affiliation with WdC SuperPower Reviewers Group  
Rated: E | (5.0)
Hi G.B, I am Miranda, or Mia, and I came upon your work through Tina Stone (76) ’s Bible Group.

👾Thoughts: This has a fanatic point, it made me think about a lot of things. Specifically, my grandmother and her friend. They have lived through the same things, and I (think) their faith is still strong. They don’t talk much about God, but I know they believe and pray.

The message of this is to keep believing, and that no matter what happens, God has us. He knew this would happen. He knows when it will end too. It is hard, but we need to try and have faith. Or at the very least pray, that’s what I do. It helps.


Suggestions: I don’t have any for this. Great work.

Final Musings: I have enjoyed reading the the works in your port, and I can’t wait to read more. Keep writing! 🍪


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In affiliation with WdC SuperPower Reviewers Group  
Rated: E | (4.5)
Hi G.B, I am Miranda, or Mia, and I came upon your work through Tina Stone Tina Stone ’s Bible Group.

👾Thoughts: This poem is about how grace and mercy impact our daily lives. They are not people, but that does not stop the feelings or ideas to be useless. Quite the contrary. 👾

Mercy helps us be better, and it allows us to extend forgiveness when others have wronged us, or when the world just seems to hard.

Grace allows us to give others mercy, or understanding. How are we to help others when we can’t even understand them? The Bible defines it as God showing us His love, and acceptance. Grace allows us to follow Him, because He IS grace, love, acceptance, and Mercy all in one.


Suggestions: I have no suggestions for you on this, other then a few grammar errors. But I don’t know if you want that, so I leave you with the invitation to email me if you do.

Final Musings: I enjoyed this poem. It spoke to me, it wasn’t flashy, and it got the message across. Keep writing! 🍪


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Review of Competition Entry  
In affiliation with The WDC Angel Army  
Rated: ASR | (5.0)
Hi Steven, I’m Miranda, or Mia. I stumbled upon this work through another story, and figured you could do with a review.

Usually, I would not review a long work. One, because of the time, and two, because I usually lose interest quickly. It doesn’t matter if it’s a great work, Imo bored regardless. Reading books is an easy task, and often enjoyable, but something about essays... Anyway, I read this the whole way through. I enjoyed it. As of now, I am at your earlier stages. I am a teenager, and have no idea what the future will hold, let alone look like. It does make me wonder though; will I be kind and fulfilled like my grandparents, or regretful.

If you had this insight as a teenager, I would be surprised if you took it. Not because you’re you, rather because you didn't know who you were yet. I certainly don’t. You probably know all of this anyway, but I don’t see any harm in reiterating it. You can’t change your past, and even though life hasn’t gone by how your expected, I ask you if it was worth it? Ignore the regrets for a moment, if you can, and think about that: was your time worth it?

I don’t know my reason for writing this, you know more then me, and I can’t say why, but who knows. I might be in your shoes one day, and some crazy teenager could say the same. Keep writing Steven.

Miranda 🍪
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for entry "~ A Story-Poem ~
In affiliation with The Poet's Place  
Rated: 18+ | (4.5)
Hi Ruwth, I’m Miranda from The Poet’s Place and I am reviewing again, per you updating this poem.

I’m glad you updated a few things in this; it really helps as you read it. I still see a couple stanzas that can be made to help the poem, though I don’t know why I didn’t mention them earlier. Oh well. The 9th stanza reads, ‘Her husband/Speaking to them/Held up/A book/A special book.’ But it is missing an element: the right punctuation. It’s only missing one thing though, so no worries. After book (the first one), there needs to be a semicolon. Or maybe a colon, apologizes for that but I’m still learning about the distinctions between the two.

The second one I see is in the 15th stanza. The last two lines read: ‘Not yet fully/Manifest in her.’ I wonder if you meant “manifested”? Because right now, that doesn’t quite fit.

And the last thing comes in the last stanza. ‘Even now, years later with promises unfulfilled, she remembers her vision of hope.’ Adding “with” and the commas seems to read better to me, but that may just be my preference.

Again, I am not a professional so take what you don’t like or find useful with a grain of said. But keep writing! This is a beautiful poem. I hope this helped! Cheers and God Bless 🍪
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for entry "~ A Story-Poem ~
In affiliation with The Poet's Place  
Rated: 18+ | (4.0)
Hi Ruwth, I’m Miranda and I am reviewing per your request.

So first off, I think this is a great poem. I like the promise, and the theme. I wonder if this is talking about your experience with God, or someone close to you. It’s interesting for sure. At the very least, it speaks of the fact that prayer is a powerful thing. I do have a few suggestions however. The problems occur within the punctuation, and how there needs to be a few line breaks, and proper endings.

For instance, in stanza five, you write: God, I have no vision. No hope for a brighter future with this man. Please give me a vision. It’s a great line, but you put a quotation mark at the beginning of it and forgot to add the second one to tell the reader she is done speaking.

Another thing I notice is how there a few stanzas without semicolons or commas and that should be addressed, at least to the reader. In the 18th stanza the lines read: ‘She believed God had shown her something precious/ a loving husband and happiness ahead.’ After precious, you either need a sentence to tie them together (though that would mess with the flow) or a semicolon. Both present challenges to me, because adding another sentence would mess with the structure but a semicolon seems to also make it strained. I recommend maybe changing the third sentence, but that’s just my opinion.

That’s really all that I see. I hope this review helped, and I can’t wait to see more poems! I ask you to remember that I am not a professional, and to take whatever you don’t agree with as a grain of salt. This was still a phenomenal poem about faith, and I enjoyed it. Thank you for sharing this with us. God Bless 🍪
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Review of Forbidden  
In affiliation with WdC SuperPower Reviewers Group  
Rated: 18+ | (5.0)
Wow. This is a really pretty poem. I can easily visualize what’s happening and that’s an amazing trait to have. You write so well! Keep writing!
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Review of 'wolves gathered'  
In affiliation with WdC SuperPower Reviewers Group  
Rated: 13+ | (5.0)
To me, this reads as a prose for what it brings to mind and how the flow works. It’s a good piece, and it reminds me of many things. You have a skill with pen and paper that many either do not possess, or have not yet harnessed completely. I enjoy reading your works simply because of that, but more so of the story that is told. And I suppose it helps that you don’t shy from the loneliness or torment people feel. Life is not all beautiful and rays of sunshine and it will never be the beautiful picture we paint. Keep writing.
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Review of MWA  
In affiliation with The WDC Angel Army  
Rated: 13+ | (5.0)
This is good so far! It’s intriguing to me, as I’ve never read anything like it. Keep writing!
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In affiliation with The WDC Angel Army  
Rated: ASR | (4.5)
Hi Maria! Mia here. I come in peace *BigSmile*

First Impression:
At first I didn’t understand what was happening, and it wasn’t until the second paragraph when it clicked but that’s to be expected. I really liked this. The psychological damage that hardships she’s experienced would be an interesting thing to see.


Suggestions:
I really only recommend space it out more and maybe making the wording smoother.


Overall Impression:
This was a great story and the story dynamic was well thought out. God bless
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Review of Get Up  
In affiliation with The WDC Angel Army  
Rated: 13+ | (5.0)
This is brilliant! You've definitley have talent. I don't see any errors either which is awesome. Keep writing!
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Review of We will survive?  
In affiliation with The WDC Angel Army  
Rated: E | (2.5)
Hi Rondon! Mia here. I found your piece in “Read and Review a newbie” and I come in peace *BigSmile*

First Impression:
This poem has potential. I definitely liked the theme of nature and how we, as the dominant species, haven’t been caring for it like we should have.


Suggestions:
A few. In the second sentence of the first stanza, you write, “Hanging from a thread we we’re”. What do you mean? Did you mean ‘we’re’, as in ‘we are’, or were they both just mistakes? Because if you removed them, the poem would flow better. You also need a period after thread.

“And even though we forgot,
We chose to dare.

The bold punctuation is what I think is needed, but this is your poem and it wouldn’t take anything away if you didn’t add them.

“Our disrespect for Nature,
Has become our fate.
Even though life seems perfect in paper,
We always find ourselves afraid.

Same as before, just punctuation.

“Dance with the gods,
Dine with the devil.
Through hell we fought;
Now we are cursed for ever.

Punctuation. And you can disregard the quotation marks, I just use that to make it easier to see.

Overall Impression:
Overall, I liked this poem. It had a really good message and I enjoyed reading it. I hope my review helped; I will be sure to read more *Smile*


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In affiliation with 30-Day Bloggers Group  
Rated: E | (4.0)
Hi Marlon! Mia here. I’m responding from you sending in a review request. I come in peace *BigSmile*

First Impression:

I loved how you wove the love between the two so eloquently. It really spoke volumes and I could easily visualize what was happening, which was a definite plus for me.


Suggestions:
I would say just punctuation. There are a few places where you need a semicolon instead of a comma, so it breaks up the poem and makes it smoother. An example of that would be the second stanza:

Walking along the boardwalk,
Your warmth caressed my being,


After being, you need a period.


Overall Impression:
I really liked this. Usually I wouldn’t review romance, but this was good. I hope this review was helpful and as always, keep writing. I can’t wait to read more *Smile*
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In affiliation with The WDC Angel Army  
Rated: ASR | (5.0)
I loved these works! You’re an awesomeeeee writer Cat, and I hope you get all the praise you deserve!
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Review of Frozen  
In affiliation with The WDC Angel Army  
Rated: E | (3.5)
Hi Marlon! Mia here. I am reviewing this after you sent in a request. I come in peace *BigSmile*

First Impression:
I found this poem rather interesting. I wonder who it was addressing, if anyone particular. I wonder if something happened that caused this poem. But nevertheless, I did like the work. It was a perspective I hadn’t quite seen yet and that’s always appreciated.


Suggestions:
I only really see punctuation errors, but not anything bad. Just small things. I don’t know what it was about this poem but the flow of it seemed off. It just seemed like something was missing. It might just be me, but oh well.

Frozen, are the times shared.
Memories replay again and again.
Like magic you appeared;
My life since, never the same.
Unknowingly you cast a spell.
Hypnotized with your smile,
In your world I now dwell,
No escaping your frozen isle.

This just needed punctuation and “magic” to be lowercases, which is why I made it bold.

Frozen, at the Broadway Show.
You, an angel dressed in white;
Sophisticated, elegant, Oh how you glow.
Most beautiful lady there that night.
Awed by the exciting tide,
You immersed into the magical show;
You grab hold of my hand, electrified,
As Elsa sang, “Let It Go, Let It Go.”

Remember not to miss out on punctuation. I added the bold parts because it seemed like the sentence wasn’t completely correct. And the second was just to highlight that it needed to be lowercase.

Frozen, the many times we kissed
Mesmerized me with bliss;
Feel of ecstasy truly missed,
Treasured moments to reminisce.
Beauty of many colors and shades,
Forever Imprinted on my mind.
True beauty never fades.
Frozen, until end of time.

As you can see, the last stanza needs punctuation. It is hard to read if it’s just one continuous work, or at least it is to me.

Overall Impression:

I liked it! It was a good poem and it brought up great imagery. Keep writing! You’re good *Smile*
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