Good thoughts here. My initial advice would be to review the poem for errors. Was "brown" in the third line capitalized on purpose? And "too" in the fourteenth line should be "to." Just need to correct some little things like that. :) I really appreciate the fact that you didn't try to stick to rhyming--I feel like that locks a lot of people in from being as creative as they can be. Good job!
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