I don't share your fear but I did love your story (I wrote a similar short story called Mushroom Soup some time ago - but I warn you, it might make you a bit squeamish). :)
All that being said - very well written and nicely paced. I'm still smiling after reading it - always a good sign.
Loved it. My kind of story - a serious subject wrapped in good humor and fantasy. Well written and cleverly presented.
The embedded warning is clear - let's hope more readers and writers tackle these subjects in such an accessible and entertaining manner.
Well this was refreshing and very well written. I like your style and flow. I was smiling as I read - not sure why - its not a humorous story but it is pleasing.
There were a couple of polishing opportunities I noted (for what it's worth).
'There should be a warning right like I bite when overcome and i should have a sign' This sentence needs some syntax and I had trouble understanding it.
'I was going to write a list for you in bullet points about the reasons you should like me and then I was realizing that you already liked me and that I was writing a list of reasons you should believe in this.' This sentence works better without the the "in this" at the end.
'I am one of those cartoons where someone stands with a sword and then in the distance a roiling cloud of anger and things and noise comes storming across an expanse of desert at them.' This sentence works better without the "at them" at the end.
How wonderful. In such a short story, only a few lines, you had me reeled in, impossible to leave until I found out why this woman was saved and what would become of her.
Very well written and vivid in style. The pictures you created were clear and memorable.
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