Wonderful!!!!! I want a Shima Enagma!!!!! I would name it flake, for it would be white and snuggle in my curly hair.... and I would tell anyone that caught a glimpse of her that she was "just a flake" and let them believe she was nothing more than dandruff.
A witch should have such a companion.
Your story proves that just having one true companion that supports you and you can share with can make all the difference.
I didn't detect any SPAG issues. Though there was little dialogue and long, run on paragraphs, you didn't notice much. There were just enough characters used to bring the story to life. I could easily see it as a illustrated children's book that wouldn't even require very many pictures.
What I loved best was that it didn't upset Taffi to not be able to share Snowball with everyone. I could easily fathom that if she was able fo, the poor little bird being ripped from Taffi's hair and them being separated; the bird being taken off somewhere to be studied scientifically and Taffi again being cast into ridiculed obscurity. I was glad for both of them that their secrecy was kept in tact until Snowball decided the time was right.
A very magical ingenious story that I enjoyed very much.
I read this because we had an incident at my nephews wedding. The DJ he hired for the reception had technical difficulties. Seemed the only thing that would work on his system was the karaoke. Our side of the family was still happy; we enjoyed karaoke. Unfortunately her family did not. My nephew did make his new bride and some of her family tear up when he sang Tim McGraw's - Don't Take The Girl.
I guess that's not really a review, but I thought I would share with you.
Your poem is nicely written and has a good rhythm. I enjoyed it a lot.
Looking forward to seeing the final draft. Would love to be a part of it. Get in on the ground floor of construction and learn how it works. Maybe be a silent backup. Be here if you need to take an extended leave or just need some time away.
I don't know if it is so short and choppy and fast paced because it had been a contest entry or what. I know personally I would like to see it rewritten at a slower, smoother pace. A near death experience, even if brought on by lightening, would not be so rough. In any spiritual belief, the experience of meeting deity is a peaceful, calming one.
As I said, it was a very interesting, and, dare I say, enlightening story. Very nice.
It's a great concept and a fun idea. I love the tips, especially the one about using three different prompts in one story. Just be careful though, some contests require your entry be only for their contest.
Would give you a higher rating, but many of the contests you use for examples here are closed. Lately I've been noticing that a few members don't update their items like this. It irks me.....
Still, to end on a positive note, it is a unique idea and I applaud you for keeping up with all you do.
I love the updated version. i had forgotten about these sigs after I found the shops where I could get custom ones. These are still sweet though. Nice job.
This is a wonderful shop! A virtual treasure trove of items that any consumer could dream of. I thoroughly enjoyed browsing through all the wonderful offerings; thinking of who I could send smaller items to and dreaming of being able to afford the higher ticket items to be able to gift them to members that truly deserve such a blessing.
The variety of colors and items is wonderful. It is very pleasing to the eye. It reminds me of just looking at something like a banana split. It just invites you to sample/purchase the items in anticipation of the pleasure you would bestow upon the lucky receiver.
I only have one little complaint. You have things that are advertised as being on sale only until September 2023. Oops. I think someone needs to go over and update some of their items.
I am a casual reviewer who gives mostly my opinion. Basically I know what I like.
Structure: I think this would be better served as a longer piece with more description.
Subject matter: It's a great snapshot of part of a life with a dog.
Overall impression: I found myself asking questions while I read and going back to reread to see if I missed something.
Notes: One of the main questions I found myself asking is details about the dog. A lot of readers are into animals and just knowing it is a dog is just not enough.
I just want to reiterate that I believe this is really great subject matter. Readers enjoy glimpses into people's lives especially when they involve animals.
I am a casual reviewer who gives mostly my opinion. Basically I know what I like.
Structure: No particular structure detected.
Subject matter: thunderstorms are usually a good subject, if somewhat overused.
Overall impression: I believe it could be longer/drawn out more. It's almost too short to really convey the emotions that seem to struggle to get across
clearly.
Notes: For some reason the term "electric breezes" doesn't sit well with me. I think better adjectives could have been used.
For someone like me who is a seasoned member of the community, these instructions are easy to follow and understand. However, I can see where a novice might have difficulty. The member signatures are great. Bravo on the attempt.
I believe you can use the "product review" template under "create new item" for books as well. Just a suggestion....
You did a good job here. It is an intriguing review and makes me want to read the book to find out more. I think the run on sentences can be chopped up better.
I am a casual reviewer who gives mostly my opinion. Basically I know what I like.
Structure: when you first look at it you think it is a poem. when you realize it is not the standard rhyming type, you are pleasantly surprised
Subject matter: How many of us are no longer willing to take a man at his word? This piece gives us hope that there might just be men worthy of it still out there.
Overall impression: A short choppy piece, but one definitely worth taking a look at.
Notes: There were no spelling or grammatical errors detected.
Cute story. I would correct some of your grammar, but it fits your character's cadence. I like this story a lot. The way it is told makes it all the more entertaining. It may not fit everyone's tastes, but as I have said, I like it....
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One slight misplace that I see.... Your E line first word is not the start of the line. I would suggest moving it to Everyone and just delete "as we enter the final stages of the month". Just the opinion of a fellow poet (even though I don't write much of it anymore)
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