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93 Public Reviews Given
107 Total Reviews Given
Review Style
Casual. More my opinion than, say, most reviewers.
I'm good at...
Finding grammar and punctuation errors.
Favorite Genres
horror, fantasy, YA.
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Rated: E | (4.0)
Powerful love poem.

I especially like your use of the word "devour" at the end.....I had someone like this in my life but sadly she has passed on.....

A very strong sentiment.

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Rated: E | (4.5)
Such a great poem

You don't start thinking until more than half way through it that it could be about the groundhog. Then you have to go back and read it again....

Very nice.
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Rated: E | (4.5)
and their friendship grows by the day......

so cute. I'm glad I could help.
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Rated: 13+ | (4.0)
This was......interesting, to say the least. I don't think I'll ever hear of white albino naked lab mice the same again, nor will I stop wondering about the attraction of rubbing them on one's head.

It is a very cute story.
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Rated: E | (3.5)
7th line - change "was seen" to "would seem"... just a suggestion.

Thank you for writing such an inspired piece! I see no spelling or grammar mistakes.

It may benefit from some WritingML making it easier to read. Maybe some color or something to make the lines pop. Again, just a suggestion.

very nice work!
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Review of The Quills Group  Open in new Window.
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Rated: E | (4.5)
Hello and Congratulations!!!!
Kit Author IconMail Icon Picked you as the benefactor of " Mouse Colony 50/30/20 Raffle"  Open in new Window. by Mousethyme Author Icon ....

You have been generously donated 61,500 gps!!!!!!

Your group here has no spelling or grammatical errors.

A very nice representation of a very fine group!
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Rated: 13+ | (3.0)
I would cut down the description to "My revenge won't bring me answers. Just questions." The "four years have passed" just sets the reader up for a long flashback and a lot of readers do not like them.

I would enlarge the font size and break down some of the larger paragraphs.

Break up the sentences. They are much too long.

I like the idea. There's a story to be told here. There's just a lot of telling rather than showing.

Bravo at the first draft attempt.

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Review of Silent Night  Open in new Window.
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Rated: 18+ | N/A (Review only item.)
I don't know that "squeak" is the right word or sound. Crunch, maybe. I just can't see (or hear) snow squeaking....unless maybe it was slushy.

I get the feeling Tim is a ghost when he "drifted forward". When you describe Luke as "ravaged by age and infirmity" I start to think that Tim is there to guide Luke to be with him on the other side.... It makes me feel his ache all the more when he has to leave.....


A very nice piece....bravo.
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Rated: E | (3.5)
The automatic review response system is a wonderful idea and a great concept.

There are no spelling mistakes or grammatical errors that I can detect.

I think that requiring 250 character responses may be a little much. Still we can do it if we try and ramble.

Great Job.
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Review of Writing Blog  Open in new Window.
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Rated: 18+ | (4.5)
I've been reading up on monsters and demons and yes, there are a lot of them.

This entry was interesting to read. It is clear and concise with no grammar or punctuation errors.

I will have to read more of your blog some time.....

Great job.
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Rated: E | (4.5)
I think there should be an extra credit round of writing an outline of the story.

Just a thought.

The description is clear and concise. There are no grammar, punctuation or spelling errors. It is easy to understand the instructions.

Great Job!!!
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Rated: E | (5.0)
suggestion to invite tracker Author IconMail Icon She's a good friend of mine and we exchange emails all the time.....
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Rated: E | N/A (Review only item.)
Nice work. very clear and concise.

Could put a little bit more in about sending c-notes. I know I love getting encouraging ones.

No punctuation or grammar errors detected.

A very good explanation. Kudos.
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Rated: E | (4.0)
cute survey.

I would personally love to see the Earth that the USS Enterprise so strongly protects and serves. I think I would of put at least "SciFi-verse" on there.

Still, it was interesting to look at.

No grammar or punctuation errors detected.

Nice Job.
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Rated: E | (4.0)
I love this concept and forum!
The forum is very well done with no errors in grammar or punctuation. It is clear and easy to understand.

Great job!
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Rated: E | (4.0)
Just learned of this group and I was definitely excited to become a part of it.

Everything is clear and consistent. Easy to understand and follow.

Bravo
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Review of Writing.Com 101  Open in new Window.
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Rated: E | (3.5)
This is very helpful and should be available in other places to help one decide if they want to do an In&Out at all.

Very nice and well worded in an easy style to understand.
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Rated: E | (5.0)
plain language that is easy to read and understand. Directions to finding more information.

all in all a great piece that fufills its purpose of helping members understand more of writing.com.
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Rated: 13+ | (4.5)
This is one of the funnest forums I have ever participated in. I almost can't wait for next year....

This has been very educational to participate in. I feel mostly ready for NaNoWriMo thanks to all the wonderful people who help make this a true success for everyone involved.

Congratulations on a super event!!!

Blessed Be
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Rated: ASR | (4.5)
I love them. They made me laugh. I especially like "sneaky little devil" one. It is true, creativity may mean being sneaky once in a while.

Bravo on a great collection.

Blessed Be.
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