First I want to welcome you in WDC. This review reflects my opinion only, and I am not a writing expert. I do hope you find something that is interesting or helpful to you.
FIRST IMPRESSION: This is a good poem written from the view of a seashell. I appreciate the narrators thought process.
THE POEM: I found this poem is so rhythmic and melodious. The rhyming is soothing to the ear.
FAVORITE LINES:
"Pick me up and hold me close.
Closer and closer, to your ear.
Listen, listen. To the song within.
My tune reverberates, unclear."
SUGGESTION: I didn't find any mistake.
FINAL THOUGHT: I can’t wait to read another poem from you. I enjoyed it reading.
Beautifully written and lovely storytelling . I like this spooky story. I enjoyed the suspense throughout the story. I especially like the character "Bryan".
I like this beautifully structured poem. It has wonderful thoughts inside every line. You have good rhyming. The tone is soothing and pleasing to the ear.
Beautifully written and lovely storytelling. I like this spooky story. I enjoyed the suspense throughout the story. Your prompt was probably to make some kind of horror story contest, and you were probably write with the prompt "Halloween in a Suburb" and I think you managed them well.
I especially I like the character Nora and the ending.
This is a good story overall. Well done!
This is good piece of work to test one’s knowledge about writing.
It was well built. The questions are useful for story and fiction writing. The questions are clear and simple that I could understand them all. I answered them most.
This review reflects my opinion only, and I am not a writing expert.
Your poem "A Terrible Tribute to Edgar Allan Poe" is very melodious, melancholic s and soothing to the ear.
I like this poem very much. It is a great tribute for the poet Edgar Allan Poe. It has great narratives. Your poem reminds me a poem "The Raven" by Edgar Allan Poe.
Edgar Allan Poe is one of my favorite poet.
The descriptions are well written and very vivid and artistic.
“Yes, I know this isn’t refined within, because in my head, there is a din; A ton of words that rhyme too thin”
I like the inner rhyming and how the word flows. I like the images you have painted here.
Thanks for sharing it with us. It's pleasure to read your poems.
This review reflects my opinion only, and I am not a writing expert.
I like this spooky poem written with the words “Witch, Zombie, ghost, moon, Elvis, pumpkin, apples, frightened”. You beautifully used all those words in your poem. I like the Zelda the Witch and Zombie Elvis’s story as well.
You have good imagination. I like the first stanza. A night where all the creatures of the universe came out/It was a night for human and nonhuman to celebrate.
Thanks for sharing it with us. It's pleasure to know someone like you.
First I want to welcome you in WDC. This review reflects my opinion only, and I am not a writing expert. I do hope you find something that is interesting or helpful to you.
FIRST IMPRESSION: This is a good story. Wonderfully told with third person. I especially liked the way you tell your story.
THE STORY: The story is about a man whose car stopped in the middle of the road. Then he entered a motel and found motel office looks strangely vacant. The man entered a house and encountered with a mysteries dangerous women in a white wedding dress.
I liked the way you told the story with very clear descriptions and presentation. I love the smallest details as well.
CHARACTERS: All the characters are well developed.
SUGGESTION: You used written sound, for example Tap. Tap. Tap. Tap. Bang. Bang. Bang. Tick. Tick. Tick. Tick. to create the mood of the story. I think you should try to describe the sound. That will make your story more interesting. I found some wrote these sound using exclamatory marks like Bang! Bang! Bang!
FINAL THOUGHT:You are a good storyteller. I appreciate the way you are telling this story.
I enjoyed it reading. Glad to meet an awesome writer like you. Keep writing!!
Good poem about a pineapple. I like the way you crafted it. Pineapple is one of my favorite fruit. I enjoy its scent, color and of course taste. I like the words of your poem and the ending. It packed with message. Which you told beautifully
"Who grow this cherished exotic fruit;
Humanity’s ultimate conquest"
I like the story of a sad princess who was heartless and proud. Your rhyming is pleasing to the ear. I like rhyming poems.
You said beautifully
“He offered his love but she refused,
Within herself she felt emotions confused”
It is fun reading. We usually see that fairy tale ended with happy ending. The characters are usually humble, innocent, or kind-hearted. But you wrote this from different points of view.
I think you can add some events to make it more interesting. Otherwise, it’s a beautiful poem.
I like how you sketched the character. It’s interesting to think about. Your story followed the prompt Fairy Tale Blues.
I am still love with fairy-tales. I like this swinging fairy poem. Your imagination gives so much life to this poem. I like the vivid picture you have painted here.
FINAL THOUGHT: you are a good storyteller. I appreciate the way you are telling this story.
First I want to welcome you in WDC. This review reflects my opinion only, and I am not a writing expert. I do hope you find something that is interesting or helpful to you.
Humorous ending!! I like the way you told this story. I like the suspense. I think you can make a bigger piece from that piece. That would be interesting.
You are a good storyteller.
I can’t wait to read another story from you. I enjoyed it reading.
I found your poem in the read and review page. It's been a pleasure to review your poem"Shadow Walks" on behalf of "The WDC Angel Army"
TITLE:This is a beautiful picture. Your words gave so much life to this picture. I like title as well. It fits this poem.
IMAGERY:I like the beautiful image of a dog you have sketched here. The dog whose paws too big for gangly legs. The descriptions are vivid and artistic.
THE POEM:The poem is about a dog who chases after waves returning in hopes that she will once more be there. Your rhyming is pleasing. The tone is soothing to the ear.
RHYTHM:Your poem has good rhythm. It flowed beautifully.
STRUCTURE & FORM:you have beautiful thoughts inside every line.
THEME: I could imagine the scene. .
OVERALL IMPRESSION :I enjoyed your poem. It followed the prompt.
First I want to welcome you in WDC. This review reflects my opinion only, and I am not a writing expert.
This is a good poem for self-help. Your words are true that nobody hand us success. Your poem tells, that we should believe our own strength to go on with life. Only hope, courage and determination helps us to go forward. I feel this poem is positive.
I think you need to change the line “That one day i will definatly SHINE” to “That one day I will defiantly shine.”
FINAL THOUGHT:I appreciate the way you are telling this story.
I like reading this thoughtful science piece. The concept is unique. This piece is very informative, helpful and well written. I learn what an Earth ship is and how it does work.
It is high time for all of us to think of it to save our planet.
I like the descriptions as well. Thank you for sharing your work and the link.
This review reflects my opinion only, and I am not a writing expert. I do hope you find something that is interesting to you.
First Impression: I really liked your poem, You beautifully painted lovely nature picture.
What I like: This is a poem about uniqueness of nature. I like the way you crafted.
“Golden needles shower” “waves crashing” “morning air” “flower” all the things blended together creates a lovely nature scene. I like the colors and shapes, sounds, smells, touch, and feelings you used to create the images. I could imagine the scene.
Yes, being with nature is a wonderful thing.
Final thought: I feel that it wrote from life experience, senses and emotions, and it looks great!! I especially like the last stanza.
“Remember this one day you'll die all the toys just left behind
While missing out on the gifts God gave in love for you to find”
I just read your poem from read and review page. Beautifully started with the lines ""You expected to be sad in the fall." I like your poem. Your words are so pure and true. I feel the sadness laced in this poem.
Good story. So, informative. I think you need paragraph breaks between segments of a story. You can use writing ML to make this story more interesting.
I am taking part for August Challenge for"The WDC Angel Army" . I saw your name on the Port Review Authors for August. It's been a pleasure to review your story "Othello's Adjustment" This review reflects my opinion only, and I am not a writing expert.
This is a good story about a black cat and her point of view. It packed with message. I enjoy the character and the way she told her story. The character fleshed out very well. I appreciate your rich and smooth flow. I understood this was written for a contest inspired by a picture of factory smokestacks but it still looks great. I like the thought “To me, all the people looked alike, but they did not act alike.”
Overall, I like the clever idea, great characters, and it’s interesting plotline. I enjoyed your story.
I'm reviewing you for I see your name on read and review page.
This is a good poem. Wonderfully painted the enchanted winter picture. I especially liked the way you tell your story. It seems you wrote this poem from life, emotion and experience and it looks great. You used the punctuation where they are needed. I like the last stanza
"Ungloved right hand grasping a letter,
addressed to loved ones in New Orleans,
I wonder if I will freeze in my tracks,
life lost before I get to the mailbox."
First I want to welcome you in WDC. This review reflects my opinion only, and I am not a writing expert.
This is a good poem. I feel the sadness woven in your beautiful imaginary. I understand it wrote from personal life experiences and emotions and it look great. You did a good job to put down your feelings in to words. I think that sometimes writing could calm the mind.
I just read your poem from read and review poem. The main image is wonderful. Yes, love should be like that. Your poem has beautiful romantic thought woven inside every line. I appreciate its simplicity. It seems you wrote this from personal experience. You expressed beautifully about your deep and meaningful love. I feel your poem is positive.
I want to welcome you to WDC and thought I would write about it. Yes, Gender equality is main issue. Gender gap is widening day by day. In some part of the world women cannot vote, job and travel without the permission of their men.
I like this thoughtful piece. Thanks for sharing!!
I just read your poem from read and review page.
I really liked this poem because of the way you painted life with the breathtaking beauty of winter . You have used a lot of vivid picture in this piece. I could imagine them all.
I feel that it wrote from life experience, senses and emotions, and it looks great.
I really like your poetry of the alphabets. I like the repeated verses. You beautifully painted every stage of life. This gives the poem another dimension. I like the lines
E If only we could play. And eat.
G Our adult diet etched with health’s
F disguise—or candy. Walls
H can never hide. We will never mask
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Hi Neva,