I like this Skeltonics verse poem. Your rhyme is rich and smooth. It flowed beautifully. I like the spooky picture you have painted here. The last three lines are my absolute favorite “Werewolves howl at the moon,
running to the tune,
so you won't leave so soon”
This is a beautiful poem about how's, when's, why's and who's. Yes, there are so many questions in life. As our human mind is a wondrous place. We often asked the questions about the things that we never be able to do. you wrote beautifully
'Why can I not just take to flight
and roam among the stars?
Dance on the rings of saturn
or climb the hills of mars?'
I like the thoughts woven throughout this poem. . I think you need to capitalized the word “saturn” and “daffodil” should be Daffodil
Patrick you wrote a good poem. I like the way you put your feelings into words. It seems that you wrote it from personal experiences and emotions. I appreciate it's simplicity. I like the last line
"Because there is no power strong enough, in any universe or dimension that can quell the love that we share."
I found some of the lines of your poem are too long. Otherwise it's a wonderful poem.
Beautifully written and lovely storytelling. I like this spooky story. I enjoyed the suspense throughout the story. Your prompt was probably to make some kind of horror story contest, and you were probably write with the prompt "Halloween in a Suburb" and I think you managed them well.
I especially I like the character Nora and the ending.
This is a good story overall. Well done!
This is good piece of work to test one’s knowledge about writing.
It was well built. The questions are useful for story and fiction writing. The questions are clear and simple that I could understand them all. I answered them most.
This review reflects my opinion only, and I am not a writing expert.
Your poem "A Terrible Tribute to Edgar Allan Poe" is very melodious, melancholic s and soothing to the ear.
I like this poem very much. It is a great tribute for the poet Edgar Allan Poe. It has great narratives. Your poem reminds me a poem "The Raven" by Edgar Allan Poe.
Edgar Allan Poe is one of my favorite poet.
The descriptions are well written and very vivid and artistic.
“Yes, I know this isn’t refined within, because in my head, there is a din; A ton of words that rhyme too thin”
I like the inner rhyming and how the word flows. I like the images you have painted here.
Thanks for sharing it with us. It's pleasure to read your poems.
This review reflects my opinion only, and I am not a writing expert.
I like this spooky poem written with the words “Witch, Zombie, ghost, moon, Elvis, pumpkin, apples, frightened”. You beautifully used all those words in your poem. I like the Zelda the Witch and Zombie Elvis’s story as well.
You have good imagination. I like the first stanza. A night where all the creatures of the universe came out/It was a night for human and nonhuman to celebrate.
Thanks for sharing it with us. It's pleasure to know someone like you.
First I want to welcome you in WDC. This review reflects my opinion only, and I am not a writing expert. I do hope you find something that is interesting or helpful to you.
FIRST IMPRESSION: This is a good story. Wonderfully told with third person. I especially liked the way you tell your story.
THE STORY: The story is about a man whose car stopped in the middle of the road. Then he entered a motel and found motel office looks strangely vacant. The man entered a house and encountered with a mysteries dangerous women in a white wedding dress.
I liked the way you told the story with very clear descriptions and presentation. I love the smallest details as well.
CHARACTERS: All the characters are well developed.
SUGGESTION: You used written sound, for example Tap. Tap. Tap. Tap. Bang. Bang. Bang. Tick. Tick. Tick. Tick. to create the mood of the story. I think you should try to describe the sound. That will make your story more interesting. I found some wrote these sound using exclamatory marks like Bang! Bang! Bang!
FINAL THOUGHT:You are a good storyteller. I appreciate the way you are telling this story.
I enjoyed it reading. Glad to meet an awesome writer like you. Keep writing!!
Good poem about a pineapple. I like the way you crafted it. Pineapple is one of my favorite fruit. I enjoy its scent, color and of course taste. I like the words of your poem and the ending. It packed with message. Which you told beautifully
"Who grow this cherished exotic fruit;
Humanity’s ultimate conquest"
I love this acrostic poem. I like the beautiful images you have painted here. I like how each line started with the letters.
I think you can bold first letters of each line. It would be interesting.
I like the story of a sad princess who was heartless and proud. Your rhyming is pleasing to the ear. I like rhyming poems.
You said beautifully
“He offered his love but she refused,
Within herself she felt emotions confused”
It is fun reading. We usually see that fairy tale ended with happy ending. The characters are usually humble, innocent, or kind-hearted. But you wrote this from different points of view.
I think you can add some events to make it more interesting. Otherwise, it’s a beautiful poem.
I like how you sketched the character. It’s interesting to think about. Your story followed the prompt Fairy Tale Blues.
I like this sweet poem. The poem is short and still filled with hopes. I like the beautiful picture you have painted here. I like the colors and sounds and smells and feelings you used to create the images.
"April showers bring may flowers,
This is what they say.
I sit and smile instead of glower,
As I think of flowers and play."
The memory of April showers pleases your heart.
The tones I find in this poem are cheerful, and positive. You have nice rhyming.
I am still love with fairy-tales. I like this swinging fairy poem. Your imagination gives so much life to this poem. I like the vivid picture you have painted here.
FINAL THOUGHT: you are a good storyteller. I appreciate the way you are telling this story.
This review reflects my opinion only, and I am not a writing expert.
FIRST IMPRESSION: This is a good poem. Wonderfully told. I especially liked the way you tell your story.
THE POEM: This is a story of an old man who received letter from a dyeing friend. I like how you sketched the character. The poem is significant not only the words but also the rhyming. It has good message. I enjoy the scents, and colors of this poem.
MY FAVORITE:
"I gave God praise for using me as His vessel in this life.
If only more would know God's love there'd be less pain and strife."
First I want to welcome you in WDC. This review reflects my opinion only, and I am not a writing expert. I do hope you find something that is interesting or helpful to you.
Humorous ending!! I like the way you told this story. I like the suspense. I think you can make a bigger piece from that piece. That would be interesting.
You are a good storyteller.
I can’t wait to read another story from you. I enjoyed it reading.
I found your poem in the read and review page. It's been a pleasure to review your poem"Shadow Walks" on behalf of "The WDC Angel Army"
TITLE:This is a beautiful picture. Your words gave so much life to this picture. I like title as well. It fits this poem.
IMAGERY:I like the beautiful image of a dog you have sketched here. The dog whose paws too big for gangly legs. The descriptions are vivid and artistic.
THE POEM:The poem is about a dog who chases after waves returning in hopes that she will once more be there. Your rhyming is pleasing. The tone is soothing to the ear.
RHYTHM:Your poem has good rhythm. It flowed beautifully.
STRUCTURE & FORM:you have beautiful thoughts inside every line.
THEME: I could imagine the scene. .
OVERALL IMPRESSION :I enjoyed your poem. It followed the prompt.
First I want to welcome you in WDC. This review reflects my opinion only, and I am not a writing expert.
This is a good poem for self-help. Your words are true that nobody hand us success. Your poem tells, that we should believe our own strength to go on with life. Only hope, courage and determination helps us to go forward. I feel this poem is positive.
I think you need to change the line “That one day i will definatly SHINE” to “That one day I will defiantly shine.”
FINAL THOUGHT:I appreciate the way you are telling this story.
I like reading this thoughtful science piece. The concept is unique. This piece is very informative, helpful and well written. I learn what an Earth ship is and how it does work.
It is high time for all of us to think of it to save our planet.
I like the descriptions as well. Thank you for sharing your work and the link.
Patrick, I enjoyed reading your poem very much. It describes beautifully a lot of problems that our mother earth faces now. I like the rhyming of your poem; it flowed beautifully with your crafted words. Earth is the only planet we live together. But we are destroying our mother nature. We don’t even think what will happen to our future generations.
You are telling beautifully by those lines
“I fear one day that when I awake the sky will all be gray.
No natures sounds and I will know the earth died on that day.”
This review reflects my opinion only, and I am not a writing expert. I do hope you find something that is interesting to you.
First Impression: I really liked your poem, You beautifully painted lovely nature picture.
What I like: This is a poem about uniqueness of nature. I like the way you crafted.
“Golden needles shower” “waves crashing” “morning air” “flower” all the things blended together creates a lovely nature scene. I like the colors and shapes, sounds, smells, touch, and feelings you used to create the images. I could imagine the scene.
Yes, being with nature is a wonderful thing.
Final thought: I feel that it wrote from life experience, senses and emotions, and it looks great!! I especially like the last stanza.
“Remember this one day you'll die all the toys just left behind
While missing out on the gifts God gave in love for you to find”
I just read your poem from read and review page. Beautifully started with the lines ""You expected to be sad in the fall." I like your poem. Your words are so pure and true. I feel the sadness laced in this poem.
I like your melodrama. I like how you contrast different people’s different point of view. Each of them the wife, the man and the neighbor has different personality. Yes, people think and behave differently from one another. I found it reflected in your story.
I like the rich and smooth flow of your writing.
Overall, it's a good story and I enjoyed it a lot!
FINAL THOUGHT: you are a good storyteller. I appreciate the way you are telling this story.
I can’t wait to read another story from you. I enjoyed it reading.
This review reflects my opinion only, and I am not a writing expert. I do hope you find something that is interesting to you.
FIRST IMPRESSION: It’s a wonderful story written with the prompt “It was just another day, same as always “. Beautifully told and written. It flowed beautifully with your well-crafted words. I like the suspense builds through this story. It makes the readers worry about your main character.
WHAT I LIKED: I liked the description and the presentation of your story. I like the title as well it fits the story.
DIALOGUES: Dialogue floated normally between the characters and I could imagine the scenes where they are.
CHARACTERS: All the characters are well developed. You crafted all so beautifully.
It’s really a chilling horror story. Thanks for sharing your awesome work with us.
First I want to welcome you in WDC. This review reflects my opinion only, and I am not a writing expert. I do hope you find something that is interesting or helpful to you.
I like this poem. Your words are so pure and true. I understand you wrote this poem inspired by a movie and it looks great. Though I found some lines are really long but I like your words. Your poem packed with message. I like the combination.
Good story. So, informative. I think you need paragraph breaks between segments of a story. You can use writing ML to make this story more interesting.
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