Hi!
I want to welcome you to WDC and thought I would give you some feedback on your work.
This a a good start of an interesting piece. Beautifully told.
Life has so many obstacles. Some of us struggle to move forward to leave the the past behind. But some us cannot do this. Some want to get stuck in the past.
I like the lines " Ok this is to heavy, time to drop them bags off. But where do i start. With the root, the root of unforgiveness and hatred bitterness. I carried this junk, weighted down."
I like this sweet little poem because each stanza is beautiful. It has lovely romantic thought crafted inside every line. I like the way you put your feelings into words. It is vivid and artistic. My favorite line "an ethereal pixelated image,
aching for the real thing."
I like the your thought process. It's real to life.
I just read this beautiful nature poem. I like this poem because of the beautifully crafted words. You painted a pretty picture. You described the beauty of the snow fall with some good words choice. You could think you are a part of the nature. I like the last line
“Not at the ice cream flakes around,
but at the Southerners homebound by snowy glare.”
I just read this from read and review page. I like your story. It has lovely romantic thoughts. All the characters are well developed and understandable. The dialogue floated wonderfully through the characters. I like the character Max. Your story give readers a glimpse into someone’s inner life. I like the descriptions and presentations.
This is my opinions only and I am not an writing expert.
I am sending you a review of your story. This review reflects my opinion only, and I am not a writing expert.
I like this spooky story. The descriptions and presentation are vivid. It really terrifying. The way you wrote it keeps me reading it to the end. I like the smallest details of your story.
My favorite part
"Some were laughing, some crying; others hollering and calling out for people I never knew. They swarmed around me--they became the fog. Then they began to swirl and take on shape, dancing above the sea. I rubbed my eyes and backed away."
I want to welcome you to WDC and thought I would give you some feedback on your work"BE KIND ENOUGH TO CARE" .
This is good poem. I like the point "to be kind and do good without having expectations."
In this article, you told to appreciate the presence of people around us. We the human have many responsibilities toward others. We are fortunate that we are living in a time of technology. We can help people around us.
Sadly, values of co-existence eroding fast creating spaces for selfishness. You truly said “Be there for people when they feel lonely, let them have a crying shoulder when they need it”. Yes, It cost nothing but to give great pleasure in one’s mind.
You penned down all your thoughts so beautifully. I like the inspirational words of this piece.
Overall: a thoughtful piece. It speaks about humanity. It said we need compassion towards each other to make this world better place.
Thanks for sharing it with us. It's pleasure to know someone like you.
Keep writing!
TITLE:I like this nature poem and the title as well.
IMAGERY:I like the beautiful images you have sketched here. The descriptions are well written and very vivid and artistic.
RHYMING & REPETITION:Your rhyming is pleasing to the ear(a.a.b.b).
I like rhyming poems. The tone I found this poem is cheerful and soothing.
RHYTHM:Your poem has good rhythm. It flowed beautifully like the floating sea.
STRUCTURE & FORM:you have beautiful thoughts inside every line.
THEME: I enjoy the scents, colors and sounds of the this poem. It reflects the poets love of ocean. Sea water delights us and inspires us which reflects in your poem. I like the descriptions.
OVERALL IMPRESSION :I enjoyed your poem. It’s well written.
Thanks for sharing it with us. It's pleasure to know someone like you.
Keep writing!
I an sending a review to your story. This is a very sweet story about a old women who tried to buy ink. You did very good at moving the story toward a happy ending. I like the dialogues.
I think you need some descriptions to your character. You can give a name to your character "The old Women" to make it more interesting. Otherwise this is a good story.
I just read your poem. I like the beautiful images you have painted here. This poem is unique and flows beautifully with your crafted words. Your rhyming scheme makes this poem more interesting and brighter. The way you wrote this poem keeps me reading it from the beginning to the end. I like how each like breaks.
I am not an writing expert this is my views only. Thank you sharing, I enjoyed it.
I just read your poem. Your poem has lovely romantic thought inside every line. Love should be like that! I like the way you put your feelings into words. The descriptions are well written and very vivid. Thank you for sharing.
I just read your poem. I like the concept and title as well. We all experience depression. You truly said Drowning in a sea of angels Choking on laughter and smiles. I like the images you have painted in your poem. You have beautiful message inside every line. I like the stanza
"Directions say left
Turning right.
Victory guaranteed
Too bored to fight."
Beautiful and thoughtful poem. Thank you for sharing!
I just read your poem. The title caught my eyes. I like the way you are telling your story. I like how each line breaks. I feel the sadness woven inside your poem. My favorite line
"If you're never satisfied with what you already have,
if you don't stop reaching for what you can't grab,
what you think you want could be your very ruin.
You don't know what you've got until it's gone."
I just read your circus story. This is beautifully told with some good words choice. The dialogues floated beautifully between the characters. I like the character SAM. The way you wrote it keeps me reading it to the end.
I think you can make bigger story from everything I just read. It would be interesting.
I just read your poem. I like this story, and how you contrast the two worlds. The tone of the poem I found soothing. Your rhyming scheme End Rhyme ABCB makes this poem brighter.
Good start. I like the simplicity of your writing and the way you put down your feelings.
I too is not a professional writer. But I like writing because I think it is best way to express ourselves, organize our thoughts and emotions and ideas with others.
My second language is English. I keep writing everyday to be master in writing. Now, I feel that my writing in English becomes good after coming here.
I found some good points in your writing “But whatever it is, Im kind of feeling happy when im writing this. Even Im nervous i also feel happy and blissful.”
Suggestion: I think you need corrections some of the places for example:” When i start writing my heart always felt a relief that i never feeled.” Capitalized all the I’s and otherwise it is wonderful.
I understood this was written from personal experience and it looks great. I like the thought woven in this piece. Beautifully told and written. Thanks for sharing your story with us. It's pleasure to know someone like you.
I want to welcome you to WDC and thought I would give you some feedback on your work.
This is good thoughtful poem. I like the way you wrote this. I liked the concept as well. The images are vivid and artistic that keeps the readers to read it at the end. I do hope you find something that is interesting to you.
The poem: In this poem, you told about time. you said that time never stays. Beautifully started with the lines “I ponder oft this currency called Time That spends itself e’en as I write this rhyme.”
Yes, time always runs and runs without stoppage. It never waits for anyone. It is so precious than gold. Which you told with these lines “How best to spend this precious, waning gold; It glitters best in passion of sweet labor, We should the value and respect the importance of time every single moment. We should remember if time once lost it never retrieve.
I like the little rhyming of your poem and the meaning it has. I sometimes find it difficult to rhyming my poems.
Though I am not expert but It seems you have used punctuations marks where they are needed.
Overall: Your poem floated beautifully. It tells we need to use the time properly.
Beautifully told and written. Thanks for sharing your story with us.
I'm reviewing for the Review Challenge for February"Just Answer the Question II" . I want to welcome you to WDC and thought I would give you some feedback on your work.
I like this story, and the way you told. The title caught my eye. I don't how to express my feelings after read this article. I am touched by your articles. I understand you wrote this from personal experience and it looks great.
The story is about a 90 year mother-in-law Elsie who has dementia for the past five years. You share your knowledge, experiences with good examples. It keeps me reading it to the end.
I enjoyed it reading. Thank you for sharing! I learned about the behaviors of dementia patients.
I'm reviewing for the Review Challenge for February"The WDC Angel Army" . I want to welcome you to WDC and thought I would give you some feedback on your work.
This is a good piece of write. Beautifully told about despair and depression.
Inner fear disrupts our activities. I like the lines of your piece
"Wallow not in fake remorse
I was always set upon this course
Tears will dry,Smiles disappear
I could not defeat my inner fear"
Suggestion: In second and last stanza you need one space after the punctuation mark “comma”.
It is well written thoughtful piece. I enjoyed it reading. Thank you for sharing!
I'm reviewing for the Review Challenge for February"The WDC Angel Army" . I want to welcome you to WDC and thought I would give you some feedback on your work.
This is a good piece of write. The title caught my eyes.
This is a good poem. Yes, love should be like that! Your poem has lovely romantic thought inside every line. I could feel the sense of sadness woven in your poem. I like the way you put your feelings into words.
Favorite lines: “and that it doesn't hurt me
i miss you teasing me”
Suggestion: I think you need to capitalize all the first letters of your poem. For example “i still wear your shirt i say i don't care” should be “I”
It is beautiful poem. I enjoyed it reading. Thank you for sharing! Keep Writing!
I am sending you a review of your story, "My Mother Came Back" for the Review Challenge for February. This review reflects my opinion only, and I am not a writing expert. I do hope you find something that is interesting to you.
The title caught my eye.
FIRST IMPRESSION:This is good story. Beautifully told and written. I like the way you wrote this story.
THE STORY:This story is about a 13 year kid Rain whose mother left her when he was just 6. She worked in his dad's coffee shop, La Coffee. One day while Rain was doing her homework she heard a quiet tapping on her window. …
SETTING: In a modern time.
CHARACTERS:All the characters well developed. I like the character Rain.
DIALOG: Dialogue floated normally between the characters .
OVERALL IMPRESSION: Wonderful story. I enjoyed it reading.
I want to welcome you to WDC and thought I would give you some feedback on your work"Successful Life" . I strive to give honest reviews and I hope you find this review helpful.
This is good piece of write with points how to be successful in life. I liked the concept.
I like the descriptions and presentations. The way you wrote this piece keeps me reading it to the end. Your points are short and to the point. Each points it very true. Yes, the most important and basic of success is to belief on Almighty Allah. Nothing can achieve without believing our creator. We always be mindful of Allah so that we may prosper.
Another important point of success is to set the right goals.
Beautifully told and written. Thank you for sharing!
I'm reviewing for the Review Challenge for February"The WDC Angel Army" . I want to welcome you to WDC and thought I would give you some feedback on your work.{/b}
I just read this beautiful poem. I like how your poem starts with onomatopoeia words. This poem flowed beautifully with your crafted words. You beautifully painted the images of cemetery with some good words choice. The images are vivid and artictic.
“A peaceful wind gently rustles through the grass,”
“Darkness encompasses the tall stones” “Her white dress drapes over the blades of grass
Leading spectators away” All the snapshots beautifully expressed in words.
It is well written thoughtful piece. I enjoyed it reading. Thank you for sharing!
I'm reviewing your story "The Pulse" for the Review Challenge for February""Anxiety" ”
I like the quote, "Nothing diminishes ANXIETY faster than action" - Walter Anderson
Which reflects in your thoughtful poem. We all experience anxiety. You truly said nothing but our actions only lessen our anxiety. We must accept anxiety as a part of our life . This poem gives me the positive that we all need to go on with life.
I like the images you have painted in your poem. The descriptions are well written and very vivid and artistic. It told beautifully that our action reduces anxiety.
I'm reviewing for the Review Challenge for February"The WDC Angel Army" . I want to welcome you to WDC and thought I would give you some feedback on your work.
This is a good piece of write. The title caught my eyes.
This is a good poem. It is so true of life today. Even little children today do not have time to stand and stare, to look at nature because of their busy schedule. I like the words. I like the images you have painted.
My favorite lines
“Will we have time?
If we stand here waiting,
for the roar of springtime
is coming in full swing.”
It is well written thoughtful piece. I enjoyed it reading. Thank you for sharing!
I'm reviewing for the Review Challenge for February"The WDC Angel Army" . I want to welcome you to WDC and thought I would give you some feedback on your work.
This is a good piece of write. The title caught my eyes.
First, I feel sorry to hear your aunt death.
I love this poem because it captures something poignant – and true.
When a loved one dies an emotional feelings surrounded our mind. Which reflects in your poem. You express your sorrow in deep, powerful ways. Crafted beautifully with your words. For example “Our sorrows will turn tomorrow’s into sweet memories for a life time remembering all the joyous moments hilarious and wisdom that they leave behind as their legacy”
Suggestion : I found some of the lines of your poem are too long. I learned that The length of the lines and the line breaks are important.
May your aunt’s soul rest upon in peace.
It is well written thoughtful piece. I enjoyed it reading. Thank you for sharing!
Mina
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This is good poem. I like the point "to be kind and do good without having expectations." 
