Good poem about war. Your poem flowed beautifully with your crafted words. I like the emotion evokes in this poem.
I liked the concept as well. You have good rhyming. My favorite are last four lines
"The soldier has gone
as for mom you’ll now see
two gardens she tends
one’s hers - one’s for me "
It's been a pleasure to review your poem. This review reflects my opinion only, and I am not a writing expert.
This is a good poem about a black cat and his thinking's. The poem caught beautifully the cat’s thoughts. You paint nicely a flawed character. I think people hate black cats because of superstitious . Some thought they are symbol of bad lucks.
Though here in my country, we didn’t think or consider black cats are associated with luck or unluck. We only hates black mosquitoes.
I like the thoughts woven in this poem that keeps me reading it to the end.
This is good poem and so thoughtful. It packed with messages. I really liked the way you put out your feelings. I appreciate the simplicity. You have good rhyming. The words are so true.
I like the lines “Can you give:
A moment of your time?
Without expectation of any reward?
Without any hidden strings attached?.”
A good story. Beautifully written. You have sketched flawed characters I especially like the character "Timothy" . I like the mystery. Your descriptions are clear.
I love the way the story ended. You have sketched wonderfully some flawed characters like Caroline . The plot's neat too. The way you wrote makes me reading your story to the end.
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I like this thoughtful piece, Yes, it is true that when we are in trouble parents are always there for us. They are the best friend of ours. They always gives us honest opinions.
This is a lovely poem nature. The plot is extremely simple and yet filled with hope.
The tones I find in this poem is soothing. I feel this poem is positive, beautiful. You have good rhyming.
My favorite lines
The flowers in their beds are drenched
And their thirsts been fully quenched
Humorous ending. I really appreciated the way you end it. You paint a wonderfully the sneaky little dog characters. I like the lines” It really doesn't matter if a thief has two or four legs, because stealing is stealing, and that's just plain wrong! “ It’s interesting to think. I truly enjoyed this story.
This is good piece of write. You expressed beautifully the romantic thoughts in limited words. I like the way you put down your feelings. It's interesting to think about.
I just read "The Moon Followed Me Home" when I came across read and review page.
This is beautiful poem about moonlight. I appreciate the simplicity of this poem. You paint beautifully the stunning picture of nature. Yes, moonlight always cherish our heart. I once wrote a poem here about moonlight. My favorite lines
" Her light shone on the hills.
Her light cast shadows of the trees.
Her light danced and skipped on the sea,"
I really liked the way you put out your feelings. Thank you for sharing your work! Keep writing.
This is an amazing story, it is packed with message...I liked the way you told the story. Writing a story for children is a challenging job. But you wrote this beautifully. I especially like the ending of the story and the beautiful image of Teddy Bears you put here. I think children will love this.
I just read "Fall Into You" when I came across read and review page.
This is a beautiful poem about love and relation. The title fits your poem.
I like the emotions evokes in this poem. I like how you put your feelings into words.
I like the repeated lines
Keep believeing in our wanting
It makes me realize that love haunt lovers forever. The tone is filled with melancholy but soothing to the ear. I think spelling believeing should be believing. Otherwise, Its a beautiful poem.
I really liked the way you put out your feelings. Thank you for sharing your work! Keep writing.
I just read "Wherever I Go" when I came across read and review page.
This is a beautiful lyrics about exploring the nature of love. You poured beautifully sweet and tender emotions. It reminds me the song Wherever I Go.
The title fits your poem. I like how you put your feelings into words. I like the rhythm it has. The chorus part is my favourite
"There are times when I think of you
Maybe because I really miss you so.."
I really liked the way you put out your feelings. Thank you for sharing your work! Keep writing.
I was impressed by the way you wrote all this. I like the way you told your story. I like the description. I think you can make bigger story from everything I just read. It would be very interesting. Thank you for sharing.
This is a beautiful poem about exploring the nature of love..You poured beautifully sweet and tender emotions. The title fits your poem. I like the imaginary and the vivid words. You expressed beautifully feelings through words. For example “You are the mystery, you are the chameleon,
With so many faces, across the day and night.”
And “You, the mirage of a soul's desert,
Ah you, the humans' deepest mystery,”
I like the rhyming. The tone is filled with melancholy but soothing that makes me read your poem to the end.
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This is a beautiful poem about love and heartache.. The title fits your poem.
I like the thoughts evokes in this poem. I like how you put your feelings into words. You displayed beautifully the forms and stages of our emotions.
“My life, it was defined to be,
The angel of your health.
And even here, abandonedly,
From heaven, to this HELL,”
The last stanza makes me realize that love haunt lovers forever which I find in the last lines “The warmth of your strong memory is drying tears that fell
As I must cry...
Farewell”
I like the rhyming. The tone is filled with melancholy but soothing that makes me read your poem to the end.
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I like this piece. It is so informative. Yes, Plastic production increased dramatically worldwide over the last 60 years. It is the most popular packing materials all over the world.
But plastic trapped in the pipes and drains and causes water logging.
I really like reading this piece. The title fits your story. Thank you for sharing the links.
I like this poem. It has good message. I like the thoughts woven in this poem. Your words are so true and inspirational. I like the last stanza
"I want to walk through verdant forests,
among the giant redwood trees,
listening to the chant of the breeze,
intoning Mother Earth's gratitude
for the blessing of the Almighty."
I find this poem is positive and soothing tone. Thank you for sharing Neva.
First I want to welcome you in WDC. This review reflects my opinion only, and I am not a writing expert. I do hope you find something that is interesting or helpful to you.
A very good poem about passion in life. You have written a very good piece of poem, I really liked the way you put out your feelings. I appreciate the simplicity. I like the little rhyming. The words are so true. I like the lines
“I go back to my life
I wake from my dream
There is no fire, no rush
Perhaps this is it I think
A wheel, repeating,
A circle that can never reach
A certain point of destiny”
It's been a pleasure to review your story "Dear Me" on behalf of "The WDC Angel Army" from read and review page.
This was a very good letter! I enjoyed reading it. It has wonderful message. The words are so true. I especially like part "And please, please, please, don’t compare yourself to other writers! You cannot be anything other than who you are. You have your own unique experiences and ways of perceiving this complex world. Find your unique voice".
Yes, I believe everyone is unique. I do hope you listen to your inner voice.
Beautifully written, clever, great use of emoticons. I love the way the story ended. You've perfectly matched it. I appreciate the emoticons you used here in this story. It really speak the words. The way you told this keeps me reading it to the end.
I especially like the part “Jake was a very big part of this event. We didn't want any sibling rivalry and had tried to include him in as much as possible. He had packed the diaper bag with a, a , , , , and a . I think the last one was for him.”
I want to thank Angel Army "The WDC Angel Army" for giving such a challenging prompt for writing.
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You paint a beautiful picture of farms people on a warm summer night after their chores. I like the enchanted beauty you have painted here. “cool breeze through the arbor leaves “ “crickets sing “ “stars glow “ “A boy, a dog “ “back porch light “ all things blended together made a beautiful canvas of summer night. I like the title and the peaceful rhythms it has. My favorite line
“But on the porch, it’s far away,
Far as the chores of another day,”
I read your inspirational poem. I like the words and the emotion evokes in this poem. Your words are so true. It has good message. I like the second stanza.
these are my thoughts and ideas alone. Thank you for allowing me to read and review your writing. Keep up the good work, and best of luck with all of your writing.
Happy writing
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, great use of emoticons
. I love the way the story ended
. You've perfectly matched it. I appreciate the emoticons you used here in this story
. It really speak the words
. The way you told this keeps me reading it to the end. 
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. It's fun reading 