First I want to welcome you in WDC. This review reflects my opinion only, and I am not a writing expert. I do hope you find something that is interesting or helpful to you.
This is a good piece of write and so thoughtful. Wonderfully told about the benefits of parenting. I especially liked the way you tell your story.
Parents are blessings. You truly said that Life gives us different challenges but parents are the shelter for him in this world of materialism. I agree with you.
This is a beautiful written for Megan's April Prince Challenge in 2019 to pay tribute to the Prince . It's been a pleasure to review your poem "Cold Piano Keys" on behalf of "The WDC Angel Army" . This review reflects my opinion only, and I am not a writing expert.
The poet tribute to her favorite star by writing a poem with the song titles Baltimore, Sometimes It Snows in April, Purple Rain, When Doves Cry, Under The Cherry Moon in his poem. His songs have filled her heart since the poet was young.
The main image is wonderful. I like the thoughts evokes of this poem. The title Cold Piano Keys fits this poem.
My favorite lines
“Feel us lift his spirit to the sky,
with lingering half-notes in the distance
calling us in 3/4 time
to ride our childhood bikes home”
It's been a pleasure to review your story "TV Shows of The 60's" on behalf of "The WDC Angel Army" . This review reflects my opinion only, and I am not a writing expert.
In the poem, the poet reminisce the TV shows of 60's. Her love of 60’s shows Dark Shadows, Gilligan's Island, Green Acres and Peyton Place are still imprinted on her mind and heart which she tells by this line “My memories of the 60's will be with me when I fall asleep and face the morning light.” She could remember the days of Min skirts, trolls, Go-Go Boots, Beatles hair cut styles .
I think this poem would make the readers of 60’s nostalgic. I like the images the poet have painted here.
I really liked the way the poet put out her feelings.
The words are so true that keeps me reading your poem to the end. It has good rhythm and flowed beautifully with your crafted words. I like the humorous ending and the way the poet displayed life.
This review reflects my opinion only, and I am not a writing expert. I do hope you find something that is interesting or helpful to you.
Poetry has always been one of my favorite genre. People expressed their feelings through poetry. It’s like a condensed story of mind. And I believe that It's a great thing of calmness. As readers, sometime I read poems again and again, trying to understand the deepest meaning of it.
I really liked the way you put out your feelings. Every words are so true, emotional and nice rhythm. I like the stanza
“People forgotten, prisoners of time,
We're left never really saying goodbye,”
I just read a chapter of your story about the little bat. It’s a good story. It’s been pleasure to review "Little Bat" on behalf of The Angel Army.
This story is well written and told. Writing stories for children is a challenge. I think your story could grab the children to reading it to the end.
You have good imagination, the dialogues are rich. It make the children feel like they are traveling with the little bat. You crafted the character bat so beautifully.
FINAL THOUGHT: You are a good storyteller. I appreciate the way you are telling this story.
I found your name on the public review page. It's been a pleasure to review your story "Home Sweet Home" as part of my assignment for "The WDC Angel Army" . This review reflects my opinion only, and I am not a writing expert.
TITLE: The title “Home Sweet Home” fits your story.
FIRST IMPRESSION: This is good tragic story about a soldier. I like the character Charlie. You painted him beautifully.
The STORY: Charlie was a soldier. He was infected by a virus developed his the enemies. The virus created bad effects on his cell tissue as well his mind. I appreciate Charlie’s courage even though he was in a awful situation.
RHYTHM: Your story has good rhythm. It flowed beautifully.
PLOTLINE: You have interesting plot line. I like the descriptions and how the story ended.
It's been a pleasure to review your story "The Flower I Was." on behalf of "The WDC Angel Army" . This review reflects my opinion only, and I am not a writing expert.
This is a sweet poem written from the point of a flower. Beautifully praising the marvels of nature for example The kids walk by splashing puddles, wearing boots.
The meaning is deep that keeps me reading it to the end. I especially liked the lines
“I am just a flower and one day I will die.
Until then I'll pretend I can fly just like the birds in the sky.”
It's been a pleasure to review your story "The Flower I Was." on behalf of "The WDC Angel Army" . This review reflects my opinion only, and I am not a writing expert.
This is a sweet poem written from the point of a flower. Beautifully painted with praising the marvels of nature. The meaning is deep. I especially liked the lines
“I am just a flower and one day I will die.
Until then I'll pretend I can fly just like the birds in the sky.”
You paint a wonderful picture of a rainy day when the little children played with a small wooden boat. It has nice rhythm.
The tones I find in this poem is soothing. It makes me nostalgic.
I like this story poem. The narrative is great that makes me reading it to the end.. I could imagine where they are. You paints a nice picture of nature and the two boys Eric and Derek.
I admire the sound words choice (onomatopoeia )and the images you have used here.
“CRACK, then again, like the strike of a snake,
the old oak shed a branch from it's top,
while warning the boys with the sound of its break,
before hitting them both with a PLOP!”
In conclusion, it is a very good poem . The tone is quiet and very melodic.
First I want to welcome you in WDC. This review reflects my opinion only, and I am not a writing expert. I do hope you find something that is interesting or helpful to you.
Yes, It's hard to let go of the person people truly love. You have written a very good piece of poem, I really liked the way you put your feeling out. I appreciate the simplicity. The words are sad but still filled with hope.
This review reflects my opinion only, and I am not a writing expert. I do hope you find something that is interesting or helpful to you.
You have wrote a charming poem of Zimbabwe Rain with sourcing heat and clouds of indigo and blue that swallowing the hills and creeping up the valley. Make the whole earth dancing with their melodies. You paints a beautiful picture of a rainy day.
I just read a chapter of Lou Ryan's new case told in first person views. It's been a pleasure to review your story "No Appointment Necessary" on behalf of "The WDC Angel Army" . This review reflects my opinion only, and I am not a writing expert.
TITLE:The title fits this story.
FIRST IMPRESSION: This is good story. great characters, and an interesting plot-line. I like the suspense of the story.
THE STORY: Lou Ryan's was a private detective. He works in Lou Ryan detective agency. Lou Ryan's prepared himself to stand up for justice. In this story you paints him beautifully.
SETTING:In a modern time. CHARACTERS:All the characters well developed. I like the character Lou Ryan's.
DIALOG: Dialogue floated normally between the characters .
OVERALL IMPRESSION: Wonderful story. I enjoyed it reading.
I just read this piece. I appreciate the way narrator’s displayed life with nature. The descriptions are vivid and so artistic. The words are so thoughtful and so true. It expressed beautifully the narrator’s love for the nature.
It seemed that he felt as he is part of nature which he told in those lines “I do invite you join me in the grass. Feel the sun on your body, the life tickling your skin. Hear me emoting with nature. Gaze into our eyes and join us. Intuit the ultimate in life, love, nature, touch and ecstasy, as we entwine with nature and each other, and as we are taken over by the ecstasy”
Yes, being with nature is really wonderful . They give pleasure to our heart.
Informative piece about the waste in our oceans. I liked the concept.
This is a good piece of write and so informative. The descriptions are vivid and so descriptive.
Yes, because of low production cost and their lightness, durability, and resistance people like plastic. Plastics are a part of our daily live. But nowadays they becomes a threat. It not only threat for people but also every marine life. I hope a day will come when all of us will start caring about the environment and nature.
I think the bigger fonts will make this piece more interesting. You can use writing ML. Otherwise, this a wonderful piece.
First impression: Good story. Beautifully written.
Suggestion:I learned that a story without enough description is missing something. So, I think in some places you need to give some descriptions. You need to put the dialogues in quotations marks. Otherwise it’s a beautiful story. The way you wrote keeps me reading it to the end.
Yes, I believe that the full moon affects our mood of human mind. I learned that it associated with our behavior.
I like this story, and how you paints beautifully a midnight picture. The descriptions are vivid and artistic that keeps me reading it to the end. I like way you told your story.
FIRST IMPRESSION: It is really a good read! The descriptions are well written.
RHYMING & REPETITION: The free verse story poem flowed well.
The tone I found is cheerful and soothing .
RHYTHM:It has good rhythm.
MY FAVORITE:And then, beside me, meowing in the wilderness
a stray kitten (tiny contradiction in evolution)
THEME: It seems you wrote this poem with some given words picnic basket, warm lemonade -, out of ice cubes, a stray kitten. You used them beautifully in your poem. I enjoy the scents, colors, sound of this poem.
OVERALL IMPRESSION :I enjoyed your poem.
It's been a pleasure to review your story "The Picnic" on behalf of "The WDC Angel Army" . This review reflects my opinion only, and I am not a writing expert.
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TITLE: The title “Home Sweet Home” fits your story.
The STORY: Charlie was a soldier. He was infected by a virus developed his the enemies. The virus created bad effects on his cell tissue as well his mind. I appreciate Charlie’s courage even though he was in a awful situation. 
