Dearest Ken,
Happy Columbus Day! I can't (and can) believe you have over 1100 community recognitions. What a great contribution you are making to WDC. I, on the other hand, have all but disappeared. School has taken a front seat in my mind and life, leaving little room for thought beyond lesson plans. That's okay because teaching gives me the paycheck that pays the bills allowing my daughters to go to college and become a veterinarian, a Combat Systems Officer in the Air Force, and a yet-to-be determined calling. Ha ha.
But I did see your challenge this morning and I had to take advantage of it. (A three-day weekend gives me a little room for extracurricular thought.) The mention of the Redskins was an added incentive. Many of my relatives are big fans, so when they are not playing Denver, I too will pull for them.
As to your poem, "Under the Sign of the Wolf," there are phrases in it I truly love and then some I feel could be stronger, to be consistent with the poetic language throughout - unless changing the flow was intentional. My two favorite lines or phrases are these:
An hourglass perches
on one corner,
the sand lying motionless
as if time has stopped.
and,
A framed picture of a wolf,
singing its silent song
to a moon that never sets,
I love how you have created the images in my mind.
The two parts I feel could be strengthened are:
I perch, owl like,
on the edge of my swivel chair,
as my mind absorbs
the puzzle pieces that surround me.
and,
The clank of spray cans,
the sharp tang of paint,
the movement as I watched
deft strokes cage this creature of the night.
I understand what you are saying there, but the images created in my mind, at least, are not as strong. The words, to me, are not as convincing. Overall, it is a strong piece, but the choices for words could be stronger in parts.
I hope you are well!
Hugs,
Colleen
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