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Review of Sentimentality  
Review by bob county
Rated: ASR | (5.0)



The pearl of immeasurable value. I am reminded of a toy solder
my dad put in the knoll of his pear tree. It was a tradition he picked
up from his dad. Celtic lore believes the tree's have old souls.
It is respectful to offer them a gift. In turn they will give you a wish.
Silly, but sentimental.

Your tribute is perfect.

Bob
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Review by bob county
Rated: E | (5.0)


Hats are fun. There use to be a time when everyone wore hats.
Now, I just wear a baseball cap. This is a cute lyric.
My favorite part of Easter was watching the ladies parade around
in their Easter dresses and bonnets. I guess that dates me.

Loved your sap shot!

Bob
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Review by bob county
Rated: E | (5.0)


When the wind is in the tree.
It makes a noise like the sea.
As if there were not noise enough.
To draw the sea men back to the surf.

Such is the turmoil of the forlorn.
What strikes me about your little capsule,
is how true love can be postponed.
There are so many obstacles and so little time.

Nice work.
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Review by bob county
Rated: ASR | (5.0)



Passages we must make. It is so true; the elderly are ignored.
My mother was a vibrant artist, then the smoking caught up with her.
We just can't forget how important hospital visits are. It keeps the
spirits up.

Bob

Keep writing!
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Review of Presents  
Review by bob county
Rated: E | (5.0)


Honest to God this is perfect. It reminds of the dual nature of God
in Gnostic Gospels. Try explaining that to a Nun with a slap happy
ruler.

Sometimes, I go on an internet date and wonder, "Could I fall in love?
Then as we drive pass a dumpster; I visualize tossing my date in it."
It's the mindless savage in us all. Right?

Bob
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Review of Lost Dreams  
Review by bob county
Rated: E | (4.5)


The story is a creation with a beginning and an end.
I had a debate on this assertion with Asherman.
This story has little action in it, but evokes a strong emotion.
How to be Free Men in a closed society?
Slavery was never abolished. It was given a new name "indentured servant."
If you have a debt; you are a slave to your debtor. +

Most peculiar you had to use a phrase. Not even writing can be free.
Dr. Fred Hoyle described life as a series of fields;

"There is the nuclear field that binds all atomic nuclei.
There is the electro-magnetic field that enables atoms
to absorb light.
There is the gravitational field that holds the stars and
galaxies together.
And there is the creation field that causes matter to originate."

I say there is also the Chaos Field. That allows Free Will.
But, this is far from the thrust of your story.
I think you created a smooth transition of events.

Bob
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Review of War is over  
Review by bob county
Rated: 13+ | (4.5)



I think this poem has good meter, but it sounds cleshe.
War as we know it is an extension of world politique.
It is also a hard topic to sell to readers. Most readers have
heard the about the evils of war and war profiteers.

"I wonder who won?
No one they are all gone." you write.

Well, did you know that short selling on Wall Street is driving up the price of oil?
The rise in oil prices has nothing to do with war in the middle east.
That's the Shell game.

Bob
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Review of Screams  
Review by bob county
Rated: 13+ | (5.0)



Once again this proves my belief that women are screwed.
Biology is not fare. It leaves women with all the responsibility.
Emotionally, this diary is stereotypical, but it is much more.
How do you explain away unnatural feeling? Love, knows
no boundaries. Very thought provoking.

Bob

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Review of Bitch  
Review by bob county
Rated: 18+ | (4.5)


Love is a chemical reaction. Emotion come from glands in our sexual organs
and brain. If I may give an example The Tit Finch will build and elaborate nest
like a ball hanging from a twig. This is done for the benefit of its chicks.
It is instinctual. The Tit would have more fun, playing with many lovers.
And so, we are all slaves to our instincts. But, somewhere in our logic we
can reason. Do I love or do I need to love? Do not allow yourself to be exploited.


Bob
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Review by bob county
Rated: 18+ | (5.0)


The typical polemic maintains the envy leads to despair, which can lead
to deviant behavior. I hope you are feeling happier.
I like to meditate. I'll get a copy of Man That You Fear; Marilyn Manson.
Don't be afraid to offend. This is the purpose and sacrifice of a poet.


Bob
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Review of Freedom?  
Review by bob county
Rated: 13+ | (5.0)


"The naked ape" I tremble at our barbarity.


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Review of Why now tarry?  
Review by bob county
Rated: 13+ | (5.0)



This is a well rhymed poem. Of course there are hypocrites in the Church.

Read my essay on: Wicked Popes.

What astonishes me is the blind resistance to reason that religious institution
still exert. Honestly, do you want to force women to give birth? How would
could that be accomplished? Sexual freedom to not a lite topic. But, more
prohibition laws are be written by religious officials.

How many more scandals do we need to read?
The pompous and pious have no where to hide.

A friendly advocate,

Bob
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Review of Einstein's Dream  
Review by bob county
Rated: E | (5.0)


"The least initial deviation from the truth is multiplied later a thousandfold."
Aristotle wrote in the fourth century B.C.
What is empirical truth? If I walk towards a door and do not open it; I will
slam into the door.
What is deductive reasoning? I know to some certainty what is on the other
side of the door.
What is the scientific method? The study of doors and objects for a more
consistent and precise application of doors.

I am offended, however, you may no mention of Fairies in your Mythological
Battle of the Gods. Fairies are supported in many UFO abduction accounts.
Look at the bug eyes hairless ET of UFO -ology. That's a Fairy.
The Bible stories of; Jacobs Ladder, Joshua stopping the Sun can be
interpreted as UFO encounters with Fairies.
Get a copy of Warner Brother's FATIMA; The Sun fell on the town of Fatima,
Portugal and there were cameras recording it. Sounds like a UFO to me.

There's a lot of truth to old folktales.

Bob
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Review by bob county
Rated: 13+ | (5.0)


Oh, so sweet! Just keep the quotes definable: he said.
Sometimes I like to use captions: Mr. Dad and Jr. Son.
Sex is of course a thrilling topic. How many sicoms are
written about getting it and not getting it?

Funny I never got a "birds and bees" father and son chat.
"I'm not paying for an abortion." dad said.

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Review of pouch poetry  
Review by bob county
Rated: E | (4.5)



Poetry is most always written in the present. It is highly concentrated: all
nonessential words have been left out so as to express the immediate
emotions. Verbs are time words. They carry the poem forward or backward.
What I found lacking in your poem was a sense of direction it had no subject.
This is my personal preference. Perhaps, you intended to create a limbo;
with no beginning or end?

They're many good images !

Bob
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Review of Vampire Origins  
Review by bob county
Rated: 13+ | (5.0)



This is a very jumpy village. Poor Lucy to be treated so rudely by the
parish priest and then to rise up as one of the undead. This is what
every parent fears. If you can't let the virginal daughter alone with the
Priest, what hope is there? I thought silver bullets were for Werewolves.
This is a new twist on old folklore. Man's carnal nature will not be tamed
in the village Dung.

Bob

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Review by bob county
Rated: 18+ | (5.0)



There is a house in New Orleans they call the "Rising Sun."
Many folk get angry with God, because the God thing isn't cutting it.
But all that God is-is in you. Where do you think you can from?
Every living thing is connected and was formed on this planet.
GIA, Zeus, Odin, these are words for the Source of Life.
Typically, when Christians question their faith they slip off into
demonology. If your told that any other faith is evil, what else could
you believe? I like Zen. It doesn't judge a tsunami .. It excepts it.
Do you believe God wants to destroy the world? Why? It is all God.


Obviously, your poem needs no grammar correction.
I, however, question its motives.

Hell, according to Nordic Myth is a place to be reborn after death.

Bob
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Review of Window  
Review by bob county
Rated: 18+ | (5.0)


What a sweet story. There is of course the interruption.
That creates suspense and an amusing confrontation.
But, the desire continues to a pleasant conclusion.
If you have a minute compare my cucumber tale to yours.
It never stops. That's what I like best about your story.
It as an open ending.


Bob
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Review by bob county
Rated: E | (5.0)


Back in the day folks got together to tell stories.
Mark Twain was a conman before he started to write.
"People will believe anything." he said. .. I guess the problem
with novels is most of us don't have the time read one.
Another publishing company has collapsed. Whose buying books?
Everything is a fad with suround sound. I went to see
"I am number 4" and kids were texting in the theater.
Maybe, someone will remember what this culture was doing.

I'm just too tired.


Bob
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Review by bob county
Rated: ASR | (5.0)


Wow! I didn't expect a sympathetic letter to Mumaur Quadafi.
I wrote a letter to the Pope recently, asking if they accept substitute
Married Reverends. Seems to me the Catholic Clergy is having a
melt down. Okay?

"I don't want to get caught in the quagmire of nation building around
the world." George Herbert Bush said when campaigning for the
Presidency.

I wouldn't call an attempt on Mumar Quadafi's life murder.
I'm sorry his baby daughter was killed instead. But, if someone had
killed Adolf Hitler before he had risen to power, think of all the lives
that would have been saved.

A very thought provoking tribute to Hanna Quadafi.
It's all part of the war on Jihad Terrorists.

Peace.

Bob
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Review by bob county
Rated: E | (3.5)


I was expecting a different story. Writing is a process of selecting
and developing ideas for a dramatic effect or is your story a discourse
on your vacation? You set the stage accurately, but nothing interesting
happens. My perception of this vacation is you enjoyed snorkeling.
Writing for me is about fantasy and adventure.. snorkeling didn't make
my list. There is a story on knitting if you make a word search for it.
But, I couldn't read all of the 12,182 words. I just don't think about knitting.

Very well written.
But, I loss interest.

Bob
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Review of Bitch  
Review by bob county
Rated: 18+ | (4.5)


The danger in writing about love and relationships is it becomes
maudlin. "He sailed the sea of love-" you wrote. That's too flowery.
I'm a basic guy. I look and want what I see, but I know there is a price
to pay. Women want to be payed. They don't want a loser.
Aggressive women generally have many lovers. They do not expect to pay
for it . That being said I like the transposition of a gay adolescence
and adult heterosexual. It's a taboo subject. Some boys get their first taste
of sexual intercourse form other boys. They are not gay. Just horny.
My advise simplify the proses.

Fun read!

Bob
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Review of Nigger  
Review by bob county
Rated: 18+ | (4.5)


I felt a little satire in this muse.
In my day the big put down was faggot.
I've always found colored people to be attractive.
That's what we called African, Hispanic, and Italian Americans.
Native Americans were "Natives." "He has a lot of Native in him."
mom would say.
My big critique on your essay; so what is your point?
Insulting people is a bad idea, obviously, you could get punched.
There was an elderly Chechoslovian, who called my Jewish friend
a desert N-(title of your essay). He didn't like Jews and did not know
my mom was Jewish. Could I call him a codger? That was over thirty
years ago. The old codger liked to play chess with me. I was in a chess
club and he was a better player. I liked him.

Any who. I think the big problem with your lecture is it states the obvious.
It reminds of the lecture we would get on a nuclear blast. Don't look at the
blast. We were told to walk to the nearest fallout shelter and wait for
instructions. Sounds silly now. There was a fallout shelter in my grammar
school. The teachers would walk us to it as the air raid siren went off on the
roof. It was kind of a field trip.

Well, just be nice.

Bob
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Review by bob county
Rated: E | (4.5)


Keeping up with the Jones is one example of social behavior.
But, I was hoping to see a more primal instinct in your thesis.
Basic emotions have not changed since the caveman.
Everybody wants everything and they get frustrated.
The trick is how to use your coping skills to get what you want.
I think you should expand on basic desire and habits.

I like the concept!

Ug!
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Review by bob county
Rated: ASR | (5.0)



Ah so. The spleen is a purse.
A sheep's bladder cannot be a purse.
But, can a beaver hold a bill fold?
Is a pussy a slot machine? chipmunks make funny
doodle squat.


Just curious.

Bob
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