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Review by bob county
Rated: E | (3.0)
"Marry Queen of Scots."
Was the first question a doctor
asked me when I had a concussion.
I said, "Ice cream."
You say, "Dorsimba Poem."
and write, "crepuscule."
which makes me want jimmies on my
ice cream...

The poem set a mood,
but it was also cryptic ..
I prefer simplicity .
Keep a dream journal.

Bob
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Review of The Cycle  
Review by bob county
Rated: E | (3.5)
I felt I was reading a child's image
of death.
It was very sweet and simplistic.
Most people can't imagine their extinction.
So, they dream of fields with happy nymphs
or singing angels or 70 virgins a leaping.
But, we are limited by what we know from life,
If you haven't seen it, then you can't describe it.

Just my two cents..

Bob
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Review of Boys and Girls  
Review by bob county
Rated: 13+ | (5.0)
"Bang-bang! He shot me down."
Kill Bill song.
Children are violent and so are girls.
It is astounding how many films feature
violent women.. Is this feminism ?
I hope there are some polite children.
They are the leaders of the brave new world.
I like your poem ..
It is concise and paints a simple point
in childish play.

Keep writing and keep a dream journal.

Bob
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Review of Cup or Cone?  
Review by bob county
Rated: E | (5.0)
I liked the knife sharpening truck.
Mom would give me some dull knives and
some cash and I'd run out to the knife sharpener
guy, who looked liked Santa..
It was fun to watch him grind the blades
as the sparks flew..
Any who, you dropped "the" in "applied for(the)job".
I think the ice cream man job is vanishing along
with the knife sharpener and shoe repair man.

Keep writing!

Bob
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Review of Death by Sight  
Review by bob county
Rated: 13+ | (4.5)
If we could see ourselves as others see us..
So, a story about a self absorbed murder victim.
I like PBS Murder Mysteries ; Inspector Morse
and Inspector Lewis snooping around Oxford University,
Hercule Pero, the Belgium detective and Sherlock Holmes.
Did you know that our jury system allows the jury to judge
the validity of the law?
A wicked law can be overruled by a jury.

The tome you've woven seems like a rebuke of
the beautiful people.
In every competition there are winners and grudges.
Some people will kill for fame.

Keep writing!

Bob
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Review by bob county
Rated: E | (3.5)
Freud would say your obsessing.
What is grief?
Monks and Priest have a party.
My uncle was a Priest and when he died
we were invited to his party.
The Priest believe that death is rebirth.
It felt like an Irish wake ..
Strange how people deal with death.

Keep writing!

Bob
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Review of Collateral Damage  
Review by bob county
Rated: E | (4.5)
Very Hannibal Lector...
You never know who your going to meet
on Halloween.
It's an odd way to entertain the dead.
But, that's all part of the fun.
I like your coroner, I pictured Quincy Jones
on a bad day.

Keep writing!

Bob
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Review of The Maze  
Review by bob county
Rated: 13+ | (4.0)
"Is it my treasure yur aftarh?" Ben Gun asked.
This fella reminded me of that classic Treasure Island
character.
When I was just a boy I asked my mother what would I be.
She said, "You'll do what your told or get locked up."
Kay-sur-rah!
My how the times are changing..

This was a fun slice of men and mice.
Keep writing!

Bob
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Review by bob county
Rated: 13+ | (5.0)
Nature is violent and selfish.
But, the does not mean we must be.
I have recently turned 53 on the 13 of December.
And I'm reminded of tid-bit of biology ...
From our birth to our death we will replace every
cell in our body. We are not the same person we
once were.
So, who are you?
Every part of you is a collective organism.
Your brain is a network of reflex responses.
Somewhere, you make a decision that it is your identity ..
No one is certain if this is free will.

I like your blog !
Is that my choice?

Vertago
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Review of Gaia  
Review by bob county
Rated: 18+ | (4.5)
"I am surrounded by mind," you wrote.
Did you mean the mind of Gaia ?
The wasp will sting a grasshopper or caterpillar,
paralyzing it so it can place its eggs inside a
living host to feed on.
Why would a benevolent God devise such cruelty ?
The Aztecs believed in a spider God.
The spider's young devour their mother.

Your prose have a wonder to them, like Alice
down the rabbit hole.
But, nature is not always kind.

Keep writing!
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Review of SIXTEEN IN PARIS  
Review by bob county
Rated: E | (5.0)
I just had the back of my van caved in.
It happened in a parking lot and note was left.
I think I can replace the hatch with one from a junkyard.
Merry Christ-mass!

Jeeze, you were Paris in 1964.
I was born in 1962.
My grandmother was from (I will misspell)
Asance Loraine.
You might have met her. She was a starving artist.
Maybe, we're related?

I like your free verse.

Bob
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Review of THE ORACLE  
Review by bob county
Rated: E | (5.0)
The curse of Cassandra , "She knew the fates of her friends,
but could not change them.." Homer.
I shutter at the life of a flat world believer.
There is only one way out: straight off a cliff.
A monk ask another, "What holds the world up?"
"The world sits on the back of a turtle." the other monk replied.
"But, what does the turtle stand on?" the monk queried.
"Why? It is turtles all the way down." the other monk laughed.

Silly rabbits...

Nice fable.
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Review by bob county
Rated: E | (3.0)
This presents an interesting ethical situation.
Can you steel from a thief?
I like that.
The dialogue reads flat and stunted.
I would like to imagine the central characters in peril
and desperate...
Are they being pursued?

Just my two cents.
And thanks for your reviews.

Bob
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Review by bob county
Rated: 13+ | (3.0)


Voting booth juiced?
In Maine, Reverends preach against liberal
atheist and lawlessness. I have heard a Priest
say that immorality comes from a lack of faith
in God.
Have they read the Old Testament?
Leviticus 23 calls for the execution of homosexuals
and adulterers. That's a violent divorce.
If the Republicans try to take away Row vs Wade ,
they will never be elected again.
News flash! Donald Trump is pro-choice!

Can't we all just get along?
Nope.

666
V

Your poem was elegant and amusing ~

"Stereotypes firmly trajected."
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Review by bob county
Rated: 13+ | (5.0)


We born dreamers. There is the NOW in all of us.
I remember a story about the world's end.
A hero travels to the edge of the world to find God.
He can see the waters of the world falling off the edge
the world into the stars. But, he does not see God.
And so he looks back toward the land and knows the NOW.
Gilgamesh.

You have the NOW.

Bob
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Review by bob county
Rated: E | N/A (Review only item.)
I was just watching Christopher Walken in The Prophecy.
Christopher plays Raphael , Arch Angel.
He's not a good Angel in this story.
Any who, Angels or Heralds are recorded in very religion.
Native Americans call them Sky Gods.
Sumerian legend called them Anunaki.
Genesis writes about the "Sons of God coming from Heaven
and taking brides."
And there is that strange talking reptile in Genesis.
Todays visitations are described as close encounters with a
U.F.O. Have you heard of Fatima?
Skeptics scoff, but isn't science about testing all theories?
Bill Maher calls it , "A fairy tale for adults."
Can we adults consider the evidence ?

Fun topic!

Bob
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Review of What About Her?  
Review by bob county
Rated: 13+ | (2.5)
In some cultures an open marriage is expected.
The Native American brave was expected to have many wives.
Mormons believed in Old Testament polygamy, but most have
only one.
It all boils down to what you believe and people can
believe anything.
The composition reads like a dairy.
Is this from your own experience?
Most country songs are about a cheating heart.
I don't recall a song about the mistress.
Any who, I enjoyed your formatted prose.
It reminded me of Psalms "Let my cry come onto you."
Maybe, you expand on the character development?
Is the mistress really in love ?

Keep Writing!

Bob
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Review by bob county
Rated: 13+ | (4.5)
Politics, religion and death; it never ends.
Is Lady Lehana a Saint or foolish ?
Most people are selfish and no good deed
goes unpunished.
I like the clean prose and transition...
The story has style and an old plot.
A royal wedding with a peasant ..

Keep writing!

Bob
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Review by bob county
Rated: 13+ | (3.5)
Fun tale!

I love a plot twist. Pop culture is obsessed with beauty ..
You make a good argument against it.
If only people could be less superficial and vain.
My only criticism is for more detail in the character.
I'd like to know why the Princess was so unhappy.

Keep Writing!

Muzzy
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Review by bob county
Rated: E | (2.5)


The gist of this is that a horse dreams about being a unicorn.
But, the syntax is very jumbled and there are several incomplete
sentences and run on sentences.
The tail is curious . It appears to be about a horse, rather than a fair maiden.
The traditional unicorn story is about a maiden enchanted by a unicorn.
The unicorn is attracted to her innocence and virginity.
You need to shorten your sentences and pick up the pace.
This yarn rambles ... Maybe, introduce a prince or woodsman?
Have you read Midsummer's Nights Dream?
There are mythical creatures and a maiden.

That's my two cents.

Bob
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Review by bob county
Rated: E | (3.0)
Is this a commercial?

Okay, if someone is upset they will have indigestion.
So, they should get a massage?... Rhode Island is
a state with many massage parlors and legalized
prostitution. Does the Hindu religion permit prostitution?
I am suspicious of prostitutes. They give me indigestion.
But, thankfully, I have no herpies.

Your essay is giving me the munchies.

Muzzy
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Review by bob county
Rated: E | (3.5)


Two men were shot dead at an art exhibit in Texas
of cartoons of Mohamed. The two suspects were trying
to shoot their way into the exhibit. Are these Islamic extremist
terrorist? Why is the penalty for drawing an image of Mohamed
death? And is the penalty for leaving the Moslem faith death?
I do not see tolerance of critical free thinking in Islam.

Is it fare to say the Moslem faith does not tolerate skepticism?

Shalom +

Muzzy
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Review by bob county
Rated: 13+ | (3.5)


The grammar and syntax of your argument for the existence of Hell
is sound, if you except the premise that the Gospel of Jesus is God's
word. Do you see how volatile religion is in the Middle East?
Can there be any rational argument for ISIS?
It is reasonable to conclude that the Gospels of Jesus were written
by Apostles in primitive and superstitious times , who were not concerned
about scientific truth.
The Gospels state that Jesus "walked" into Hell to save the just people, who had
known him. The inference being is that only Christians can enter Heaven.
Is that justice?

Does Jesus forgive non-Christians?

Did I help?

Vertago

~~~
<^>
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Review by bob county
Rated: 18+ | (3.5)



God forgives those, who sin against him.
But, who can know the mind of God?
I like the rytham of your tome.
Catholics believe in free will and God's absolution.
It is possible Adolf Hitler is in Heaven, if he made an act of
sincere contrition.
Could you forgive Hitler's sins?
What would Jesus do?

Keep writing!

Bob
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Review by bob county
Rated: 13+ | (3.5)


I think I loss some consciousness, reading your
thread on the end of thought.
It was amusing. I saw only one typo.
"when got home." appears to drop "he."
Maybe, that was a subtle detachment from thought of grammar?
The Greeks believed that the body defined the person, hence
the importance of excise and philosophy ..

Did I help?

Muzzy
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