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Review by bob county
Rated: 13+ | (3.5)


I think I loss some consciousness, reading your
thread on the end of thought.
It was amusing. I saw only one typo.
"when got home." appears to drop "he."
Maybe, that was a subtle detachment from thought of grammar?
The Greeks believed that the body defined the person, hence
the importance of excise and philosophy ..

Did I help?

Muzzy
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Review of Bloomsday  
Review by bob county
Rated: 18+ | (3.5)


Poor girl. She's a busty lass with a twitchy DNA.
Sounds like Poison Ivy at The Little Shop of Horrors.
What I'd like to see is more of your insight on Eva Bloom.
Was that Hitler's girlfriend's name? Ehm, Braum?
Any who, I love a good naughty tale waggar.
It reminds me of the yarn about a man's talking penis.
The fellah tries to smooth talk the ladies, but his waggar
is very rude.

Do not be ashamed to express yourself... It's fun.

Keep Writing!

Bob
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Review of The playground  
Review by bob county
Rated: 13+ | (4.0)


This reminds me of Huck Finn finding a dead man by the Mississippi .
Other boys started poking the body with sticks. Huck just stood there
and tried to surmise how the man died. Did he fall off a boat?
I like the pace of your tale and the detail in the appearance of the corpse.
We always slow down at traffic accidents.

Keep writing.

Muzzy
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Review of Lucid in the Sky  
Review by bob county
Rated: E | (5.0)


I think I have a hole in my pocket
or is it a poem?
What I gleam from this stream of Beatle mainia .
Is the pull of certain death as you plummet to the Earth.
I like that. I don't see any typos or grammar problems.
It made me wonder why Paul was so obsessed with
sky diving. Then, I thought about the Rolling Stones and
their near death experience in a hot air balloon.
Yeah, I can dig it.

This is a fun thread!

Muzzy


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Review by bob county
Rated: E | (5.0)


Is love a mental illness?
Hell, it depends on what your after.
There is an 18 year old girl in Florida ,
who wants to marry her father.
There is a man in Ohio , who has
9 wives.
And does this make you cringe?
Where do you draw the line?
I think your poem is asking what love is.
For many centuries it has been about a happy family.
But, that can get sketchy too.

I love your poem.
Keep writing!

Muzzy


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Review of The End  
Review by bob county
Rated: 13+ | (5.0)


There are some typos or maybe that's intentional.
Most contagious diseases are transmitted by contact.
It's a sad fact that simple sewage and water filtration can prevent
these outbreaks in poor countries.
Modern cities are more likely to have over dosed populations
with super viruses.

If you think back to how life began, we were viruses.

I like your style. Keep writing.

Muzzy
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Review of Sr Mary Carola  
Review by bob county
Rated: E | (5.0)


I had to chuckle. "I married one." you wrote about Catholics.
Having been raised in a strict Irish Catholic home, I thought Protestants were communists.
Then, I entered public school and got a dose of humanism.
Your jolly Nun sounds like fun, "Her chin danced" on her tight white collar.

This is a perfect piece of narration.

Keep Writing.

Muzzy


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Review by bob county
Rated: 13+ | (5.0)


Leonard Cohen is a fantastic baritone, Hallelujah !
The Sisters of Mercy is another classic Cohen tome.
And without a doubt the Sisters do great charities .
My first encounter with a Nun was Sister Emeritus ..
She was awesome. It was a New Order in those days
and the Nuns were wearing casual dress with a habit.
Sister Emeritus was young and slender and made me
feel very happy about the opposite sex and guilty,

I have to revisit Leonard's crooning.

Thanks for the nostalgia.

Muzzy
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Review of Islam in Malaysia  
Review by bob county
Rated: 13+ | (4.5)


Hmm..

Islam is the fulfillment of Judaism and Christianity according to Mohamed .
So, all the stoning of adulterers and genocidal war comes from the Jews Talmud
or Christian Old Testament. There are still conservative Jews , who practice Old Testament
Law; see the Hasidic culture and settlements in Israel. It's a hard choice to be a fundamentalist
Christian and condemn the tolerance of alternative lifestyles.

What is peculiar about your column is its neutrality.
Jesus said, "Either your are with me or against me."
There is no common ground between executing apostates and critical free thinking.
Oh, well ultimately unquestionable truth is decided on the battle field.
This holy war will kill every living creature.
The last great war will burn off the atmosphere and the oceans will boil.
But, is that what God wants?

I hope not.

Muzzy
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Review by bob county
Rated: E | (5.0)


Well, this is a lovely poem about the superego.
But, what or who is "I"?
Your poem described a pantheon of symbolism.
I am tormented by the meaning of the soul.
Are we biological machines ?
How do we prove the existence of the soul?
These are ancient questions.
But, the modern psychi is defined by science and Darwinian philosophy ..
It is not romantic or spiritual.
At what point did our ape ancestors see the world as sacred?
Does an ape have a soul?

Did I help?
My favorite color is red.
It is delicious ..

Muzzy
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Review of Close Your Eyes  
Review by bob county
Rated: E | (3.5)



Well, there are no spelling errors..
The grammar is correct and the story
has a good suspense to it. I'm reminded
of the kids, who leapt off their parent's roof
because they thought they were Superman.
The actor had to make a special announcement
"Only Superman can fly." Throughout your tale
of drowning you mention your faith in God to
show how to swim.

Well, we shouldn't expect miracles ..
We should learn to swim, before diving.

Funny story.

Muzzy
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Review by bob county
Rated: E | (3.0)



Well, Merry Christ-Mass!


This X-Mass I've watched the Wrath of Khan
and Bad Santa. I watched Bill Nye try to convince
a Young Earther that the Earth is more then six
thousand years old... I wonder what Jesus would say
about anthropology and geology?

And I'm snacking on some pretzels.

Muzzy
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Review of Please Review  
Review by bob county
Rated: E | (4.0)



When I read literature I am looking for amusing stories.
I want to be titilated .. A good read should be fast paced
and not preachy.. An erotic amusing tale will obsess you
and stay with you forever. Shocking thrillers are fun too.

Muzzy
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Review of Flesh  
Review by bob county
Rated: 13+ | (3.5)


Let me get this right.
You wanted to sell chameleons and
got porn pop ups?
Flies don't like cold. In the summer
you can discourage them with air conditioning.
Also, flies do not sniff. They have antenna on their
eyes that responds to certain airborne chemicals.
They don't like insense burnel..
Most insects don't like smoke.

The tale was a little hard to follow,
but, amusing.

Muzzy
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Review of A Week of 19  
Review by bob county
Rated: E | (5.0)


I like to review. It's a way to help other writers and applaud
great writing.. As a recovering Irish Catholic schooled ascetic,
I know how difficult it is to promote yourself. It feels like bragging.
But, storytelling is just that.. The storyteller is building up their ego
as they build up their story.

So, lets here it for the hardworking writers!

Write on!

Muzzy
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Review of Seven Sins : Envy  
Review by bob county
Rated: 18+ | (3.5)



Vanity is a strong motive. I like the description of lipstick.
That is a strong image. There are too many stories in the
news about revenge killings directed at bullies.
Your tale builds to a cliff hanger. Is there a part 2?
I get a murderous vibe.

Muzzy
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Review by bob county
Rated: 18+ | (3.5)


So, this was written as a script.
You need a character outline and more setting detail.
Give the reader an idea of the world your writing about.
There is gasoline that implies a modern Witch trial.

Sometimes, hysteria can be a Witch's ally ..
Only one confessed Witch was set free, during the Salem Witch Trials.
Titchiba was a Haitian slave and confessed Witch.
She bit the head off a chicken before her judges and threatened a curse on them and their children.
The judges set her free and order she be allowed to leave Salem unharassed.

There is scientific evidence of beta and alpha waves emitted from our brains ..
These frequencies can effect plants and animals.
A strong magnetic field can disrupt these brainwave patterns and cause insomnia as well as
mental dementia and suicidal depression.
This could be interpreted as black magic.

Did I help?

~~~
<*>
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Review of Hickory Dickory  
Review by bob county
Rated: E | (5.0)


Very true. We look for truth and find another door to open.
This specter you have, reminds me of an oracle.
Is this a reoccurring dream?
Have you tried automatic writing?
Just write whatever pops into your head and sort it out..
A Tarot deck can be helpful.

Muzzy
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Review of An Equal End  
Review by bob county
Rated: E | (3.5)


Well, well, do you want anarchy?
The executive branch of government is balanced against the Senate and Congress
and judiciary.. Ultimately, we the people must form a more perfect union.
The ultimate power rest with the people.
A jury can decide against an unjust law. The northern states courts would not
enforce the slavery laws in the southern states and escaped slaves were given
asylum .. That was just.

Good writing!

Vertago

~~~
<^>
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Review of Todd and Mommy  
Review by bob county
Rated: 18+ | (3.5)


How old is Tod?

What is this twilight of the mind and Eros?
Are we the master of our fate or are we driven by passion?
It was Freud who reasoned that men want to return to the womb..
Young and foolish teenagers look for a moments pleasure and find
a life time of dissatisfaction...
The images in the maternal tale are disturbing to me.
My mother spanked me a lot and hardly caressed at all.
She had her breasts cancer and I was bottle fed.
So, it is difficult to enjoy your erotic tale wager.

Why did you write "The heat coming up from my ass"
about breast feeding?

Any who,

Keep Writing!

Muzzy disturbed...


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Review by bob county
Rated: 13+ | (3.0)


Well, this is my idea on ghosts, they're residual memories.
Paranormal events that Abby experienced aren't that rare.
Many people have ghost stories, mostly, because of some
traumatic event in there lives... A spooky woods is a good
place to conjure ghosts and hob goblins ..

"Once again they returned to the river," sounds a little cliché.

Other than that I enjoyed your haunted tale.

Muzzy
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Review by bob county
Rated: E | (3.0)


Well metered.
We have three bridges here.
One is a major highway the other two
are kept for tourist ..
The parable of the bridge is an ancient one..
Zen uses the bridge as an example of the journey,
crossing the bridge is not as important as the journey.

So the student asks, "Where does the bridge lead?"

Muzzy
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Review of Sins of the flesh  
Review by bob county
Rated: 18+ | (3.0)


So passes the glory of this world..
Your tome, I assume is that life is pointless.
But, life moves like an arrow to its target.
And before you know it your arrow is spent.
I must confess I have regrets too..
A moments pleasure can lead to a lifetime of regret.

Have you considered archery?
The Zen archer believes the bow and arrow are lovers.
Once the arrow is released there is no turning back.

Did I help?

Muzzy
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Review by bob county
Rated: E | N/A (Review only item.)


Daneiliane Poetry?
It looks Elizabethan ... A Midsummer's Night's Dream?
The verse is eloquent and moving and almost Shakespearian.
So, you are a Dane? Perhaps, you fancy Hamlet?
Poetry is a prayer said to God for the love of an another.
That's my two cents. We can agree to disagree.

Keep writing!
Your writing is improving.

Muzzy
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Review by bob county
Rated: E | N/A (Review only item.)


Well, you are direct in your indicatives.
Back in my youth I was ... assertively opinionated.
But, I knew better to provoke the bullies.
For example a small classmate had a pit bull .
He would brag about how his dog could tear a car door off.
That begged for a confrontation with a car door.
The dog just scratched it up. So?
The point being don't put a chip on your shoulder,
unless you can face the guy who knocks it off.

Is English your first language?
It appears you have problems with grammar and participles.
I like your positive writing, but it needs some polish in syntax.
Just my two cents; bragging is dumb.

Keep writing!

Muzzy
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