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I look at the fun factor.
I'm good at...
Knowing what sells and Knowing what is good are my skills.
Favorite Genres
Murder mysteries.
Least Favorite Genres
Long sad stories.
Favorite Item Types
Murder She Wrote, Columbo and NCIS.
Least Favorite Item Types
Sad, tragic endings.
I will not review...
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Review of Summer Kiss  
Review by bob county
Rated: 13+ | (5.0)
You made a good choice to have the narrator be submissive.
It makes the character more endearing.
I asked my mom, one summer in my childhood, why two ladies were kissing.
She said they were hippies. This was the 1970's.
Mom was old school; born in 1926.
My dad believed homosexuals were demon-possessed. Dad was born in 1910.
I think there is a gay gene; were born that way.
I asked Sister Emeritus, "Why Adam didn't come from Eve?" in CCD class.
Mom had told me where babies come from.
Sister Emeritus answered, "Man is the head of the family."
So, Eve was Adam's clone...(?)

You can be a published author.

Bob County
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Review of I KNOW NOT  
Review by bob county
Rated: E | (5.0)
My mom confided in me she married my dad because he had a house.
She was his high school student in adult night school.
Mom got her GED and married dad.
She said she grew to love him and would never divorce him.
It was to her a mortal sin to divorce, however, she could kill him
if he cheated on her.
That would be an insult to her female pride.

Your sonnet is passionate.
Sadly, we can become trapped in our lives.
My advice is to simply meet new people.
Nature will take her course.

Bob County
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Review of Sun Rays  
Review by bob county
Rated: E | (5.0)
This is a sensitive sonnet.
I have a few observations.
"As you stare in that window," you wrote.
"As you stare out that window," might be clearer.
"Asking you non-verbally to stay," you wrote.
"Asking you silently to stay." might be clearer.
These are small stylistic observations.
The overall message is passionate.

Bob County
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Review by bob county
Rated: E | (5.0)
If you say you believe in the supernatural, scientists will say your superstitious.
But, you can say there is a fifth dimension where entities with superior telepathic abilities
can manipulate our minds and physis will accept the possibility of these multidimensional beings.
Dr. Lawrence wrote a book about how something can come from nothing. Is this Zen?
While, Jennifer Lawrence believes God is guiding her career.
Reading your interview sparked this haiku, "No matter where you go, you are there."
Clearly, you are highly educated and chose to speak truth to power.
Does this desire for justice come from God or some other inspiration?

Just curious.

Bob County
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Review by bob county
Rated: 18+ | (5.0)
Ha! I imagined Sherly Temple making this speech.
"Or trouble you'll beget," Sherly would say wagging her finger.
In the Time Magazine interview of Adolf Hitler, Hitler said,
"The German people deserve prosperity."
He was elected by the popular vote of the Catholic majority.
He promised prosperity and a stronger Germany.
One of the first things he did was build the "People's car,"
the Volkswagon.
He also implemented food vouchers and public housing construction
and restored public transportation.
The trains ran on time...

This was a fun read.
But, be careful what you wish for.
I lost family in the war to end all wars.

Bob County
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Review of love is a bath  
Review by bob county
Rated: 13+ | (4.5)
Hmm, "Now I understand my body I don't want it anymore,
wrap myself in cellophane and start chopping, angry that
my legs bend inwards and my hair is flat." you wrote Charlie.
Are you angry about your gender?
The process is vague. I'd like more clarity.
When I was a lad of 9 or ten I'd slide about the tub.
I like to slide over the tile floor too.

The poem is seemingly innocent, until the chopping impulse.
Keep writing!

Bob County
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Review of Somebody  
Review by bob county
Rated: E | (5.0)
If Bernie Sanders is correct we have 8 to 10 years left
until a global ecosystem collapse.
We are seeing more widespread fires and drought.
As the climate becomes warmer and storms more destructive,
there will be food shortages and less drinkable water.

I tell my friends not to have kids.
I also advise them to get out of California.
It would be better to move to the colder northern regions.
Remember there are groups to join in the green movement.

Never give up.

Bob County

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Review of Ironic Monarch  
Review by bob county
Rated: E | (5.0)
Your heartfelt sonet is moving.
Deuteronomy 24:16 states,
"The children shall not be punished
for the father's sins."
Why would a just God condemn innocent
children to drown in a flood or be
slaughtered by the tyrant Herod the Great?
Why were Adam's children condemned to death?
Why would a peaceful Jesus state,
"Obey me or die."?
The Son of God should not be a terrorist.

You could publish your poem in a Christian magazine.
There are hundreds of them.
It is clear you are a just man and fair.
Muslims believe Jesus was a great prophet just like
Mohamed. Should nonChristians go to Hell?

What is the name of your cat?

Bob County
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Review by bob county
Rated: E | (3.0)
The meter of the poem changes at the end;
"he had gone." seemed grammatically incorrect
and forced rhyme.
It ends with two verses rather than continuing
with five.
Nevertheless, it is a fun limerick.
I like Robin Hood.
He was a progressive socialist.

Keep Writing!

Bob County
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Review of seven, actually  
Review by bob county
Rated: 13+ | (5.0)
"Your homework assignment is to follow a stranger and take notes on them."
A journalist professor said.
I raised my hand and queried, "Isn't that stauking?"
The professor answered, "That's what journalists do."
Your writing is extremely vivid and reminds of a Russian
poem "We prayed for water and the floods came."
There are many references to cutting yourself.
I hope you're not doing that.. Be happy and healthy.

Bob
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Review by bob county
Rated: 18+ | (5.0)
And Jesus said, "Obey or I will kill you." (Luke 19:7)
I like this post. I've wondered if Jesus was a revolutionary.
Have you heard of socialist theology?
It's called Liberation Theology in Central America.
What did Jesus do for the homeless and poor?

Good topic.

Bob County
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Review by bob county
Rated: E | (5.0)
Hmm? I like this observation.
America Vesbuti named the American contents.
It's all about colonization.
The United States was an East Coast Nation,
then they expanded.
Mexico used to include California.
But, that changed with the Mexican war.

Fun topic!

Bob County
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Review of Supinity  
Review by bob county
Rated: 18+ | (5.0)
This reads like sexual magic.
The belief that sex connects us to the supernatural
is in all religions.
The Virgin Mary had intercourse with the Holy Spirit.
Is the Hebrew God sexual?
Witchcraft revolves around orgies of sexual magic.
The winter solace is a pagan orgy holiday.

Fun topic!

Bob County
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Review of For Dad  
Review by bob county
Rated: E | (5.0)
My dad put on the back of his cemetary stone
"Now I have time."
We are mortal and must accept this.
My mother was not afraid of dying.
"I've done what I wanted to do," she said.
I wish you peace and happiness.
This is a beautiful tribute to your dad.
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Review by bob county
Rated: 13+ | (3.5)
This reminds me of the holodeck on Next Generation.
Any event can be recreated in our memories.
But, are we a dream?
Do we live in a hologram made by a higher intelligence?

You say Anita's "jaws" froze.
Does Anita have multiple jaws?
Maybe this is a typo or not?
Jimi is imagining his world.

Keep writing!

Muzzy43
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Review by bob county
Rated: E | (3.5)
Jessica lacks character traits?
Jess needs more positive and negative personality traits?
Maybe I can provide some life experience..
I knew a girl named Peggy. She was withdrawn.
Peggy was in her 30's, but very petite.
She had to show her driver's license to buy beer.
Peggy had a recurring nightmare that insects would crawl inside of her.
She especially feared that a spider or centipede would lay eggs in her ears.
So she put earplugs in at night.
She also wore tight panties in bed to ward off centipedes and spiders.
Maybe you can incorporate this phobia in Jessica?
Peggy liked me to call her Pickles.
She never used a public pool, but enjoyed swimming in ponds and seaside beaches.

Keep writing!
And don't get bogged down in outlines.
Just write what's in your heart.

Muzzy43
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Review by bob county
Rated: E | (5.0)
Nothing cannot exist, therefore we exist.
The monster in your story is fear...
A friend of mine died in a snorkeling accident.
She was stung by a poisonous snail.
The snail is very small and has a barb at the tip of its shell.
It is more venomous than any snake. ...
But, who has nightmares about snails?

Reading your work felt like zen.
Keep writing!

Muzzy43
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Review of Dear Me  
Review by bob county
Rated: E | (3.5)
I'm picturing Stewart Smally looking at his reflection in the mirror.
"I'm good enough and gosh darn it! I like myself."
I also remember a Christian prostitute Trina.
Trina believed Jesus and Marry Mandoline had "Hooked up."
I thought that was a nifty idea for a Jesus flick.
I think William Defold played Jesus that way...
Anywho, it's a fun muse.
Sometimes I wonder if Fundamentalist Christians are masochists.
If its all preordained why bother ?

I've got a number of books I'd like to publish.
The Art of Psyco Therapy #2165561 is a fun read.
Maybe, you could be my schizophrenic publisher?

Happy September bipolar day!

Muzzy43

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Review by bob county
Rated: E | (5.0)
That's a cute limerick...
I voted for Bernie Sanders.
But, the Super Delegates thought Hillery was a winner.
I will vote for whoever the Democratic nominee is.
This is the worst and most dangerous President ever.
I hope he doesn't start WWIII.

Shalom

Muzzy
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Review of Make Your Mark  
Review by bob county
Rated: E | (3.5)
I like to buy lottery tickets.
Sometimes I win a free bet or $20 dollars.
We should be optimistic about hitting the jackpot.
I guess my objection to your proposition is style.
You need to space out this article .. It's too congested.
SO FAR POPULATION CONTROL HAS FAILED.
We are running out of drinkable water.
But, I'm positive most people are nice and I will the jackpot.

Shalom

Muzzy
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Review by bob county
Rated: E | (3.0)
Mark Twain was said, "When I am told, Heaven is sitting in a green field playing a harp,
I imagine it is Hell."
Of course, if the brain is dead, why should we care?
And why is there a Heaven for anyone, if we are all created with God's curse of Original Sin?
Did God preordain our fall from grace just to erase it with Jesus' crucifixion?
What is the lesson learned? Does God forgive all sin by His crucified Son?
Duetrionomi 24:16 states, "The children shall not be punished for their father's sin."
Was Adolf Hitler absolved of his sins through Jesus' crucifixion?
Hitler was a baptized Catholic. .. Did he repent?

Your poem raises many questions.

Muzzy
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Review by bob county
Rated: E | (5.0)
This is a fun thread.
I like candlepins.
But, I do roll big balls occasionally.
What is fun about professional sports are the fans.
In Maine, there are toy war games with tiny toy tanks that shoot paintballs.
And there are toy sailing boat contests too.
I used to be in the chess club in high school.
I'm pretty good at darts.
Believe it or not, these games attract fans.
What is the thrill of watching someone else bowl?
Why do so many people watch gulf?

Anywho, I enjoyed your poem.

Bob
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Review by bob county
Rated: E | N/A (Review only item.)
Back in the day, people who complained were put in stocks in public streets.
Their head and hands were locked in a wooden vice.
They would be at the mercy of their fellow citizens.
They were brutalized.
Jesus was crucified for complaining about Roman tyranny.
Complaining can still be dangerous and get you lynched.

A good thesis.
Keep Writing!

Bob
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Review of BOSPHORUS- 1  
Review by bob county
Rated: ASR | N/A (Review only item.)
I had a neighbor's condo get hit by a dump truck.
The truck went through their kitchen.
It is frightening how quickly you can lose everything.

I was in the hospital for a hernia.
A young nurse examined me and I was aroused.
It was embarrassing and thrilling.
The nurse gave me a magic marker to mark the
hernia with an x.

I like your style.

You say you are a Witch?
I like that movie with Will Farell
and Nicole Kidman; Bewitched.
Can you do wiggle your nose?

Bob
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Review by bob county
Rated: E | (4.5)
This must be a conservative bar.
In Maine there's the Navy Yard bar.
It's a place to hook up and nobody cares
about bad breath.
You can shoot some pool or grab the mike and
sing a song.
There's always a game on the TV.

By and by a fun bar.
Your poem doesn't sound real.
Have you been to a bar?
What's your favorite drink?
I like rum and coke.
Maybe I can bye you one?

Querious poem...

Muzzy
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