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631 Public Reviews Given
Review Style
Encouraging but helpful. Most of the review will be about how good/what i liked about your writing, but i will point out flaws if i see any! :)
I'm good at...
Short Stories
Favorite Genres
Mystery, Sports, Romance
Least Favorite Genres
Murder Mysteries
I will not review...
I will review pretty much anything
Public Reviews
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Review by Izzy's Writing
Rated: E | (5.0)
Oh my god this was so amazing! I nearly cried reading this (reminds me of my own grandmother).

I really loved how you used birds and the birdcage as a metaphor. It's so special!

You are quite right that society doesn't respect the elderly enough. We cast them away into nursing homes and never visit. (well, I will, I'll be working at one soon)

Thank you for sharing this with us!
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Review by Izzy's Writing
Rated: E | (5.0)
A poem about mommies?! Ugh, yes, I adore these so much!

A mom's love never stops, not even when her children grow up. We can still need our moms even if we've bought a house or became parents ourselves.

Favorite line? Well, more like a favorite stanza.

"Thus, In those sparkling eyes it was
where I met the smile so adamantly
By the hug and by the soft braid
here goes my heart with them soothly
Chest-to-Chest they so avowed to be
and heart into heart they go gorgeously"
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Review of Poem is...  
Review by Izzy's Writing
Rated: E | (5.0)
Hmm, interesting. A poem from 2009?! Ooof! (just kidding!)

So, is this poem describing what poetry means to you (back then) or just what you believe a poem should look like?

I love that, in the first two sentences, you compared poetry with a turtle. Are you saying that sometimes the poem is all in your head and you can't push it out?

The formatting is perfect, there's nothing wrong here! :D
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Review of Cloudburst  
Review by Izzy's Writing
Rated: E | (5.0)
Before I get into the "wow" factor of this poem, the fact that you use such creative language is amazing! Yes, I love learning new words I haven't heard before.

Alright, now, onto what I liked about this poem:

The two stanzas before the last one of the poem really stood out to me. I love that you make rain seem like a real person. Human-like, I should say.

"Rain touches emotions." Yes! Yes, it does. Most days when it's rainy outside, I feel sad or tired. It's the change in weather, I swear!

As I read each word, I have a clear, clear picture in my mind of what you're writing! It's so good!
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Review of Gentle Hands  
Review by Izzy's Writing
Rated: E | (5.0)
"Strength from your gentle hands."

It's an oxymoron to be sure, but I've always loved talking about the strength it takes to be gentle. Sure, okay, it can take strength to be tough, but it takes so much more strength to be gentle.

This poem is great for so many reasons. First, pulling yourself up from the ashes of your old relationship to try and find a new one isn't easy. It takes courage to rise, it takes courage to be vulnerable, and it takes courage to try again. Love can leave us broken and scarred, but it doesn't last forever.

Another thing I really like that you point out in this poem is that we can't do it alone. It takes a lot of inner strength to love again, but it wouldn't be possible with another light to guide you home.
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Review of Gran's Wisdom  
Review by Izzy's Writing
Rated: 18+ | (5.0)
Ooof, that ending! I think I know exactly what that means.

I love this poem for a few reasons, which I will list below.

1) This poem reminds me of the conversations I had with my grandma about her life. It makes me miss her.

2) There's a lesson to be learned in all this. For starters: just because you are married doesn't mean you're happy to stay in it. Secondly, you could be with a partner for ages and still not know what they are really like. It's a sad lesson to learn, really.
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Review of The Flower I Was.  
Review by Izzy's Writing
Rated: E | (5.0)
I love this! Nature poems are some of my favorites.

I love the writing from the perspective of a flower. I adore it when people write from an object's point of view. It just makes it a much more interesting read.

Favorite line: "Don't feel sad for my death, feel happy that you saw me shine.
I am happy that a passer by picked me to ease their strife."

^-^ that line made me smile
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Review of Barriers  
Review by Izzy's Writing
Rated: E | (5.0)
First of all, I really like how you separate some lines with () it's a format I don't see a lot of.

Secondly, you're so right. Modern day religion has too much going on. I like the simple, please!
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Review of Serene Beauty  
Review by Izzy's Writing
Rated: E | (5.0)
"the true delicacy of creation" wow, what a line! Sometimes we forget how delicate this world is but poems like this help remind me.


*Gold* My review has been submitted for consideration in "Good Deeds Get CASH!.
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Review by Izzy's Writing
Rated: 13+ | (5.0)
First of all, thank you for sharing your work with us! I do hope you will share more in the days to come!!

I love how you repeat this one line "the fallen stay while the world moves on with laughter." It really cements this theme of this poem and ties it back together after each stanza.

"yet while the world moves on and she rots here." what a heart-breaking line! To be left behind by so many.
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Review of seeking a myth  
Review by Izzy's Writing
Rated: 13+ | (5.0)
I love this! I could feel the disconnection between the reader and her opposite.

"with the first pains of womanhood and her changing faces." What A Line!!!

"What is left for her to guide me with her silver horned crown?" Love the image of this line!
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Review by Izzy's Writing
Rated: E | (4.5)
"The sidewalk was not getting any softer." Oh, what a line that shows Lily's impatience!

"For some reason she wanted to kiss him." That is a relatable mood.

I really enjoyed the story but just for future reference, try and space out your paragraphs. Makes it easier to read.
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Review of Confusion  
Review by Izzy's Writing
Rated: 13+ | (5.0)
Oooh I really like this!

I like this because every year, the vibes start up a new. We have a chance for a clean slate. A chance that maybe, just maybe, this will be our year.

This year we might lose friends or make new ones. The "vibe" that you speak of really depends on the person.

The questions you pose through are good questions. I especially like the question of staying nutural. We can't always have an opinion and we don't always have to express that opinion.

Thank you for this. Keep writing!
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Review of Forbidden Wants  
Review by Izzy's Writing
Rated: E | (5.0)
Very short but very sweet. There is a lesson to be learned in all of this. The lesson is that we can't always get what we want. Some things aren't meant to us and we may never understand the reason why. It's unfair but it's a lesson some of us still struggle to learn.

Thank you for this lovely piece.
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Review by Izzy's Writing
Rated: E | (5.0)
I don't know the first couple parts but this sounds like a really good story!

That "silent voice" you heard was God telling you to let. He does so quite often, as a reminder that we are not alone, and that we must do good deeds. Not to get praised in return, but God sees and he is happy.

Helping that couple to the hospital, and then having your children tell you "I believe in God, too." is a great lesson to learn. You helped your children learn that there is a God, and here is the proof.
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Review of Christmas carol  
Review by Izzy's Writing
Rated: ASR | (5.0)
Wow, I enjoyed this very much.

1) I loved the rhyming with every other line. It's always a nice touch when it comes to poetry (I'm not very good at it myself tho)

2) I'm a Catholic Christian and reading poems like this that cement my faith are always good to read. It's very healthy spiritually for me.

3) It's a Christmas poem! I love Christmas.
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Review of Abandonment  
Review by Izzy's Writing
Rated: 18+ | (5.0)
Wow, dark and powerful and angry. I know how you feel. I've been angry at people for leaving me so many times it's hard to count. But in the end, I forgive and forget.

I like how you used capitalization to emphasis your words. That was a very, very smart move on your part!
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Review by Izzy's Writing
Rated: E | (5.0)
ahhh this is so cute I'm!! :')

To be innocent and free again. To be carefree. To be a child. To be so playful and happy. I wish I had my childhood back!

My mom and dad used to give me butterfly kisses all the time when I was young. And they'd give me bearhugs too so I can relate to Taylor here!

Great story! Keep writing! This gets a 10/10 for me.
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Review by Izzy's Writing
Rated: E | (5.0)
Oh my gosh why is this me tho? Like, your words are spot on! Totally spot on!

"Love is something one gives, not receives". I LOVE THIS LINE SO MUCH! IT'S A BEAUTIFUL LINE!

I wrote a story where my character gives his life for a friend and that reminded me of this line a lot.

Happy writing!
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Review of Thunder  
Review by Izzy's Writing
Rated: E | (5.0)
Short, sweet, and to the point! Just how I like poems to be!

We've been having a lot of thunderstorms/wind in our area lately so this poem reminded me of that. My dad and I just spent an hour outside cleaning up sticks from the backyard tree. Ugh!

Write on!

(Also: I love how you put the word "Boom" in there. Makes for a more dramatic effect)
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Review of Aftermath  
Review by Izzy's Writing
Rated: 18+ | (5.0)
Oh my gosh what a heart wrenching piece! I'm...........*wipes away tears* very moved from this poem.

This is a rather personal question but did someone in your family or someone you know commit suicide. Not being rude at all, because I am sorry if it did happen, but that's what it sounds like this poem is about.

Write on! :D
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Review of Rocking Horse  
Review by Izzy's Writing
Rated: E | (4.5)
Nice little story you have here! So sad the boy was abused but in the end he escaped.

I remember having my own rocking horse when I was but a child and I played with it a lot. My cousin had one, too, so we played on that a lot.

The only thing I would tell you is to separate your actions from your speaking words. Make them separate so it's easier for us, the reader, to understand.

Have a good day!
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Review of Disappearing Act  
Review by Izzy's Writing
Rated: E | (5.0)
oh my gosh! This made me smile. I love little kids and this sounds like something a little kid would do!

I love how the mom got revenge on the dad. Have fun, Pops!

I see no spelling errors that need to be addressed. Nothing wrong with your writing!

Keep up the good work!
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Review of Huntingtons  
Review by Izzy's Writing
Rated: E | (4.5)
1) You need to space out your paragraphs. It's very hard to read when they are close together.

2) A story where there is a serious illness is always important to write. Good job including that!

3) Write, write, write. The more you practice, the better you will get.
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Review of WHY I LIVE?  
Review by Izzy's Writing
Rated: E | (5.0)
This sounds like someone who tried to...ah...end their life would write. It seems like something I would write for sure, since I tried to end my life eariler this year.

I loved that you included your children in there! Children are so important to everyone.

Keep writing, please! :)
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