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635 Public Reviews Given
635 Total Reviews Given
Review Style
Encouraging but helpful. Most of the review will be about how good/what i liked about your writing, but i will point out flaws if i see any! :)
I'm good at...
Short Stories
Favorite Genres
Mystery, Sports, Romance
Least Favorite Genres
Murder Mysteries
I will not review...
I will review pretty much anything
Public Reviews
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Review by Izzy's Writing
Rated: E | (5.0)
Aww, i love it how it's based on your personal feelings! To be in love has to be one of the best things in life! "Your innocent affections can only be outdone
By your seductive warmth
And your simply engaging, scintillating smile.
My love, I find you to be the most beautiful, adorable,
And talented young lady ever to grace
This tireless, strange, and fortunately bizarre world –
The happiness we share together
Is the most magnificent granting of spirit and grace
That God could ever bestow
Upon two such deserving, youthful partners…" if i embarrass you, I'm sorry in advance, but that was one of the cutest things i've read. Great Job!!!!!
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Review of Nonnative Species  
Review by Izzy's Writing
Rated: E | (5.0)
Ah, to be a kid again! Boys will be boys, I guess. My cousins do the same thing-it's crazy, but you love them. This story was childlike and yet you had the kid act older than his age. That was a nice touch-great job. "She took the rose pink butterfly decorated pillowcase from Larry and dumped its contents onto the kitchen table. Laying on her oak table was a one foot long thick bodied snake with olive and brown splotches that merged into irregular and broad strips toward the head. She reached into her apron pocket, pulled out her cell phone, and speed dialed Animal Control." My mom would've done the same thing, LOL!!!
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Review of Head Games - FF  
Review by Izzy's Writing
Rated: E | (5.0)
KEN!!! Of course you had humor in your story, that's just what i'd expect from you! Detail, emotion, humor... all of those things go into a great writer! "Zach had found out that the score's name was Percy Argos. "Percy!" he snorted. "What a wimpy name. This will be a piece of cake."" That was my favorite line-life isn't easy, Zach! talento, usted tiene que, mi amigo. Gran escrito, espero que veo más de lo mismo.
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Review of i hate you  
Review by Izzy's Writing
Rated: 18+ | (5.0)
"Yeah, I know; I hate you too" LOL!!! that last line made me laugh. It was pretty long, but the fact that he got the guy he wanted was great! I love when people discover their true love-a match made in heaven! "I snaked my arm around him and his body did that tremble that will always make my stomach do flip-flops. I nuzzled his neck and hoped everyone was watching. They knew me as Mr. "thanks, not interested", but the way our bodies fit so effortlessly together affirmed, Thanks, I'm taken. I kissed my way back up to his lips before smiling into Justin's misty eyes" That part made me shiver-it was just super cute!
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Review of Musical Athletes  
Review by Izzy's Writing
Rated: 13+ | (5.0)
AHH! I loved this poem! What kind of boys do you like? I know now, LOL!!! I loved when in writing, someone expresses their feelings of what they want. It's okay to be a little selfish in writing, we all are at one point! "Musical athletes,
harboring brawn and good taste
always float my boat." This was my favorite part! Good work!!!!
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Review by Izzy's Writing
Rated: 18+ | (5.0)
Wow! It sounds like you haven't had an easy life! I want to say that I'm sorry and if you ever want to talk, I'm here to listen! Abuse is not an easy thing to deal with (I was abused by kids in middle school!) and the emotional scars take a long time to heal. That's for sharing your story and remember, I'm here if you want to talk.
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Review of A Sparrow's Song  
Review by Izzy's Writing
Rated: E | (5.0)
this is the first time I've read a poem about a bird! That's an interesting subject matter-they need to be written about more often! Birds are one of my favorite animals and I love their songs. Their songs are so pretty!! "
He sings his many songs when he arrives.
He defines territory where they will thrive.

She will come next to share the space.
Building the cup shaped nest is her place." I liked how you talked about both the male and the female bird-that was interesting! Great Work!!!
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Review of Lost Within  
Review by Izzy's Writing
Rated: E | (5.0)
I've found myself feeling the same way sometimes! Lost with no direction, lost not knowing where to go, lost not knowing where the path will led. If life did come with maps and directions, it'd be a hell of a lot easier, wouldn't it? "I cling to an antique compass,
As if it could help,
As if it could suddenly point the way." That was a great beginning! I loved it. It led to a great ending: "
At least down is a direction." Great job!
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Review of Hanukkah  
Review by Izzy's Writing
Rated: ASR | (5.0)
YOUR SON WROTE THAT?! Oh my gosh, he's gonna be a great writer someday! That poem was great for a nine-year-old!!! The younger you start, the better you will get. I started when I was seven years old and I've come such a long way since then! "
Hanukah is more,
Than just a feeling to behold!
So I'm telling you, do not forget,
What you have just been told!" These were my favorite lines! Great job!!!
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Review of Your Everclear  
Review by Izzy's Writing
Rated: E | (5.0)
It was loooong but nice song! Music is one of my favorite things and when I see songs on writing websites i start enjoying it! "
What are you going to do
when the alcohol has no bite
when what, where, and who
start to keep you up at night
the liquor makes its way through your veins
and it doesn't even take away your pain?
what are you gonna do?
when its all on you?
What are you going to do?" These was my favorite lines-you're trying to get your friend to stop drinking! Good Job!!
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Review by Izzy's Writing
Rated: E | (5.0)
Wow! That beginning was great and it had a good ending too! Some people like the same things in the same time in the same place everyday. Doesn't mean you have to be rude! "George, the always amicable bell hop, maître de, waiter, concierge and general club staff walked deliberately up to Mr. Pierpont, gently removed the bell from his hand and, before Henry had a chance to think of a proper insult, soundly slapped ole Henry across the face, twice. Now, Henry was pissed off, and his face hurt. As he stared at George, wide eyed with a gaping mouth George slowly leaned in so only Henry could hear and said in his quiet voice if you want Tea make it your gad damn self, then just turned and walked out of the room." That part was great, I loved it!!
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Review of Exhibition  
Review by Izzy's Writing
Rated: 13+ | (5.0)
This was a nice little poem! I found it to be detailed and emotional, two things that I love seeing in writing. "
Recalling the excursus
Lies were told, names were changed
Banquets were planned, Galas were authorized" The beginning lines are my favorite! Great job!!
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Review of Grandma  
Review by Izzy's Writing
Rated: 13+ | (5.0)
I'm not sure if I should be happy or sad when I read this. When I saw your title, I thought it was going to be a cute little tribute to your grandma. I guess not! "You’re full of life and energy and happiness
But yet...I learned to live half alive" This sounds like a good ending! Um, sorry to pry but were you abused when you were younger? I'm sorry but it just seems that way in your poem!
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Review of Mirror Image  
Review by Izzy's Writing
Rated: 13+ | (5.0)
I liked this! I noticed that you used the same phrase "I see distorted reality" twice. I thought it added greatly to the poem. I like poems because they can be intereging, they can tell a story, or they can simply just inspire you. Great work, I really enjoyed it!
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Review of Survivor  
Review by Izzy's Writing
Rated: 13+ | (5.0)
OMG!! No matter how scary it got I couldn't turn away! I had to know how it was going to end. "The Slithadon moved forward and quickly got itself into position to strike at the interloper. Head back, mouth wide, it threw itself forward. There was no way to avoid its inhuman speed. On reflex Gabriel swung upward and felt the sharp, long steel point strike home within the mouth of the beast. As the knife worked its way through the tough tissue of the palate and through the bone into the brain, the razor sharp teeth closed with an unstoppable pressure and a certain finality. It severed his arm cleanly above the elbow. The creatures’ wild spasms and convulsions of death finally overcame it and threw him roughly to one side. The Slithadon was dead. He knew he would be too if he did not act quickly." What a way to make your readers shiver. I love it!
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Review by Izzy's Writing
Rated: 13+ | (5.0)
this was funny! LOL!!! That's something I haven't thought of: military and NFL being switched! Very creative, I enjoyed it!
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Review of SURPRISE!  
Review by Izzy's Writing
Rated: 18+ | (5.0)
this is a great story! So many unplanned pregancies end with people giving up the baby! I'm glad you didn't! Great job!!!
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Review of Roses  
Review by Izzy's Writing
Rated: E | (5.0)
short and sweet! That's the way I like poems. Your character is heart-broken: "the roses, they are no longer red" That line just sounds like one that is heart-broken. "Because all of her fears
Were within those beautiful roses of red" Great Work!!!!
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Review by Izzy's Writing
Rated: E | (5.0)
i haven't read the other chapters but i must say this was an interesting read! Zombies, huh? That's something I haven't read about before! The story was intereging and it held me until the very end. The mother threatening him, the killing, the being able to be in someone else's brain. I want to know more! "He didn't remember actually doing it...all that he could recall was lifting the gun and aiming it. Her bloody corpse remained in her room, face down in a pool of blood. The sheets stained beyond fix and the posts were splattered as well as the wall. As time passed Curtis looked to the small razor he held in his hand. He looked over it and took in the sleek edges and the immensely sharpness that followed. He grinned and grimaced as he trailed it down his wrist. Blood trickled down as it left a trail down his arm." the ending made me shiver. Keeep Writing!!!
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Review of Natural Pearls  
Review by Izzy's Writing
Rated: E | (5.0)
I enjoyed reading this poem! It held me until the end and I liked the fact that it could related to life a little bit! "Against the membranes of life;
Constant biting irritant,
Iridescent-coated pain,
Layer on layer of self" These were my favorite lines in the poem-it reminded me of myself! Great job!
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Review of Violence  
Review by Izzy's Writing
Rated: E | (5.0)
this was an interesting little story! Detail, emotion... the whole packaged deal. As I was reading your story, I found I had a lot of questions running though my mind. Why is Jay throwing his class? Is he going to be okay? Two lovers broken apart with new lovers. Great Work!!!
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Review of Malevolence  
Review by Izzy's Writing
Rated: 13+ | (5.0)
you may be humerous, but you can be better deep, dang!!! Great job on your poem! "The infection rages, a cancer of the soul,
inundating the hearts of the innocent.
Its malevolent touch spreads without control." Those were my favorite lines, I loved them!!! Keep doing those deep poems, I enjoy them!
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Review of You Have Enemies  
Review by Izzy's Writing
Rated: 13+ | (5.0)
this was an intereging read! As a Catholic, this spoke to me really well. We all have our enemies (and thorns!) in life and somehow we just have to get past it. "
Christ enemies rose up against him and they crucified him. They put soldiers at his tomb to make sure no one “stole” the body. What they did not realize was that it was the crucification of Christ on the Cross, which began the process of transformation in both the individual and humanity. They only aided a process they hoped to stop; their act of cruelty assisted the power they feared." these line were my favorite! You did a great job!!
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Review by Izzy's Writing
Rated: E | (5.0)
YAY!!!! I have so many different reviewers and author and writers and friends and all those other people to choose from! I *Heart* it!!!!
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Review of The Brownies  
Review by Izzy's Writing
Rated: 13+ | (5.0)
AHHH!!!! this will totally be me when i have kids. This is hilarious, I'm sorry! Great Work! *giggles*
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