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Encouraging but helpful. Most of the review will be about how good/what i liked about your writing, but i will point out flaws if i see any! :)
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Short Stories
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Mystery, Sports, Romance
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Murder Mysteries
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Review of Faded  
Review by Izzy's Writing
Rated: E | (5.0)
Oh my gosh, this poem is so perfect. Like, this is literally my life at the moment.

Depression is exact as this poem describes it. you feel so alone and you feel like no one cares about you or is there for you.

The title is perfect too. You all of the sudden feel faded.

Great piece of work!
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Review by Izzy's Writing
Rated: E | (4.5)
In the politest way possible, please separate your paragraphs more, girl. it was a little hard to read.

May I ask what country this is taking place it?

Building a wall between people will never work out in the end. I can understand why they did it, but still. I believe it's better to talk it out.

Oh well, it's YOUR story, write it how you want :)
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Review by Izzy's Writing
Rated: E | (5.0)
Wow, this is really good. it sets up the story so perfectly!

the first part made my eyes well with tears. I'm imagining a poor girl out in the streets with her family trying to survive. That pulls at the heartstrings.

The only thing I would say to you is to separate your sentences a little more. I wasn't sure if it was supposed to be one long paragraph or not :)

Please keep up this story, I'm very interested!
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Review of Room to Rent  
Review by Izzy's Writing
Rated: 13+ | (5.0)
This poem made me squirm a little in my seat. I don't really like hearing about animals being harmed in anyway.

the first paragraph of your poem sounded really sad, almost personal. "It seemed that nobody cared about the love I used to have".

Thank you for your poem and keep writing!
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Review of Let Be  
Review by Izzy's Writing
Rated: E | (5.0)
This poem is so so good omg this is amazing!

My life lately-- well, actually, in the past couple of years-- hasn't been easy, so whenever I come across a happy poem like this, my heart lifts a little.

Your poem reminded me that even in the darkest of times, we can always find happiness.

Thank you for that reminder, and keep up the good writing!
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Review of Built From Lies  
Review by Izzy's Writing
Rated: E | (5.0)
The first part of this poem sounds very similar to the situation I'm in. Convincing everyone else that I'm fine when I'm really not.

You used a lot of emotion in this poem. This sounds more like a personal poem than anything else.

I loved the "I cannot find a fix, nothing to ease the pain, none of us can help, this world is now our bane." line because this is one of the truest statements I've heard all day!
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Review by Izzy's Writing
Rated: E | (5.0)
OMG this is a new story! I had a few laughs through out!

*Angry* 'Anger': “You don’t want that! Put me in instead. I bring passion and flare.”

I actually lost it laughing at that one. Oh, anger, you do your job so well.

Do you know, this reminds me of the Disney movie INSIDE OUT. Have you seen it before?
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Review by Izzy's Writing
Rated: E | (5.0)
First of all, I'm really sorry about your friend! That sounds horrible!

Secondly, I really like this letter or whatever because it teaches us a lesson about life: there is a pain but then there is also hope.

Third, I really like the title of your writing!

I hope your friend is in heaven, and thanks for this great piece of work!
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Review by Izzy's Writing
Rated: ASR | (5.0)
Nice goals for the year! I wish I had done the contest so I could've written out my goals.

I saw no errors in your writing. Your paragraphs were perfect and I saw no problems with anything.

My only (joking) complaint is that I wanted to know more about you by the end of it!
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Review of LIFE LEARNT  
Review by Izzy's Writing
Rated: E | (4.0)
I like this! it's life goals right?! nice!

I just noticed you don't use capital letters at the beginning of your sentences. You should.

It's a good start, but I think more needs to be added to it. Like what about life after college? You need to think about that too.

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Review of Never Did I See  
Review by Izzy's Writing
Rated: E | (5.0)
The first thing I would like to ask you is: why do you write in that style of one word, then two words, then three words every line? Not that I'm complaining.

I think this story can teach you a good lesson. Nothing ever stays the same. Everything in life changes. And that's okay.

I really enjoyed this poem. Keep writing!
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Review by Izzy's Writing
Rated: E | (3.5)
The first thing I noticed is that you made a error in your description.

"It's about two monks who carried water to his master."

It should be "It's about two monks who carried water to THEIR master."

Also, you didn't use " " to know when someone is speaking. It felt me very confused.

It does teach a very good lesson, this story does. But you just need to fix your spelling errors.
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Review by Izzy's Writing
Rated: E | (5.0)
Ahh I loved how you talked like an Irishman in this poem! that was so cool!

My grandma was born on St. PArtick's day and I'm part Irish. This poem is perfect!

This poem is about his life story. How he was captured, put into slavery, and eventually escaped. Legand has it that he is why there are no more snakes in Ireland. Do you know that story?
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Review by Izzy's Writing
Rated: E | (5.0)
Omg this is a really good poem! was this written from your own experience in the military?

It sounds (to me) like you are a Catholic or a Christian. Are you? I don't mean to pry.

Having had family in the military, this poem was perfect for me to read.

Thank you, soldiers!
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Review of firtst bike  
Review by Izzy's Writing
Rated: E | (5.0)
May I ask how old you are? :)

Ah, getting your first bike. that's always a very pleasant experience. I was about six or seven when I got first bike of mine, and it was amazing.

I noticed some grammar and spelling errors in your story. No worries, we all make mistakes.

1) "And I was worry about them..." should be "And I was worrying about them."

2) "And I got a bike it was the exact color I wanted..." should be "And I got a bike. It was the exact color I wanted."

Happy writing!
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Review of A Holiday Tableau  
Review by Izzy's Writing
Rated: E | (5.0)
aweeeeeee I love this!

the perfect Holiday dinner, a loving family, and good food. It's like the American dream (more than other countries)

I loved that you included the kids asking for Grandpa's pipe for their snowman. That totally sounds like something little kids would do.

Thank you for taking me back to my childhood!
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Review of The Song of Hope  
Review by Izzy's Writing
Rated: E | (5.0)
first of all I have to say I haven't read a lot of Emily Dickson poems, but I love the quote you used!

I love this poem for a few reasons:

1) with the world the way it is nowadays, we need more poems like this. It feels like the world is losing hope and this poem remind us that there is always hope.

2) same as the first reason, but on a more personal level.

Great job!
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Review of Inside this Realm  
Review by Izzy's Writing
Rated: E | (5.0)
Thank you!!!! Honestly, thank you for writing a poem like this!

The first part of the poem, I thought it was going to be about depression. I really did. Just the words you used and such made me think it was.

And then you turned it into a poem about standing your ground and not letting strangers or society take things from you. Which is something I struggle with on a daily bases.

Please write more poems like this. The world needs them!
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Review of Missed.  
Review by Izzy's Writing
Rated: E | (5.0)
Um, is this story/poem about a stalker or an old lover? It's hard to tell here.

Funny, the minute the word "Missing" popped up on my webpage, I thought of my grandma who died five years ago. The pain of her loss still hurts me to this day.

This was a wonderful short piece of writing!

Great job!
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Review by Izzy's Writing
Rated: 13+ | (5.0)
omg a World War II story! it's been forever since I read one of those!

May I ask how old the girl in your story is? You don't really say her age or name.

I'm actually quite amazed she was able to outrun those German soldiers. That has to be tough to do!

I like those people who took her in! they sound like very nice people.

Keep writing!
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Review of A toast.  
Review by Izzy's Writing
Rated: E | (5.0)
is this poem about yourself or someone else?

It's short and sweet, just the way I like them! I really do like them!

This poem sounds more like a story about someone who couldn't sleep and had thoughts about love.

I like that last line the best.

Good job!
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Review of In the Box  
Review by Izzy's Writing
Rated: E | (5.0)
whatttttttttt a moving box? that's crazy talk!

I love mysteries! I love being the detective.

I just wish that the story was a little bit longer. That's the only complaint I have.

Was this based on something that actually happened to you? or were you just writing this in first person?

I hope that you'll make a sequel of this story!

Keep writing!
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Review of A Love So Divine  
Review by Izzy's Writing
Rated: E | (4.5)
awe this is such a cute poem! I love it!

I like the way you describe the girl you were dating. It sounds like she was a good woman for you.

The only thing I would tell you is to separate your paragraphs. That's the only criticism I have.

Can I ask what happened that your relationship ended?

Keep writing!
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Review by Izzy's Writing
Rated: E | (5.0)
is this based on your life story? if it is, it's a cute poem.

as a kid, you're always wanting to play with new children. That's part of fun of being a child is that you can play with anyone you want.

The last paragraph made me laugh. It just is totally something a kid would say.

Keep writing!
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Review of Safety Plates  
Review by Izzy's Writing
Rated: E | (5.0)
this was interesting! did is this only like a part of a story you're starting to work on? or is this it?

This story reminds me so much my parents telling me to but on my seat-belt when I was younger so we wouldn't get into an accident.

But I don't understand why they didn't like the oringal script? what was wroung with it?

Keep writing!
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