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Review of Out of Tears  
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Rated: E | (5.0)
This poem tells clearly how fast tears can dry, when one has completely run out of tears.

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This poem tells tears are needed to get down.

Edited the entire poem:
It is incredible
how fast tears can dry.
One moment, they are streaming
down my face, choking
me, blurring my vision.

The next, they are dried
on my cheeks, salty lines
on cracked skin leaving
my eyelashes stiff and crusted.

My red eyes itch
from the sudden dryness.

My nose is stuffed
and empty at the same time.

It is incredible
how fast tears can dry
when you have completely
run out of them.

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Rated: E | (4.0)
Your view and expression about footsteps of our life is destined and it is appreciable.

Edited the title of the poem:
The Footsteps of Life

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Edited the description of the poem:
This poem tells about footsteps of life.

Edited the entire poem:
The footsteps of life will carry you through guiding in the right direction to choose to.
The footsteps of life remain unknown as we walk through this life.
These are unknown as we walk through this life one step at a time.
We gather steps we trod have been measures of our lives.
Once we realize the footsteps we have trod these have been
given from God along the way.
We give to Him thanks/We give Him thanks/We thank God for the steps on this earthly life realm.

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You have not used Author’s Notes telling a word about your style of writing or style and art of expression of title of your poem to help your public readers to follow and appreciate your poem.

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Review of the Burning Bush  
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Rated: E | (4.5)
The poem has clearly expressed and shown the burning bush as a metaphysical fire.

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The Burning Bush

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The burning bush as a metaphysical fire.

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If fire does dispel my fear
then I am here
where matter teems and pulses
disappearing in a sheet of flame.

My senses clear; I will remain.
The melting skies convey
a silent message to my heart.
The burning earths, where memories fly
assure me that I cannot die.

I stand in light, compounded
of an elemental passion, pure
purposeful, and nowhere bound.
Departure is now unthinkable.
No exit is to be found.

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Edit includes grammatical changes, corrections, changes in words and lines for making the poem more expressible, easier to understand and to help your public readers to have a pleasant read.

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Review of "The Lady Doth"  
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Rated: E | (5.0)
This sonnet speaks clearly about the mistake that man often makes against women, misusing their power or to prove women wrong doers, even when wrong doing is negligible, and offers a word for resolution of any negligible complain, the octave and the sestet have clarity of viewpoint and the resolution at the end of the sonnet is appreciable for the point of view is good and lawful.

Edited the title of the poem:
The Lady doth

Edited the description of the poem:
I am all for me too, time is up movements; abusers need to be brought down, but, enough.

Edited the title of the poem in the body of the poem:
The Lady doth

Edited the poem:
The current climate of "Time's Up", and (or) "Me too!"
Exposed a wrong against the vulnerable
and a movement hearing voices is overdue.
They shout with charges indisputable.

Though, it is not exclusively for women wronged.
It seems that most complaints do come from there
abusing power, mostly men belonged.
They use their strength, intimidate and snare.

Now, many men have fallen in their shame
and many more will follow in their wake.
The line is drawn but not to bring one’s fame.
A compliment can be just that, not to snake.

So, do not mistake attraction for abuse
and protest only when there is misuse.

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1765 / Friday, 17th January, 2020


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Review of First line  
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Rated: E | (4.5)
This poem tells expressively a philosophical point of view and reflective meditation about appreciation of the creation, life, rules for living and achievement of eternity.

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First Line

Edited the description of the poem:
This poem is about reflective meditation.

Edited the entire poem:
At times, in quiet moments, lost in thought
I feel a kinship with this living earth.
And all the life that creation has wrought
through changes and deaths, and finally rebirths
to understand, and flow with Nature's tide
brings sweet awareness to the mind of man
its cycles of conflict, the pain and pride
endured, resisted; and if once one can
just watch its movement in the quietness
of heart that has ceased its normal daily quest
to change what is to what should be, I guess
that life would have a new meaning, and be blessed.
Conflict might finally end, and man could be
at peace with self and touch eternity.

Comments:
It is evident that you have not used Author’s Notes. You could use Author’s Notes to tell a word about your style of expression, and partial or lesser use of punctuation to help your public readers to easy read, appreciate, understand and follow your art of expression.

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1763 / Friday, 17th January, 2020


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Review of For Love of Life  
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Rated: E | (4.5)
Your poem speaks about a general view about keeping a relation.

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This poem tells a relationship message.

Edited the entire poem:
For love of life, and love, and beauty fair
which reigns within the heart of those who seek
nothing but truth, and in that spirit, share
the subtle language of the soul in meek
and gentle ways; I dedicate this verse
for through our basic needs, and suffering.

We are of like accord; and though the curse
of cruel hate is strong in hearts, I bring
this simple hope, this fervent-written prayer
that we might join our hearts with faith to find
a way to mend our differences; to care
for one another's needs with quiet minds
that we might bridge that gap the self has made
and be as one enlightened, and unafraid.

Comments:
You have used lesser or partial punctuation in this poem. You have not used Author’s Notes to tell or warn your public readers to understand the poem easier, or to get a pleasant read or to help your readers to appreciate the poem fully and expressively.

Comments:
You have not used Author’s Notes to write a word about your style of expression.

Comments:
Edit includes grammatical corrections also.

Comments:
You have not clearly mentioned to whom this verse is dedicated to. Those two lines you have written for dedication is not expressive as the word dedication is always used with a word to follow ‘to.’

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1762 / Friday, 17th January, 2020


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Review of A Bear in a Storm  
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Rated: E | (4.5)
This parable poem expresses a good moral – Live boldly, be happy and enjoy life.

Edited the description of the poem:
This is a parable poem.

Edited the entire poem:
Bears normally like snow.
So, I have heard.
This bear lives for the snow.
He loves his life.
Some other bears
think he is strange
not going for more
green and golden places.
But, not this bear
he is not your average bear.

So, hear my story.
Live boldly.
Be happy.
Enjoy life!

Comments:
Partial or lesser use of punctuation is not a good practice. You have not used Author’s Notes about your style of expression, or telling any warning in the Author’s Notes to help your public readers to understand the poem and help them get a pleasant read.

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1761 / Friday, 17th January, 2020


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Rated: E | (4.5)
In this poem you have clearly highlighted comparative essence of feeling and emotion in keeping and maintaining romantic relation at the state and status or type of heart of a girl.

Edited the description of the poem:
This poem tells hear of gold.

Edited the entire poem:
A girl is with a heart of gold.
How on earth she could be cold?
She was frigid to the touch.
A girl is with a heart of steel.
She really does not know how to feel
her emotions before a wack
and she cannot keep on track.
If only she knew how to deal!

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Rated: 13+ | (5.0)
Very well said about the themes of the songs and again, you have rightly maintained the prompt to make a musical descriptive poem.

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This poem is written about the titles of songs sung by Glen Campbell.

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It is an Oklahoma Sunday Morning.
Wind is waltzing with the cottonwood leaves
and Mama is at the church praying
that you get home before Mother's Day.

While you, Country Boy (You Got Your Feet in L.A.)
walking along Hollywood Boulevard
with stars in your eyes and holes in boots
do you love the bright city lights

more than our warm Southern Nights?
Come home, Country Boy, to ones who love you.
Come home to the perfume of ripening wheat
and the scent of fresh baked homemade bread.

Come back, Country Boy, to the old homestead
that you remember when you hear Gentle on My Mind
when you find yourself sleeping on a bus stop bench
or in a cold jail cell with a tweaker and no bail.

Just send us a hail by snail mail
asking us to Try a Little Kindness
and we will send you the lettuce to purchase a ticket
on a Greyhound or a jet. Just come home, Country Boy.

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Rated: E | (5.0)
Whatever happens, you are confident, you know what to do, and you will help whoever go and reach the place, you will go to the well once more, and you believe, you will get to see also there the thing you have been searching for and you will find the man there, those who could not see may remain there; well expressed.

Edited the title of the poem:
To the Well Once More

Edited the description of the poem:
This is a poem out there to those who have become inspired to write poems via their experiences. / This special poem is to those out there, who have become inspired to write via their experiences.

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I will embrace them
as one who earned the right
to stand at the precipice
of such undeniable change
to peer into the void of ideas
to be drawn from nothing
to be turned into something
as brothers we will share.

We will enslave the page
with what we know
and what we’ve been shown.

Some, those in tune
will come to understand
those, blind, without eyes
will remain in the dark
to the well once more
I will go
I hope to see you there.


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Review of Dawn  
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Rated: E | (5.0)
This speaks a special morning, when God comes and promises you a new dawn to follow each night provided you live a righteous living, while you enjoy the morning with your love beside you.

Edited the description of the poem:
On the wings of the morning.
This poem tells how you enjoy life on the wings of the morning.

Edited the part of the poem:
On the wings of the morning my love comes to me
and the smile on her face is a wonder to see.
A mug of hot coffee, she bears in her hand
and it is brewed to perfection, neither strong nor bland.
Muffled sounds of civilization are heard
and out of a bush, float the song of a bird.
The Sun is awake from its long evening slumber
sweeping stars from the carpet of night beyond number.
My mind is at peace, and the dawn seems to say:
"May my breeze bring you yet another fine day!"
"Be courageous, my son, do for Me what is right
And I promise a new dawn will follow each night."

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Review of A Child is Born  
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Rated: E | (4.5)
This poem speaks about a great child is born, and the earth rejoice her birth as an Angel is seen lingering near about.

This is not a good practice, you have not used Author’s Notes to tell anything about the form of the poem, as you have kept the public readers in dark about the form of the poem; after all, this poem is placed on public read and reviews. I could not enjoy the poem in want of information about the form of the poem.

Edited the description of the poem:
This is a Poem in Lady Slipper Form.

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Review of Musings at Work 1  
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Rated: 18+ | (5.0)
You might have suffered a lot; this poem speaks your real life experience, people are not conscious of sound pollution, days before and after the Christmas they play music even at work places to express their love of God; music affect upon mind, head and health; well said

Edited the description of the poem:
This poem tells about just practicing; if you work retail, you might appreciate this.

Edited a part of the poem:
I pray for sweet relief
but, my prayer remains unanswered
and no relief is to be had.

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1750 / Monday, January 13, 2020


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Rated: E | (5.0)
You have positively, appreciably, confidently, naturally and eloquently expressed your feeling and emotion about melody of birds, and birds’ sing-song chirping, and twittering at different places and times and you are so inspired that you think listening to the birds and feeling of their expression of their melody makes your day.


Edited the description of the poem:
This poem speaks to listen to the birds sing.


Edited the part of the poem:
It is the sing-song chirp of birds
from bushes and trees that get to me
and when the dawn begins to peek
I hear the songbirds speak.


Edited another part of the poem:
It is the melody of birds
for right outside, they sing with pride
and without bird-song by and by
my day would die.


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Review of Remiss  
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Rated: ASR | (5.0)
Truth reveals! I am inspired with your thoughts; your endeavours are appreciable; you have been able to find out the right word to express your honour to the veterans, you have portrayed a general but humane stand of thinking and honouring the veterans for their dedications and contributions to the cause of saving human rights and sacrificing their lives in wars; you have found the right word ‘remiss’ so you wish to use it for your expression of paying thanks to them, as you think the right word has an eternal and humane value to express honour to the veterans. I find no exaggeration, and find the order of taletelling is appreciable and expressed well to represent our concern globally about remembering the contributions of the veterans. This has been a great work having humane value in term of expression. You have done the thematic job righteously. The right word is here in right perspective. I feel proud of reviewing this great work after six years.

Edited the description of the poem:
This poem is an entry to honour the Veterans, telling about the right word to express the thematic action.

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1747 / Monday, January 13th, 2020


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Review of Transitions  
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Rated: E | (5.0)
The view, visual projection speak about the transition, the environment witnesses so, the movement, the speed, the changes in actions, the rush, the activation and the sound and sights all are evident and well worded to give the readers a state and status of the storm that has already raged, though the view of transition of the storm approaches is appreciably explored and depicted to give us the order of movement more intensive and dramatic.

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1745 / Sunday, January 12th, 2020


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Review of Doughnut Saga  
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Rated: E | (5.0)
Doughnuts personified, none could leave tasting such delicious cakes, as if they have wooed enough, so your husband need not ask for further treat, he enjoyed eating all the cakes silently or privately, but you spied for you were also greedy and wanted to eat the small ring-shaped cake made of rich, light dough that is fried in deep fat and digest them a major part of the cakes though you detected the eater, the taletelling is funny, and interesting to read for you were unfortunate to eat the cakes.

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The doughnuts sitting on the shelf
are calling out my name.
Their scent surrounds, if only
I could eat them right away.

But, I did not buy them just for me.
David knows they were there.
I wish I could ignore them.
But, they did not play fair.

The sumptuous red liquid
oozes from the holes
sugar tantalise
as if they were messing with my soul.

As I float towards the cupboard
I know temptation has won
greedily, I open the door
but wait, where they have gone!

I go looking for my husband
as fire steaming from my ears.
When I find him hiding in the shed
his face betrays his fear.

His lips, dusted in sugar
a red spot on his cheek
that was the last time I bought something nice.
Ho! He won’t get any more treats!

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1744 / Sunday, January 12th, 2020


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Review of Family Memories  
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Rated: E | (5.0)
This is a well-structured Ottava Rima poem in one stanza of eight lines with a solid rhyme pattern, expressed in a good flow of thoughts, about family memories, poet remembers and expresses his joy and happiness, and remembers how he had the fine, fantastic, funny, formal and fabulous joyous and playful moments of living in his family and how he passed his holidays, vacations, and how he made his trips, outings and journeys and enjoyed his days in his childhood family days, now he remembers the past worth of history.

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Photographs on a shelf spark memories clear
take me back to days of fun and mirth.
Family outings, trips, vacations so dear
remind me gently of history's past worth.
My mother, father and siblings are here
remembering in fondness my thoughts’ rebirth.
Pleasures that fill my mind of days’ past glee
hauntingly completes my journey’s memory.


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1743 / Saturday, January 11th, 2020


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Rated: E | (5.0)
Love can be found even in unlikely places, this poem speaks a tale about how a conductor finds his love at the station, though it is a one way love, but love grows here in the heart of the conductor; the taletelling is fantastic and spoken in a natural and orderly way.

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Each day
he looks for her.
Each day
she sees him.
He is alive.

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1742 / Friday, January 10th, 2020


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Rated: ASR | (5.0)
Man’s vessel makes journey to heaven after his death, for immortality of the human soul, as the poet says, the soul or spirit is female, the soul of a man has to go through tests conducted by God; as young undying souls roam around the worlds of God; this expresses a generalized viewpoint about man’s making journey to achieve the status of immortality after his death.

The title of an acrostic poem may be written all in capital letters; for more information please read the notes: "Invalid Item" .

Edited the title of the poem:
Vessel of Your Desire
Edited the description of the poem:
This acrostic poem tells thoughts on the immortality of the human soul.

Edited 5 lines of the 18 line poem:
Sistered with a body
Single entity of
Ego, brain, and spirit

Once born into matter
Forever journeying

The aforesaid last line (not of the poem’s last line) is not expressive, since there is limitation of syllables, I could not change the line to make it more expressive.

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1741 / Wednesday, January 8th, 2020


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Rated: E | (5.0)
Nature is well concerned all the way in this Haiku; a view of the trees and leaves of Autumn is expressed, leaves are falling, it seems the trees are getting bald with the fall of leaves, winds of the next season is actively tossing and tugging the leaves, the state is shaken, not stirred; the view of Nature is well depicted.

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1739 / Wednesday, January 8th, 2020


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Review of Photograph  
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Rated: E | (5.0)
You have painted a visual portrayal of your romantic feeling and emotion in visualization and in imagination, how you have relaxed in the arms of your love, in the photograph, as if placing in a place, making an environment to get the feeling upon the stand of placing the photograph in the environment you have visualized; well depicted.

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This poem tells about framing a sliver of our love.

Edited 7 lines of the 17 line poem:

greens and blues: water, trees and elements
of a fertile land on a cool day.

I stand there with my love.
His pale shirt and skin was contrasting my shades
of brown.

Touch the reptilian frame (in a weird tint of turquoise).
Feel the soft ridges of the skin, and tell me.


I have changed, corrected the 7 lines of the poem to express them more expressively and for easier read.

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#1937699 by Dave

1738 / Wednesday, January 8th, 2020


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Rated: E | (5.0)
One remembers the action, activity, words of wisdom or act of imparting behaviour that inspires or impacts upon the person as a source of inspiration or that eternally impacts upon the person and that remains in memory of the person; the message is clearly expressed in this poem.

Edited the title of the poem:
Quotes and Words of Wisdom

Edited the description of the poem:
This tells the quotes and words of wisdom that inspire and uplift the soul.

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#1937699 by Dave

1737 / Wednesday, January 8th, 2020



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Review of Winter haiku.  
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You have two choices of enjoying and walking along the snow surfaces before the summit, you may avail of one as you wish, in this Haiku, human nature is well depicted.

Edited the title:
Winter Haiku

Edited parts of the 9 line poem:
Each top snow is original.
Which one do you prefer?

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#1937699 by Dave

1732 / Tuesday, January 7th, 2020



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Review of Thank You, Lord.  
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Rated: E | (5.0)
Thanksgiving, once a year, a righteous activity, the day to pay thanks to God, the moments to pay gratitude to God for His unconditional and infinite love moulds us for the life above, and for His giving us peace of heart and peace of mind; the essence and importance of Thanksgiving Day is fairly depicted. I have enjoyed the read.

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Thank you, God, your Love
molds us for the life Above.

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1731 / Tuesday, January 7th, 2020


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