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Review of Honey - Don't!  
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Rated: E | (5.0)
In 26 lines, in this poem, you have shared your experience, an emotional part of relation, that how sometime a husband’s logical, rational and lovable activity and words are not appreciated in the perspective of the words and activities for the time being, and within a few minutes again either your husband or you would act something untoward but lovably and appreciably and there is again a mutual or reciprocal good stand of relation when either of you might have forgotten the earlier sour or harsh relation, though in most of the cases, husband feels bad at the harsh words from his wife, it is easy to relate to such state of feeling and relation.


I like and have enjoyed the read, the free flow of thoughts, the taletelling, the word visuals, and the word imagery.


Thanks for sharing and placing this work on public read and reviews on 23rd April, 2018; I am happy to write and send this second (2nd) review of your work.


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Rated: E | (5.0)
This is a fine, concordant, harmonious, melodious, lyrical and musical ode to audio visual cyber sprockets, I like and have enjoyed the read, the word visuals, the word imagery, the taletelling, the free flow of lyrical and musical notes, and the rhythms of melodic thoughts, in appreciation of changes in practices and trends in choreographic manifestations.

Thanks for sharing and placing this work on public read and review on 6th April, 2019; I am happy to write and send this second review of your work.

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Rated: 13+ | (5.0)
You remember with least interest about their talking and spoken words, you never like to remember any of the inhuman and devastating talks as you are reluctant to keep any of such losing moments in your memory.

You find now everything is over and forgiven, though you think, you are not in a state of peaceful mind and living, because, the fight is not yet over actually, you have just remembered the words spoken by a dying, departing co-fighter or soldier.

I like and have enjoyed the read, the taletelling, the flow of thoughts, the word visuals and the word imagery.


Edit:
The Fight Is Not Over
(The Fight is Not Over)


Edit:
As last spoken words, those
Are something to be remembered.

(As last spoken words, those
are something to be remembered.)


Edit:
Is he talking about my fight
To be okay with his loss?

(Is he talking about my fight
to be okay with his loss?)


Edit:
Is he talking about our fight…
(Is he talking about our fight?)


Edit:
All is forgiven, Baby. Come
Back to me. I love you.

(All is forgiven, Baby, come
back to me. I love you.)


Comments:
Since there is no sign of cease fire, you are least bothered with the talks or words, though, everyone wants peace, but you have not expressed a word about peace, circumstantially, I appreciate.


Thanks for sharing and placing this work on public read and review on 30th August, 2016; I am happy to write and send this first review of your work.


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Review of Dance of Life  
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Rated: ASR | (5.0)
What makes a poem, and how the poems are created, and how poets make their poems, and what poems do are well said in this 6 line poem.

I like and enjoyed the read.

Thank you for sharing, placing this on public read and review on 27th December, 2013; I send this ninth review of your poem.

Keep writing poems.
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Rated: E | (5.0)
Truly mortal!

I like and have enjoyed the read, the taletelling, the free flow of thoughts, and the philosophy upheld.

Comments:
You have endeavoured composing your first Senryu maintaining the spirit of literal meaning Japanese Sen river + ryu willow as you have successfully made this in a lyric verse form having three unrhymed lines of five, seven, and five morae and have typically treat the theme of human foibles with an ironic tone (memory moments measure our mortality, in appreciation of footprints in time, as you have stated memory moments reminds us we are mortals and we have to go back there, for we live a mortal or temporary living); though our soul is immortal, as God the creator of man says so, we may think our soul is divine, but we are mortal, as God wishes to create us, as soul is indestructible and untouchable, so you have referred to the matter ironic in essence for appreciation, as you have mentioned, the memory moments capture our soul, this thought reminds us we will have to leave this beautiful God’s created world once, for the soul is separated from death and death of our physical body.

Thank you for sharing, placing this on public read and review on 8th December, 2005; I send this thirty-first review of your Senryu.

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Review of A Brand New Day  
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Rated: E | (5.0)
Great!

You have discovered yourself!

You have expressed your thanks to the peers, friends, society and media for their effect upon your life, you have rediscovered you for you no more want to live a fake, unreal, mean and pseudo life under the influence through social ideals and media hype.

You have decided to live a real life, to follow what is true, and to follow all that makes you real, individual and not being the media type. You wish to live a brand new day every day henceforth.

I like and enjoyed the read, the rhymes, the lyrical flavour, the simple diction, the art of expression, the story, the taletelling, the word visuals, the word imagery, the free flow of thoughts, the rhythms of thoughts about effect of people and media, the monologue flavour of appreciation of life, and the appreciation of contemporary state of living.


Comments:
You have learned the essence of human values in making a good living rejecting valueless contemporary social and media ideals and wish to live a good and righteous living.

Thank you for sharing, placing this on public read and review recently; I send this first review of your poem.

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Rated: E | (5.0)
I like and have enjoyed the read of this poem, the environment you have described so well and the word visual helps me to see and look into the scene you have portrayed in words, as it is evident you have invoked an aspect of Nature


Edit:
A chill in the breeze (Haiku Tanka)
(A Chill in the Breeze)


Comments:
I think it is needless to mention the nature or form of the poem in the title of the poem; you may have used Author’s Notes to tell about the nature or form of the poem.

Besides, you have not mentioned clearly the type of Haiku you have written and use of syllables is not mentioned anywhere.

I know Haiku is a Japanese lyric verse form having three unrhymed lines of five, seven, and five morae, traditionally invoking an aspect of seasons or nature.

Moreover, I know Tanka is a Japanese lyric verse form having seven unrhymed lines, the first and third composed of five morae and the rest of seven.

Thank you for sharing, placing this on public read and review recently; I send this second review of your poem.

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1586 / Sat 07122019



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Review of Hope At Will  
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Rated: 18+ | (5.0)
It is good to learn your decision about life; in this poem, you have tried to state the nature of your faith in fate and you wish to make your own fate in your own dark and extreme way and you believe you know what it is all about and you will and you believe you will accept the fate in your own way.

I like this and have enjoyed the read, the taletelling and the free flow of thoughts.

Edit:
Hope At Will
(Hope at Will)

Thank you for sharing, placing this on public read and review on 26th June, 2015; I send this third review of your poem.

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Review of The Future  
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Rated: E | (5.0)
You have defined today, yesterday and the future days; all days are changeable, as time changes, so you state, today is today, only today as long as it remains, and it becomes yesterday when today is gone and when tomorrow of yesterday becomes today and every tomorrow is future on today; so, we can change our today and we can change our tomorrows or the future as we change our clothes.

I like and have enjoyed the read, the taletelling, the free flow of thoughts.

Thank you for sharing, placing this on public read and review on 26th August, 2012; I send this seventh review of your poem.

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1582 / Sat 07122019



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Review of Chaos, Evolved  
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Rated: 13+ | (5.0)
Chaos, controversies cause wars!

You have expressed a nice story about causing wars, in this poem, your words say a good point of view, as you have clearly worded controversies and conflicts cause wars, disputes, battles, and bring in losses, invite causes of losses, bring out incurrence of losses and breaks up relations.

For controversies cause and invite us to hell. If we do not take actions to remove conflicts and resolve controversies we will have to suffer in the future; well said and well done.

further you mean to say, if there are controversies and we do not take action to solve, we will be affected with our will and we will invite troubles.

I like and have enjoyed the read, the story, the taletelling, the word visuals, the word imagery, the free flow of thoughts, and the rhythms of conceptual derivation why and how controversies and conflicts bring in wars in people.

Edit:
Drama, Controversy...Its self-explanatory, I think
(This is self-explanatory. This tells drama, controversy.)

Comments:
You have explained the point of view that chaos evolves our will and take us to hell.

Thank you for sharing, placing this on public read and review recently; I send this second review of your poem.

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Review of I am Coming Home  
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Rated: E | (5.0)
This is a poem of performing responsibility to self, family, and others; you have stated clearly we should give our time, moments and days to others and those who served and took care of us previously.

We know we live by keeping and maintaining our relations by performing our responsibilities, because life is giving and taking and not taking, taking and taking only and no giving.

I like this and have enjoyed the read, the story, the taletelling, the free flow of thoughts, the word visuals and the word imagery expressing about our commitment and responsibilities to others who once did perform their responsibilities to ours and helped us growing and maintaining our living.

You further hinted that sacrifice is essential, we have to lose something to get something, nothing is achieved without loss, loss is the consideration, and nothing is achieved without consideration or paying the price; you have hinted the message in a few words.

You have mentioned the story very well, you have lost a lot, now you have come to know about your elder ones who are not well, so you have decided to come back home to serve your unwell elder ones who once kept you well.


Edit:
I Am Coming Home
(I am Coming Home)


Edit:
Let's give atleast a piece of our today for those who gave us all of their yesterdays.
(Let us give at least a piece of our today for those who gave us all of their yesterdays.)


Edit:
I have changed from always clingy to a women independent.
(I have changed from always clingy to a woman independent.)


Edit:
But I have missed moments, happy and sad .
Just because these kind of moments don't happen planned.

(But I have missed moments, happy and sad.
For these kinds of moments do not happen planned.)


Comments:
Your view about human values is appreciable.

Thank you for sharing, placing this on public read and review recently; I send this second review of your poem.

Please feel free to reject any of the edits and comments; keep writing.

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Review of My Gypsy Soul  
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Rated: E | (5.0)
Your gypsy soul, as you have expressed the story about, in this poem, stating natural and realistic state of the gypsy soul, temporarily or adventurously has lost the consciousness, and at the instance of listening to an angel’s song, the gypsy soul soars again and wings to golden shores in a heavenly kingdom.

I like and have enjoyed the read, the story, the taletelling, the lesson and the moral of the story, the word visuals, the word imagery, and the free flow of thoughts.

I get a good message that a lion roars, temporarily or sometime it may not behave or act like a lion, for a dormant lion is a lion and nothing more or less.

I expected to have a glance about the Splasharama image.

Thank you for sharing, placing this on public read and review on 17th July, 2008; I send this thirteenth review of your poem.

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Rated: E | (5.0)
Self-evaluation!

This is a good poem that explains clearly what you think of your status about your own work or work of writing and you experience that in this site you feel and find works by others are better than yours and you ever find yourself a poor writer.

I like and have enjoyed the read, the taletelling and the flow of thoughts and how you have appreciated others in terms of work.

Edit:
My appreciation for others.
(My Appreciation for Others)

Comments:
A title of a poem does not seem to be a complete sentence; as such there is no need of using a period at the end of a title to make it a sentence.

Thank you for sharing, placing this on public read and review recently; I send this first review of your poem.

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Review of In this moment  
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Rated: E | (5.0)
In this poem, you have stated, a sappy girl, howsoever she appears silly and excessively sentimental or mawkish, she is better as you are happier to live with her, so now you have started living happier with her in this place.

I like and have enjoyed the read, the lesson, the taletelling, the word imagery and the word visuals.

Thank you for sharing, placing this on public read and review recently; I send this third review of your poem.

Keep writing.

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Rated: E | (5.0)
In this poem, you have narrated a good story with a moral; the story tells what happens all seven days of the week, the story teaches only want is not enough, right work, rightly and at the right time is absolute for survival, as only emotion and dream cannot help living meaningfully, all the vices can destroy living, actions using good human virtues can help lead a meaningful living, object of living howsoever creative leads a disastrous living, creative and virtuous and valued practice of living make a right and meaningful living.

I like and have enjoyed the read, the taletelling and moral of the story, the word visuals, the word imagery, the free flow of thoughts, the rhythms of exemplification for good living.

Thank you for sharing, placing this on public read and review on 19th January, 2013; I send this first review of your poem.

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Review of for writing.com  
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Rated: E | (5.0)
I like and have enjoyed this poem about your writing and your love for your mother tongue and the taletelling.


Edit:
for writing.com
(For Writing.Com)


Edit:
just a poem about writing and my love for my native language.
(This is a poem about my writing and my love for my native language.)


Edit:
…verse seven reprimandedly
(…verse seven reprimanded really)


Edit:
the english language.
(the English language.)


Edit:
arabic transliterations of the Holy Quran in greek alphabet text
(Arabic transliterations of the Holy Quran in Greek alphabet text)


Edit:
swahili and spanish may create thought provoking challenges
(Swahili and Spanish may create thought provoking challenges)


Edit:
….for the english language!
….for the English language.)


Comments:
You have not maintained uniformity in application of English Grammar in your expression. You have not used the Author’s Notes properly to tell your readers about your style of expression.

Thank you for sharing, placing this on public read and review in September, 2011; I send this eighth review of your poem.

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Review of Clouded  
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Rated: E | (5.0)
I have enjoyed this poem of welling emotion, and could easily relate to the emotion, feeling the joy how you saved your beautiful things from drenching and drowning in rain as the clouds held the rain.


Thank you for sharing, placing this on public read and review recently; I send this second review of your poem.


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Review of Birdbath Beauty  
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Rated: E | (5.0)
Birdbath beauty in Nature is very well expressed, as you find how your mom enjoys after heavy raindrops make your house safe and dry.

I like and have enjoyed the read, the taletelling, the change in environment around your house after the rains, and the word visuals, and the word imagery, and free flow of thoughts.

Thank you for sharing, placing this on public read and review on 26th May, 2010; I send this fourteenth review of your poem.

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1565 / Friday 06-12-2019



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Review of Odor of Sorrow  
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Rated: ASR | (5.0)
True feeling, good feeling and thought, and nice feeling appreciation, well expressed in your free verse.

I like and have enjoyed the feelings and sensation you worded about sorrow, tears and sadness; how odour, smell and scent spread and influence and affect your environment and you is well said, well done.


Edit:
There is an odor to sorrow
that rises out of the carpet,
like the musty stench of a thousand floods,
to permeate the house.

(There is an odor to sorrow
that rises out of the carpet
like a musty stench of a thousand floods
to permeate my house.)


Edit:
There is a smell to tears
that emanates from the wallpaper,
like the stink of stagnate tide pools,
and hangs in the air.

(There is a smell to tears
that emanates from the wallpaper
like a stink of stagnate tide pools
and hangs in the air.)


Edit:
There is scent to sadness
that fall from the ceiling,
like reek of rotting timbers,
to smother the soul.

(There is scent to sadness
that falls from the room ceiling
like reek of rotting timbers
to smother the soul.)


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Review of TIGER: a parody  
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Rated: E | (5.0)
The ultimate action of the tiger, stated metaphorically, proves inhuman and paperwork, the war against Iraq and war against misconception of WMD turn farcical and made another historic blunder of human devastation and brought in no glory of war in the world and at the US.

I like and enjoyed the story, the order of taletelling, and the word imagery and the word visuals as well the flow of thoughts.

I need not mention how you ever write a title of a poem, the style of expression of a title of a poem you write appears to me a part of style of your expression of a title.

Great! Well inspired, I am happy, glad to write and send this seventh (7th) review of your poem which you created and placed on public read and review for about 12 years ago in April, 2007.

Thank you for sharing your war poem with us.

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1562 / Thursday 05122019



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Rated: 18+ | (5.0)
I like your poem, you have truly, fairly and confidently self-propagated yourself as a realist, a true realist, an overt nihilist with no possessions, and you deny of this materialistic form of existence, interestingly enough, you say, you cannot take anything on faith, only being absolutely sure of anything you believe in that.


I have enjoyed the read, the taletelling, the philosophic aspect of your ideal and sense of living as a realist, monologue flavour of appreciation of what it is to be realistic, and the flow of thoughts, and the word visuals and word imagery.


Edit:
I’m A Realist
(I’m a Realist)


Edit:
I’m a realist
And I deal in less
Then I often fake
All that’s left
I do near nothing
A real minimal
Minimalist
Devoid of any plans
Purpose, or solid ideas.

(I’m a realist
and I deal in less
then, I often fake
all that is left.
I do near nothing
a real minimal, minimalist
devoid of any plans
purpose, or solid ideas.)


Edit:
The ones that get my goat
That tighten my rope
Are the things that I know
Are without questions real
But we can’t posses them
Or effectivity explain them
We can hold them
And touch them
Molest them in every way
Shape, and or form.

(The ones that get my goat
that tighten my rope
are the things that I know
are without questions, real.)

(But, we cannot possess them
or, effectiveness (or effect) explains them.)

(We can hold them
and touch them
or, molest them in every way
shape, and or form.)


My favourite lines of your poem:
I’m a realist
In a less traditional sense
I’m here to know
Understand and act
Upon the foundation
Of said understanding
All of human creation
In a non-literal sense


Comments:
I think in the said lines you have truly exposed your stand of becoming a realist in reality stand point.


Comments:
You have expressed yourself as a realist in a set chosen condition and you have expressed the status of your realist stand in your own theory of living in appreciation and attitude and outlooks toward the world for survival.

You are free to reject any of the edits in the brackets and comments.

Great! Well inspired, I am happy, glad to write and send this third (3rd) review of your poem which you created and placed on public read and review for about 6 years ago in June, 2015.

Thank you for sharing your biographical poem with us.

Keep on writing also for entertainment, enjoyment, learning for your public readers worldwide.
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Review of This Is Me  
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Rated: E | (5.0)
A solitary, neglected but challenging and independent living!


I like this biographical poem and have enjoyed the read; it is a bit unusual type but true depiction of state of living is likeable; your nature, likes, choices and preferences for living is appreciably worded; since birth you have been neglected by your mother and you could not live with your father, as if you were born to live isolated, neglected, self-dictated, independent and fateful living in or within the world of insane people from a different world, but you lived confidently and challengingly.


Edit:
This Is Me
(This is Me)


Edit:
A dark poem about being given up on and being alone in the past and present.
(This is a dark poem about being given up on and being alone in the past and present.)


Edit:
I was never told what was wrong
I was left to my own dark diagnosis
This is me
Simple does it all now seem
I am here in this time and place
A lifetime away from those days
But I must admit little has changed
I still wish to be alone
Both in my world
And in my skin and bones
I am safe because I know
What it means to have no one
And as before I’m fine with that…


(I was never told what was wrong.
I was left to my own dark diagnosis.
This is me.
Simple does it all now seem.
I am here in this time and place.
A lifetime away from those days
but, I must admit little has changed.
I still wish to be alone
both in my world
and in my skin and bones.
I am safe because I know
what it means to have no one
and as before, I am fine with that.)


My favourite lines from the poem are as follows as I can feel the ironies of your life:
I’ve earned the right to be alone
It’s all that I am capable of
From the day of my birth
I was handed over to nothing
And nothing is where I belong
My mother once said
This child, my son, unwanted
Take him from my sight
Remove him from our life
Never again do I wish


Comments:
The state and status of your life brings out the true picture and figure of your personality.

You are free to reject any of the edits and comments.


Great! Well inspired, I am happy, glad to write and send this sixth (6th) review of your poem which you created and placed on public read and review for about 5 years ago in February, 2014.


Thank you for sharing your excellent biographical poem with us.

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Review of Five Haiku  
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Rated: E | (5.0)
I like and have enjoyed the read of the poems and Haiku.

Edit:
These haikus describe spring in Las Vegas.
(Five Haiku describe spring in Las Vegas.)


Comments:
Morning rain, spring's scent
neither lightning nor thunder
just the pure rain drops.

This Haiku, Japanese lyric verse form, has three unrhymed lines of five, seven and five morae, invokes an aspect of nature, about the season spring, and has a good description of rain drops.


Comments:
Window cats watch, wait
for the rain to dissipate
for birds to return.

This Haiku projects a good portrayal of a scene where the window cats wait for the birds to return in rain.


Comments:

What is love's power?
Wind moves the limbs of stone pines
perfumes morning's air.
I do not think this is a traditional Haiku, for I do not get a good picture of the aspect of Nature and somehow relates to the season.


Comments:
A little wind and
a bit of rain leave my car
windows pollen stained.

This is a poem more than a Haiku, because I do not relate to the third line and I think the reference of aspect of Nature is not distinct.


Comments:
Burgundy roses
sip word by word faith's vintage;
love reverberates.

This is a good poem lesser than Haiku, the season spring is not clear in description. I think this is a better formal poem in the flavour of Haiku, though the basic feature of concern of the theme relates to the aspect of Nature or season is not clear in expression.


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Great! Well inspired, I am happy, glad to write and send this thirteenth (13th) review of your five Haiku which you created and placed on public read and review for about 14 years ago in June, 2005.


Thank you for sharing your Haiku with us.

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1557 / Thursday 05122019


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Review of Breath and Skin  
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Rated: E | (5.0)
Lessons of life taught in words!

Again, in this poem, like a previous one, you make it a point that you have written everything in your poems clearly and convincingly, somewhere lessons from your living experience have not been portrayed or expressed so honestly or expressed more subtly or philosophically but you think, all words you shared or expressed to produce each of your good poems or works, are personal and exclusively related to your own experience of living and now you wish readers should appreciate the words in right, appropriate and natural appreciation for practice of living.

Moreover, you have hinted of your limitations in expressions and you expect readers should appreciate your state and stand of living in your perspective for practice in living.

Truly, you have expressed whatever life has taught in courses of your specific and particular mode of living, all and everything you shared may not be equally applicable to everyone, as living cannot be dictated but living is struggling as per the circumstances and environment in which one lives.

I like and have enjoyed the read, the story, the taletelling, the flow of thoughts, the word visuals, and the word imagery.

Great! Well inspired, I am happy, glad to write and send this fifth (5th) review of your poem which you created and placed on public read and review for about 7 years ago in June, 2012.

Thank you for sharing your excellent poem with us.

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1555 / Thursday 05122019


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Review of Take These Words  
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Rated: E | (5.0)
Through this poem, you have repeated your views, points, thoughts, and words to remind your readers to take seriously for practice in course of living, as you have highlighted your experiences in living in different dimensions in all your poems and works, and you wish readers should take a serious care and attention to the words you have shared in your different poems in order to make a better course of living.

I like and have enjoyed the read, the taletelling and flow of thoughts.

Great! Well inspired, I am happy, glad to write and send this seventh (7th) review of your poem which you created and placed on public read and review for about 6 years ago in February, 2013.

Thank you for sharing your excellent poem with us.

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