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Rated: E | (5.0)
Grace and glory of loss report on media!

Poet teaches a good lesson to the media people, and reminds the professionals to be more humane concern about reporting a loss on any front of achievement or performance, and tells report must not necessarily only highlight one way up and one way down but media report should speak a grace, courtesy to speak about loss or profit or win or defeat in human courteousness and media report should essentially up keep a stand appreciable at both points of concern of the performance and activities reported.

I like and have enjoyed the read, the story, the taletelling, the word imagery, the word visuals, the flow of thoughts, the art and style of expression of speaking about professionalization of media reporting, and rhythms of thoughts.

Great! Well inspired, I am happy, glad to write and send this first (1st) review of your poem which you created and placed on public read and review for about a month ago in November, 2019.

Thank you for sharing your excellent poem with us.

Keep on writing also for entertainment, enjoyment, learning for your public readers worldwide.
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1551 / Thursday 05122019


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Review of Out To The Future  
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Rated: E | (5.0)
Fine, fantastic!

Realistic and appreciable thoughts about living, you have cherished to live in and move on to and live in for as well breathe in to living confidently and comfortably as you have decided to live forgetting about the past and live in the present and go beyond making a new future set and live in crossing the future within the present.


You have now learnt how to live henceforth, you will stand tall and make yourself free of you from yourself and make the living and feel that nothing from your present or from your past has control out to the future, and you are determined to go, go and go forward in the present.


You have learned, experienced enough, so you think you must burn down the past and will destroy the present in order to know, learn, see, feel and experience everything new, whatever and howsoever anything might appear impossible to others, without bothering others who may scream for you to come back, you will continue to go, even at the price of dreams of others, dismantling their bridges of hopes and dreams, dismantling all the connections of them, you will continue to go and go and go away from them, without regret and without concern, you will have to go beyond life, and go beyond death.


I like and have enjoyed the read, the taletelling, the philosophy of living, attitude toward living, mission for living, appreciation of living, and the free flow of thoughts, the word imagery, the word visuals, the free flow of thoughts, the monologue flavour of appreciation of living, the rhythms of thoughts for living, and visions for living.


I think you have reflected the essence of your thoughts in the following lines, now the lines have been my favourite:

I have to step beyond life
Beyond death
Transcend the idea of what “is”
For the uncertainty of what can “be”
I must risk it all
My absolute everything
Only then will I stand tall
Only then will I be free
Of myself and all that my life
Has come to be
Only then will I know
That nothing from my present
Or from my past has control
Out to the future
I must go


Edit:
Out To The Future
(Out to the Future)


Edit:

A short poem about moving beyond the past and the present into my own defined future.
(A poem tells about moving beyond the past and the present into my own defined future.)


Edit:
Beyond here
Beyond now
This very moment
Of space and time
Out to the future
I must be willing to go
I cannot hold back
No longer can I
Remain in the past
Never again will I step back
As I bravely move forward

(Beyond here
beyond now
this very moment
of space and time
out to the future
I must be willing to go.)


(I cannot hold back
and no longer can I
remain in the past.


(Never again will I step back
as I bravely move forward.)


Edit:
Way beyond what I have become
Increasingly bothered with
I must burn down the past
And by doing so destroy the present
I must lay waste to all that I know
In order to find something new
Something impossible to those
Who know my terrifying truth
Selfish this will all seem
Many will scream for me
To come back
To hold them ever so close
But above all I must let go
I must set them free
Even at the price of their dreams
I must dismantle their bridges
All of their connections to me
So that once I am gone
Once time no longer holds me
I, as well as them
Will be absolutely free
Out to the future
Beyond here
Beyond now
I must go
Without regret
Without concern


(Way beyond what I have become
increasingly bothered with.)


(I must burn down the past
and by doing so destroy the present.)


(I must lay waste to all that I know
in order to find something new
and something impossible to those
who know my terrifying truth.)


(Selfish this will all seem
as many will scream for me
to come back
to hold them ever so close.)


(But, above all I must let go
I must set them free
even at the price of their dreams.)


(I must dismantle their bridges
all of their connections to me
so that once I am gone
once time no longer holds me
I, as well as them
will be absolutely free
out to the future
beyond here, beyond now
I must go
without regret, without concern.)


Comments:
I have changed the lines of the poem and tried to make them more expressive and easier to read, enjoy, appreciate and understand.


You are free to reject any of the edits (given in the brackets) and comments.


Great, I do feel happy, well inspired and glad to write a review and I send this sixth (6th) review of your poem which you created and posted on public read and review for about 7 years ago in August, 2012.


Thank you for sharing your excellent poem of living a life with us.


Keep on writing.
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1549 / Wednesday 04122019



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Review of Summer's Heat  
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Rated: E | (5.0)
Fantastic!

I like and have enjoyed the poem, the taletelling, the safety device for saving from the heat of summer, the word visuals, the word imagery, and the free flow of thoughts.


Edit:
A little poem which is "inspired" by hay fever
(This is a little poem which is "inspired" by hay fever.)


Edit:
Prickling crimson spots
Spread like flames
Across my arms
Itching, burning, tingling
To the point of
Insanity

(Prickling crimson spots
spread like flames
across my arms
Itching, burning, tingling
to the point of
Insanity.)


Edit:
Every summer
These tiny bumps
Of irritation
Re-appear;
My own unique take
On hay fever

I want to scratch!

(Every summer
these tiny bumps
of irritation
re-appear.
My own unique take
on hay fever.
I want to scratch!)


You are free to reject any of the edits and comments.


Great, I do feel happy, well inspired and glad to write a review and I send this sixth (6th) review of your poem which you created and posted on public read and review for about 4 years ago in June, 2015.


Thank you for sharing your excellent poem with us.


Keep on writing.
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1548 / Wednesday 04122019


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Review of As I Look  
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Rated: 13+ | (5.0)
Fantastic! Relation specific! Feeling visually terrific!


This poem stands in its own strong ground of taletelling a state of love as you look and as you experience and as you express the visual diversified and colourful state of feeling the glory, grace, growth and grandeur of love and love relation in appreciation.


I like and have enjoyed the read, the taletelling of her personality in the eyes of love in appreciation, the word imagery, the word visuals, and the free flow of thoughts.


Edit:
what My eyes really see
(This poem tells what my eyes really see.)


Edit:
I see your softness
Mingle with your strengh

(I see your softness
mingle with your strength.)


Edit:
The undulations of your mountain ranges
Bring shelter and comfort

(The undulations of your mountain ranges
bring shelter and comfort.)


Edit:
While in your curves
I could hide till a thousand tomorrows

(While in your curves
I could hide till a thousand tomorrows.)


Edit:
The warmth of your pastures
Suckle their young

(The warmth of your pastures
suckles their young.)


Edit:
Yours is a rich garden
Letting its color
Mingle with a grey world
Till all about you smiles

The sun rises in your sky
Never setting

(Yours is a rich garden
letting its color

mingle with a grey world
till all about you smile

the sun rises in your sky
never setting.)


Edit:
The moon vies with the sun
Wanting its night to last forever
In order to watch down upon you

In your heart
Is a thousand peels of laughter

Even though
Tears have tracked across your cheeks

(The moon vies with the sun
wanting its night to last forever
in order to watch down upon you
in your heart
is a thousand peel of laughter
even though
tears have tracked across your cheeks.)


Edit:
You are many things
Sad and yet laughing
Firm and yet weak

You are simple and yet complex
For you are Woman

In short I love you
(You are many things
sad and yet laughing
firm and yet weak.
You are simple and yet complex
for you are woman.
In short, I love you.)


Comments:
You have shown the readers the grace and grandeur, glory and graciousness, beauty and wonders, unconditional and governing state and status of her state of love.

You are free to reject any of the edits and comments.

Great, I do feel happy, well inspired and glad to write a review and I send this fifth (5th) review of your poem which you created and posted on public read and review for about 17 years ago in November, 2002.

Thank you for sharing your lovely poem with us.

Keep on writing.
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1546 / Wednesday 04122019



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Rated: ASR | (5.0)
Fantastic! Feeling specific!
I like and have enjoyed the poem, the read, the story, the taletelling, the monologue flavour of remembering memories; the cause and feeling miserable particularly 4th July the day and the celebration of the day, and the free flow of thoughts, the word imagery, and the word visuals.

Edit:
A lonely, miserable July 4th celebration
(Poem tells a lonely, miserable July 4th celebration.)

Edit:
What is it about this day that makes me melancholy?
I'm left with emptiness, but I don't know why
Maybe it's because this day is so much a part of my unhappy childhood
that this feeling of emptiness ensues.

(What is it about this day that makes me melancholy?
I'm left with emptiness, but I don't know why.
Maybe it is because this day is so much
a part of my unhappy childhood
that this feeling of emptiness ensues.)

Edit:
These holidays are painful until they've passed by;
still the lingering touch of sorrow is always there.

(These holidays are painful until they have passed by.
Still, the lingering touch of sorrow is always there.)

Edit:
Looking at the white clouds 'neath deep violet skies,
I suddenly forget why I am even there.
(Looking at the white clouds 'neath deep violet skies
I suddenly forget why I am even there.)

Great, I do feel happy, well inspired and glad to write a review and I send this fifteenth (15th) review of your poem which you created and posted on public read and review for about 16 years ago in June, 2003.


You are free to reject any of the edits and comments.


Thank you for sharing your excellent biographical poem with us.

Keep on writing.
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#1937699 by Dave

1544 / Wednesday 04122019



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Rated: E | (5.0)
Fantastic!
I like your poem speaks about a feeling about keeping and continuing a relation with someone you do not like and love, but you are afraid, you cannot discontinue or break up the relation for you find how much your lover loves you and how much you feel comfort in and around your lover, though now you are in a dilemma, for you experience the lover has broken up the love relation.


Edit:
double edged sword
(Double-Edged Sword)


Edit:
i seek ….gentle touches

(I seek ….gentle touches.)


Edit:
i seek ….your palms
(I seek ….your palms.)


Edit:
i seek ….a double edged ….your heart
(I seek ….a double-edged ….your heart.)


Comments:
I like your style of expression; you follow writing everything in small letters and avoid using grammar.

But, you have not used Author’s Notes to tell about your style of expression and what makes you to avoid using grammar in your poem.

I think, your poem is posted on public read and review, so it is no more a private affair, your private and personal art or style of expression may not be liked by your beloved public readers.

You may please note, you are not supposed to restrict the right of enjoyment of your public readers, and if you so wish, you may use Author’s Notes for the readers.

You write poem not only for self-satisfaction, self-pride or self-enjoyment, you are equally obliged to your public readers to help them enjoying your poem.

You are free to reject any of the edits and comments, if you so like.

Thank you for sharing your poem with us.

Keep on writing.
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#1937699 by Dave

1543 / Wednesday 04122019


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Rated: E | (5.0)
Fantastic! Serving words!

The process is processed, like that of cooking and serving for tasting the taste of dish, your words after the draft, and revision, you have maintained the processes for serving the words to the readers, I like the poem, and I have enjoyed the read, the flow of thoughts, the word visuals and word imagery.

Writing and presenting writing before the readers are professional jobs and they are like that of cooking and serving cooked dishes, as you have shown us the skills required for good performing the jobs.

Great, I do feel happy, well inspired and glad to write a review and I send this twelfth (12th) review of your poem which you created and posted on public read and review for about 12 years ago in March, 2007.

Thank you for sharing your excellent poem with us.

Keep on writing.
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1542 / Wednesday 04122019


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Review of Up To My Neck  
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Rated: 18+ | (5.0)
Fantastic!

You have composed this poem to tell your feeling and emotion about journey to death and you have expressed the story of your visualization in a nice taletelling, I like and have enjoyed the read, the story how your boat parted you and how you experience the making of your journey to the grave, the flow of thoughts, the word visuals, the word imagery, the monologue flavour of narration of your journey to death at the instance of the departing of the boat in your heart, and the flow of thoughts.
I liked and following lines the most:
Up to my neck
Just below my head
The water is ice cold
Shivering to the bone
Increasingly I cannot feel
Soon I will be dead
Soon I will be free
At the bottom of the sea
I like how journey to death is described.

Edit:
Up To My Neck
(Up to My Neck)

Great, I do feel happy, well inspired and glad to write a review and I send this firth (5th) review of your poem which you created and posted on public read and review for about 7 years ago in August, 2012.

Thank you for sharing your excellent poem with us.

Keep on writing.
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#1937699 by Dave

1541 / Wednesday 04122019


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Review of Weathering Time  
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Rated: E | (5.0)
Weather is a natural process, and you have captured a story about weather of time, I like and have enjoyed this poem in 19 syllables, the weathering of time exemplified and defined, the word visuals and word imagery, and the flow of thoughts.

Great, I do feel happy, well inspired and glad to write a review and I send this fourth (4th) review of your poem which you created and posted on public read and review for about 3 months ago in September, 2019.

Thank you for sharing your excellent poem with us.

Keep on writing.
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1540 / Wednesday 04122019



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Review of Listening In  
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Rated: E | (5.0)
This poem speaks a psychological healing and getting happiness at thought and imaginary talking or speaking to self and listening to the same and enjoys pleasures by self-commenting and self-activating and doing while listening to others by not speaking or answering to others, a process for self-healing and self-enjoyment.

I like and have enjoyed the read, the taletelling and the flow of thoughts.

Thank you for sharing your excellent poem with us.

Keep on writing.
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1533 / Tuesday 03122019



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Review of Port Mayaca  
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Rated: E | (5.0)
fantastic! Lively!


This is a nice poem, I like. I have enjoyed the read. This speaks the tale simply, confidently and honestly. You have discovered the best place, a sanctuary, where you find peace of mind. You can easily lose your pain. You find comfort and convenience of living there freely. And interestingly enough, no one watches you while you stay and act, enjoy living there. Perchance, you think the place only you know.

I have enjoyed the taletelling, the story, the word visuals, and the word imagery, moreover, the free flow of thoughts.

Great, I do feel happy, well inspired and glad to write a review and I send this sixteenth (16th) review of your poem which you created and posted on public read and review for about 16 years ago in March, 2003.

Thank you for sharing your excellent poem with us.

Keep on writing.
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1531 / Tuesday 03122019


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Review of The Promised Land  
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Rated: E | (5.0)
Fantastic! Religious faith specific!

Truth reveals!

This is a fantastic poem that promotes the faith in God and the discovery is praiseworthy; I like and have enjoyed the read, the taletelling promotes truth of God’s words and revelation of truth with discovery after making efforts to get into the truth through commitment to find the truth; the free flow of thoughts, the word imagery and the word visuals.

Great, I do feel happy, well inspired and glad to write a review and I send this first (1st) review of your poem which you created and posted on public read and review for about 11 years ago in April, 2008.

Thank you for sharing your fantastic poem with us.

Keep on writing.
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1530 / Tuesday 03122019



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Review of Beginnings  
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Rated: E | (5.0)
In this poem, you have composed a Senryu and nicely treated the theme of human foibles with a satirical tone, you have highlighted in the beginnings there was no difference in viewpoint, standpoint or practice of cultural harmony and unity and there was no difference in living in appreciation of Nature in the same spirit and approach for living, but today there are differences in identification and practices as living is fragmented.

I like and have enjoyed the read.

Great, I do feel happy, well inspired and glad to write a review and I send this third (3rd) review of your Senryu poem which you created and posted on public read and review for about 13 years ago in April, 2006.

Thank you for sharing your Senryu with us.

Keep on writing.
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1529 / Tuesday 03122019



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Review of Fly Free  
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Rated: E | (5.0)
This poem passes a simple message for living and reach the dream destination through work hard, using one’s own ability to the fullest extent feasible, toppling the hurdles, steering clear the problems in the way, through self-confidence and making own way to reach the target and achieve the goal, and sometime one may have to push others on the way strategically and fairly and go along the right way to reach one’s destination safe and achieve success to make a life lived meaningfully and satisfactorily and not by mere dreaming and going at random.

I like the message expressed simply and convincingly to inspire those who may need it. I have enjoyed the read.

Edit:
An encouraging message to those who need it.
(Poem tells an encouraging message to those who need it.)
Or,
(This poem writes an encouraging message for those who may need it.)

Thank you for sharing your poem with us.

Keep on writing.
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1526 / Tuesday 03122019



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Review of Untitled  
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Rated: E | (5.0)
That thoughts and imagination go and travel fastest but without destination or go or travel around thoughts with wishes and desires to get something or be someone or achieve everything that mind allows through thoughts and imagination.

In this poem you have tried to show the readers the power of mind, thoughts and imagination and it is far from reality and truly, in reality we get or achieve as per our ability and stand of performance, where we experience thoughts and imagination remain far from reality in result, for our life depends upon our action and activities, though everything depends upon our thoughts and imagination, but actual action depends on the environment in which we act.

This hints of the message to the direction that I could feel and find in the words expressed in the poem.

Thank you for sharing your poem with us.

Keep on writing.
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#1937699 by Dave

1525 / Tuesday 03122019



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Rated: E | (5.0)
Fantastic!

Your great poem is a clear ode to Indo-Pak cricket of 2004, India won the series; you have shown though there are millions of differences in ideals, politics, philosophy, religion, governance and economy, India preserved her glory, spirit, status and performance; Prime Minister of India wished Indians should not only win the game but also win the hearts of the Pakistanis.

I like and have enjoyed the read, the taletelling, the rhymes, the story, the news, the word visuals, the free flow of thoughts, and word imagery.

Edit:
AN ODE TO INDO-PAK CRICKET: award winner
(An Ode to Indo-Pak Cricket)

Comments:
I do not like to read other details in a title of a poem; you may use Author’s Notes to tell about the status of your poem and may attract your public readers; besides, you have cherished a good habit of writing a title each of your poems expressed all in capital letters, if you wish, you may follow the link and check where you may write a title of a poem expressed all in capital letters: "Invalid Item

Edit:
India, Pak, twin nations,
Have many aberrations.

(India, Pak, twin nations
have many aberrations.)

Edit:
Religion and politics,
Of the two countries, don’t mix.

(Religion and politics
of the two countries, don’t mix.)

Edit:
Democratic, secular,
Against Muslim dictator!

(India a Democratic, Secular
against Muslim dictator.)

You are free to accept or reject any of the edits and comments.

Great, I do feel happy, well inspired and glad to write a review and I send this fourth (4th) review of your poem which you created and posted on public read and review for about 12 years ago in June, 2007.

Thank you for sharing your excellent poem with us.

I congratulate you for your winning the award on the contest poem.

Keep on writing.
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1523 / Sunday 01122019




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Review of GOD’S WORLD  
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Rated: E | (5.0)
Excellent!

This is a very interesting poem tells about God’s creation for six consecutive days and He took rest on the seventh day of the week. He created everything and man. He asked man to rule over the rest. But, man has caused disasters, devastated and misused Nature and other creations. Man has been causing cruelty to man and animals, destroying nations and killing man mercilessly and talking about human rights.

I like this poem and have enjoyed the read, the word visuals and word imagery.

Edit:
GOD’S WORLD
(God’s World)

Comments:
A title of a poem expressed in all capital letters is not a good practice. When and why a title of a poem may be written all in capital letters may be checked out in the link: "Invalid Item.

Great, I do feel happy, well inspired and glad to write a review and I send this second (2nd) review of your poem which you created and posted on public read and review for about 11 years ago in January, 2008.

Thank you for sharing your excellent poem with us.

Keep on writing.
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1521 / Sunday 01122019


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Rated: E | (5.0)
Truly natural, wonderful!

I like this Haiku and have enjoyed the read, the aspect of Nature, the taletelling, the word visuals, the satori ‘aha’ effect is there in the third line, the eternal and natural concept of bird’s family living and their generation, and the flow of thoughts.

Edit:
THE NEST: a haiku--award winner
(The Nest)

Comments:
It is not a good practice writing a title of a poem giving details of events. You may use Author’s Notes and tell your winning status on or for the poem.

I do not like to write a title of a poem all in capital letters; I know you have fostered a good habit of writing a title of a poem all in capital letters.

Where and why you may use capital letters in writing title of poem, you may check the link: "Invalid Item

I am happy, inspired and glad to write and send this third (3rd) review of your poem which you created and posted on public read and review for about 12 years ago in June, 2007.

Thank you for sharing this excellent Haiku with us.

I congratulate you for your winning the contest.

Keep on writing.
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#1937699 by Dave

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Rated: E | (5.0)
Fantastic! Memories!

I like and have enjoyed your poem in 12 lines, the taletelling about fleeting of memories and how you feel about your memories, the word imagery, the free flow of thoughts and the word visuals.

Edit:
LIKE DRIFTING SNOW
(Like Drifting Snow)

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I understand it is your habit to write the title of your poems all in capital letters. But, I do my job, being a reviewer, I point out the issue; where, when and why you may use the title of a poem all in capital letters, you may check the link: "Invalid Item

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Fleeting memories.
(A poem tells about fleeting memories.)

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Like drifting snow they come and go,
Lasting for just a while.
To catch them or to hold them back,
Verily, is futile.

(Like drifting snow, they come and go
lasting for just a while.
To catch them or to hold them, verily back
is futile.)

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They are more like a screen of smoke
Hanging at mountain tops;
It’s a castle one moment but
The illusion then drops.

(They are more like a screen of smoke
hanging at mountain tops.
It is a castle one moment, but
an illusion, and then it drops.)

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As sunlight shines, the smoke is gone
And the snow drifts away.
So do the fleeting memories,
In my mind drift and sway.

(As sunlight shines, the smoke is gone
and, the snow drifts away.
So, do the fleeting memories
in my mind drift, and sway.)

Comments:
I have changed some words and sentences, and have tried to express the lines of the poem easier read, and more expressive; I am sorry, I could not maintain or up keep the format for I give this as a suggestion to help you make an idea about changes you may need in the lines, if you feel it is necessary anyway today; writing the poem in the chosen format is your business indeed.

You are free to accept or reject any of the edits in the brackets and the comments.

I am happy, inspired and glad to write and send this third (3rd) review of your poem which you created and posted on public read and review for about 12 years ago in November, 2007.

Thank you for sharing this excellent poem with us.

Keep on writing.
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Distracting and writing!

You have taken a good decision, maybe creative, writing a Haiku is easier, maybe you think, it takes a little time with no good pressure in mind for paying attention to writing on grave issue for consideration in writing a Haiku; I appreciate as you have devised a novel idea to stop worrying about anything and paying a little attention in writing a Haiku for you wish to do that on an experimental basis; my best wishes. Anyway, I like and have enjoyed the story of your endeavour.

Maybe you get better result than what you expect.

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Trying Not To Worry...
(Trying Not to Worry)

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...so I distract myself by writing a haiku.
(So, I distract myself by writing a haiku.)

I am happy, inspired and glad to write and send this fifth (5th) review of your poem which you created and posted on public read and review for about 3 years ago in September, 2016.

Thank you for sharing this excellent poem with us.

Keep on writing.
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Review of Frowsy Hair  
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In 24 syllables you have expressively described the story of his hair, it appears really frowsy, as it blows in the breeze and as he walks, it looks like a mop head, well said and well done.

I like and have enjoyed the read.

I am happy, inspired and glad to write and send this second (2nd) review of your poem which you created and posted on public read and review for about 3 months ago in September, 2019.

This description reminds me of a great person, the UK Prime Minister.

Thank you for sharing this excellent poem with us.

Keep on writing.
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Review of Gathering Storm  
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Stormy rain scenic visual!

Fantastic!

You have painted the visual of gathering storm and falling rain, the changes in scenario, the weather by degrees changes from hard to soft, so after the storm, now it is raining so sweetly, softly, and melodiously, wind stops.

I like and have enjoyed the read, the sound, the environment, the weather on its way in description, the taletelling of movements, the word imagery, the word visuals, and the flow of thoughts.

I am happy, inspired and glad to write and send this eleventh (11th) review of your poem which you created and posted on public read and review for about 8 years ago in November, 2011.

Thank you for sharing this excellent poem with us.

Keep on writing.
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Review of Our Grandson PG  
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Rated: E | (5.0)
Great grandson, Govind!

Your happiness, joy and excitement of wishing the first birthday to your grandson PG, named Govind, is so well described; then Govind was so cute, lively, playful, vigorous, and today he is a 12+ year old jolly and creative child, I wish and think so, and you are proud of his great living today.

I like the poem and have enjoyed the read, the story, the taletelling, the word imagery and the word visuals.

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description of a tinytot.
(This poem describes of a tiny tot.)

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sis sofia loves him so
(sis Sofia loves him so)

You are free to accept or reject any of the edits.

I am happy, inspired and glad to write and send this sixth (6th) review of your poem which you created and posted on public read and review for about 11 years ago in June, 2008.

Thank you for sharing this excellent and great poem with us.

I wish my belated happy birthday to Govind and I think you will love to send him a belated happy birthday wish to him.

Keep on writing.
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Review of The Flower I Was.  
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Rated: E | (5.0)
Fantastic!

You have composed a good poem, I like and have enjoyed the read, the taletelling, the monologue flavour of appreciation of your life and story about your living as a flower, the word imagery, the word visuals, and the free flow of thoughts.

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The Flower I was.
(The Flower I was)

Or,
(The Flower I was!)

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Life as a flower.
(A poem tells my life as a flower.)

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I am just a flower and one day I will die.
Until then I'll pretend I can fly just like the birds in the sky.

(I am just a flower, and one day I will die.
Until then, I will pretend I can fly, just like the birds in the sky.)

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Don't feel sad for my death, feel happy that you saw me shine.
I am happy that a passer by picked me to ease their strife.

(Don't feel sad for my death; feel happy that you saw me shine.
I am happy that a passerby picked me to ease their strife.)


Comments:
I have just tried to make some lines and or sentences more expressive.

You are free to accept or reject any of the edits and comments.

I am happy, inspired and glad to write and send this sixth (6th) review of your poem which you created and posted on public read and review for about 4 months ago in July, 2019.

Thank you for sharing this excellent poem with us.

Keep on writing.
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Review of God is alive  
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You have composed a good poem, indeed, we know and believe God is alive, man cannot kill God for God creates man as God is Omniscient, Omnipresent and Omnipotent; I like your thoughts about God.

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God is alive
(God is Alive)

I am happy, inspired and glad to write and send this sixth (6th) review of your poem which you created and posted on public read and review for about 4 years ago in July, 2015.

Thank you for sharing this excellent poem with us.

Keep on writing.
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