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Review of Poet’s Block  
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Rated: E | (5.0)
This poem speaks about the poet’s block, and tells clearly the state of mind of the poet at the instance of unexpected phenomena of muse, as if the muse has gone on holidays leaving the poet in a mindless state and status for the time being, as if the poet has lost his spirit and power of imagination, as if the poet feels starless and moonless sky in the world of his thoughts.


I like and have enjoyed the read, the flow of thoughts, the taletelling and the word visuals, and the word imagery.


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as created and posted on 5th January, 2012; I am happy to write and glad to send this eighth (8th) review of your work.


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Rated: E | (5.0)
This poem promotes, propagates the value, essence and effect of looking up at the flags of the nation and reminds the citizens to remember the meaning of the colours, designs, shapes of the flags and tells the story of up keeping faith in colours, and opens the value of combination of colours of the flags and messages flows when the flags wave in the airs and breeze and how the flags carry healing breath over heads.


I like and have enjoyed the read, the taletelling about definite meaning of red, blue and white colours of the flags, free flow of thoughts, the word imagery and word visuals.


Edit:
Looking Up to My Flag
(Looking up to My Flag)


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1647 / Sat 14122019


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Review of Green Bay  
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Rated: E | (5.0)
Realistically funny! Ironic!


In this 5 line poem, you have depicted a nice tale; I like this and have enjoyed the read, the taletelling about a too rusty, old Chevrolet car that a boy from Green Bay was riding but soon at his disgust the car started decaying, and the flow of thoughts and the word visuals.


Thanks for sharing and placing this work on public read and reviews; your work was created and posted recently; I am happy to write and glad to send this third (3rd) review of your work.


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Rated: E | (5.0)
Fantastic! Wonderful!

You are truly a great poet, a love poet; I like this and have enjoyed the read, the love story, the taletelling of your feeling and expression of love today, and of unconditional love of your other half, your better portion, your middle, and your end, and today you feel of her love that makes you whole, your founding joy and your heartbeat, and today you think she makes your circle complete.

It was a pleasant and easy read, as I have enjoyed your lovely diction, simple art of expression, the word imagery, lovely and free flow of thoughts, the monologue flavour of taletelling the experience of her love today, and the word visuals.


Edit:
You are my love,
You fill my soul
My other half,
My better portion,
The middle, the end,
You are my life’s journey,
The one who makes me whole
She who is beside me,
Willingly giving me everything
The one who holds me,
Caresses me
My founding joy,
My hearts desire,
The very beat of my heart,
The pulse of the blood in my veins,
My every breath,
My hakuna matata,
For with you, my circle is complete,
You bring sense to an existence,
Where there was only chaos before

Comments:
I like you have put the entire poem at the center of this review page, in this page, WdC has displayed the poem at the left of this review page; I am sorry for the inconvenience.


(You are my love.
You fill my soul.
My other half
my better portion
the middle, the end
you are my life’s journey
the one who makes me whole.)


(She who is beside me
willingly giving me everything
the one who holds me
caresses me
my founding joy
my heart’s desire
my very heartbeat
the pulse of the blood in my veins
my every breath
my hakuna matata.)


(For with you, my circle is complete.
You bring my sense to an existence
where there was only chaos before.)


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Review of The Liver  
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Rated: E | (5.0)
Funny! Fantastic!

It is nice to read a pathetic story, as you have simply narrated the story about her, she became anorexic and later intellectually dyslexic, that means she lost everything to be called an intellectual person any more, moreover, she needs a caregiver; I like and have enjoyed the read, the taletelling and the free flow of thoughts.

Thanks for sharing and placing this work on public read and reviews; your work was created and posted on 2nd April, 2019; I am happy to write and glad to send this third (3rd) review of your work.

You are free, as you have right to do so, to reject any comment, if you like so. But, keep writing.

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1633 / Fri 13122019


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Review of Loving Hands  
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Rated: E | (5.0)
So meaningful is the message here, in this poem, you have stated, depicted and shown finding lost pets is truly a blessing, and the finder should lend loving hands to the found pets as their babies are rare, as you have advised us to show kindness, devotion and care to the lost pets found.

I like and have enjoyed the read, the taletelling, the word visuals, and the word imagery.


Edit:
Loving hands stroke a sweet, furry kitten;
Hold the leash, walking man’s best friend.
Licked and smelled, but my hand’s not bitten
Giving comfort and warmth ‘til the end.

(Loving hands stroke a sweet, furry kitten.
Hold the leash, a walking man’s best friend.
Licked and smelled, but my hand is not bitten
giving me comfort and warmth till the end.)


Edit:
Finding lost pets is truly a blessing,
Hands posting signs and calling around.
Love is regained, then scratching and sniffing,
Old friends’ purring and barking, now found.

(Finding lost pets is truly a blessing
hands posting signs, and calling around.
Love is regained, then scratching and sniffing
old friends’ purring and barking, now found.)


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1631 / Fri 13122019


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Review of creeping darkness  
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Rated: E | (5.0)
You have done a good job and I must appreciate your power of imagination and endeavour producing a work of this sort with abstract matter of content and with full of poetic thoughts.


Edit:
creeping darkness
(Creeping Darkness)


Edit:
blinded tears
that sparkle and
glisten that glitter
and dew on or near
the lashes that flutter
and veils hidden to the
bright orbs light
of desire and misfortune

Comments:
I do not understand the purpose, objective, meaning and essence of these lines, actually, I fail to understand and appreciate your point or point of view in these lines, I know you are speaking something very important but it is beyond my reach.


Edit:
slide into the dark abyss
of shuttering waves
tip toeing lines of despair
and demon only to be
haunted by past ice cold
grasp and lessening to
the demons dogs howls


Comments:
What actually you are trying to point and tell is not clear to me and I cannot relate your words to anything, you are the writer, so it is clear to you; but you have placed this work on public read and reviews, and only your understanding, entertainment and satisfaction is not enough, because your work is no more a private or personal affair, it is good that you may also think of your public readers’ entertainment, enjoyment and learning.


Edit:
and growls of hunger
racing time shredding
the thinnest lines and
drawing binding blood
in tiny rippling pools to
feast as ice cold grasp reach


Comments:
The points may be very important, but I do not understand anything, you have not used Author’s Notes to help your public readers to understand and appreciate your thought expressed according to your style of expression.


Edit:
to the last thudding pound
of heart and see the glisten
of last breath slip of freeze
particle second in air


Comments:
Of course, I tried to reach your thoughts, but I am sorry, I could not reach you, I know, you are a great writer, you have tried to express something important, but I could understand nothing about your imagination, thoughts, words, expression and use of words and thoughts.


You have mentioned about the description of the work in two words – imagine-poetry, and I think, those two words are inexpressive and I find no relation to the work you have shared.


But, I appreciate your endeavour, you have composed a good poem, though you have chosen and marked your work under the genre: essay and this gives me an idea that you have not yet decided the nature of your work but you have already posted on public read and reviews.


Thanks for sharing and placing this work on public read and reviews; your work was created and posted recently; I am happy to write and glad to send this first (1st) review of your work.


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1630 / Fri 13122019


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Review of Easier To Bear  
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Rated: E | (5.0)
Right indeed, you have composed this poem to teach us a good lesson of living, you have clearly stated it is the attitude not the aptitude that matter for making a good living, we should understand the essence of living, that life is rare and it will make our life easier to bear as and when we feel and keep our attitude that life means and include pain and we should do something to combat the pain and live easier, and it is possible when we think of life is rare.


So, it is well said, that we should not keep and carry the words with our head and heart to get pains continuously, rather we should keep off the words and feel easier to bear the words.


I like and have enjoyed the read, the taletelling, the message, the word visuals and word imagery.


Edit:
Easier To Bear
(Easier to Bear)


Edit:
I close my eyes
But still I see
The kindly face
That's haunting me

(I close my eyes
but, still I see
the kindly face
that is haunting me.)


Edit:
How can this face
I thought I knew
Do the things
He threatens to?

(How can this face
I thought I knew
do the things
and he threatens to.)


Edit:
I thought you gentle
I thought you kind
But now danger
In you I find

(I thought you gentle.
I thought you kind.
But, now danger
in you I find.)


Edit:
Please my friend
You I must tell
This path you take
Will not end well

(Please my friend
you I must tell
this path you take
will not end well.)


Edit:
You need help
This I know
Or your feelings
Stronger will grow

(You need help
this I know
or, your feelings
stronger will grow.)


Edit:
Please understand
That life is rare
It will make your pain
Easier to bear

(Please understand
that life is rare.
It will make your pain
easier to bear.)


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1629 / Fri 13122019


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Review of The Freak  
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Rated: E | (5.0)
Indeed, you have done a nice poem, I like, it has a good message, a physical ugliness is not easy to change completely, only one may change in one’s ugliness a little bit, but here the man is brave and impractical, he is happy with his ugliness, he is reluctant to change for he has a childish mind and he does not care if anyone likes him or not, but he is proud of his patience and he knows what is righteous living.

I like and have enjoyed the read, the taletelling, the lesson, the message, the story, the rhythms, and the free flow of thoughts, the word visuals, and the word imagery.


Edit:
But his horrible posture and rudeness
Cause other freaks so much distress,
And even when trying his best,
Those friends do truly protest!

(But, his horrible posture and rudeness
cause other freaks so much distress
and even when trying his best
those friends do truly protest.)


Edit:
But sure as he claims to be tall,
He proudly says to them all,
“I like how I’m feeling today,
And wouldn’t live any other way.”

(But, sure as he claims to be tall
he proudly says to them all
“I like how I am feeling today
and wouldn’t live any other way.”)


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Review of changes  
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Rated: E | (5.0)
Though, I read the poem many times, I think I could not fully understand your point of view or point, and as such I could not enjoy the read fully, but I think I have understood the key or essence of the poem, maybe we will have to forget the past and that we should not lament for the moments we loss and we should go forward hopefully and try to live happily, maybe we will have to welcome changes for making our future brighter or happier.


Edit:
changes
(Changes)


Edit:
changing future as slight
whispes away the fears and
shedded tears and choking
breathe

(changing future as slight
whispers away the fears and
shedded tears, and choking
breathe.)


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Review of The Plains  
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Rated: E | N/A (Review only item.)
Wonderful!

You have composed a very nice poem; it is imaginative and thoughtful in essence; I like and have enjoyed the read, the taletelling, the word imagery and the word visuals.

You have appreciated how God has created the infinite Nature so beautifully and graciously.


Edit:
empowered with a grace

(This poem tells about the open plains, empowered with a grace.)

Or,

(This tells the open plains empowered with grace.)


Edit:
The open plains
empowered with a grace
unique to them.

(The open plains
empowered with a grace
are unique to them.)


Edit:
Elegance woven into
the wild landscape.

(Elegance is woven into
the wild landscape.)


Edit:
Radiant in the hot sun,
grasses bow in respect
to the winds.

A blessed world of which
only fragments remain.


Edit:
(Radiant in the hot sun
the grasses bow in respect
to the winds.

See, a blessed world of which
only fragments remain.)


Comments:
The lines are not expressive; I have tried to express them more expressively; the fifth line may also be expressed other way, though; you are the poet, you know how it could be expressed better.


Thanks for sharing and placing this work on public read and reviews on 26th April, 2004; I am happy to write and send this first (1st) review of your work.


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1625 / Thu 12122019



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Review of Untitled  
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Rated: E | (5.0)
You do not like to take stress and wish to live letting go of anger, that is, you wish to live stress free, worry free and anger free life.

I like the concept and have enjoyed the read.


Edit:
There is progression in my aggression but i am trying not to stress.
Life is teaching others lessons,
while it is making mine a mess!
I can not let it affect me.

(There is progression in my aggression.
But, I am trying not to stress.
Life is teaching others lessons
while it is making mine a mess!
I cannot let it affect me.)


Comments:
I have tried to express the lines more expressively and grammatically correct.


Edit:
I have to do what is best.
I want to live my life without the constant burning in my chest!
The time has finally come,
to lay this rage to rest!

(I have to do what is best.
I want to live my life
without the constant
burning in my chest!
The time has finally come
to lay this rage to rest.)


Comments:
I have tried to express the lines more expressively.


Thanks for sharing and placing this work on public read and reviews recently; I am happy to write and send this second (2nd) review of your work.


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1622 / Thu 12122019



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Rated: 13+ | (5.0)
This is a nice poem; I like and have enjoyed the read; you have done a nice personification of a closet.


Edit:
There's A Closet On My Left
(There's a Closet on My Left)


Edit:
Ink drip’t across the ledger
Quill bitten to a nub


Comments:
These two lines are inexpressive; the word ‘drip’t’ is not clear to me; I could not edit the lines anyway.


Edit:
For there’s a Closet on my Left
Where None had ever stood

(There is a Closet on my left
where none had ever stood.)


Edit:
A Closet on my Left
And its Door is yawnin’ Wide

(There is a Closet on my Left
and its door is yawnin’ wide.)


Comments:
You have not maintained uniformity in expression, in the lines above, you have written Yawnin’ Wide, and here in the aforesaid two lines, you have expressed yawnin’ Wide.


Edit:
The Room’s door on my Right
Behind me, just Six Feet

The Room’s door on my right
behind me is just six feet.)


Comments:
The lines are not expressive, and grammatically correct. And you have maintained no university of expression, that is, you have used somewhere capital and somewhere small letters.
You have not used Author’s Notes about your style and art of expression to help your public readers.

I understand your purpose or objective of using capital letters, but you have not maintained uniformity, that is, you have used both capital and small letters for the same word or character.

You would appreciate, you have placed your poem on public read and reviews, and it is always good that you may also think about your public readers’ understanding of your art and style of expression and your public readers may get enjoyment at read, you being the poet you know what is what, what you use for what, and why and what for and you get pleasure, satisfaction and enjoyment reading your poem, but it is true that when you place a work on public read and reviews it becomes a public affair, I mean, it does not appear to be a private affair, so your only understanding or enjoyment is not enough, there are public readers.


Edit:
If I can only reach it
Then I’d be safe outside

(If I can only reach it, then
I would be safe outside.)


Edit:
There’s a Closet on my Left
And it’s Door is opn’n Wide

(There’s a Closet on my left
and its Door is opening wide.)


Comments:
These two lines are inexpressive and grammatically incorrect, moreover, you have used the word (opening) wrongly broken.


Edit:
There’s a Closet on my Left
And It Begs me to Come Inside

(There’s a Closet on my left
and It Begs me to Come Inside.)


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1620 / Thu 12122019


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Rated: E | (5.0)
All three poems about your pet kittens at play with a mouse, and your pet puppy and a newly purchased two-wheeler bike are simply good at rhymes, I like and have enjoyed the read, and particularly, clearly the kittens and the mouse, the taletelling and the free flow of thoughts.


I like your indifferent and funny act and mode of living, so carefree and free living and about your performance achievement, you have expressed so innocently and naturally.


Thanks for sharing and placing this work on public read and reviews recently; I am happy to write and send this first (1st) review of your work of fun poems.


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1619 / Thu 12122019



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Review of Identities  
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Rated: E | (5.0)
Your impression, description and expectation of identification of her identity all are well depicted and I think it is a good poem of search; I like and have enjoyed the read, the taletelling, and the visual imagery.


Edit:
I see it.
Not as a name,
not as a face,
but as a description.
Plastered onto your forehead is one word;
an adjective.
You, your body, your face, everything I see, is not what I see as your identity.
But it is your word
Very rarely will I see a positive identity,
but I can't be so quick to judge.
For the identities appearing to me are of your darkest secrets;
most hated attributes.

(I see it
not as a name
not as a face
but as a description.
Plastered on to your forehead is
one word, an adjective.

You, your body, your face,
and everything I see, is not what
I see as your identity.
But, it is your word
very rarely I will see a positive identity
but, I cannot be so quick to judge
for the identities appearing to me are
of your darkest secrets, most
hated attributes.)


Thanks for sharing and placing this work on public read and reviews recently; I am happy to write and send this first (1st) review of your work of free verse poem.


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1618 / Thu 12122019


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Review of Imagine  
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Rated: E | (5.0)
This poem, I think, has reached its object or purpose, as you have briefly but meaningfully expressed the state and status of manifestation of love, raw in spirit and at the same time to keep and maintain a divine sprit in essence, but all in imagination and feeling as there is freedom, free will and bonding of relation, and it is not essentially poetic as it is expressed in words, for love is love and it is a feeling and it cannot be expressed in word. Your expression has endowed a feeling that love is an action that can never be expressed in a word as we cannot express God in a word. Because, you know, as you have stated, love is also a responsibility, a commitment, a need and a means to the achievement of a meaningful living.


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1617 / Thu 12122019



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Review of Due Dates  
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Rated: E | (5.0)
This is a good work done in terms of fulfilling the contest requirement, though I find the requirement ‘sweeping changes’ does not seem to have been used naturally in making the poem, but I like the taletelling, and see you have done a job appreciable, interestingly enough, you have told the tale and have not shown us naturally fitted in the order of making the poem.


I appreciate the fun you have poured in making the poem.


Edit:
On internet dating.

(This speaks on internet dating.)


Edit:
Amid the sweeping changes
technology brings theses days,

(Amid the sweeping changes
technology brings these days.)


Edit:
I so despise
that dating now
is digitized.

(I so despise
that dating now is
digitized.)

Edit:
For one true love,
for a camaraderie of soul,
for a nexus like the Earth and moon,
I’d gladly trade my mouse
and Windows 7
for some antebellum
horse and buggy any day.

(For one true love
and for a camaraderie of soul
for a nexus like the Earth and moon
I would gladly trade my mouse
and Windows 7
for some antebellum horse
and buggy any day.)


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#1937699 by Dave

1613 / Thu 12122019


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You feel the importance, essence and value of words and you get the feel of each word in the dreams, and you feel the best place when you are in his arms and words become alive and more and more lively.

You have composed this poem so confidently about the words those act live at the very place, where he whispers to you in darkness and where you surrender to the charms of his love and where you find yourself in his lovely and comforting arms; I like and have enjoyed the read and the taletelling.

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#1937699 by Dave

1611 / Wed 11122019


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You have proved, you have shown your craft in words, you are a good word painter, you have commendably used odd words including waggish (jocular or witty), flaggish(I could not find it in a dictionary) and pugnacious (belligerent, combative in nature).


I like your story about old Uncle Fred, and have enjoyed the read, the taletelling about the type, nature and personality of the uncle, the word imagery, the word visuals, and the free flow of thoughts.


I like and appreciate you have used poetic licence using odd words and you have managed to express your thoughts and I must appreciate your concern and pride for nationalism and love of nation and military service and your appreciation of citizens contribution to the cause of up keeping freedom of thoughts, expression, and living in real sense of human freedom and above all, your true faith in real meaning and essence of freedom, to say, freedom is not free, as you too believe in the ideal of freedom in living.


Edit:
Short but sweet offering for the odd words contest.
(This is a short but sweet poem, an odd word contest entry, offers use of the odd words.)


Edit:
For always would a flag he wave
With a determination pugnatious
And on this subject he would dwell,
In fact was most loquacious!
For everyone should wave a flag
And show for all to see
That we support our country fair
And that freedom isn’t free!

(For always would a flag he wave
with a determination pugnacious
and on this subject he would dwell.
In fact, he was most loquacious.
For everyone should wave a flag
and show for all to see
that we support our country fair
and that freedom is not free.)


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#1937699 by Dave

1610 / Wed 11122019


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Review of Barriers  
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Rated: E | (5.0)
Authentic, realistic!

Epic on use and effect of words!


This is an authentic, appropriate, right, fair, educational, inspirational and most meaningful poem; I like and have enjoyed the read, the epiclike taletelling about the use, and effect of words, the word imagery, the word visuals, the rhythms of thoughts about impact of words used and the use of improper and inappropriate words as barriers to righteous act, action, activity, and how wrong words can create confusions, battles, fights, wars and break heart, disrupts head and mind, and how words used inharmoniously, impolitely, wildly at the persons wrongly can cause losses and dissipate a person, and further, how words can cause harm and stop growth of a nation, and how wrong delivery of words at the wrong time to the wrong person can invite losses and cause loss of relation and hamper growth, and how right use of words can heal and invite progression and growth.


Edit:
barrier - anything that restrains or obstructs progress
(This poem tells about barrier - anything that restrains or obstructs progress.)


Comments:
You have rightly expressed the good and bad impact, fruition, result and effect of wrong use of words and how good use of words can help grow and progression in every aspect of living.


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#1937699 by Dave

1609 / Wed 11122019


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This is a nice, fantastic and interesting poem; I like and have enjoyed the read, the taletelling, free flow of thoughts, the word visuals, the word imagery, the monologue flavour of fantasy thoughts about a metaphoric visually promoted character of a monster in appreciation.


Edit:
A child cloaked in a man
(A Child Cloaked in a Man)


Edit:
A child cloaked in a man,
A monster reborn.
His hair rests on a cold shoulder,
And his eyes are ever averted.

(A child cloaked in a man
a monster reborn.
His hair rests on a cold shoulder
and his eyes are ever averted.)


Edit:
I hear him constantly,
The devilish newborn.
His voice chills and warms at once,
And I feel his soul unsatisfied.

(I hear him constantly
the devilish newborn.
His voice chills and warms me at once
and I feel his soul unsatisfied.)


Edit:
He calls to me still,
But not with his voice.
An attraction I cannot deny,
Pulls me to him always.

(He calls to me still
but, not with his voice.
An attraction, I cannot deny
pulls me to him always.)


Edit:
He is deadly,
But I cannot resist.
I’ve been down this road before,
And I will again, endlessly.

(He is deadly
but, I cannot resist.
I have been down this road before
and I will again, endlessly.)


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#1937699 by Dave

1608 / Wed 11122019



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You have done the poem so nicely, freely and interestingly; I like and have enjoyed the read, the taletelling, the word visuals, free flow of thoughts, and the word imagery.


Edit:
AAAAHHH! ZOMBIES!!!

Shamblin', shufflin', crunchin', munchin',

Ice cream, sodas, delicious craniums!

Aaaaahhh, ZOMBIES!!

(Ah! Zombies
Shamblin', shufflin', crunchin', munchin',
ice cream, sodas, delicious craniums!
Ah, zombies!)


Edit:
I WALKED WITH A ZOMBIE,

'Twas my first walk,

But sure not my last,

Now I, Zombie, walk too!

(I walked with a zombie.
It was my first walk
but, sure not my last
now zombie and I walk too!)


Edit:
I AM LEGEND,

Fear my wrath,

Feed my Soul,

Feed Me NOW!

(I am legend!
Fear my wrath.
Feed my soul.
Feed me now!)


Edit:
At DAWN OF THE DEAD

hear us ROOOOOOOOOOAAARRRRR

How fast we eat

and thirst for more!

(At dawn of the dead
hear us roar
how fast we eat
and how thirsty we are for more!)


Edit:
NIGHT OF THE LIVING DEAD

falls all too soon,

for the living, who soon swoon,

and Zombies walk the land.

(Night of the living dead
falls all too soon
for the living, who soon swoon
and zombies walk the land.)


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1607 / Wed 11122019


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You have very nicely, smoothly and confidently expressed your feelings, as you have experienced the power of life that stirs your inner self for God is the authority, the stallion, which influences your heart, all through God’s actions differently in Nature from above to the earth, energizing and empowering the heart.


I like and have enjoyed the read, the story, the taletelling, the word visuals and the word imagery.


Edit:
Authority is the stallion, placed by God
to remind us of the magnificence of life,

(Authority is the stallion, placed by God
to remind us of the magnificence of life.)


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#1937699 by Dave

1602 / Tue 10122019



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So many years passed, the founding fathers of America visualized rightly and wrote those famous words on freedom, in 242 years the country has experienced diverse state, stand and status of freedom in manifestation, the spirit of freedom went on changing a lot in dimensions, though your country has tarnished considerably but it is still shinning, you are proud of the founding fathers of the nation, citizens are still proud of enjoying the glow of the three words and you feel happy the tradition is still on for you experience Americans still hold the dream and carry on spirit of the same vision as you think you still hold the same course even today.

I like and have enjoyed the read, the taletelling, the word visuals, flow of thoughts and the word imagery.

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1600 / Mon 09122019



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Review of Honey - Don't!  
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In 26 lines, in this poem, you have shared your experience, an emotional part of relation, that how sometime a husband’s logical, rational and lovable activity and words are not appreciated in the perspective of the words and activities for the time being, and within a few minutes again either your husband or you would act something untoward but lovably and appreciably and there is again a mutual or reciprocal good stand of relation when either of you might have forgotten the earlier sour or harsh relation, though in most of the cases, husband feels bad at the harsh words from his wife, it is easy to relate to such state of feeling and relation.


I like and have enjoyed the read, the free flow of thoughts, the taletelling, the word visuals, and the word imagery.


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1599 / Mon 09122019



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