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Review of Word Play  
Review by Adore ♥
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Rated: ASR | (4.5)
Hi Thankful Sonali WDC POWER RVW!


I am reviewing your entry as a judge for
 
Dear Me: Official WDC Contest  [E]
What are *your* goals for the new year? Think it over, write a letter and win big prizes!
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*Lightning2* Impression: For your Dear Me entry, you took a very clever outlook at this letter by playing around with the title and working into the letter, rather cleverly. I enjoyed how your outlook for goal setting was with identifying which goals to initiate, to propagate, in this upcoming year. I also enjoyed the words you made out of the contest title and how much it worked within the framework of this letter for goal setting.

*Heart* What I loved: I loved DARE ME, E-DREAM and RE-MADE...how fun this was to enjoy a clever mind at work.

*Leafr* What needs work: Nothing needs rework in this entry.


*Note1*Final thoughts: I have watched your writing through the years and really was blown away by this whimsical entry. How fantastic that you chose to enjoy your entry and submit what you found interesting in this contest. Thanks for your entry and best wishes in the contest.

"Noticing Newbies"  [13+]


I enjoyed reading and reviewing your work today. Take or leave what you wish. Keep writing.


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Review of Dear Me  
Review by Adore ♥
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Rated: E | (4.0)
Hi Dergs Gulp & Yani giving boops


I am reviewing your entry as a judge for
 
Dear Me: Official WDC Contest  [E]
What are *your* goals for the new year? Think it over, write a letter and win big prizes!
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*Lightning2* Impression: I thought your entry was youthful and full of content that was full of intent and action! I considered your insertion of the acronyms SFW (macrophilian) and (growth)RP without a side appendix of the explanation of unfamiliar interests that require a bit of dissection if used in your contest entry. I stumbled a bit but all in all, I understood that you are forging through to reattach yourself to fans (and gain "new" fans) as your content grows in 2023.

*Heart* What I loved: I loved your energy. You wrote through these changes, you entered your Dear Me entry and you "Dared to the challenge" and this is part of the hallmarks to success.

*Leafr* What needs work: Sorry but I think I stated that your content might need to offer an appendix or just simply state what the acronym means for the others.

*Note1*Final thoughts: Again, I love your enthusiasm, your energy and your face to the wind as you "grow" again and you set a date of intention for this plan. This is a very good outline and I do wish you the best!


"Noticing Newbies"  [13+]

I enjoyed reading and reviewing your work today. Take or leave what you wish. Keep writing.

Thanks for your entry and best wishes in the contest.

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Review by Adore ♥
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Rated: E | (4.0)
Hi Beholden


I am reviewing your entry as a judge for
 
Dear Me: Official WDC Contest  [E]
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*Lightning2* Impression: What a fun inspiring letter to oneself to goal setting for 2023. Your willingness to lay bare the story count over the years the years is encouraging to the readers of your honest letter and myself. Your goal count is rigorous but this is just my small minded opinion of actual story writing. These are achievable numbers from my unlearned count.

*Heart* What I loved: I loved your humility in full disclosure on some areas where you wanted to see improvement and you did not shy away to save face. Your bravery will not go unrewarded.

*Leafr* What needs work: There was nothing in your entry that I thought needed rework.


*Note1*Final thoughts: The final goals you decided on showed a management style that is flexible and adaptable where necessary. It was a most beautiful part of the Dear Me letter to yourself and I really enjoyed reading it.


"Noticing Newbies"  [13+]


I enjoyed reading and reviewing your work today. Take or leave what you wish. Keep writing.

Thanks for your entry and best wishes in the contest.

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Review by Adore ♥
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Rated: 13+ | (4.0)
Hi Stik's on a Boat!


I am reviewing your entry as a judge for
 
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*Lightning2* Impression: Your entry for the Dear Me contest attempted to outline a plan for 2023. It embodied a whole lot of emotional states though you summarized it in one line: work on addressing your trauma. That is an interesting goal, along with your new city advisory committee positions and work in the city of Minneapolis to help beautify the community. I thought your outline was a grand endeavor but one that I think you will achieve in 2023.

*Heart* What I loved: I loved your energy. I think that in modifying your commitments and ensuring you are involving self care in the various forms it unfolds, you are actively seeking to achieve your goals. Goal completion is a thing that requires energy and commitment and I think you have this.

*Leafr* What needs work: There is nothing in your Dear Me entry that needs rework.


*Note1*Final thoughts: I think with this strength of heart and mind, and an intent for goal completion, you will finish more than not in 2023. This is looking to be your year.

"Noticing Newbies"  [13+]

I enjoyed reading and reviewing your work today. Take or leave what you wish. Keep writing.

Thanks for your entry and best wishes in the contest.

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Review of Dear Me 2023  
Review by Adore ♥
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Rated: E | (4.5)
Hi StephBee Salutes 2 Service


I am reviewing your entry as a judge for
 
Dear Me: Official WDC Contest  [E]
What are *your* goals for the new year? Think it over, write a letter and win big prizes!
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*Lightning2* Impression: In your Dear Me entry for this year, I can say that those dust bunnies are far far away from settling on this adventuresome letter full of directed goal setting. I think your disclosure in the not so positive areas shows your agreeability and likability. What wonderful writing endeavors you secured and the future holds much possibility.

*Heart* What I loved: I loved the honesty and directed outline in your letter. The goals are factual and directed. The writing focus really helps to work as a compass for the journey ahead.

*Leafr* What needs work: Nothing in this writing needs rework.


*Note1*Final thoughts: What a positive and delightful letter to spur you forward, to remind you to beware of the dust bunnies that want to cloud your life, complicate it and you are moving in a active direction. Best wishes in your pursuits for 2023.


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Review by Adore ♥
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Rated: 13+ | (4.5)
Hi Kåre Enga 🇹🇭 Udon Thani


I am reviewing your entry as a judge for
 
Dear Me: Official WDC Contest  [E]
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*Lightning2* Impression: For your Dear Me entry, you celebrate the fact that you are not aspiring achieve any new life pursuits or goals. You are simply looking forward to enjoying the time you have, the location you are settled in and the surrounding area. This is a fantastic goal that many never get to enjoy as they are busy working or "living" but never smell any good parts of life prior to dying.

*Heart* What I loved: I love the freedom with which you submitted your entry knowing that you are not concerned about goal setting at all. You are interested in life enhancement, in whichever manner, it presents itself to you.


*Leafr* What needs work: Your Dear Me entry does not need rework.


*Note1*Final thoughts: I always look for a surprise entry and this one surprised me with its openness and agreeableness. 2023 will be an interesting year for you, I think. Thanks for your entry and best wishes in the contest.


"Noticing Newbies"  [13+]


I enjoyed reading and reviewing your work today. Take or leave what you wish. Keep writing.

Thanks for your entry and best wishes in the contest.

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Review by Adore ♥
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Rated: E | (4.0)
Hi AmyJo -June, already? C'mon!


I am reviewing your entry as a judge for
 
Dear Me: Official WDC Contest  [E]
What are *your* goals for the new year? Think it over, write a letter and win big prizes!
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*Lightning2* Impression: For your Dear Me entry for this month, what is awesome is how you lay out eight or nine different activities, blogs and ports that you use to help you achieve your goals for 2023. You also lay out the issue of your health and this is not a matter than defies being ignored. You must take care of yourself, proactively, or the rest will fall to the wayside. It is good that you recognize this fact and endeavor to keep this in check so the rest can come together.

*Heart* What I loved: I loved how succinctly you laid out the links to the various items that are used in goal actualization and these goals have dates for achievement. Your knowledge that faith is a major part of achieving these goals is also a positivity.


*Leafr* What needs work: Nothing in your entry needs rework.


*Note1*Final thoughts: With future outlook so close on the horizon, how fortuitous that many of these ideas are falling together. I do wish you the best in this contest.

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I enjoyed reading and reviewing your work today. Take or leave what you wish. Keep writing.

Thanks for your entry.

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Review of Dear Me for 2023  
Review by Adore ♥
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Rated: E | (4.0)
Hi 💙 Carly


I am reviewing your entry as a judge for
 
Dear Me: Official WDC Contest  [E]
What are *your* goals for the new year? Think it over, write a letter and win big prizes!
by Writing.Com Support
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*Lightning2* Impression: Your Dear Me entry is a fantastic foray into the goal reflection of a previous year (2022) and the hopes of the following year (2023). I thought your outlines were clear and easy to follow and I loved your Character link and definitely have to read more of your writing.

*Heart* What I loved: I loved your willingness to self disclose and share this journey in full display is beautiful thing. It is a rare quality I've seen from successful writers.

*Leafr* What needs work: Your Dear Me entry does not need any rework.


*Note1*Final thoughts: I very much enjoyed your Dear Me letter and know that this was one of the better entries from this month. You have a great heart for things and I think you will achieve the goals you outlined for the upcoming year.

"Noticing Newbies"  [13+]


I enjoyed reading and reviewing your work today. Take or leave what you wish. Keep writing.

Thanks for your entry and best wishes in the contest.

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Review of Dear Me (2023)  
Review by Adore ♥
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Rated: E | (4.5)
Hi Sorji


I am reviewing your entry as a judge for
 
Dear Me: Official WDC Contest  [E]
What are *your* goals for the new year? Think it over, write a letter and win big prizes!
by Writing.Com Support
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*Lightning2* Impression: Wow! You have had alot on your table, you've seen some much change and yet, you are still moving and evolving. Your itemization of your writing goals vs your non writing goals is impressive. I love how you set as an intention to write in NaNo this year. That is a huge goal but I think you will do it. Why? As you said, you got this!

*Heart* What I loved: I enjoyed your self exposure of illness, the steps to recovery, how you kept in step with this huge promotion which allows you to work from home. What an amazing time you've had and now, there is 2023 set before you.

*Leafr* What needs work: I did not see any par that needed rework.

*Note1*Final thoughts: With your writing and non writing goals so clearly defined, it will be a literal slam dunk to hit these goals this year. I totally love your writing style and wish you so much more in this new year of 2023.


"Noticing Newbies"  [13+]

I enjoyed reading and reviewing your work today. Take or leave what you wish. Keep writing.

Thanks for your entry and best wishes in the contest.

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Review of Christmas Cheer  
Review by Adore ♥
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Rated: E | (5.0)
Hi Maddie Spring in my Step Stone

This review is for your clever Crossword puzzle titled, "Christmas Cheer", a word search puzzle you created for use here on Writing.com. I really like the avatar chosen with a few ornaments from a Christmas tree to adorn your item in your portfolio.


Impression: I loved the flow and movement of this word search. *Smile* I felt that you took a few minutes to choose the words carefully before fitting them inside of the word search chart.

*Heart* What I loved: I love Christmas, first of all, and a word search to allow me to bask in all the wonders of Christmas without using too much of the time that's allotted, was an enjoyment that you shared with not only me, but so many others.

*Leafr* What needs work: I didn't see any part of this word search that needed rework.


*Note1*Final thoughts: What a fantastic Christmas word search to share and post here on Writing.com! I am so glad that you both posted this word search puzzle, but you took out a few minutes to visit my port and rate my word search too! Thank you so very much dear and I hope to read and review more work from you going forward.


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Review by Adore ♥
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Rated: 18+ | (4.0)
Hi PureSciFi }


I am reviewing your entry as a judge for
Journey Through Genres: Official Contest  [E]
Write a short story in the given genre to win big prizes!
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. Thanks for entering!


*Lightning2* Impression: In this story of a man and his sister who are advanced in age and they are experiencing time in the future, the main protagonist, Brai, a man of seventy-two years is watching his time and his form advance in an unsettling way. His sister, Taen, too, was aging and she takes him on a journey back through time. This journey was they traveled also took them back through the years and they relived their years in backwards manner. This was a trippy journey that while they experienced age reduction, they still were suffering from advanced age.

*Heart* What I loved: This was a mind tampering kind of story where you weren't sure what time you were in or what was the age of the characters. It was quite the trip!


*Leafr* What needs work: I did not see anything that needed revision or rework in this story.


*Note1*Final thoughts: What a fantastic voyage on the spacecraft traveling through trippy time and if you could reverse time, even temporarily, then you have to go for it.


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I enjoyed reading and reviewing your work today. Take or leave what you wish. Keep writing.

Thanks for your entry and best wishes in the contest.

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Review of The Journey  
Review by Adore ♥
In affiliation with Noticing Newbies Committee  
Rated: 13+ | (4.0)
Hi Thankful Sonali WDC POWER RVW!


I am reviewing your entry, "The Journey" as a judge for
Journey Through Genres: Official Contest  [E]
Write a short story in the given genre to win big prizes!
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*Lightning2* Impression: This is the story of a family moving far away, taking their young child on a journey to a strange place to change their lives, their child's future...her friend Meera leaving to go to a new place. This change- hurt...the friendship would have a strain due to distance. It's so strange that it would seem that a friendship could stand distance and yet, so much changes and sometimes, the journey wrecks more than time.

*Heart* What I loved: I think that sometimes we have to discover how the journey changes more than just place...it changes the person and this story really expresses this.


*Leafr* What needs work: There was nothing that I saw that needed revision or rework.


*Note1*Final thoughts: Sometimes the journey is long and it is good if you can have a friend, or friends, or especially your family to help you along the way.


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I enjoyed reading and reviewing your work today. Take or leave what you wish. Keep writing.

Thanks for your entry and best wishes in the contest.

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Review by Adore ♥
In affiliation with Noticing Newbies Committee  
Rated: 13+ | (4.5)
Hi Damon Nomad


I am reviewing your entry, "An Incredible Journey" as a judge for
Journey Through Genres: Official Contest  [E]
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*Lightning2* Impression: This story of an ordinary man whose life changed when he was 61 years old to set off on a journey on a deathbed promise to his father to find his brother, Luke, who had been absent from the family when he just stopped going to school during his doctoral research. He wanted to see the world, and hadn't been seen since. This story depth and interesting twists really surprised and thrilled me as I read through this intriguing tale. You will be entertained thoroughly as this writer really knows how to spin a yarn!

*Heart* What I loved: What I really enjoyed was how this man, now in his sixties, must fulfill this call to adventure of sorts, to locate information to satisfy a deathbed promise for father. He feels resentment at the seemingly careless manner in which his brother just abandoned the family for his Asian pursuits. The man finds out there is more to the story.

*Leafr* What needs work: Nothing in this story needs rework or revision.


*Note1*Final thoughts: As I mentioned, this story surprised me in its depth of character development and backstory for this contest. I am so happy to have read as story of this caliber in the contest.


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I enjoyed reading and reviewing your work today. Take or leave what you wish. Keep writing.

Thanks for your entry and best wishes in the contest.

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Review of Dream Vacation  
Review by Adore ♥
In affiliation with Noticing Newbies Committee  
Rated: ASR | (4.5)
Hi Graywriter


I am reviewing your entry, "Dream Vacation" as a judge for
Journey Through Genres: Official Contest  [E]
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*Lightning2* Impression: In this story of a middle aged woman with a spider plant friend named Peter Parker and an overbearing mother who only served to nitpick her every flaw, we meet Shelly, who has finally gotten a break of sorts by winning a 2 day/3 night all expense paid trip to Lake Chipatla, Mexico where she hopes her life takes a turn for the better. The story moved expertly along as the main protagonist fumbles her way to her dream trip and things take a turn...I only hope for the better.
I thought the single overworked female template with the never satisfied mother felt realistic, and it only helped to add more flavor to a flavorful story.

*Heart* What I loved: I sigh when I read about the overbearing mother because it is MORE true than not true. But this didn't feel forced nor overworked. It just was a legitimate piece in a story where you root for something, anything better to happen when it hasn't in the past.


*Leafr* What needs work: I did not see any part of this story which needed rework or revision.


*Note1*Final thoughts: I really enjoyed this story. It was a refreshing take on the single woman with a "pet" house plant (that was a new one!) and we hope her life gets injected with burst of fresh air to change her world.

"Noticing Newbies"  [13+]


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Thanks for your entry and best wishes in the contest.

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Review of The Traveler  
Review by Adore ♥
In affiliation with Noticing Newbies Committee  
Rated: 13+ | (4.0)
Hi LightinMind


I am reviewing your entry, "The Traveler" as a judge for
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*Lightning2* Impression: In this story of a mysterious man who had traveled over the mountain ranges of Asia for more than 2000 years, his path crosses a man who he states God has sent him to help and the adventure continues from there. There is intrigue, the Mongolian mountain ranges, a Tarbagan marmot and more to ensure we know our travels are in Asia. The main protagonist, called Ezekiel, is a man of few words and a man of intrigue. His encounter with a deadly but injured spy only add more spice to this story of betrayal and honor.

*Heart* What I loved: I thought that the Ezekiel character was an honorable man and lived by a certain code, though many others do not. How real this seems to be, even more so in real life.

*Leafr* What needs work: I did not see any area that needed rework or revision in this writing.


*Note1*Final thoughts: This story of a man whose walked the world for over 2000 years is an intriguing one as to see life for this length of time would fill your mind and person with a sense of never ending time.
Ezekiel is an interesting character and it will be great to see more of them in your writing.


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Review by Adore ♥
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Rated: E | (4.0)
Hi Zehzeh }


I am reviewing your entry as a judge for
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Write a short story in the given genre to win big prizes!
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*Lightning2* Impression: In this story of an unknown speaker and his companion bear, Gladly Golightly, they travel along on an adventure in London with a stuffed bear who eats peanut butter from a jar, it felt like a lighthearted romp with two kids, or a teen and his bear one day. The story ventured over many territories, and followed ancient cemetaries, some historic and some patriotic but by the end, they rallied their trip back on a London double bus back home.

*Heart* What I loved: I thought the addition of the bear with the huge figure was a nice touch but I felt that the lack of personalization of the speaker did not connect the bear to his companion as much. Buuut, the bear was great and very knowledgeable.


*Leafr* What needs work: There were a few punctuation issues, especially the use of the apostrophe mark instead of the quotation mark for the speech parts of the story. As you chose to do for this story, there was a lot of dialogue with this issue. I think that if you correct this, it will help the reader follow along better.


*Note1*Final thoughts: I think the premise and the character of Gladly Golightly has a lot of promise but the story needs to be tightened up, and with the correction of some punctuation issues, your story of these two adventure seekers will be off to a great start.

"Noticing Newbies"  [13+]


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Thanks for your entry and best wishes in the contest.

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Review of Santorini Magic  
Review by Adore ♥
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Rated: E | (4.0)
Hi debmiller1


I am reviewing your entry, "Santorini Magic" as a judge for
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*Lightning2* Impression: This story of a photographer with a successful YouTube channel who photographed images in exotic locations has a nice easy mood about it. The scene was established concretely enough to engage the reader into this traveling photo artist's life and the passion she had for it.

*Heart* What I loved: I really enjoyed the simplicity. The ideas were presented solidly but there wasn't an overuse of words to fill the space. I liked how, though the speaker expressed a loneliness despite her love of her profession, casually she found another traveling nomad to enjoy life with.

*Leafr* What needs work: I did not see any areas that needed rework or punctuation issues.

*Note1*Final thoughts: I thought this was a well framed entry that stayed within the framework of the content prompt and I enjoyed it, as I think other readers will.

"Noticing Newbies"  [13+]


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Thanks for your entry and best wishes in the contest.

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Review of Kat's new friend  
Review by Adore ♥
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Rated: E | (4.5)
Hi Beck Fires the Boiler!


Impression: This is a short little story called, "Kat's New Friend", a tale of a young lady who is lonely now that her older sister has gone away to college. The young girl, Kat, has trouble sleeping at night till she gets a package with a seashell from her big sister. Now, she has a part of her at home and doesn't feel as lonely any longer.

*Heart* What I loved: This was such a sweet little story. It felt genuine and true to real life experiences that turn out on a happy note.


*Leafr* What needs work: Nothing needs work in this story.


*Note1*Final thoughts: Friendship, especially one between sisters is a special thing and it is wonderful to see it portrayed this way in this story.
Thank you for the opportunity to read and review your work today. Happy 22nd WDC anniversary week to you too!

Adore

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Review of Thirty Minutes  
Review by Adore ♥
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Rated: E | (4.5)
Hi Captain Kit


Impression: This review is for a short poem titled, "Thirty Minutes" an ode to the time to share the love the writer has for their loved one.

*Heart* What I loved: I love this simple but sincere writing that is so beautiful and states the love in simple tones. It is indeed a very cheesy bit of writing but it made me smile and I really enjoyed this expression of love today.

*Leafr* What needs work: Nothing needs work.


*Note1*Final thoughts: What a beautiful bit of poetry to warm a heart on a cold winter morning. Thank you so much for this opportunity to read and review your writing today.

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Review of Diet Dying Days  
Review by Adore ♥
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Rated: E | (4.5)
Hi AmyJo -June, already? C'mon!

This funny little poem called, "Diet Dying Days" of the times either leading up to or in the midst of a strict diet right before Thanksgiving. Oh what a struggle the diet can be, especially when we know that we will consume so much food those days of Bacchus hedonistic dining and consumption.

The struggle is real and the speaker has only one answer to quell and stay the horror of the impending dietary implosion.


Impression: This is definitely written from the perspective of one who has struggled but knows how to live another day to diet. I genuinely enjoyed reading this poem and chuckled at the cleverness of the prose.

*Heart* What I loved: It was so likeable and succinct...really a fun quick enjoyable read.


*Leafr* What needs work: Nothing in this poem needs improvement.


*Note1*Final thoughts: You are one who has fought this diet battle and maintained life though you often felt it might defeat you. Funny, keep on writing these poems and I thank you for the opportunity to read and review your writing today.


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Review by Adore ♥
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Rated: E | (3.5)
Hi SandraLynn


Impression: This review is for your short story, "May Introduction to Camping", and without further adieu, let's begin. *Books1*

The story appears to be the funny part of a family's camping trip with the pets, for the first time. The family is fairly large, four kids and a couple of dogs, make up those that need oversight on the trip.
It's always the dropped bowl of chili, or the mishap with the tent that make up the memories that seem to stay for all time. This story felt so hard warming and sweet that I wanted to only focus on how cute it was and not look at layout and the like. A very enjoyable story and I'll break out my favorite parts below.

*Heart* What I loved: I loved reading a story of a family outing with kids and pets that is just them being together, living their lives and that is enough to make a story. The little segue with the pets who got into trouble and Dad had to save the day with defunking the dogs made me chuckle.

*Leafr* What needs work: I enjoyed the story so much so I hate bringing up some obvious things like story layout (probably need to double space), paragraph spacing and separating the word count from the very last paragraph since it is not part of the story but that's an easy fix. Your story was great and I really enjoyed reading it today.

I hope to see more writing from you and I'll check out your port for more work. Oh, and hope you are enjoying the 22nd WDC celebrating this week! It's a festive time of year so hopefully you can have fun here with the rest of us this week.

Adore


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Review of To (Lost Love)  
Review by Adore ♥
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Rated: E | (4.0)
Hi PennMan


Impression: This poem, To (Lost Love) in memory of your mother and your relationship with her is so gently expressed in this poem that the love is shown in every word and transition.


*Heart* What I loved: I thought your poem unabashedly revealed the depth of your love, and how much you'll miss her and why she is so deeply missed. This was a very special woman and she raised a very loving person as well.

*Leafr* What needs work: Nothing here needs rework.


*Note1*Final thoughts: It takes a strong constitution to openly let others into your world and you have let us into your world, and it is one filled with love.

Thank you so much for this opportunity to rate and review your writing.♥


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Review by Adore ♥
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Rated: E | (4.5)
Hi 🌕 HuntersMoon

This review from the read and review thread and what a treasure your post Christmas poem, "Christmas is Over" is for anyone who stumbles across this work.


Impression: This poem was very beautifully laid out and structured in tightly woven yet flowing like wine that made me wish there were more to it than five paragraph lines. While your poem very pointedly described, the loss in most of our lives, this work gave me hope for more on the other side.

*Heart* What I loved: I loved ALL of this poem and only wished when I grew up as a writer like yourself, I could pen such a beautiful piece of writing and fill others hearts with joy at reading a great poem about Christmas.

*Leafr* What needs work: Ha! Really? Nothing in your poem needs anything but more lines of text, but it's absolutely perfect where you ended it.

*Note1*Final thoughts: I very much enjoyed reading and reviewing this fun and peppermint flavored bit of writing from you today. I hope you have a blast this anniversary week and thank you again for granting me the opportunity to read and review your work.

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Review by Adore ♥
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Rated: E | (3.5)
Hi Johnny O


Impression: I am completing this review for your entry, "Historical Reasons For Wars Being Fought," and without further adieu, let's begin.

This work started out with asking the reader a few questions, which did tie into the theme of this month's Quotation Inspiration contest. This did show a keenness of eye in keeping the writing in step to lead the reader where you wished them to travel. I think that having a solid idea behind what you are writing is key to confidently leading your readers to the conclusion. You like to keep your work fast, no frills and what an interesting journey you took us on.

*Heart* What I loved: There was brevity to this writing that I might have seen as lax except for your deft knack for writing.


*Leafr* What needs work: There were a few places in this writing where a punctuation and space might've been useful but that was all that I saw with this work.


*Note1*Final thoughts: Really nice job with this entry. I enjoyed it for the contest today.

thank you again for your entry and I will keep an eye out for more writing from you!


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Review of Tower Moment  
Review by Adore ♥
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Rated: 13+ | (4.0)
Hi Author Ed Anderson


I am reviewing your entry, "Tower Moment", as a judge for
 
Quotation Inspiration: Official Contest  [ASR]
Use the quote provided to write a story and win big prizes!
by Writing.Com Support
. Thanks for entering!


*Lightning2* Impression: For this story of a life changing event, you used the Quotation Inspiration prompt in a directive way to lead the reader on a journey that involved a deposit to his bank account which changed his life forever and enabled him to make those he wanted in his life to live fabulously. This was the stuff of fantasies but this fantasy was his and those he loved to live the way they wanted, all reservations left alone.

*Heart* What I loved: This story just took a leap and had fun with the Quotation Prompt leaving caution to the wind. And what a blast it had with it.



*Leafr* What needs work: I did not see any area that needed rework.


*Note1*Final thoughts: This story used the Quotation Prompt strongly in its direction for the contest entry and gave us a story where the questions of life were answered in way that no one saw coming.

Best wishes in the contest and I will look for future writings as well.


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I enjoyed reading and reviewing your work today. Take or leave what you wish. Keep writing.

Thanks for your entry and best wishes in the contest.

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