Greetings to you! You a recipient of this week's Simply Positive review for your poem, "Heart's Dream - For Ollie".
Impression: This is an amazing poem that enters into the secret place of love and expresses the uncertainty that goes along with putting your heart out on a limb. With skillful hand, you take the simple act of seeing a person's name to feeling the emotional tugs that come from never feeling that love, in spite of, all of your dreams.
Rhythm, flow, style: The flow and rhythm of this poem is so solid and fluid. I just fell in love with this one and entered into the pain of a love that will not be fulfilled.
Remarks: This is a beautiful poem that gives ode to those special feelings and moments that are felt but never truly known. I truly enjoyed reviewing this poem and only wish you all the best with you writing.
Good tidings to you! You are one of this week's recipients of a Simply Positive review! This review will cover your lovely poem, "Mary" about a special woman you came to know and love
Impression: I was struck by the respect and love that just flowed from the words you used to express the affection you have for this woman, Mary. She not only impacted her family but definitely touched your life in such a way that you were able to share her tale with others. Very touching and well versed.
Rhythm, flow, style: I love the line placements and the flow, the movement of your lines. You begin the poem by denoting that though you are not talking about the mother of Jesus, this woman gives honor to the name, just the same. Then, each stanza just builds on the uniqueness of Mary very solidly and with fluidity.
Remarks: I think that you really gave homage to this woman with high marks and though she is not here to read it, I think that she knew just how much you your relationship meant to each other. This is just a wonderful piece of writing and I really enjoyed it completely.
I do wish you all the best with your writing and many wishes for a beautiful holiday season!
Your short story, "Girl's Night Out", is this week's recipient for a Simply Positive review. So, without further bantering, let's move on to your review.
Impression: This is the story of a lady who continues to pursue relationships in spite of all of the jerks she meets, and she stays strong through the help of a few friends. What I found most enjoyable was the wise-cracking throughout the story; these ladies knew how to have fun and find fun in the world around them. It felt realistic in that she was left without a date at the story's end because this was a girl's night out story, not a fairy tale. I really enjoyed it.
Rhythm, flow, style: What can I say? The writer kept the story moving well, the characters were all believable, plucked right out of the real world with the average set of insecurities. I bought into the story and liked the characters.
Remarks: Well, as always, Diane you have written a very engaging story that many of us can relate to and chuckle along with your characters. I loved how you weaved the book titles into the conversations and it never felt like forced conversations. You kept me wondering at the ending with the little inside joke between Janice and the main character. Hopefully, they will be in another short story so we can learn the secret of the fish. :)
I enjoyed reviewing your short story and wish you all the best with your writing endeavors.
Hiya! You are the recipient of a Simply Positive review for your short story, "Storm-story". So, without further adieu, let's move on to your review!
Impression: This is a story that I think many people can relate to, starting over again in a new town, a new life with a pup and yet, you have your reservations about stormy weather. I thought that the dialogue was realistic; the movement was good and kept me very interested. I like the ending of the story, as well and really think that you could make a series out of this character.
Rhythm, flow, style: Solid movement, interesting ideas and characters that keep the reader interested and involved with the story. You write with a realism that shows in your writing. Enjoyed this story very much.
Remarks: Even though I have not been single for a very long time, I could relate to the starting over part of the story, the wanting to get away from the storms of your life. I thought it was interesting that, for the first time in a long time for the character, the storms passed her by and she could be at peace with her puppy and herself. And again, I think this could be a short story collection with this character...(hint, hint).
Enjoyed your writing and on doing what you are doing, Fyn!
Greetings! Your poem, "The Magnitude of Stars" is the recipient of a Simply Positive review. So, without further bantering, let's get on to the review.
Impression: The writer of this poem takes the reader to far away places, way beyond our view, and yet we are able to see through poet's words. I just felt dreamy and happy as I read this poem. Beautiful work!
Rhythm, flow, style: There is a sense of fluidity, a deftness as I read through this poem. I found myself imagining what was not stated, and reveling in what was said. An enjoyment to read that shows the mastery of writing poetry well.
Remarks: What a enchanting trip we have been on with your poem, Maryann! The ideas are handled well; you spark the senses with delight and the reader just wants to stay gazing forever into the stars after the travel we have been on. I could not find anything that needed adjusting with this poem, and that just takes it to another level of reading.
I wish you all the best with this poem, and with your writing endeavors!
You are the recipient of a Simply Positive review for your work, "The Monster". So, without further adieu, let me move on to your review.
Impression: This story really is so timely with the Halloween season afoot, and makes a perfect bedtime thrill for the kiddies. You brought the reader into the mood so seamlessly and then, offer a bit of humor that every parent can identify with for the ending. Very clever.
Rhythm, flow, style: The movement was fluid, the ideas cohesive and well placed. Every line moved well with the other, leaving the reader to enjoy the story with ease.
Remarks: I just found myself smiling, it was like a slick little gag for the ending, a "gotcha" for the reader who thought that there was some terrible monster afoot. Why, I even thought that poor Mirabelle was living with monster parents! What a pleasure to read your work and I do look forward to reviewing more from you in the future.
You are the recipient of a Simply Positive review for your work, "Empty Nest Solution". So, without further adieu, let's move on to the review.
Impression: Warm, loving, full of laughter and memories of yesterday, this work just gets you right in the tender spots and never lets up. For any parent, or any child that has been in this type of loving relationship, and find themselves having to leave the nest, this is the story for you!
Rhythm, flow, style: I really liked the conversational way the story seemed to interact with the reader. The ideas were all connected and I did not feel as if I needed to figure out the story. Glorious job!
Remarks: I really enjoyed reading this story, and found a connection, especially with your newest family addition, Bear. What I also liked is how the puppy is never touted as a replacement but just a companion to help fill the quiet times.
I did not have any writing suggestions for the story, and just look forward to reading more of your writing!
You are the recipient of a Simply Positive review for your work, "Ponderings", and without further adieu, let's review!
Impression: It is a nicely written, mellow methodical bit of poetry. I just felt that you brought the reader into your private area to think freely with you.
Rhythm, flow, style: The rhythm and tempo was very nice, and I like how your ideas flowed cohesively together.
Remarks: Very enjoyable time spent here with your poetry and thanks for sharing your thoughts. I did not find anything that I thought warranted revision. Just keep plugging away, Nila and your writing future looks quite bright!
You are the lucky recipient of a Simply Positive review for this week!
I am reviewing your work, "Letting Go", a very moving poem about moving forward and not holding on to what cannot change.
Impression: Wow! You drew me into this piece right from the first sentence: "I sit outside as evening shadows dance..." Even though you are fighting with this thing, this weight you must let go of, you did not miss the opportunity to watch night, full of life, around you. I loved it! This poem represents what great poetry is all about - bringing the reader into your angst, your joy, your sorrow so deeply that they don't want to let go. Bravo!
Rhythm, flow, style: What can I say that anyone with eyes could not see? It just moved seamlessly from your point of contemplation, to action, and finally to peaceful breezes. Just lovely!
Remarks: I just love reading works that are borne of the poets life. The calm state of relinquishing control of things that only seek to destroy the soul. I enjoyed reading this piece and do look forward visiting your port soon.
This is a funny little, offbeat editorial item that I must agree soundly with you on! I, like you, grew up disliking the smell of "chitlins" with all of my little heart. And now that I am grown, and married to a man who prefers much different food, I never have to deal with this subject again.
My mother never learned how to cook chitterlings, but my grandmother made sure she served them during the holidays, especially with a large pot of greens and a bottle of hot sauce on the side. I guess that this might have developed during the time of slavery, but don't you think some traditions are worth letting go? I know I do with this one. But then, would not have anything to decline during the Christmas feast.
I thought you handled this item with ease, humor and really made me laugh; I haven't done that over a writing in some time. As I reviewed your item, I really did not see any glaring items for editing, so I think you are on the right track.
Keep on writing and thanks for stopping by my port for a review.
Impression: Hmmm, this story was a bit overblown for me, and I struggled to understand how the title, "The Hounds of Hell Howl at Humanity" was really tied to the contents of the story.
Rhythm, flow, style: The thought process seemed a bit jumbled, as the writing lines were bunched together and that always makes online reading difficult. The flow is not there, and the purpose of the writing was lost in all of the ideas that you tried to pose here. Some editing is needed, as well.
Remarks: I really think that you need to read through your writing aloud to make sure it makes sense and break out dialogue and maybe even think of changing the point of view to allow for more voices to tell the story. It's just a suggestion, and nothing more.
I enjoyed reading and reviewing your writing today. Thanks for your entry and best wishes in the contest.
This is another piece from your Slices of Life folder and this poem, "Don't Leave Daddy", this emotion filled gem captures the heart and essence of letting go of someone you love, and I know that many can relate to this piece.
What caught me at the onset is the stages that you show of letting go of your father, knowing that it was not his decision to stay any longer, but was in God's hands. From the first where it is simply stated, to the end, when you tell him goodbye as he leaves on a journey that cannot be shared, my heart was full with the love in your words!
There is so much truth in this poem, and the emotion traveled to my life.
I thank you for sharing something so personal with everyone, and especially, with me.
For the next item from your folder, Slices of Life, I will review your thoughtful work, "Scraps", a poem that captures the essence of the writer so well.
This poem identifies the mood, the inspiring bits of words and movement, conversation and experiences, joy and sorrow that inspire the words and thoughts that we often place on our scraps, hopefully to become our writings someday.
I really thought you entered that special place to find the words to write this piece and share it with the rest of us. I think the last line sums it up so appropriately: "Muse smiles." This says it all.
I thought that the folder, Slices of Life has some wonderful items, and I want to start by reviewing your poem, "Misunderstood", a work that reminds us that people should not be judged by the outside, though most people do.
What I found interesting about this piece is that it says so much without many lines at all. The imagery used by showing the elderly woman, who is a picture of many people who are categorized and shunned without ever giving them a chance. Unfortunately, this seems to be the way many people choose to operate, and I think that this poem could impact the average thinking to stop and consider their actions, and those that they influence around them.
This is your third review from your (5) winning reviews from the Hummingbird Semi-annual auction, and I have chosen to review your short story, "Rain? Not on My Parade", a day that looks like it has all of the elements for disaster but has a rainbow hidden in its surprise lining of joy.
This story was based on word prompts, and it is always engaging to watch and see what various writers takes will be on the word combinations. While this was not as well done as your previous stories, the creative ending deserves a hand for a job well done!
I thought that the point of view that was chosen for this story, and it made it real on a more personal level that was funny, heartwarming and drew me in to see just how this all worked out.
There were a few issues with editing again, and I'd be happy to be more specific, if you want me to show you.
This is a very nice work and I truly enjoyed reviewing it!
Here is a review for your song, "Sad Spectator" and it is a well done song indeed.
In your song, you point out how life is full of tragedies, and heartache, and yet we all know that is is a part of life and living.
I liked how you structured your lines and the emotion is shown throughout this piece.
I thought this stanza: "It is not that rare that a lyric is wrong,
Because it's broken hearts that write the greatest songs,
They last forever, they are right, they belong,
it's a shame that pain makes a noise so strong." stood out the most for me.
I hope you keep on writing songs and posting them for review.
For your entry, you submitted your short story, "Tall Tale" a story about the monster from the sea that got away, or it is more the weaving of a great story from a master story salesman.
Impression: The story sets a good scene and draws the reader into a story that only gets better and more taller as the reader travels along for the ride.
Rhythm, flow, style: The rhythm and flow works quite well for this story, in that, we need to be pulled along by speaker's strings to the end, only to find out that we fell for the big one. For this story, I give it a SMILE{/c|!
Remarks: I thought this was a very well told story gives honor to Moby Dick, and yet, has a style all of its own. Though we never get to meet the speaker, you learn so much about his character from the wild story he has told.
I enjoyed reading and reviewing your writing today. Thanks for your entry and best wishes in the contest.
You have submitted your wonderful entry, "The Weiner People at Head of the River" to the "Short Shots" contest for the month of May and now, for your review.
Impression: Impressive story of a grandpa and grandson out fishing and the grandpa wants to tell his grandson the story of the Wiener people since they are in S. Jersey and they don't have leprechauns there. That in itself made me chuckle so I know that the reader will be in for a ride. It is amazing to see all the loud talk that Tom Craven had in the beginning but by the end of the story, he tells his grandson how he did something nice for the Weiner people so no harm would come to him. The way he tells the story makes you wonder.
Rhythm, flow, style: The flow and rhythm of the story reminds me of a good tall tale with loads of humor thrown in between. Every other line will have you laughing and shaking your head at the grandfather's humor, and his affection, though he'd never say it, for his grandson. It was superb from start to finish and I thought it moved along so well without rushing, though the grandson had put his grandpa on a time limit. That was a nice creative touch too. I give this story STAR STAR STAR for outstanding writing.
Contents: There was so much information loaded into this story of the Weiner people that it came off as being a possible situation that one could be in. I vibed with the interaction between the two main characters, and the dialogue was one of the best that I've read in a long time. I would love to see more writing from you. You have a promising future ahead of you with your style of writing.
I enjoyed reading and reviewing your writing today. Thanks for your entry and best wishes in the contest.
You have submitted your wonderful entry "The Door" to the "Short Shots" contest for the month of May and now, for your review.
Impression: This was an interesting way to approach the door in the photo idea, and you leave much to the readers intuitive sense to figure out on their own. Small people who are afraid of a big door instead of big people looking at the small door? Didn't think about it that way until you did it, and so your idea is quite creative.
Rhythm, flow, style: The story moves along but it does get caught up and sputter in the areas where the reader has to figure out what has transpired. A little bit more clarification might be in order to assist and encourage the reader to enjoy the story. For this, I give your story a SMILE.
Contents: The story is about a huge prank that someone named Rwar is planning on playing on Hugo, Chari and anyone else they can trick. It did make me chuckle as it is a clever idea.
I enjoyed reading and reviewing your writing today. Thanks for your entry and best wishes in the contest.
You have submitted your wonderful entry, "The Secrete Box" to the "Short Shots" contest for the month of May and now, for your review.
Impression: A story that shows the value of family and retaining traditions, especially ones that tell a story that other people can benefit from later on when they are ready.
Rhythm, flow, style: It has a nice even flow about the story, and it merges into the issue that changes the mood without missing a beat. For this, I give the story a SMILE for using words so deftly.
Contents: I liked the storyline and how the valued secrete box that was given to the main character when she was a young teen comes up missing but as the story continues, we get more interaction between the characters and only see the plot thicken.
Remarks: While I reviewed this piece, it was written in third person in some parts, and then when there was dialogue between the characters, you would put in the markers to show they were talking in some places and then, in others, there would be nothing. It is distracting to see this and I would suggest that you go back and check your item for editing of this minor thing.
I enjoyed reading and reviewing your writing today. Thanks for your entry and best wishes in the contest.
You have submitted your wonderful entry, "A Thimblefull of Trouble" to the "Short Shots" contest for the month of May and now, for your review.
Impression: Solid and deliberate, this is the story of two gnomes whose home at the base of the tree will soon be invaded if they cannot locate the reason behind the barrier breach. It was good writing with a whole lot of idea formation behind this story to make it fun to read and enjoyable.
Rhythm, flow, style: Steady, sure writing except when the writer wanted to evoke emotion from the reader, which I thought showed some skill. It had a nice evenness about it from start to finish that drew me forward to the end. For this, I give you my SMILE.
Contents: Solid story content with a good plot that will invite many readers. I liked how the crystal who protected the gnome world, Dimune had to show them that she had emotions too, and that caused them to be more thoughtful and feeling. Nice touch there.
I enjoyed reading and reviewing your writing today. Thanks for your entry and best wishes in the contest.
You have submitted your wonderful entry, "Julian's Secret" to the "Short Shots" contest for the month of May and now, for your review.
Impression: Romping good time with a twist in the end! It was an imaginative throw back to the writing of Lewis Carroll and I thought it was done very well. And I love the ending line as it opens the door, figuratively to another visitor inside.
Rhythm, flow, style: The style is light, with a bit of rebellion in the spirit, that starts out quiet but then really gears up towards the end of the writing. The emotion became more heightened as we wondered of the fate of young Julian, and then, the story ends with a bit of mystery. I enjoyed it and give you a .
Contents: Solid fun writing with a plot that takes us back to the writing of Lewis Carroll, but with a modern twist.
Remarks: Good writing and one of my favorites so far in the contest.
I enjoyed reading and reviewing your writing today. Thanks for your entry and best wishes in the contest.
You have submitted your wonderful entry, "Rayne Forest" to the "Short Shots" contest for the month of May and now, for your review.
Impression: I was struck, for starters, by the cleverness of the title. The word play on the meaning of the word rain was a nice touch and made me look forward to reading your story. The faerie, Rayne, was a wise cracking little fellow who pulled no punches even if it involved the one person who would decide the fate of the world.
Rhythm, flow, style: You have a genuinely funny style, mischievous at best and it shows throughout this piece. The story was nicely paced and kept the reader moving along at a good clip, and even at the end, as the main character enters his door at the base of the tree, you can't help but chuckle along with him at his prank. All in all, I give you a .
Contents: The story held true to the basis of the plot and engaged the reader to travel along with Rayne on his quest to find the child who will help bring all things to order. I thought you really stepped out to make this an interesting story built upon the photo prompt...good job.
I enjoyed reading and reviewing your writing today. Thanks for your entry and best wishes in the contest.
You have submitted your wonderful entry, "Mother's Love" to the "Short Shots" contest for the month of May and now, for your review.
Impression: It is the tender and kind story of two lives who are brought together due to the danger that encompasses their lives, and form a bond of friendship and love that will continue though they will never meet again.
Rhythm, flow, style: It moved gradually and continuously forward toward the ending where we would find out the crux of the story, it being the celebration of a mother's love. The third person point of view style of writing didn't work for me, but I thought you did a good job with integrating the photo prompt into the story. For this, I give you THUMBSUP.
Contents: This story wasn't loaded with content but it still had a good beginning, middle and ending. It brought two worlds, the mother deer with her doe, and a mother elf with her brood, together in the most interesting of ways and was an enjoyable read.
Remarks: The writing suggestions I would give on this story is watch your punctuation, or lack of it in certain areas and to maybe revisit another POV style for this story. However, you did a great job of integrating the photo prompt for into a nicely done story.
I enjoyed reading and reviewing your writing today. Thanks for your entry and best wishes in the contest.
You have submitted your wonderful entry, "An Afternoon in Faerie" to the "Short Shots" contest for the month of May and now for your review.
Impression: Warm, fun, full of dreams and emotion. The story of a young boy who leaves the safety of the forest border in search for an adventure and ends up spending the time of his life in Faerie land. In the end, all is well and he leaves with someone special from behind the door at the base of the tree. It was a clever way to introduce the door from the photo prompt for the contest into the story, and make it all so conceivable.
Rhythm, flow, style: the flow was tight and moved well from beginning to end. I didn't feel that there were stagnant parts to the story, and that the reader was engaged and rooting for the child's safety as it drew to a close. For this, I give your story my STAR.
Contents: It started off well and sticked to the plot of the story quite well. It took a turn for a clever twist once the child entered into Faerie land, which others will have to find out from reading your story, and all things merged toward the conclusion when the Faerie king made a decision that changed the course of the child's life forever. And all from his disobeying his mother's instruction and venturing out for the door in the forest...do wonders ever cease!
Remarks: Good job with the story that is inviting and can stand alone outside of the contest for others to read through. I thought the door was mentioned but not brooded upon, and it just felt natural to the story.
I enjoyed reading and reviewing your writing today. Thanks for your entry and best wishes in the contest.
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Impression: This is an amazing poem that enters into the secret place of love and expresses the uncertainty that goes along with putting your heart out on a limb. With skillful hand, you take the simple act of seeing a person's name to feeling the emotional tugs that come from never feeling that love, in spite of, all of your dreams. 
Rhythm, flow, style: The flow and rhythm of this poem is so solid and fluid. I just fell in love with this one and entered into the pain of a love that will not be fulfilled.
Remarks: This is a beautiful poem that gives ode to those special feelings and moments that are felt but never truly known. I truly enjoyed reviewing this poem and only wish you all the best with you writing. 
