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Review of I LEFT  
Review by Diana
Rated: 13+ | (4.5)
I'm no expert on poetry so I can't give you a technical critique. But I can tell you your words are powerful and hard hitting. I can't imagine the hell a soldier goes through in a battle situation. I can never truly comprehend or understand the sacrifice men like you make to fight against oppressive regimes. My dad was in the army so I do understand something of the togetherness and camaraderie that an army life inspires. All your words are powerful, but the last part is the strongest:

left the man I was meant to be
something less
as I became
something
more.

Respect to you for putting your life on the line so we can continue to live in peace.
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Review by Diana
Rated: 13+ | (4.0)
Heh, nicely written. I think few would be able to resist the temptation. You built the suspense well and the twist at the end was a good one!
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Review of The Ice Lake  
Review by Diana
Rated: 13+ | (4.0)
This story is a great metaphor for what happens when we chain ourselves down with regret, or by holding a grudge. And only we can set ourselves free. A good story that hooked me with the first two sentences.
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Review by Diana
Rated: ASR | (4.5)
Wow! What a story. The contrast between the bulk of the story and the ending is so great that it's startling to read. It starts out as a pretty spiritual story, heartwarming in its way. Then WHAM! That ending just hits you in the gut. Great stuff!
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Review by Diana
Rated: 13+ | (4.0)
HAH! I've felt that frustration often. This story could almost be a cathartic release for all of us who have suffered from writer's block, waiting for our muse to come whisper into our ear.
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Review of The Fun House  
Review by Diana
Rated: 13+ | (5.0)
What a great story! You had me hooked from the beginning. That was great dialogue, too. I could picture the scene in my mind of the kids riding to the funhouse and the banter among them. You captured their individual personalities perfectly. Nicely done at the end, too.
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