This is a clever way to portray loss without stating it is a fact outright. Katie still pours a cup of coffee for her husband and she speaks to him. Great use of the prompt by the way. You have portrayed a beautiful moment here. This could be many widows.
Wow! I am the eldest of four and we share the same parents. I cannot fathom being an only child for most of your life and then meeting your half sister. It seems like a plot from a novel. This mirrors the experiences of one of my neighbours. He discovered his half sister long after his parents had died. I am happy for you. Probably meeting as adults is better. You both have lived and experienced so much. I have discovered more family via genealogy research.
For most of us our school memories are ones we remember fondly. That is when we learned new skills and socialized with others. We had no worries other than fitting in amongst our peers. I must congratulate you on your English. I did notice however that you referred to your art teacher as wearing " a gold framed glass". While this is technically correct what he wore are known as eye glasses or spectacles. At first reading it's confusing because who wears glass? In English we say a pair of eyeglasses. I laughed at the idea of Tajik having a disease you called tajikitis.
I for one would love to receive cookies as a gift. I am a parent and can empathize with this father. Kids need to learn the value of money. The earning of it is a life lesson that never leaves us. It's not the cost but the thought that counts. Great use of the prompt.
Ah, yes, we all battle with our assumptions and sometimes there are consequences. This Aunt Fanny character has her strict beliefs and stern physical priorities. She is a powerhouse, a force of nature. The narrator survives her initiation. This was no easy peasy stroll punctuated by pleasant conversation. Thanks for the image of a senior warrior woman now ensconced in my brain.
I like the repetition of that line "Novocain Nick is a genuine fake." This creates an emphasis and I did not miss it. There are many words as you know that rhyme with fake. I suppose many unwilling victims quake and shake while undergoing dental torture.
The realistic dialogue is a great lead up to the surprise ending. Mom cannot seem to get past the strange idea of friends being in the closet and somehow sneaking into the home. Yes, they did sneak in, but not through the front door. This story made me grin. As told by a child it makes perfect sense. Great use of the prompt.
This is a succinct story, yet it tells a tale. Yep, probably not many people would opt to attend clown college or brag about it. This is a creative twist on the prompt. Just following the parents' dream with a personal twist. You were well within the word count, too.
This is a beautiful story initiated by the prompt. You have created a tale of discovery that originates in a chance meeting. Taking the wrong suitcase at an airport lead to a budding romance. The background is exotic and magical. Maya became more than a curious tourist.
Well, if your aim is to compose a terrible Valentine's Day poem, you succeeded. I imagine this is like someone pretending they cannot dance or sing when they have the talent. It must be difficult, so kudos. Hey, if Dr. Seuss could do it, why not you. You needed to make words rhyme, right?
You've done it. Now I am hooked and vested in this story. What happens the next day? I presume the narrator escapes the attic unscathed. This mystery builds with an intriguing clue. Great use of the prompt words. You created the attic and the climb to it as very lifelike. I could feel the tension.
Well, Leo is front and centre for a double-cross, isn't he? Who says crime doesn't pay? I like the use of the given prompt in this fast-paced, taut story. I can feel Leo's palpable dread as he rocks in his chair hearing the three men coming for him.
Well, this is a creative use of the prompt. Men paying for wooing classes? I noticed a few editing issues. I believe it should be yeas and alrights. That apostrophe is for possession. The sentence that begins with " you told me" doesn't need commas. Oops whispered needs an h. The word envelope is misspelled in its last usage. "Hey your hot" should be you're hot. Sorry, I notice these things.
This was a delight to read. The humour shone through. I laughed out loud at the mention of "three pinches of graveyard dust" and "baked with intentional eye contact." A new twist on a watched pot never boils? I envisioned Mom throwing the salt shaker in a panic. Great use of the prompt.
Great use of the prompt words which you wove into a wee story. I like the friendly reception the narrator received from the three sisters and their parents. The wellness check benefited the visitor. Visits are healrhy for everyone. It feels wonderful to be welcomed and accepted.
Bravo. Kudos. Your cheering/motivational self has reared his head and kicked you with the best of intentions. He thinks in terms of doable goals. Anticipating your reluctance he has presented the why and how. This is a starter kit. "Start small." Somewhat helpful, definitely logical. I appreciate the exercise and construction metaphors. Yep, writing requires unceasing, immense, blood, sweat and tears effort. Building does not occur over night. Your style is relatable and humorous.
Could Grandpa be a moonshiner? Not many granddaughters party with their grandfathers in such a way, or so I once thought. This is an interesting and imaginative use of the prompt words. Many an engaging tale revolves around a fish out of water scenario and this is another one.
More opinion servers need to read this poem. Yes, we do not all "sing from the same hymn book". By the way, I have never heard this particular turn of phrase before and I like it. Too many believe their opinions are the only ones that matter and then they attempt to impose them. Your rhyming is effortless, kudos.
This story is mesmerizing and scary at the same time. Is this what happens to missing children? I suppose anything is possible. How frightening that someone could abduct a child and then consider that child to be a daughter. Great use of the prompt. This would be quite the secret.
So, sneaky Angela was never struggling or floundering. She learned to delegate, or fob off her work to Sandy. This is definitely not team work. Angela never needed the proffered encouragement. As a schemer she had another plan. Some people do just enough to benefit themselves, eh?
Well, what can I comment? Debra has decided to leave her crazy boyfriend and strike out on her own. By crazy, I mean unfaithful and oblivious. He has not honoured their relationship. There are great descriptors here. I like the immediacy of " within punching distance."
This is a pleasure to read. I had no idea what caused such dissatisfaction until the surprise ending. Kudos for personalizing something as banal as a wallet. Probably many people can relate to this. What is a fat wallet anyway? Too many of us may never know.
Whew, now this is a story with many shiny facets. Apparently, the space time continuum is complicated and ever-evolving. Those seemingly mundane ripples cascade at warp speed with devastating consequences. I love this backhanded derogatory comeback. "You boys seem to be on the smart side of stupid." Thanks for the laughs.
It must be lonely to be thought invisible. Kareem proved himself diligent and sharp-eyed with his new star discovery. "His relationship with the teachers weren't" seems awkward. I believe it should be wasn't as that verb is tied to the word relationship. I also espied a missed letter."He tried not to let is invisibility". I know you intended that to be his . Great use of the prompt.
This is indeed a cute story told from the viewpoint of the family dog with seniority. Why had the family adopted an interloper? I like Mav as the set in his ways canine. Kudos for the imaginative use of the prompt sentence. I never viewed it in this story .
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