This is a great use of the prompt phrase. Anybody who co-habitates with another will probably relate to this story. Room mates whether romantic partners or not have the ability to irritate. We are all individuals. That said, we have our strengths and we have our weaknesses. Thanks for the read!
Haha! If only electric vehicles were that simplistic, and only required a very long extension cord. Some ideas just need a bit of tweaking, eh? I know a few wives who expect the worst from their husbands and rarely are they disappointed. This is a funny flash fiction piece.
Ah, too late with that wise warning, Warren. Not too many would attempt a dangerous climb up a public precipice in broad daylight. It is a tad obvious. The ending is funny and unexpected. Bravo implementing the prompt sentence. This is a fun read. Maybe Warren will command respect next time.
In a minimum of words you weave a poignant tale and capture a precious moment in time. Granny is sometimes transported to her past and that pull interferes with the reality of the present. You made great use of the prompt words. "Getting Granny a new resident near the sea." I believe you intended to write residence .
Wow, this is a powerful glimpse into one man's world. Great implementation of the three prompt words. You created a breathing, palpable scenario here. I think I like this Drake fellow. Now this is an affirmation. "He would stand tall, like his father had taught him, one small act at a time."
I am not sure if I understand this story. Does the newcomer meet her future self as someone applying for a job? Does she fear success and advancement? Does she see who and what she is destined to become? Great use of the three prompt words. You made me think.
Cue the dramatic music and the look over his shoulder. Yes, what will Ian do with his discovery? Have the crows shown him a much-needed treasure? Will finder's keepers prevail in this instance? Great use of the prompt words and creating a suspended story. What will happen next?
There's momentary lapses and then there's total memory loss. To lose a spouse right after a restaurant meal together is definitely forgetful. Ah, the human brain can only process and contain so much before it rebels. This is a delightful story that made me smile. Again, great use of the given prompt.
Oooo, I like that the previous story has a new chapter. Travis is over-confident and proud of what he did, so he just has to brag about it. Fools and their best laid plans are soon thwarted. Sadly, too many women do not consider their own fates and only see that a rival is out of the picture. Great use of the given prompt.
Aha, this is a clever murder tale.Well sort of a murder. How to get rid of a fiancee and try to make it look accidental. Poor sun-worshiping Libby. Death by sun stroke cannot be pleasant.Actually, I am surprised this doesn't happen to more tourists. Great use of the prompt words.
Ah, family discord certainly makes for compelling stories, eh? This mother-daughter duo does not come across as cute and cuddly. There is so much animosity between the two. I like that you wrote with strong verbs . This adds depth to the story. The ending is a surprise and a cliff hanger. Cue the ominous music. Has there been foul play?
Great sentiment and oh so much dressier than attempting to say, "Meh, it's all the same to me. What's one more year?" A marching band? Who has that show other than an historical figure? I enjoyed reading this charming poem. The rhymes are natural and fun. Relaxing and nothing taxing sound like heaven.
Well, that was a quick read with an unexpected twist. Everything built up to that surprise, the hunter has become the prey. Great pacing and descriptions. I can say that I have never before heard of a person described as a " diseased and twisted bramble of soul."
Ah, the spontaneity and ensuing surprises of travel. Not every excursion needs to be planned. Sometimes, it is okay to go with the flow and just live in the moment. Not all methods of transportation are first class. Who is ever prepared for motion sickness or sea sickness? Great use of the prompt words.
I know I sure would not wish to encounter a werewolf. With those sharp, powerful fangs, deadly claws and "a thirst for fresh blood" no thank you. The occasional grumpy dog is enough of an encounter during my walks. I should think the bloodthirsty howl is fear-provoking, too. Yikes. Happy account anniversary.
This is a thoughtful and heartfelt rendering. Memories of Grandpa come alive as if in dreams. I too associate coffee with my grandparents. I love the aroma memories. It is sobering to live long enough to become the age Grandpa once did. He lives on in and through you. Happy account anniversary.
"Crystal fantasy wonderland." I will admit that snow and ice can appear to be beautiful. Some of the ice even resembles fancy sculptures. Oh, you describe the snow accumulation and the incessant shoveling. Snow is always difficult to pin down re amounts. As it increases the benevolency "dissipates". Great word by the way. Happy account anniversary.
I am laughing reading your story. Ruby did indeed earn a bit of comeuppance. She and her gossiping ways remind me of that expression "flapping your gums". I suppose that is all she could do for a while. You paint quite the picture of this Ruby. Yep, I imagine her husband and the locals loved their brief peace and quiet. Happy account anniversary.
I like the concept of art being a gift. Beauty is indeed in the eye of the beholder. A painting, for instance, can as you explain evoke feelings, emotions, hopes, sorrows and memories. Not everyone sees and interprets it the same way. Words do the same thing. The world as a "tediously floating rock" creates a raw, provocative image. "We would would struggle to see things clearly." I believe that's one too many woulds. "It touched our souls." The rest of your verbs are present tense and perhaps this one should also be, hence, try touches. Happy account anniversary.
Hurray! I appreciate that you celebrate the "ordinary things" in this poem. They are the everyday things, but they are important, vital, life-affirming, extraordinary things, too. Many aspire to experience and then cherish these moments. I like the flow of this piece of poetry and its affirmations. Happy account anniversary.
Reading this I cheered for Ruby and her new found resolve. She is worthy of so much more than Jack who treats her like a maid. The contract of marriage is not the best reason to stay with a cold partner. Sadly, this story is relatable and probably true to many couples. Happy account anniversary.
Well, this is an original take on the blank page. You choose to celebrate, almost revere that once overlooked page. Yes, perhaps it is fate, or destiny to be passed over in favour of another page. Does a page need to be filled to be relevant? You reveal that it does not. Its very blankness is beautiful, meaningful. Happy account anniversary.
My family lived with German Shepherds and I have fond memories of them. They are loyal and intelligent dogs. I can feel your love for Macha in this story. I believe children and pets compliment each other. Nobody cuddles like a beloved pet. I enjoyed reading this. I did notice two spelling errors. They should be spelled ecstatic and tenant. Happy account anniversary.
I have heard it said that growing old is not for the faint of heart. Obviously, too many people are not granted this experience, opportunity or privilege, no matter what you call it. It is unfortunate that aging takes a toll. I believe it is a shame that some seniors feel invisible and burdensome. No one deserves to be thought of as irrelevant or anonymous. Sigh, that is a bleak picture. Happy account anniversary.
I loved reading this fun, rollicking piece of poetry. It has a great rhythm and the rhymes are not at all forced or clumsy. I believe you did a great job telling this from a child's perspective. Is it a monster in the laundry room? What relief to discover a forgotten "soft toy all covered in dust." Thanks for the imagery and the smile. Happy account anniversary.
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