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Review of The Change  
Review by N.A Miller
Rated: E | (5.0)
interesting point of view... never thought of it from the pov of a deer. I thought it over all very heart warming and given a second look when i go deer hunting. No more of that shinola for me... This makes me think twice about hunting again.

Overall: Good grammar and spelling no issues detected.

It is a different way to look at things.



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Review by N.A Miller
Rated: 18+ | (5.0)
Good story... a good vampire type story with a good suspense/horror factor and a really surprising ending. I thought overall that this might be used in a novel opening rather than just a story.

Overall written well with no grammar spelling or any technical issues.

Good work and effort A+

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Review of Toadette's Story  
Review by N.A Miller
Rated: 18+ | (4.0)
I would like to say this is actually quite good, i found it very compelling and wanting to read on after every chapter. It is not often you find someone who is able to do an graphic novel or illustrated novel on an anime and able to pull it off. very well done i really did enjoy this entire novel. Even if it is ongoing i will keep reading.

I found no technical problems with it, and dialogue was easy to follow as was the plot.

I give this a 4 star solid review and really enjoyed the storyline. I am a big anime fan myself, mostly Aikira, Robotech, Voltron, Kite, Bleach, and Yamato as major ones i follow. So I definitely will add this one to my list.
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Review of Will-a-Wisp  
Review by N.A Miller
Rated: E | (5.0)
nicely done, very good effort... good for the writer's cramp post here on WDC...


Overall good dialogue, grammar, no spelling problems and i like how you still can build up the action and still get the job done with not alot of writing.

I never tried something like this for writers cramp or something this short.. it's always been 1000-2000 words usually and still i have difficulties.

I appreciate this because you have shown me that a little effort you can accomplish. I might even take a whack at this and give it a try myself. My profound thanks for that.

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Review by N.A Miller
Rated: 18+ | (5.0)
good story... I can really relate to this. reminds me too much of my personal life. (1st marriage)

As for the mechanics: I found no grammar errors or spelling errors.

Overall impression, good readability, well flowing and good plot. also excellent dialogue.

a jewel to find... and my thanks for sharing.

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Review by N.A Miller
Rated: E | (2.0)
if you find him you will find his power and he will teach you his word.

Only the most evil people really are sent to the lake of fire.

Everyone will fall short one way or another and it is up to the person to fix or repent for that short coming.

a very short-sighted poll.. no one really knows what is on the other end and what will happen between life and death... it is FAITH and belief that makes all the difference.
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Review of Rock Gets Revenge  
Review by N.A Miller
Rated: 18+ | (5.0)
Not a bad story... Very well done.

I found no overlying problems in the way of grammar or spelling errors.

It is refreshing that someone went this way and did an anime based theme in written form. Not too many people do this because of the often difficult story lines and plots related to this genre.

For this story, I found it very concise and clear, very easy to follow.

I am very familiar with anime and hentai type stories, but i personally have never tried writing one. The closest I ever got was based on a picture and the assignment was to write a story based on it.

a very refreshing piece...



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Review by N.A Miller
Rated: 13+ | (3.0)
Here is my review of your story:

Overall impression: Good, free flowing and good dialogue.
No Grammar/Spelling issues.

Things to change:

It jumps right into the story, and lacks a preface or an opening before the action actually starts.. something to warm up the person reading than jumping right into the "Meat and Potatoes" of writing. It overall is GOOD, as it is, just add an opening is all and i think you could improve... otherwise no other changes that that i could see..

What I liked: The story historical aspect of it, from the point of view of using history as a base for events in current life.

Don't read anything into this review: This is NOT a bad review... You have a good story here, and it can be improved. It is not a bad story... you have a lot of work to be done and i think it has alot of potential -- Capitalize on it and expand it and i think you have a winner here.


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Review of Desert Mirages  
Review by N.A Miller
Rated: 13+ | (5.0)
ooooh i like this, very intriguing... I hope there is more of this coming soon, it could be expanded into something more in depth...

Technically: No issues found
Grammar: No issues found
Spelling: No Issues found

What I liked: The depth of description and by your working painted a mental picture when reading along... I was able to follow quite well and mentally got a great picture of the story.

Free flowing and well written
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Review by N.A Miller
Rated: E | (5.0)
has not been here in three years, I hope I meet with the genre even through its mainly science fiction but it does have a main aspect of adventure and action in it as well.

"I may be a little rusty but certainly not untried." - Admiral James T. Kirk
(Star Trek: The motion Picture)
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Review by N.A Miller
Rated: E | (5.0)
Very nice article...

Grammar and all that: Excellent and free flowing...

I liked how in depth you went into the dating scene, although for me its been a good 25 years since I actually dated. So I am pushing a half a century old I can relate and been married twice. but even from a point a view of married it takes commitment and hard work to make it work between a couple. Otherwise it won't... Consider that.

Otherwise Good work...



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Review by N.A Miller
Rated: 13+ | (5.0)
nicely done... an art form in its own right... i am not a screenplay writer, but it was really easy to follow... hat's off that you can do that.

No spelling/grammar issues detected

No changes needed.

Good story too... not used to reading one but i picked up on it after a couple of scenes to understand where i was... good job.


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Review of River of Death  
Review by N.A Miller
Rated: 13+ | (3.0)
good story and reminds me of Heart of Darkness... from John Steinbeck... the same horror adventure type story Genre... Good -- but you have alot of work to be done.

There are a few grammar and tensing errors in several places but overall the story flows as does the dialogue... The only thing i find fault right off the get go... nothing that needs to be taken care of immediately, but make a note that needs to be checked.

Example: I merely nod. (needs to be nodded.) It hurt too much to talk... (drop the s)

i would suggest rewriting and reading aloud to help you iron those out... It does help sometimes.

Good horror concept, pretty scary stuff...


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Review by N.A Miller
Rated: 18+ | (5.0)
Hi there. My name is NathanielM and I just read your work. Here is what I have to say.

Story: Mother's Christmas Wish
Something To Think About: Wouldn't change anything...
Punctuation/Grammar/Spelling: I see no problems.

Things I Like: Overall I like the rapid transition of the character, and how life seems to get in her way all the time. Great flowing dialogue and easy to follow... Likes the vivid descriptions of circumstance and the fast pace...

Good work.





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Review of A Shiny New Dime  
Review by N.A Miller
Rated: E | (5.0)
loves this poem... great work... captures growing up from when you were young to the teen years of dating, first bar and driving... everything that captures how life really is...

Technically: No issues, Great prose and rhyme. Flows beautifully.

GREAT work....
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Review by N.A Miller
Rated: E | (5.0)
nice i liked the prose. i found nothing wrong technically with the poem and it my overall feeling was that of the nature of Robert Frost type Poem, (Which is my favorite poet) He shows us all the beauty of a scene, and the great vivid descriptions. It was just like his poetry style. Keep it up... poetry like that style will get you noticed... Great poem!
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Review of MY LIFE  
Review by N.A Miller
Rated: E | (4.0)
I enjoyed your poem and thanks for sharing that.

Overall: found no technical issues, and the prose and everything flowed smoothly.
I don't write alot of poetry myself, mostly Haiku, but I think it was well done.

Feeling: I liked it because it reminded me of myself and my plight here of late over the last two years of heck, self destruction and reminds me that life is short and we need to live what we are given and use it wisely.

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